Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTR71WG4ZW7M90FNBJCK2ZB

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Duration:
44.9s
Cost:
$0.001441

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The suspect darted around the corner, a blur of motion against the glistening pavement. Detective Harlow Quinn's heart raced as she pushed herself harder, her breath coming in sharp bursts. The rain pelted down, drenching her salt-and-pepper hair and soaking through her coat, but she barely noticed. The thrill of the chase consumed her, a familiar fire igniting in her chest. “Stop!” she shouted, her voice swallowed by the night. The figure ahead glanced back, eyes wide with panic, and then sprinted down a narrow alley, disappearing into the shadows. Quinn skidded to a halt, her worn leather watch digging into her wrist as she weighed her options. The alley was dark, the kind of place where secrets festered and danger lurked. She hesitated, the memories of her partner, DS Morris, flooding her mind. Three years had passed since that fateful night, but the echoes of his loss still haunted her. She could almost hear his voice, urging caution. “Damn it,” she muttered, shaking off the thought. She had a job to do. Quinn plunged into the alley, her footsteps echoing against the damp brick walls. The scent of rain mingled with something more pungent—urine and decay. She wrinkled her nose but pressed on, her instincts guiding her deeper into the labyrinthine passageways. The suspect was fast, but Quinn had years of experience on her side. She rounded another corner, her eyes scanning for any sign of movement. A flicker of shadow caught her attention, and she lunged forward, adrenaline surging through her veins. “Where are you?” she hissed, her voice low and fierce. The alley opened up into a wider space, the remnants of an old Tube station looming ahead. Graffiti covered the walls, vibrant colours clashing with the grime. A flickering neon sign buzzed in the distance, casting an eerie glow over the scene. Quinn’s instincts screamed at her to turn back, but the thrill of the chase pushed her forward. The suspect had vanished, but she could hear the faint sound of footsteps echoing in the distance. She followed, her heart pounding in her chest. The underground market, known as the Veil Market, was a place of whispers and shadows, where the supernatural mingled with the mundane. Quinn had heard tales of it, but she had never dared to venture inside. “Just a quick look,” she muttered to herself, her resolve hardening. She had to know what she was dealing with. As she approached the entrance, a heavy door swung open, revealing a dimly lit room filled with strange wares. The air was thick with the scent of incense and something metallic, like blood. A shiver ran down her spine, but she stepped inside, her senses heightened. The market was a chaotic blend of stalls, each one overflowing with bizarre items—enchanted trinkets, vials of shimmering liquids, and ancient tomes. A low murmur of voices filled the air, punctuated by the occasional clink of glass or the rustle of fabric. Quinn’s eyes darted around, searching for her suspect. “Looking for something?” A voice slithered through the air, smooth and inviting. Quinn turned to find a man leaning against a stall, his dark eyes glinting with mischief. He wore a long coat that seemed to absorb the light, and a sly smile played on his lips. “Not your business,” she snapped, her tone sharp. “Ah, but it is,” he replied, pushing off the stall and stepping closer. “You’re in my territory now, Detective. You might want to tread carefully.” Quinn narrowed her eyes, her instincts flaring. “I’m not here for a chat. I’m after a suspect.” “Many come here to hide,” he said, his voice low. “But few leave unscathed.” Before she could respond, a commotion erupted at the far end of the market. Quinn’s heart raced as she caught sight of her suspect, weaving through the crowd, desperation etched on his face. She pushed past the man, ignoring his warning, and sprinted after him. “Stop!” she shouted again, but the words barely left her lips before the suspect ducked into a narrow passageway, disappearing from view. Quinn followed, her breath coming in ragged gasps. The passageway twisted and turned, the walls closing in around her. She could hear the suspect’s footsteps echoing ahead, a frantic rhythm that urged her on. “Don’t let him get away!” she growled, determination flooding her veins. The passage opened up into a larger chamber, dimly lit by flickering candles. The air was thick with the scent of smoke and something sweet, almost intoxicating. Quinn’s eyes widened as she took in the scene before her—a gathering of figures cloaked in shadows, their faces obscured. “Get back!” she shouted, raising her badge. “I’m a police officer!” The figures turned, their eyes glinting in the candlelight. A low murmur rippled through the crowd, and Quinn felt a chill run down her spine. This was no ordinary market; it was a den of secrets, a place where the supernatural thrived. “Quinn!” A voice broke through the tension, and she turned to see Tomás Herrera, his warm brown eyes wide with concern. He stood at the edge of the chamber, his Saint Christopher medallion glinting in the dim light. “What are you doing here?” she snapped, her heart racing. “I heard you were chasing someone,” he replied, his voice steady. “Thought you might need backup.” “Backup?” she scoffed, glancing back at the crowd. “This isn’t a game, Tommy. It’s dangerous.” “Dangerous is my middle name,” he shot back, a hint of a smile tugging at his lips. “But seriously, we need to get out of here. This place is crawling with trouble.” Before she could respond, the suspect reappeared, his face pale and wild. He