Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTR69Q09B12DRD6GDGD7NEH

Run Details

Duration:
19.7s
Cost:
$0.002901
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The footfalls came first—barely audible, hesitant, like a mouse skirting the edge of a crumbling floorboard. Aurora Carter froze, her breath hitching against the cool night air that settled thick between the ancient oaks. She’d slipped through the graveyard silence of Richmond Park, weaving beneath branches that stretched skeletal and strange, their shadows pooling hard on the muddy earth. The Fae Grove wrapped around her like a shroud, its ancient oak standing stones looming, hallowed and mute. She should have felt relief, the kind born from reaching a destination after a long, gnawing hunt. Instead, an icy ripple traced her spine. The wildflowers, contradictory in their endless bloom, seemed disturbed—petals shushed into tight fists, petals turning their faces away. The grove had a pulse, not of gentle life but a slow, deliberate reckoning. Aurora’s fingers brushed the small scar on her left wrist—the neat crescent curved there since childhood—an old reminder, a faint tether to the world outside. Her hand slid beneath the collar of her jacket. Fingered the Heartstone pendant at her throat. It pulsed faintly now, a deep crimson glow that beat with an unsettling warmth, steady but tense, like a warning whispered from a realm barely visible. A twig cracked sharply behind her. Her head snapped toward the sound, bright blue eyes cutting through the darkness. Nothing. Just the solemn standing stones and twisted trunks, each one an ancient sentinel watching in silence. Then the footfalls again, closer. Slower. They weren't human. Not quite. Aurora swallowed hard, voice caught in her throat. She had come here led by cryptic messages, an instinct she couldn’t shake — that the answers to what had been hunting her all these months lay deep inside this half-remembered space between worlds. Yet the grove did not welcome her. It watched. Judged. And whispered secrets best left hidden. A subtle movement flickered at the periphery of her vision: a shadow, slipping, bending with impossible grace between the wildflower bloom and mossy stones. Too quick for a human form, too purposeful to be a trick of light. She took a breath and stepped forward. Her boots sank slightly into the soft earth, squelching muted underfoot. The pendant throbbed again, its pulse synchronising with the knock-knock in her chest. "Show yourself," she said, voice low but deliberate. Only the night answered, thick and dense. No rustling, no answering footfalls—just the wind, delicate and sibilant as if the trees themselves spoke in hisses. Another shadow moved beyond the stones—slimmer, taller, something that stretched beyond natural shape. Aurora’s heart hammered, but her jaw set firm. She pulled her phone from her pocket, the screen blooming faint light. She swept it methodically across the grove, searching. The screen caught flickers—noises—scratches of translucent figures, like veils fluttering through the mist. She blinked hard, trying to anchor herself in the tangible. A low murmur, almost a chant, floated on the air. Not words but sound layered with intention, threading through the silence. "We don’t belong here," a whisper hissed, seeming to come from beneath the soil. Her fingers tightened on the pendant’s cool silver chain. The warmth surged, suddenly blistering against her skin. The Heartstone was a beacon, but for what? And whom? The murmur grew louder — waves of sound ebbing like the tide. Her gaze flicked beyond the stones, to where the ancient oaks twisted like gnarled phantoms. A shape stepped out — not fully there, more shadow than substance yet with terrible clarity. It watched, unblinking eyes carrying depths older than memory. Aurora took a cautious step backward. The ground beneath her shifted—roots groaned and pulsed, as if waking from a deep slumber. She stumbled, regaining balance on the thick carpet of moss and wildflowers. "You shouldn’t be here," the voice whispered again, tinged with something simultaneously amused and cruel. Her mind spun, questions clawing for answers. What had she expected when she came to this notch in the world, this pocket of earth where time folded like a torn sheet? A secret? A message? Or was this always punishment? Another step, slow and deliberate, from the shadow. The air chilled, pressing against her skin like a wet sheet. "Answers," Aurora breathed, the word fragile but fierce. "I need answers." The shadow quivered and then split, melting into several thin forms darting amongst the trees. They flicked by faster than the eye could follow, weaving between the trunks, rising and falling like the breath of the grove itself. Aurora’s pulse slammed against her ribs—terror biting, but something else burrowed deeper: recognition. She reached out, but all that met her fingers was the raw, musky air of old earth and damp leaves. The pendant burned suddenly, searing through her chest. She clasped it tightly, the deep crimson gem glowing brighter, illuminating the darkened grove in pulsing waves of blood-red light. The voices swelled, layered now, like a chorus murmuring from every branch and stone. *Why?