Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRCTPKMX5JSAYJCJ8MDRGJ

Run Details

Duration:
17.6s
Cost:
$0.000634
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The crack of footsteps echoed behind him, pounding in a staccato rhythm that blurred through the rain-slicked pavement. Detective Harlow Quinn darted between the flickering glow of neon signs, her breath visible in the chilled night air as she lunged forward. Her coat billowed behind her, hem catching on the uneven edges of broken cobblestones. The suspect—clad in a dark hoodie and jeans soaked from head to boots—had a lead, or so she told herself, but now he was weaving through the labyrinth of Soho like a rat in a trap. The streets narrowed, the world resolving into a maze of alleyways shadowed by dripping fire escapes. Quinn’s heart hammered in her chest—her ears tuned to the rhythmic clatter of her shoes, the muted whoosh of rain hitting the pavement. She kept her eyes on him, lungs screaming with each breath, mind sharpening on every detail: the flickering streetlamp that cast a flicker of blue light over his shoulders, the glint of a metallic object in his gloved hand. He turned sharply into a side alley, behind a crumbling brick wall, disappearing into the shadows of a narrow corridor. Quinn cursed, quickening her pace, voice sharp to halt his escape. “Stop right there! Metropolitan Police!” No response. Only the muffled squelch of rain on cobblestones, the hiss of water from office windows, and the suspect’s hurried steps echoing in a metal pipe-like alley. Quinn pressed her palm against her side where her Glock pressed against her ribs, momentarily weighing her options. She hesitated, instincts battling her reason. A faint sound from behind, hurried, uneven footsteps—someone else was closing in. She glimpsed a flickering neon sign, faintly tinted green, above a narrow, unmarked entrance: “The Raven’s Nest.” A bar, of all places, given the circumstances. Her gut clenched. She knew that bar. Known for its seedy clientele, secrets whispered over cheap drinks, local cops often turning a blind eye when the stakes were high. Her hand tightened on her weapon but she hesitated. The suspect had disappeared into the alley, but someone else was approaching fast, pushing through the rain with quick, determined steps. From the corner of her eye, she saw the shadowed outline of a figure, hunched, tracksuits and lean, purposeful strides. Concentrate. Find your man. Quinn’s eyes darted around. Further down the alley, an open fire escape snaked up the wall, leading to the rooftops. She could give chase, or find a way to cut him off further ahead. Yet, a gnawing suspicion moved through her. The suspect disappeared into that bar and her instincts buzzed—this wasn’t about some petty theft or a simple street thief. Not anymore. It was something else. She remembered the whispers about the underground market she unwittingly uncovered—the Veil Market, a place where all manner of supernatural paraphernalia shuffled from hand to hand, hidden beneath the city in abandoned tunnels and forgotten vaults. If he was seeking out such a place, he might be more dangerous than she thought. She hesitated, scanning the dimly lit intersection, torn between her duty and an inexplicable pull of caution. Just then the figure behind her was closing in, voice muffled but aggressive. “Hey! Stop!” Her gaze flicked back to the bar. The neon sign pulsed with an infected green glow that made her skin crawl. She could go after him, or she could slide into the darkness of the bar, confront whatever was lurking inside. It would be risky, buying into the unknown, but her gut shouted that this was no ordinary suspect. He appeared again in the alley’s mouth for half a second, sprinting toward a grey metal staircase that led into the building’s side, his figure vanishing behind a thin veil of rain streaking the glass door. Quinn’s mind raced—she could corner him here, or follow. The latter beckoned with a challenge she wasn’t sure she was ready for. She took a calculated breath, feeling the cold sweat gather at her temple. The rain’s relentless patter masked her movements as she slipped toward the entrance of the bar, her hand brushing the leather strap of her badge tucked beneath her coat. She pushed the door open just enough to peek inside. The brash scent of stale beer and nicotine hit her instant as she slipped inside, guarded by the faint flicker of the green neon. Inside, the bar was dimly lit, shadows pooling in every corner. Wood panels, dark and scratched, lined the walls, covered with old photographs and maps that looked like relics from some bygone era. Faint, rhythmic jazz played from a dusty jukebox in the back. The bartender, a scarred man with a vacant stare, looked