locked eyes with Quinn, panic etched across his features. “Help me!” he gasped, stumbling towards her. Quinn’s instincts kicked in, but before she could react, a figure stepped forward from the shadows, blocking the suspect’s path. The man was tall and imposing, his presence radiating authority. “Leave him be, Detective,” he said, his voice smooth and commanding. “He’s under my protection.” Quinn’s heart raced as she assessed the situation. The crowd shifted, eyes darting between her and the imposing figure. She could feel the tension in the air, thick and electric. “Step aside,” she ordered, her voice firm. The man chuckled, a low, menacing sound. “You’re out of your depth here. This is not your world.” Quinn’s jaw tightened. She had come too far to back down now. “Let him go,” she demanded, her voice steady. The man’s smile widened, revealing sharp teeth. “And what if I refuse?” Quinn’s hand instinctively moved to her sidearm, but she hesitated. The crowd was watching, and she could feel the weight of their gazes. “Quinn, don’t,” Tomás warned, stepping closer. But it was too late. The suspect took a step back, fear flashing in his eyes. “Please, I didn’t mean to—” “Enough!” The man’s voice boomed, cutting through the tension. “You’re in no position to negotiate.” Quinn’s heart raced as she weighed her options. The underground market pulsed with energy, the air thick with danger. She could feel the walls closing in, the shadows creeping closer. “Let him go,” she repeated, her voice low and fierce. The man’s gaze bore into hers, a challenge hanging in the air. Quinn’s pulse quickened, the thrill of the chase igniting a fire within her. She had come too far to turn back now. “Make your choice, Detective,” he said, a smirk playing on his lips. Quinn’s mind raced, the stakes higher than ever. She had to decide—follow the suspect into the unknown or confront the darkness that loomed before her. “Quinn!” Tomás urged, his voice a lifeline in the chaos. The moment hung in the air, charged with tension. Quinn took a deep breath, her heart pounding in her chest. “Let him go,” she said, her voice steady. The man’s smile faltered, and for a brief moment, the world seemed to hold its breath. Then, chaos erupted.
total_cost0.0014408299999999997

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags26
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she shouted again [again]"
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.684
leniency1
rawRatio0.038
effectiveRatio0.038
96.25% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1334
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1334
totalAiIsms46
found
0
word"glistening"
count1
1
word"raced"
count5
2
word"familiar"
count1
3
word"echoes"
count1
4
word"footsteps"
count3
5
word"echoing"
count3
6
word"scanning"
count1
7
word"flicker"
count1
8
word"looming"
count1
9
word"pounding"
count2
10
word"resolve"
count1
11
word"down her spine"
count2
12
word"chaotic"
count1
13
word"glinting"
count3
14
word"etched"
count2
15
word"chill"
count1
16
word"tension"
count4
17
word"racing"
count1
18
word"imposing"
count2
19
word"could feel"
count3
20
word"electric"
count1
21
word"weight"
count1
22
word"pulsed"
count1
23
word"pulse"
count1
24
word"quickened"
count1
25
word"loomed"
count1
26
word"charged"
count1
highlights
0"glistening"
1"raced"
2"familiar"
3"echoes"
4"footsteps"
5"echoing"
6"scanning"
7"flicker"
8"looming"
9"pounding"
10"resolve"
11"down her spine"
12"chaotic"
13"glinting"
14"etched"
15"chill"
16"tension"
17"racing"
18"imposing"
19"could feel"
20"electric"
21"weight"
22"pulsed"
23"pulse"
24"quickened"
25"loomed"
26"charged"
0.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches5
maxInWindow4
found
0
label"shiver down spine"
count1
1
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
2
label"air was thick with"
count2
3
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"A shiver ran down her spine"
1"eyes widened"
2"The air was thick with"
3"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences101
matches
0"e with panic"
1"felt a chill"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences101
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences113
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen23
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1328
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions24
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
55.50% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions33
wordCount1164
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity1.89
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn22
Morris1
Tube1
Veil1
Market1
Tomás3
Herrera1
Saint1
Christopher1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Morris"
3"Market"
4"Tomás"
5"Herrera"
6"Saint"
7"Christopher"
places(empty)
globalScore0.555
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences88
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"coat that seemed to absorb the light, and a sly smile played on his lips"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1328
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences113
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs54
mean24.59
std16.15
cv0.657
sampleLengths
061
147
251
314
440
541
610
759
861
920
1046
1150
1247
138
1425
1517
1614
1745
1822
1934
2011
2147
2211
2342
2438
2510
2616
2715
2832
2922
307
3130
3215
3330
347
3518
3612
378
3812
3923
406
4116
425
4315
4430
4510
4634
4712
4825
4910
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences101
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs220
matches
0"was dealing"
1"was watching"
16.43% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences113
ratio0.044
matches
0"The scent of rain mingled with something more pungent—urine and decay."
