Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTR7FCSA2TEWJ9QM843Y3AN

Run Details

Duration:
10.7s
Cost:
$0.000646
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rain hammered down in sheets, turning the cobblestones into a slick, shimmering death trap. Detective Quinn slid dangerously close to the curb, her shoulders hunched as she navigated the chaos of Soho’s drenched streets. Her breath fogged in the chilly air, the scent of wet asphalt mixing with something sharper—oil, blood, or perhaps both. Her pulse pounded against her temples, each step echoing in her helmet-designed mind; the suspect, a dark silhouette darting between flickering neon signs, kept just ahead, relentless in his bid to disappear into the shadows. She gritted her teeth and clenched her leather glove around her weapon. The suspect's figure flickered beneath a green neon sign—an ominous glow that seemed almost to pulse in rhythm with her own heartbeat. He weaved past a cluster of drunken pedestrians, their voices muffled by the roar of rain. He didn’t look back. He knew she was behind him, and yet he kept running, driven by something darker than fear. It was only when he veered sharply into an alley, clutching a small, battered bag, that Quinn hesitated. He vaulted over a puddle, disappearing into a narrowing passage that caged him between bricks and shadow. Quinn’s boots splashed loudly as she followed, her senses sharpening. The alley reeked of damp brick and dried paint, a forgotten backstreet where the city's neon glow barely reached. She pressed forward, aware of the flickering glow from a distant sign, seeping through the alley's open mouth underneath a sagging fire escape. The suspect’s footsteps slowed as he reached the corridor’s end—a rusted metal door, half-open, revealing a dark maw. The faded sign beside it read “The Raven’s Nest,” in peeling letters beneath the flickering green neon. Quinn’s grip tightened on her gun. She hesitated, her eyes flickering with doubt. The occasional muffled siren echoed in the distance, amplifying her every breath, every pounding footstep. The decision hovered in her mind: do she follow into the bar, into the unknown, or stay outside and curb her instincts? Her training told her to wait, keep eyes on the alley, call for backup. But the suspect had vanished into a place she’d never been—an underground nexus where the supernatural and criminal bled into one. Her hand trembled faintly on her weapon for the briefest of moments. “Bugger it,” she whispered, and pushed open the door. The bar’s interior was shadowy and oppressive. A faint haze of smoke of unidentifiable origin curled around vintage maps and black and white photographs lining the brick walls. A few rough-looking patrons hunched over dimly lit tables, their faces obscured by the rain streaking in through a cracked window. Quinn’s eyes adjusted slowly, noting the scant lighting did little to dispel the sense of lurking danger. A chipped wooden counter stretched along one wall, behind which a solitary bartender glanced up, his eyes flickering with suspicion or drunken apathy. Quinn’s boots echoed as she moved toward the darkened back corner, where the door to the secret room was concealed behind a bookshelf. Carefully, she pressed her palm against the dusty spines, feeling the faint, familiar hum of enchantment—a sign of illicit activity, she thought, or worse. The hidden door swung open quietly on well-oiled hinges. Inside, a cramped, cluttered chamber revealed itself, its air thick with the scent of worn leather, dried herbs, and something metallic—perhaps a hint of blood. The faint glow of candles flickered against odd objects strewn across battered tables, crates filled with enchanted items, and piles of arcane texts that looked centuries old. Her eyes fixed on the figure hunched over a makeshift altar—her suspect, Tomás Herrera, hunched in concentration, one arm wrapped tightly around a sac of shimmering, ethereal flames. The scar on his pale cheek cast jagged shadows across his olive skin; his short, curly dark hair clung damply to his forehead. He looked up, eyes darting between her and the growing fire in his hand. “Stop,” she ordered, voice echoing off the brick walls. He lunged upward, clutching the bag tighter. “You don’t understand,” he hissed, voice trembling but thick with purpose. “We’re past understanding,” Quinn said sharply, her finger tightening on the trigger. “Step away from the relic. Now.” He hesitated, instinct warring with desperation. His hands trembled, whether from the rain or fear, Quinn couldn’t tell. When he finally moved, it was with a sudden burst, a flash of violence—his knee spinning towards her midsection, a small dagger slipping from his sleeve. Quinn dodged instinctively, gun raised, heart pounding so loud she was afraid her eardrum would burst. The dagger’s