Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRFNC432N1EGNTNQCPXWE7

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn sprinted through the rain-soaked streets, her breath visible in the cold night air. Her worn leather watch ticked steadily, a reminder of the time slipping away. The suspect, a shadowy figure, darted ahead, weaving through the throng of late-night revellers and disappearing into the labyrinthine alleys of Soho. Quinn's sharp jaw clenched as she pushed herself harder, her military precision guiding her through the chaos. The neon sign of The Raven's Nest flickered in the corner of her eye, its distinctive green glow casting eerie shadows on the wet pavement. She knew the bar well, its hidden back room a notorious meeting place for those who preferred their dealings away from prying eyes. But tonight, her quarry had no time for clandestine meetings. He was running, and she was determined to catch him. Quinn's heart pounded as she rounded a corner, her eyes scanning the dimly lit alley for any sign of movement. The suspect was fast, but she was faster. Her years of service had honed her instincts, and she could feel the adrenaline coursing through her veins. She spotted him, a fleeting silhouette slipping into an abandoned Tube station beneath Camden. The Veil Market. Her pulse quickened. The entrance to the underground market was marked by a bone token, a macabre talisman that granted access to the hidden world below. Quinn hesitated, her mind racing with the implications of following him into such unfamiliar territory. The Veil Market was notorious for its supernatural clientele, a place where enchanted goods and banned alchemical substances were traded like common commodities. She had heard whispers of its existence, but had never ventured inside. Her decision was made in an instant. She couldn't let him escape. Quinn approached the entrance, her eyes narrowing as she examined the token. It was cold to the touch, its surface smooth and polished. She slipped it into the slot, and the door creaked open, revealing a dimly lit staircase that descended into darkness. The air was thick with the scent of incense and something else, something metallic. Copper stung her nostrils. Blood. Recent. She steeled herself, her senses alert as she descended into the depths of the market. The walls were lined with old maps and black-and-white photographs, their faded images telling stories of a world long forgotten. The market was a cacophony of sound and colour, a bustling hive of activity that seemed to pulse with life. Quinn moved through the crowd, her eyes scanning the stalls for any sign of her suspect. Vendors hawked their wares, their voices rising above the din as they extolled the virtues of their enchanted goods. She caught snippets of conversation, fragments of deals being struck and secrets being whispered. "Looking for something special, love?" A vendor called out, his eyes gleaming with the promise of forbidden knowledge. Quinn ignored him, her focus unwavering as she continued her search. The suspect was here, she could feel it. Her instincts guided her through the maze of stalls, her eyes flicking from face to face, searching for the one that didn't belong. She spotted him near a stall selling alchemical substances, his eyes darting nervously as he haggled with the vendor. Quinn approached, her presence unnoticed in the throng of shoppers. She was close now, close enough to hear the exchange. "Double the price for the last batch," the vendor said, his voice low and conspiratorial. The suspect nodded, his hand slipping into his pocket to retrieve a wad of cash. Quinn's heart raced. She had him. "Police!" Her voice cut through the noise, sharp and commanding. The suspect froze, his eyes wide with fear as he turned to face her. Quinn's gaze was unwavering, her authority undeniable. "You're coming with me." The suspect hesitated, his eyes flicking to the crowd around them. Quinn could see the calculation in his eyes, the weighing of options. She knew what was coming before he even moved. He bolted, shoving past the vendor and disappearing into the throng. Quinn cursed under her breath, her feet pounding the pavement as she gave chase. The market was a maze, its twists and turns designed to confuse and disorient. But Quinn was relentless, her determination driving her forward. She followed him through the stalls, her eyes locked on his retreating form. The crowd parted before her, their eyes wide with curiosity and fear. Quinn's breath came in short bursts, her muscles burning with exertion. She was close now, close enough to see the panic in his eyes. The suspect stumbled, his foot catching on a loose cobblestone. Quinn seized the opportunity, her hand closing around his arm with a grip like iron. He struggled, his movements frantic and desperate, but Quinn held firm. "You're done," she said, her voice low and steady. The suspect sagged in her grip, his fight gone. Quinn's heart slowed, her adrenaline ebbing as she secured him with a pair of handcuffs. The market buzzed around them, its patrons oblivious to the drama unfolding in their midst. Quinn's eyes met the vendor's, his expression a mix of surprise and admiration. "Nice catch," he said, his voice tinged with respect. Quinn nodded, her mind already racing with the implications of the arrest. The Veil Market was a world unto itself, a place where the supernatural and the mundane collided in a dance of shadows and secrets. She had stepped into its depths and emerged victorious, but she knew the true challenge lay ahead. As she led the suspect away, her thoughts turned to the investigation that awaited her. The market was a puzzle, its pieces scattered and hidden. But Quinn was determined to solve it, to uncover the truth that lay beneath its surface. The rain fell steadily as she emerged from the underground, her breath visible in the cold night air. The city stretched before her, its streets glistening with the promise of new beginnings. Quinn's jaw set with determination. She had a case to crack, and she wouldn't rest until she did.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences6
tagDensity0.667
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.03% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1007
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"nervously"
count1
highlights
0"nervously"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1007
totalAiIsms29
found
0
word"reminder"
count1
1
word"jaw clenched"
count1
2