* they echoed in overlapping chorus. *Why come here?* Aurora’s mind scrambled. Had she been foolish to accept the unknown? To chase shadows in a realm that played tricks with time and souls? She forced her voice over the rising tide of sound. "I have to stop it. The darkness spreading. The loss." The shapes slowed. The murmurs quieted. The air thickened. Then, a single figure emerged, clearer than the rest, framed by the circle of stones. Its gaze bored into hers — ancient, infinite, unreadable. The wildflowers bowed deeply, petals folding away. The figure raised a hand — not in greeting, but as a warning. A roar tore from behind her— Something massive, unseen, thundering in the black brush beyond the grove’s edge. Aurora spun. The world shattered into chaos. Branches snapped like bone. The standing stones cracked, one tumbling with a thunderous crash. The wildflowers shrieked — or was it her own scream? Darkness surged forward, swift and unrelenting. She barely had time to clutch the pendant before it flared, a wild pulse bursting from the Heartstone, casting the grove into fierce, crimson light. The shadow lunged. And the night swallowed her scream whole.
created_at"2026-02-19T10:47:35.398Z" 2/19/2026, 10:47:35 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"the voice whispered again [again]"
dialogueSentences6
tagDensity0.667
leniency1
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.25
75.47% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1019
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count2
3
adverb"tightly"
count1
highlights
0"sharply"
1"slightly"
2"suddenly"
3"tightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1019
totalAiIsms30
found
0
word"silence"
count3
1
word"looming"
count1
2
word"traced"
count1
3
word"pulse"
count4
4
word"reminder"
count1
5
word"pulsed"
count2
6
word"warmth"
count2
7
word"sentinel"
count1
8
word"flickered"
count1
9
word"throbbed"
count1
10
word"tangible"
count1
11
word"whisper"
count1
12
word"beacon"
count1
13
word"flicked"
count2
14
word"depths"
count1
15
word"tinged"
count1
16
word"chilled"
count1
17
word"quivered"
count1
18
word"searing"
count1
19
word"echoed"
count1
20
word"unreadable"
count1
21
word"shattered"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"looming"
2"traced"
3"pulse"
4"reminder"
5"pulsed"
6"warmth"
7"sentinel"
8"flickered"
9"throbbed"
10"tangible"
11"whisper"
12"beacon"
13"flicked"
14"depths"
15"tinged"
16"chilled"
17"quivered"
18"searing"
19"echoed"
20"unreadable"
21"shattered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences94
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences94
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences96
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords4
totalWords1012
ratio0.004
matches
0"Why?"
1"Why come here?"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions2
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions17
wordCount988
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity0.91
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Carter1
Richmond1
Park1
Fae1
Grove1
Heartstone3
Aurora9
persons
0"Carter"
1"Aurora"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Fae"
3"Grove"
globalScore1
windowScore1
82.43% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences74
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"seemed disturbed petals shushed into tight fists, petals turning their faces away"
1"as if waking from a deep slumber"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords2.964
wordCount1012
matches
0"not of gentle life but a slow, deliberate reckoning"
1"Not words but sound layered with intention, threading through the silence"
2"not in greeting, but as a warning"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences96
matches
0"shake — that the"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs44
mean23
std17.54
cv0.763
sampleLengths
077
156
267
36
430
511
658
738
831
98
1025
1113
1228
1323
1421
1514
1627
1712
1840
1933
2015
2140
2219
2311
2451
2520
2628
2714
289
2934
3010
319
3231
3313
346
3512
362
375
3814
3910
406
4125
423
437
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences94
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs166
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount17
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences15
totalSentences96
ratio0.156
matches
0"The footfalls came first—barely audible, hesitant, like a mouse skirting the edge of a crumbling floorboard."
1"The wildflowers, contradictory in their endless bloom, seemed disturbed—petals shushed into tight fists, petals turning their faces away."
2"Aurora’s fingers brushed the small scar on her left wrist—the neat crescent curved there since childhood—an old reminder, a faint tether to the world outside."