up briefly then resumed polishing a glass. Quinn edged further in, ears tuned for any sign of her suspect. Among the clientele, she saw the signs of illicit dealings—men in mismatched suits, a couple of figures cloaked in hooded jackets with eyes flicking around. Her gaze lingered on the darkened back room, concealed behind a stack of antique bookshelves that seemed more like a doorway to clandestine dealings than a part of the bar’s main room. A shiver ran down her spine as she moved closer, suspicion tightening in her gut. She knew this was a dangerous game—once inside this alley of secrets, she’d be taking a step off the map, into territory no normal cop was supposed to venture. But stories of the supernatural always sounded absurd until someone—somehow—had seen it. Her eyes caught movement. A figure slipped past her, sleek and silent, hesitant as he paused near the bar’s shadowed edge. It was him. The figure with the hoodie now looked like a ghost in the fog—standing, eyeing the crowd with a predator’s focus. Then he saw her. His eyes widened, a flicker of panic dancing across his face. He reached into his pocket, fingers closing around a small, shiny object—something metallic, glinting under the low light. Her fingers twitched. The chase had just become something else entirely. And behind her, the door to the secret room clicked softly shut.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags1
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences3
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
90.21% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1021
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"sharply"
1"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1021
totalAiIsms24
found
0
word"footsteps"
count2
1
word"echoed"
count1
2
word"pounding"
count1
3
word"chilled"
count1
4
word"resolving"
count1
5
word"rhythmic"
count2
6
word"flicker"
count3
7
word"glint"
count1
8
word"echoing"
count1
9
word"determined"
count1
10
word"scanning"
count1
11
word"flicked"
count1
12
word"pulsed"
count1
13
word"raced"
count1
14
word"calculated"
count1
15
word"clandestine"
count1
16
word"down her spine"
count1
17
word"predator"
count1
18
word"dancing"
count1
19
word"glinting"
count1
highlights
0"footsteps"
1"echoed"
2"pounding"
3"chilled"
4"resolving"
5"rhythmic"
6"flicker"
7"glint"
8"echoing"
9"determined"
10"scanning"
11"flicked"
12"pulsed"
13"raced"
14"calculated"
15"clandestine"
16"down her spine"
17"predator"
18"dancing"
19"glinting"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"shiver down spine"
count1
1
label"heart pounded in chest"
count1
2
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"A shiver ran down her spine"
1"heart hammered in her chest"
2"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences65
matches
0"a flicker of panic"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences65
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences67
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1007
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions0
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions12
wordCount997
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity0.7
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn7
Soho1
Glock1
Veil1
Market1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Glock"
places
0"Soho"
globalScore1
windowScore1
55.66% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences53
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"looked like relics from some bygone era"
1"looked like a ghost in the fog—standing,"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1007
matches(empty)
67.16% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences67
matches
0"knew that bar"
1"shouted that this"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs22
mean45.77
std25.22
cv0.551
sampleLengths
091
178
236
352
466
550
645
762
833
913
102
1159
1258
1352
1485
1569
1656
1744
184
1929
2011
2112
99.87% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences65
matches
0"was supposed"
0.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount6
totalVerbs161
matches
0"was weaving"
1"was closing"
2"was approaching"
3"was seeking"
4"was closing"
5"was lurking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount13
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences11
totalSentences67
ratio0.164
matches
0"The suspect—clad in a dark hoodie and jeans soaked from head to boots—had a lead, or so she told herself, but now he was weaving through the labyrinth of Soho like a rat in a trap."
1"Quinn’s heart hammered in her chest—her ears tuned to the rhythmic clatter of her shoes, the muted whoosh of rain hitting the pavement."
2"A faint sound from behind, hurried, uneven footsteps—someone else was closing in."