word"flickered"
count1
3
word"clandestine"
count1
4
word"determined"
count2
5
word"scanning"
count2
6
word"could feel"
count2
7
word"fleeting"
count1
8
word"pulse"
count2
9
word"quickened"
count1
10
word"macabre"
count1
11
word"racing"
count2
12
word"steeled"
count1
13
word"depths"
count2
14
word"cacophony"
count1
15
word"gleaming"
count1
16
word"unwavering"
count2
17
word"raced"
count1
18
word"pounding"
count1
19
word"tinged"
count1
20
word"dance"
count1
21
word"glistening"
count1
highlights
0"reminder"
1"jaw clenched"
2"flickered"
3"clandestine"
4"determined"
5"scanning"
6"could feel"
7"fleeting"
8"pulse"
9"quickened"
10"macabre"
11"racing"
12"steeled"
13"depths"
14"cacophony"
15"gleaming"
16"unwavering"
17"raced"
18"pounding"
19"tinged"
20"dance"
21"glistening"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
1
label"air was thick with"
count1
highlights
0"jaw clenched"
1"The air was thick with"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences77
matches
0"e with fear"
1"t with determination"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences77
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences78
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen25
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1003
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions4
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions33
wordCount982
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity2.14
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn21
Soho1
Raven1
Nest1
Tube1
Camden1
Veil3
Market3
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Raven"
3"Nest"
4"Market"
places
0"Soho"
globalScore0.431
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences68
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"activity that seemed to pulse with life"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1003
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences78
matches(empty)
88.80% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs24
mean41.79
std19.26
cv0.461
sampleLengths
068
168
266
373
455
555
669
718
842
939
1015
1121
1224
1311
1432
1548
1649
1736
189
1939
2022
2153
2241
2350
73.37% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount7
totalSentences77
matches
0"was determined"
1"was marked"
2"were traded"
3"was made"
4"were lined"
5"being struck"
6"being whispered"
7"was determined"
76.54% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs162
matches
0"was running"
1"was unwavering"
2"was coming"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences78
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount986
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount18
adverbRatio0.018255578093306288
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.005070993914807302
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences78
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences78
mean12.86
std5.61
cv0.437
sampleLengths
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113
222
317
425
523
610
710
820
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1018
1114
123
133
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1515
1623
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2012
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2220
2314
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251
261
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2820
2920
3016
3119
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3411
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3719
3810
3910
4015
4115
423
433
4410
4514
467
474
4811
4912
47.44% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.23076923076923078
totalSentences78
uniqueOpeners18
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences75
matches(empty)
ratio0
76.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences75
matches
0"Her worn leather watch ticked"
1"She knew the bar well,"
2"He was running, and she"
3"Her years of service had"
4"She spotted him, a fleeting"
5"Her pulse quickened."
6"She had heard whispers of"
7"Her decision was made in"
8"She couldn't let him escape."
9"It was cold to the"
10"She slipped it into the"
11"She steeled herself, her senses"
12"She caught snippets of conversation,"
13"Her instincts guided her through"
14"She spotted him near a"
15"She was close now, close"
16"She had him."
17"Her voice cut through the"
18"She knew what was coming"
19"He bolted, shoving past the"
ratio0.36
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount71
totalSentences75
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn sprinted through"
1"Her worn leather watch ticked"
2"The suspect, a shadowy figure,"
3"Quinn's sharp jaw clenched as"
4"The neon sign of The"
5"She knew the bar well,"
6"He was running, and she"
7"Quinn's heart pounded as she"
8"The suspect was fast, but"
9"Her years of service had"
10"She spotted him, a fleeting"
11"The Veil Market."
12"Her pulse quickened."
13"The entrance to the underground"
14"Quinn hesitated, her mind racing"
15"The Veil Market was notorious"
16"She had heard whispers of"
17"Her decision was made in"
18"She couldn't let him escape."
19"Quinn approached the entrance, her"
ratio0.947
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences75
matches(empty)
ratio0
66.33% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences56
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"The entrance to the underground market was marked by a bone token, a macabre talisman that granted access to the hidden world below."
1"Quinn hesitated, her mind racing with the implications of following him into such unfamiliar territory."
2"She slipped it into the slot, and the door creaked open, revealing a dimly lit staircase that descended into darkness."
3"The market was a cacophony of sound and colour, a bustling hive of activity that seemed to pulse with life."
4"Her instincts guided her through the maze of stalls, her eyes flicking from face to face, searching for the one that didn't belong."
5"She spotted him near a stall selling alchemical substances, his eyes darting nervously as he haggled with the vendor."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"A vendor called out, his eyes gleaming with the promise of forbidden knowledge"
1"the vendor said, his voice low and conspiratorial"
2"she said, her voice low and steady"
25.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"A vendor called out (call out)"
dialogueSentences6
tagDensity0.667
leniency1
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.25
71.6167%