Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTR8EYA4FYQK1MSSCYJBDED

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn's boots splashed through the puddles, each step a sharp reminder of the relentless rain that had turned the city streets into a slick, glistening maze. Her breath came in steady bursts, her focus unyielding as she pursued the shadowy figure darting ahead. The suspect, a wiry man in a dark hoodie, was quick, but Harlow had the advantage of experience and determination. "Stop!" she shouted, her voice cutting through the night air. The man glanced back, his eyes wide with panic, before veering sharply into an alleyway. Harlow followed, her heart pounding with the thrill of the chase. The alley was narrow, the walls closing in like the jaws of a trap, but she navigated it with the precision of someone who had spent years in the field. The suspect skidded to a halt at the end of the alley, confronted by a high chain-link fence. He hesitated, casting a desperate look over his shoulder. Harlow slowed her pace, her hand instinctively reaching for the worn leather watch on her wrist, a grounding gesture that reminded her of her purpose. "Nowhere to run," she called out, her voice steady despite the adrenaline coursing through her veins. "Let's end this before it gets worse." The man hesitated, his eyes darting between the fence and the detective. Then, with a burst of reckless energy, he scrambled up the fence, his movements frantic and uncoordinated. Harlow cursed under her breath, her mind racing. She could follow him, but the fence was slick with rain, and the risk of injury was high. Instead, she took a step back, assessing her surroundings. The alley was a dead end, but there was a door to her left, slightly ajar, the faint glow of neon light spilling out. The Raven's Nest. She'd been here before, knew the layout well enough to guess where the suspect might be heading. With a determined stride, she pushed the door open and stepped inside. The bar was dimly lit, the air thick with the scent of old wood and stale beer. Patrons glanced up as she entered, their conversations momentarily hushed. Harlow ignored them, her eyes scanning the room for any sign of the suspect. The distinctive green neon sign above the bar cast an eerie glow, highlighting the old maps and black-and-white photographs that adorned the walls. Harlow moved with purpose, her gaze landing on the bookshelf at the back of the room. She knew what lay beyond it—a hidden back room used for clandestine meetings. She approached the bookshelf, her fingers brushing against the spines of the books. With a practiced motion, she pulled on a particular volume, and the shelf swung open to reveal a narrow passageway. The sound of footsteps echoed from within, confirming her suspicions. Harlow stepped into the passageway, the door closing behind her with a soft click. The air was cooler here, the walls closing in as she descended a flight of stairs. Her senses were on high alert, every sound amplified in the confined space. The passageway opened into a larger chamber, the ceiling high above her head. The Veil Market. She'd heard whispers of this place, an underground market that moved locations every full moon. It was a haven for those who dealt in the supernatural, a place where the rules of the ordinary world did not apply. Harlow hesitated at the entrance, her instincts warning her of the dangers that lay ahead. The market was a labyrinth of stalls and shadowy figures, the air thick with the scent of incense and something metallic. She could see the suspect weaving through the crowd, his hood pulled low over his face. She took a deep breath, her decision made. She couldn't let him slip away, not when she was so close. With a determined stride, she entered the market, her eyes scanning the stalls for any sign of the man. The market was a sensory overload, the sounds of haggling and whispered conversations blending into a cacophony that threatened to overwhelm her. She pushed through the crowd, her focus unwavering as she followed the suspect's trail. He was heading towards the far end of the market, where the stalls gave way to a series of tunnels that led deeper into the underground. Harlow quickened her pace, her heart pounding with the urgency of the chase. As she neared the tunnels, she caught sight of the suspect slipping into one of them, his silhouette briefly illuminated by the flickering light of a nearby stall. She hesitated for a moment, the weight of her decision pressing down on her. The tunnels were unfamiliar territory, a place where danger lurked in every shadow. But she couldn't turn back now. Not when she was so close to catching him. With a steely resolve, she plunged into the tunnel, the darkness closing in around her like a shroud. The tunnel was narrow, the walls damp and cold to the touch. Her footsteps echoed in the confined space, a constant reminder of the risk she was taking. But she pushed forward, her determination unwavering. The suspect was just ahead, his footsteps a faint whisper in the darkness. Harlow quickened her pace, her breath coming in steady bursts as she closed the distance between them. Suddenly, the tunnel opened into a larger chamber, the ceiling high above her head. The suspect was there, his back to her as he fumbled with something in his hands. Harlow slowed her pace, her instincts warning her to proceed with caution. "End of the line," she called out, her voice echoing in the chamber. The suspect froze, his shoulders tensing as he turned to face her. For a moment, they stood in silence, the tension between them palpable. Then, with a sudden burst of energy, the suspect lunged at her, his movements wild and uncoordinated. Harlow reacted instinctively, her training kicking in as she sidestepped his attack. She grabbed his arm, twisting it behind his back with a practiced motion. The suspect struggled, but she held firm, her grip unyielding. "It's over," she said, her voice calm and steady. "You're not going anywhere." The suspect slumped in her grasp, his resistance fading as the reality of his situation sank in. Harlow released him, her eyes scanning the chamber for any sign of danger. The market was still bustling with activity, the sounds of haggling and whispered conversations continuing unabated. But Harlow's focus was on the suspect, her mind racing with the implications of his capture. She had him now, but the real challenge lay ahead. The Veil Market was a place of secrets, and she had only just begun to scratch the surface. As she led the suspect back through the tunnel, her mind was already working, piecing together the puzzle that had brought her here. The chase was over, but the real work was just beginning.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences6