1"The market was a chaotic blend of stalls, each one overflowing with bizarre items—enchanted trinkets, vials of shimmering liquids, and ancient tomes."
2"Quinn’s eyes widened as she took in the scene before her—a gathering of figures cloaked in shadows, their faces obscured."
3"This was no ordinary market; it was a den of secrets, a place where the supernatural thrived."
4"She had to decide—follow the suspect into the unknown or confront the darkness that loomed before her."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1170
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount21
adverbRatio0.017948717948717947
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.005128205128205128
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences113
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
94.79% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences113
mean11.75
std4.55
cv0.387
sampleLengths
014
116
217
314
49
520
618
714
812
917
108
118
126
1313
1411
1516
1613
1712
1816
1910
2017
2110
2215
2317
2417
258
2622
2714
2811
299
3019
3114
3213
3322
3420
358
3612
3716
3819
398
4013
4112
427
4310
4410
454
4614
4719
4812
4922
52.80% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.3274336283185841
totalSentences113
uniqueOpeners37
33.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences101
matches
0"Then, chaos erupted."
ratio0.01
69.50% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount38
totalSentences101
matches
0"she shouted, her voice swallowed"
1"She hesitated, the memories of"
2"She could almost hear his"
3"she muttered, shaking off the"
4"She had a job to"
5"She wrinkled her nose but"
6"She rounded another corner, her"
7"she hissed, her voice low"
8"She followed, her heart pounding"
9"she muttered to herself, her"
10"She had to know what"
11"He wore a long coat"
12"she snapped, her tone sharp"
13"he replied, pushing off the"
14"he said, his voice low"
15"She pushed past the man,"
16"she shouted again, but the"
17"She could hear the suspect’s"
18"she growled, determination flooding her"
19"she shouted, raising her badge"
ratio0.376
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount95
totalSentences101
matches
0"The suspect darted around the"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn's heart raced"
2"The rain pelted down, drenching"
3"The thrill of the chase"
4"she shouted, her voice swallowed"
5"The figure ahead glanced back,"
6"Quinn skidded to a halt,"
7"The alley was dark, the"
8"She hesitated, the memories of"
9"She could almost hear his"
10"she muttered, shaking off the"
11"She had a job to"
12"Quinn plunged into the alley,"
13"The scent of rain mingled"
14"She wrinkled her nose but"
15"The suspect was fast, but"
16"She rounded another corner, her"
17"A flicker of shadow caught"
18"she hissed, her voice low"
19"The alley opened up into"
ratio0.941
99.01% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences101
matches
0"Before she could respond, a"
1"Before she could respond, the"
ratio0.02
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences56
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"She could hear the suspect’s footsteps echoing ahead, a frantic rhythm that urged her on."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags26
uselessAdditionCount15
matches
0"she hissed, her voice low and fierce"
1"she muttered, her resolve hardening"
2"she snapped, her tone sharp"
3"he said, his voice low"
4"she growled, determination flooding her veins"
5"she snapped, her heart racing"
6"he replied, his voice steady"
7"he shot back, a hint of a smile tugging at his lips"
8"he said, his voice smooth and commanding"
9"she ordered, her voice firm"
10"she demanded, her voice steady"
11"she repeated, her voice low and fierce"
12"he said, a smirk playing on his lips"
13"Tomás urged, his voice a lifeline in the chaos"
14"she said, her voice steady"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags21
fancyCount15
fancyTags
0"she shouted (shout)"
1"she muttered (mutter)"
2"she hissed (hiss)"
3"she muttered (mutter)"
4"she snapped (snap)"
5"she shouted again (shout)"
6"she growled (growl)"
7"she shouted (shout)"
8"she snapped (snap)"
9"he gasped (gasp)"
10"she ordered (order)"
11"she demanded (demand)"
12"Tomás warned (warn)"
13"she repeated (repeat)"
14"Tomás urged (urge)"
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.553
leniency1
rawRatio0.714
effectiveRatio0.714
73.9098%