Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTREJYEXMHA9T8PV0W2VQV6

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Duration:
34.3s
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$0.002174
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Novita

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The rain lashed against the cobblestones, turning the streets into glistening rivers of darkness. Detective Harlow Quinn's boots echoed through the narrow alleyway, her breath misting in the cold air. She spotted the suspect, a figure draped in a black cloak, darting into the shadows of a side street. She quickened her pace, her heart pounding in her chest. "Stop right there!" she shouted, her voice cutting through the din of the city. The figure didn't even flinch, melting into the night like a wraith. Quinn's muscles tensed. This chase was getting out of hand, and she wasn't about to let him slip through her fingers again. She turned the corner, her flashlight beam slicing through the rain. The alley opened into a wider street, but there was no sign of the suspect. Her pulse quickened as she scanned the area. The only sound was the steady drumming of raindrops on the pavement. She moved forward, her eyes darting from shadow to shadow. A sudden movement caught her attention—a flicker of black fabric near a dilapidated entrance to an old building. She approached cautiously, her hand resting on her service revolver. The entrance was narrow, the door partially hidden by a tangle of ivy. She pushed it open, the creaking hinges sounding like a death knell. The corridor inside was dimly lit, the air heavy with the scent of damp earth. Quinn's flashlight revealed a series of stairs descending into darkness. The suspect was somewhere down there, and she had to follow. She hesitated for a moment, her mind racing. This could be a setup, but the case was too important to back down now. She began to descend the stairs, her boots thudding against the wet stone. The stairs spiraled deeper, the air growing colder and more oppressive. Her flashlight beam danced over walls covered in graffiti and ancient sigils, some of which seemed to glow faintly in the dim light. At the bottom of the stairs, she found herself in a vast, cavernous space. The air was thick with the scent of incense and old parchment. The walls were lined with stalls, each one filled with bizarre and unsettling items. Enchanted trinkets, banned alchemical substances, and ancient tomes filled the shelves. The place was the Veil Market, a hidden supernatural black market that operated beneath Camden. Quinn's eyes widened as she took in the scene. Vendors huddled over their wares, whispering in hushed tones. Shoppers browsed with a sense of urgency, their faces hidden by hoods and masks. The suspect was nowhere in sight, but she could feel his presence, a shadow lurking in the corners. A figure stepped out from behind a stall, his eyes glinting in the dim light. "What are you doing here, Detective?" the man asked, his voice low and gravelly. Quinn recognized him as one of the market's regulars, a dealer known for his connections to the underground. "I'm looking for someone," she replied, her tone firm. "A man in a black cloak. Have you seen him?" The dealer gave a knowing smile. "You're in a dangerous place, Detective. The Veil Market has its own rules. Trespassers are not welcome." Quinn's grip tightened on her revolver. "I don't have time for this. Where is he?" The dealer's expression hardened. "You shouldn't be here. Leave while you can." Before he could say more, a commotion broke out at the far end of the market. Quinn's instincts kicked in, and she pushed past the dealer, her flashlight cutting through the crowd. She reached the center of the commotion to find a group of people gathered around a stall. A man in a black cloak was arguing with a vendor, his voice rising in agitation. "That's not what we agreed on!" The vendor, a wiry woman with a fierce look in her eyes, held a small, ornate box. "You agreed to the price. Pay up or get out." The man in the cloak reached into his pocket, pulling out a bone token. "Here's your payment. Now give me what I want." The vendor's eyes narrowed. "Bone tokens are for entry, not for purchases. You owe me real currency." The man's face contorted in frustration. "I don't have any more. This is all I have." Quinn saw her opportunity. She stepped forward, her revolver drawn. "Enough!" she shouted. The crowd parted, and all eyes turned to her. "I'm Detective Harlow Quinn. You're under arrest for possession of stolen property and trespassing." The man in the cloak hesitated, his eyes darting to the exit. Quinn could see the fear in his eyes, the realization that he was cornered. "You can't arrest me here," he stammered. "This is the Veil Market. You have no jurisdiction." Quinn's expression remained cold and resolute. "You're wrong. I have all the jurisdiction I need. Drop the token and put your hands up." The man's hand tightened around the token, but he knew he was beaten. Slowly, he placed it on the table and raised his hands. Quinn moved in, her movements precise and efficient. She cuffed him and read him his rights, her voice steady and unyielding. As she led the suspect away, the crowd murmured in low tones. The dealer from earlier watched her with a sullen expression, but said nothing. Quinn ignored him, her focus on the task at hand. She had to get him out of the market and back to the precinct. The journey back up the stairs was a test of endurance. The rain had intensified, turning the city into a blur of water and shadows. Quinn's soaked clothes clung to her body, but she pushed through the discomfort. The suspect muttered under his breath, his words indistinct but laced with resentment. Once they reached the surface, Quinn hailed a cab, the neon lights of the city reflecting in the puddles. She sat in the backseat, the suspect beside her, his eyes downcast. The cab pulled away, the wheels splashing through the rain-soaked streets. As they drove, Quinn's mind raced. The Veil Market was a dangerous place, and she had just crossed into territory she knew little about. But the case was too important to ignore. She had to follow the trail wherever it led, no matter the cost. The cab pulled up to the precinct, and Quinn wasted no time. She marched the suspect inside, her steps firm and determined. The moment they entered the building, she knew the real work was just beginning. This was only the start of a much deeper and darker investigation, one that would test her limits and challenge everything she believed in. But she was ready. Detective Harlow Quinn was ready for whatever came next.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags5