3"She had come here led by cryptic messages, an instinct she couldn’t shake — that the answers to what had been hunting her all these months lay deep inside this half-remembered space between worlds."
4"No rustling, no answering footfalls—just the wind, delicate and sibilant as if the trees themselves spoke in hisses."
5"Another shadow moved beyond the stones—slimmer, taller, something that stretched beyond natural shape."
6"The screen caught flickers—noises—scratches of translucent figures, like veils fluttering through the mist."
7"The murmur grew louder — waves of sound ebbing like the tide."
8"A shape stepped out — not fully there, more shadow than substance yet with terrible clarity."
9"The ground beneath her shifted—roots groaned and pulsed, as if waking from a deep slumber."
10"Aurora’s pulse slammed against her ribs—terror biting, but something else burrowed deeper: recognition."
11"Its gaze bored into hers — ancient, infinite, unreadable."
12"The figure raised a hand — not in greeting, but as a warning."
13"A roar tore from behind her—"
14"The wildflowers shrieked — or was it her own scream?"
96.31% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount995
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount44
adverbRatio0.044221105527638194
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.01407035175879397
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences96
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences96
mean10.54
std6.67
cv0.632
sampleLengths
016
118
225
318
417
57
618
714
825
99
107
1126
126
1313
141
1516
165
171
183
192
208
2134
227
232
241
256
2624
2714
287
2911
3013
318
327
3318
3413
358
3612
378
3813
3910
4010
4111
4214
439
448
458
462
4712
4815
4916
51.39% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.3645833333333333
totalSentences96
uniqueOpeners35
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount6
totalSentences85
matches
0"Instead, an icy ripple traced"
1"Just the solemn standing stones"
2"Then the footfalls again, closer."
3"Too quick for a human"
4"Only the night answered, thick"
5"Then, a single figure emerged,"
ratio0.071
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences85
matches
0"She’d slipped through the graveyard"
1"She should have felt relief,"
2"Her hand slid beneath the"
3"It pulsed faintly now, a"
4"Her head snapped toward the"
5"They weren't human."
6"She had come here led"
7"She took a breath and"
8"Her boots sank slightly into"
9"she said, voice low but"
10"She pulled her phone from"
11"She swept it methodically across"
12"She blinked hard, trying to"
13"Her fingers tightened on the"
14"Her gaze flicked beyond the"
15"It watched, unblinking eyes carrying"
16"She stumbled, regaining balance on"
17"Her mind spun, questions clawing"
18"They flicked by faster than"
19"She reached out, but all"
ratio0.282
65.88% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount67
totalSentences85
matches
0"The footfalls came first—barely audible,"
1"Aurora Carter froze, her breath"
2"She’d slipped through the graveyard"
3"The Fae Grove wrapped around"
4"She should have felt relief,"
5"The wildflowers, contradictory in their"
6"The grove had a pulse,"
7"Aurora’s fingers brushed the small"
8"Her hand slid beneath the"
9"It pulsed faintly now, a"
10"A twig cracked sharply behind"
11"Her head snapped toward the"
12"They weren't human."
13"Aurora swallowed hard, voice caught"
14"She had come here led"
15"A subtle movement flickered at"
16"She took a breath and"
17"Her boots sank slightly into"
18"The pendant throbbed again, its"
19"she said, voice low but"
ratio0.788
58.82% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences85
matches
0"To chase shadows in a"
ratio0.012
76.41% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences43
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"She’d slipped through the graveyard silence of Richmond Park, weaving beneath branches that stretched skeletal and strange, their shadows pooling hard on the mu…"
1"No rustling, no answering footfalls—just the wind, delicate and sibilant as if the trees themselves spoke in hisses."
2"Another shadow moved beyond the stones—slimmer, taller, something that stretched beyond natural shape."
3"The ground beneath her shifted—roots groaned and pulsed, as if waking from a deep slumber."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"she said, voice low but deliberate"
1"a whisper hissed, seeming to come from beneath the soil"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"a whisper hissed (hiss)"
1"the voice whispered again (whisper)"
2"Aurora breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences6
tagDensity0.667
leniency1
rawRatio0.75
effectiveRatio0.75
73.5571%