tagDensity0.667
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
86.96% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1150
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"sharply"
1"slightly"
2"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1150
totalAiIsms31
found
0
word"reminder"
count2
1
word"glistening"
count1
2
word"pounding"
count2
3
word"navigated"
count1
4
word"racing"
count2
5
word"determined"
count2
6
word"scanning"
count3
7
word"clandestine"
count1
8
word"footsteps"
count3
9
word"echoed"
count2
10
word"cacophony"
count1
11
word"unwavering"
count2
12
word"quickened"
count2
13
word"weight"
count1
14
word"resolve"
count1
15
word"whisper"
count1
16
word"echoing"
count1
17
word"silence"
count1
18
word"tension"
count1
19
word"palpable"
count1
highlights
0"reminder"
1"glistening"
2"pounding"
3"navigated"
4"racing"
5"determined"
6"scanning"
7"clandestine"
8"footsteps"
9"echoed"
10"cacophony"
11"unwavering"
12"quickened"
13"weight"
14"resolve"
15"whisper"
16"echoing"
17"silence"
18"tension"
19"palpable"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences76
matches
0"e with panic"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences76
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences78
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen30
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1146
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions22
wordCount1125
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity1.33
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Harlow15
Quinn1
Raven1
Nest1
Veil2
Market2
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Raven"
places(empty)
globalScore0.833
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences74
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1146
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences78
matches(empty)
54.28% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs28
mean40.93
std13.92
cv0.34
sampleLengths
065
166
252
323
455
553
653
752
843
943
1054
1152
1239
1336
1439
1555
1633
1735
1830
1942
2025
2129
2235
2313
2430
2532
2651
2711
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences76
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs175
matches
0"was heading"
1"was taking"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences78
ratio0.013
matches
0"She knew what lay beyond it—a hidden back room used for clandestine meetings."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1129
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount25
adverbRatio0.022143489813994686
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.00974313551815766
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences78
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
91.23% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences78
mean14.69
std5.55
cv0.378
sampleLengths
028
117
220
310
415
511
630
718
89
925
1016
117
1212
1317
148
1518
169
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2012
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2210
2314
2423
2516
2613
2713
2820
2910
3014
3116
3213
3313
343
3515
3623
3715
3821
3916
408
4112
4219
4322
4414
4526
4613
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4814
4913
42.31% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.2692307692307692
totalSentences78
uniqueOpeners21
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences76
matches
0"Then, with a burst of"
1"Instead, she took a step"
2"Suddenly, the tunnel opened into"
3"Then, with a sudden burst"
ratio0.053
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount22
totalSentences76
matches
0"Her breath came in steady"
1"she shouted, her voice cutting"
2"He hesitated, casting a desperate"
3"she called out, her voice"
4"She could follow him, but"
5"She'd been here before, knew"
6"She knew what lay beyond"
7"She approached the bookshelf, her"
8"Her senses were on high"
9"She'd heard whispers of this"
10"It was a haven for"
11"She could see the suspect"
12"She took a deep breath,"
13"She couldn't let him slip"
14"She pushed through the crowd,"
15"He was heading towards the"
16"She hesitated for a moment,"
17"Her footsteps echoed in the"
18"she called out, her voice"
19"She grabbed his arm, twisting"
ratio0.289
58.68% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount61
totalSentences76
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn's boots splashed"
1"Her breath came in steady"
2"The suspect, a wiry man"
3"she shouted, her voice cutting"
4"The man glanced back, his"
5"Harlow followed, her heart pounding"
6"The alley was narrow, the"
7"The suspect skidded to a"
8"He hesitated, casting a desperate"
9"Harlow slowed her pace, her"
10"she called out, her voice"
11"The man hesitated, his eyes"
12"Harlow cursed under her breath,"
13"She could follow him, but"
14"The alley was a dead"
15"The Raven's Nest."
16"She'd been here before, knew"
17"The bar was dimly lit,"
18"Patrons glanced up as she"
19"Harlow ignored them, her eyes"
ratio0.803
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences76
matches(empty)
ratio0
52.15% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences63
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn's boots splashed through the puddles, each step a sharp reminder of the relentless rain that had turned the city streets into a slick, gl…"
1"The alley was narrow, the walls closing in like the jaws of a trap, but she navigated it with the precision of someone who had spent years in the field."
2"Harlow slowed her pace, her hand instinctively reaching for the worn leather watch on her wrist, a grounding gesture that reminded her of her purpose."
3"The distinctive green neon sign above the bar cast an eerie glow, highlighting the old maps and black-and-white photographs that adorned the walls."
4"She'd heard whispers of this place, an underground market that moved locations every full moon."
5"The market was a sensory overload, the sounds of haggling and whispered conversations blending into a cacophony that threatened to overwhelm her."
6"He was heading towards the far end of the market, where the stalls gave way to a series of tunnels that led deeper into the underground."
7"As she led the suspect back through the tunnel, her mind was already working, piecing together the puzzle that had brought her here."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"she shouted, her voice cutting through the night air"
1"she called out, her voice steady despite the adrenaline coursing through her veins"
2"she called out, her voice echoing in the chamber"
3"she said, her voice calm and steady"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"she shouted (shout)"
1"she called out (call out)"
2"she called out (call out)"
dialogueSentences6
tagDensity0.667
leniency1
rawRatio0.75
effectiveRatio0.75
78.9648%