blade arced through the air but stopped inches short, as if absorbed by an unseen barrier. Herrera staggered back, eyes wide with shock, breathing ragged. The room erupted into chaos. Shadows seemed to shudder and shift with every flash of lightning outside. Quinn’s hand shot forward, yanking him by the collar, her thumbs pressing against his windpipe just enough to force silence. “Shadow-market’s been looking for you. You’re not going to slip away again,” she said through clenched teeth. “Tell me what you’re hiding, Tomás.” He spat blood and grimaced. “It’s not just magic. It’s something else. You have to believe me, I’m not the enemy here. I know the risk, but I’ve got no choice.” The boyara flickered again, brighter this time, as if reacting to something unseen in the shadows. Quinn’s eyes narrowed. This wasn’t just a chase. It was something darker, something her gut told her she hadn’t yet understood. She kept the gun steady, pressed against his collarbone. “Then tell me what’s at the heart of this market—you’re not the only one hunting it. And I’m not letting you get away.” Suddenly, a shattering sound erupted from the door behind her, loud and deliberate—a clear announcement that she was not alone. A burst of cold air swept in, and the flickering candle flames danced wildly. Quinn felt her grip tighten as her senses flared. In the depths of the underground den, around her, the shadows thickened, waiting for her next move.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
33.33% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags6
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Quinn said sharply [sharply]"
dialogueSentences10
tagDensity0.6
leniency1
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.167
70.47% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1016
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count2
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"carefully"
count1
3
adverb"tightly"
count1
4
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"sharply"
1"slowly"
2"carefully"
3"tightly"
4"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1016
totalAiIsms22
found
0
word"navigated"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count2
2
word"echoing"
count2
3
word"flickered"
count3
4
word"footsteps"
count1
5
word"maw"
count1
6
word"echoed"
count2
7
word"pounding"
count2
8
word"trembled"
count2
9
word"oppressive"
count1
10
word"sense of"
count1
11
word"solitary"
count1
12
word"familiar"
count1
13
word"silence"
count1
14
word"depths"
count1
highlights
0"navigated"
1"pulse"
2"echoing"
3"flickered"
4"footsteps"
5"maw"
6"echoed"
7"pounding"
8"trembled"
9"oppressive"
10"sense of"
11"solitary"
12"familiar"
13"silence"
14"depths"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences61
matches
0"was afraid"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences61
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences65
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen36
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1002
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions16
wordCount917
uniqueNames4
maxNameDensity1.31
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Quinn12
Soho1
Tomás1
Herrera2
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Tomás"
2"Herrera"
places
0"Soho"
globalScore0.846
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences55
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"as if reacting to something unseen in the shadows"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1002
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences65
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs22
mean45.55
std23.02
cv0.505
sampleLengths
089
171
287
363
457
521
666
770
861
965
109
1118
1218
1344
1443
1537
1623
1731
1837
1932
2043
2117
99.51% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences61
matches
0"was concealed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs161
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount9
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences11
totalSentences65
ratio0.169
matches
0"Her breath fogged in the chilly air, the scent of wet asphalt mixing with something sharper—oil, blood, or perhaps both."
1"Her pulse pounded against her temples, each step echoing in her helmet-designed mind; the suspect, a dark silhouette darting between flickering neon signs, kept just ahead, relentless in his bid to disappear into the shadows."
2"The suspect's figure flickered beneath a green neon sign—an ominous glow that seemed almost to pulse in rhythm with her own heartbeat."
3"The suspect’s footsteps slowed as he reached the corridor’s end—a rusted metal door, half-open, revealing a dark maw."
4"But the suspect had vanished into a place she’d never been—an underground nexus where the supernatural and criminal bled into one."