3"The suspect disappeared into that bar and her instincts buzzed—this wasn’t about some petty theft or a simple street thief."
4"She remembered the whispers about the underground market she unwittingly uncovered—the Veil Market, a place where all manner of supernatural paraphernalia shuffled from hand to hand, hidden beneath the city in abandoned tunnels and forgotten vaults."
5"Quinn’s mind raced—she could corner him here, or follow."
6"Among the clientele, she saw the signs of illicit dealings—men in mismatched suits, a couple of figures cloaked in hooded jackets with eyes flicking around."
7"She knew this was a dangerous game—once inside this alley of secrets, she’d be taking a step off the map, into territory no normal cop was supposed to venture."
8"But stories of the supernatural always sounded absurd until someone—somehow—had seen it."
9"The figure with the hoodie now looked like a ghost in the fog—standing, eyeing the crowd with a predator’s focus."
10"He reached into his pocket, fingers closing around a small, shiny object—something metallic, glinting under the low light."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1011
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount36
adverbRatio0.03560830860534125
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.009891196834817012
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences67
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences67
mean15.03
std9.36
cv0.623
sampleLengths
018
123
214
336
416
523
639
720
811
95
102
1126
1218
136
1412
1525
163
174
1822
199
2021
2120
221
233
244
2516
2614
277
2820
292
304
3136
3216
3317
3413
352
367
3714
3820
3918
4036
419
4213
4313
4429
4510
4624
4711
4822
4911
70.65% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.43283582089552236
totalSentences67
uniqueOpeners29
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences62
matches
0"Only the muffled squelch of"
1"Further down the alley, an"
2"Just then the figure behind"
3"Then he saw her."
ratio0.065
58.71% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences62
matches
0"Her coat billowed behind her,"
1"She kept her eyes on"
2"He turned sharply into a"
3"She hesitated, instincts battling her"
4"She glimpsed a flickering neon"
5"Her gut clenched."
6"She knew that bar."
7"Her hand tightened on her"
8"She could give chase, or"
9"It was something else."
10"She remembered the whispers about"
11"She hesitated, scanning the dimly"
12"Her gaze flicked back to"
13"She could go after him,"
14"It would be risky, buying"
15"He appeared again in the"
16"She took a calculated breath,"
17"She pushed the door open"
18"Her gaze lingered on the"
19"She knew this was a"
ratio0.403
72.90% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount48
totalSentences62
matches
0"The crack of footsteps echoed"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn darted between"
2"Her coat billowed behind her,"
3"The suspect—clad in a dark"
4"The streets narrowed, the world"
5"Quinn’s heart hammered in her"
6"She kept her eyes on"
7"He turned sharply into a"
8"Quinn cursed, quickening her pace,"
9"Quinn pressed her palm against"
10"She hesitated, instincts battling her"
11"A faint sound from behind,"
12"She glimpsed a flickering neon"
13"Her gut clenched."
14"She knew that bar."
15"Her hand tightened on her"
16"The suspect had disappeared into"
17"Quinn’s eyes darted around."
18"She could give chase, or"
19"The suspect disappeared into that"
ratio0.774
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences62
matches
0"Yet, a gnawing suspicion moved"
1"If he was seeking out"
ratio0.032
51.67% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences47
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"The crack of footsteps echoed behind him, pounding in a staccato rhythm that blurred through the rain-slicked pavement."
1"She kept her eyes on him, lungs screaming with each breath, mind sharpening on every detail: the flickering streetlamp that cast a flicker of blue light over hi…"
2"The neon sign pulsed with an infected green glow that made her skin crawl."
3"He appeared again in the alley’s mouth for half a second, sprinting toward a grey metal staircase that led into the building’s side, his figure vanishing behind…"
4"Wood panels, dark and scratched, lined the walls, covered with old photographs and maps that looked like relics from some bygone era."
5"Her gaze lingered on the darkened back room, concealed behind a stack of antique bookshelves that seemed more like a doorway to clandestine dealings than a part…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags1
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
81.1164%