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences17
tagDensity0.294
leniency0.588
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.04% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1116
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"cautiously"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"cautiously"
1"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
28.32% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1116
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"glistening"
count1
1
word"echoed"
count1
2
word"quickened"
count2
3
word"pounding"
count1
4
word"pulse"
count1
5
word"scanned"
count1
6
word"flicker"
count1
7
word"racing"
count1
8
word"oppressive"
count1
9
word"sense of"
count1
10
word"could feel"
count1
11
word"glinting"
count1
12
word"efficient"
count1
13
word"raced"
count1
14
word"determined"
count1
highlights
0"glistening"
1"echoed"
2"quickened"
3"pounding"
4"pulse"
5"scanned"
6"flicker"
7"racing"
8"oppressive"
9"sense of"
10"could feel"
11"glinting"
12"efficient"
13"raced"
14"determined"
33.33% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow3
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count2
1
label"air was thick with"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
1"eyes narrowed"
2"The air was thick with"
94.51% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells3
narrationSentences82
matches
0"a sense of urgency"
1"d in frustration"
2"d with resentment"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences82
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences94
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen24
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1114
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
61.73% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions24
wordCount963
uniqueNames5
maxNameDensity1.77
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow2
Quinn17
Veil2
Market2
Camden1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
places(empty)
globalScore0.617
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences74
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1114
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences94
matches(empty)
86.92% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs29
mean38.41
std17.45
cv0.454
sampleLengths
059
148
256
353
459
547
666
750
829
937
1023
1115
1212
1365
146
1527
1623
1717
1816
1936
2042
2123
2245
2349
2451
2542
2645
2760
2813
92.43% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences82
matches
0"were lined"
1"was cornered"
2"was beaten"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs162
matches
0"was arguing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences94
ratio0.011
matches
0"A sudden movement caught her attention—a flicker of black fabric near a dilapidated entrance to an old building."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount965
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount23
adverbRatio0.02383419689119171
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.008290155440414507
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences94
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
83.95% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences94
mean11.85
std4.27
cv0.36
sampleLengths
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219
310
414
512
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811
915
108
1112
1210
1318
1410
1513
1612
1715
1810
1911
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2213
2311
2423
2514
2612
2714
2811
2915
309
319
3214
3318
3415
3514
3618
379
3810
396
4017
416
429
434
448
4516
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4816
496
46.81% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.2553191489361702
totalSentences94
uniqueOpeners24
83.33% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences80
matches
0"Slowly, he placed it on"
1"Once they reached the surface,"
ratio0.025
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount19
totalSentences80
matches
0"She spotted the suspect, a"
1"She quickened her pace, her"
2"she shouted, her voice cutting"
3"She turned the corner, her"
4"Her pulse quickened as she"
5"She moved forward, her eyes"
6"She approached cautiously, her hand"
7"She pushed it open, the"
8"She hesitated for a moment,"
9"She began to descend the"
10"Her flashlight beam danced over"
11"she replied, her tone firm"
12"She reached the center of"
13"She stepped forward, her revolver"
14"She cuffed him and read"
15"She had to get him"
16"She sat in the backseat,"
17"She had to follow the"
18"She marched the suspect inside,"
ratio0.238
16.25% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount71
totalSentences80
matches
0"The rain lashed against the"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn's boots echoed"
2"She spotted the suspect, a"
3"She quickened her pace, her"
4"she shouted, her voice cutting"
5"The figure didn't even flinch,"
6"Quinn's muscles tensed."
7"This chase was getting out"
8"She turned the corner, her"
9"The alley opened into a"
10"Her pulse quickened as she"
11"The only sound was the"
12"She moved forward, her eyes"
13"A sudden movement caught her"
14"She approached cautiously, her hand"
15"The entrance was narrow, the"
16"She pushed it open, the"
17"The corridor inside was dimly"
18"Quinn's flashlight revealed a series"
19"The suspect was somewhere down"
ratio0.888
62.50% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences80
matches
0"Before he could say more,"
ratio0.013
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences58
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The place was the Veil Market, a hidden supernatural black market that operated beneath Camden."
1"A man in a black cloak was arguing with a vendor, his voice rising in agitation."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags5
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"she shouted, her voice cutting through the din of the city"
1"the man asked, his voice low and gravelly"
2"she replied, her tone firm"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"she shouted (shout)"
1"she shouted (shout)"
2"he stammered (stammer)"
dialogueSentences17
tagDensity0.294
leniency0.588
rawRatio0.6
effectiveRatio0.353
79.3710%