5"Carefully, she pressed her palm against the dusty spines, feeling the faint, familiar hum of enchantment—a sign of illicit activity, she thought, or worse."
6"Inside, a cramped, cluttered chamber revealed itself, its air thick with the scent of worn leather, dried herbs, and something metallic—perhaps a hint of blood."
7"Her eyes fixed on the figure hunched over a makeshift altar—her suspect, Tomás Herrera, hunched in concentration, one arm wrapped tightly around a sac of shimmering, ethereal flames."
8"The scar on his pale cheek cast jagged shadows across his olive skin; his short, curly dark hair clung damply to his forehead."
9"When he finally moved, it was with a sudden burst, a flash of violence—his knee spinning towards her midsection, a small dagger slipping from his sleeve."
10"Suddenly, a shattering sound erupted from the door behind her, loud and deliberate—a clear announcement that she was not alone."
87.64% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount930
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"short, curly dark hair"
1"steady, pressed against his"
adverbCount30
adverbRatio0.03225806451612903
lyAdverbCount19
lyAdverbRatio0.02043010752688172
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences65
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences65
mean15.42
std7.03
cv0.456
sampleLengths
014
120
220
335
412
522
616
74
817
918
1017
1110
1219
1323
1418
1517
166
177
1815
1922
2014
2121
2212
239
247
2521
2621
2717
2823
2923
3024
319
3225
3327
3428
3523
3614
379
387
3911
4012
416
426
4312
4426
4516
4618
479
485
4912
60.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.4153846153846154
totalSentences65
uniqueOpeners27
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences61
matches
0"Carefully, she pressed her palm"
1"Suddenly, a shattering sound erupted"
ratio0.033
62.62% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences61
matches
0"Her breath fogged in the"
1"Her pulse pounded against her"
2"She gritted her teeth and"
3"He weaved past a cluster"
4"He didn’t look back."
5"He knew she was behind"
6"It was only when he"
7"He vaulted over a puddle,"
8"She pressed forward, aware of"
9"She hesitated, her eyes flickering"
10"Her training told her to"
11"Her hand trembled faintly on"
12"she whispered, and pushed open"
13"Her eyes fixed on the"
14"He looked up, eyes darting"
15"she ordered, voice echoing off"
16"He lunged upward, clutching the"
17"he hissed, voice trembling but"
18"He hesitated, instinct warring with"
19"His hands trembled, whether from"
ratio0.393
25.57% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount53
totalSentences61
matches
0"Detective Quinn slid dangerously close"
1"Her breath fogged in the"
2"Her pulse pounded against her"
3"She gritted her teeth and"
4"The suspect's figure flickered beneath"
5"He weaved past a cluster"
6"He didn’t look back."
7"He knew she was behind"
8"It was only when he"
9"He vaulted over a puddle,"
10"Quinn’s boots splashed loudly as"
11"The alley reeked of damp"
12"She pressed forward, aware of"
13"The suspect’s footsteps slowed as"
14"The faded sign beside it"
15"Quinn’s grip tightened on her"
16"She hesitated, her eyes flickering"
17"The occasional muffled siren echoed"
18"The decision hovered in her"
19"Her training told her to"
ratio0.869
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences61
matches(empty)
ratio0
74.83% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences42
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"The suspect's figure flickered beneath a green neon sign—an ominous glow that seemed almost to pulse in rhythm with her own heartbeat."
1"When he finally moved, it was with a sudden burst, a flash of violence—his knee spinning towards her midsection, a small dagger slipping from his sleeve."
2"Quinn’s hand shot forward, yanking him by the collar, her thumbs pressing against his windpipe just enough to force silence."
3"The boyara flickered again, brighter this time, as if reacting to something unseen in the shadows."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags6
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"she ordered, voice echoing off the brick walls"
1"he hissed, voice trembling but thick with purpose"
2"Quinn said sharply, her finger tightening on the trigger"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
1"she ordered (order)"
2"he hissed (hiss)"
dialogueSentences10
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0.6
effectiveRatio0.6
73.2439%