Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRJ1B8GQ27H2D2S5134QD4

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Duration:
29.6s
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Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The sound of a shoe slapping against rain-slicked pavement echoed through the narrow, dimly lit streets as Detective Harlow Quinn sprinted, her breath coming hard and fast. She could hear the man’s footsteps just ahead, his outline fading deeper into the chaos of Soho’s nocturnal rhythm. The scent of wet concrete mixed with the distant allure of wet asphalt and fried onions from the street vendors was sharp in her nostrils. “Stop!” she shouted, her voice reverberating off the wet brick, but the figure only pushed harder, glancing over his shoulder, his gaze flickering with panic. Quinn calculated her next move. He ducked around a corner, and without a second thought, she followed, boots splashing through puddles, urgency driving her pulse. The city had a heartbeat, a malign one that throbbed under the soaked veneer of London. Shadows flickered mischievously, and as she turned the corner, the chase led her right into the reverberating pulse of the metropolis. He darted through an alley, a dismal, half-lit space littered with the refuse of the night. She pressed on, heart pounding against her ribcage, adrenaline surging like a wild river through her veins. Wet bricks formed a tunnel around her as she pushed forward, eager to close the distance. But just as she thought she was closing in, he veered into an unmarked door at the end of the alley. Quinn skidded to a stop in front of the entrance, a heavy metal door with peeling paint and a flickering light overhead that appeared almost desperate in its fight against the dark. She could hear the faint thumping of club music beyond, pulsing with an enticing beat that felt both close and far away. The sign above read “The Veil Market,” with no other inviting details. Her instincts twinged uneasily. The Veil Market wasn’t just a bazaar—it was a catacomb of whispers and forbidden commodities. Quinn had heard far too many rumblings about it but had never truly understood the allure that drew in both the foolish and the desperate. This was no ordinary chase. With the raucous sounds of the city behind her and the allure of something unpredictable just ahead, she hesitated. The narrow alley was drenched in shadow, as if telling her to turn back while she still could. But the thought of letting him slip away twisted something visceral within her, something primal. Gritting her teeth, she pushed against the door, the metal groaning in protest as she stepped inside. The air shifted. A wave of heat enveloped her, thick with the scent of incense and something sharper—like ozone after a storm. The flicker of candles illuminated bizarre wares draped across tables. Old tomes, trinkets that sparkled dully under the weak light—everything about the market felt illicit, glimmering with unacknowledged danger. “Damn it,” she muttered. The suspect necessitated immediate action. He could be lost in this sea of lunacy, swallowed whole by the darkness that simmered just beneath the surface. “Quinn!” a voice pierced through the low din. Tomás Herrera, a familiar face emerging from the thrumming shadows, his short dark curls sticking to his forehead as if he had just stepped out of the rain himself. “What are you doing here?” she snapped, scanning the crowd quickly but not letting her gaze linger on him. “Got a tip-off,” he replied, shrugging. The glimmer of his Saint Christopher medallion caught her eye. “Thought I’d drop by, check on a few things.” He leaned in closer, lowering his voice so it barely rose above the pulsating rhythm, eyes darting. “And you’re in a dangerous spot. You shouldn’t be here.” “I came after a suspect.” She didn’t have time for his warnings, her instincts kicked in again, pushing her towards the neon chaos. “Suspect? What do you—” But Quinn ignored him, eyes scanning walls crowded with relics and whispering figments of the underworld. She edged deeper, focused, but aware of the vibrating heaviness on the air. Shadows flickered in the corners of her gaze, retreating with every step she took. The market surged with movement, bodies moving like phantoms from stall to stall, secret deals exchanged beneath the watchful gaze of the unspoken. She heard snatches of conversations: mentions of blood contracts and long-forgotten magic as her stride quickened. There were eyes on her. She could feel it—the prickling sensation on the nape of her neck. “He disappeared,” she muttered, frustration bubbling inside her. Tomás grabbed her arm, tight enough to seize her attention. “Quinn, this isn’t—” “It doesn’t matter!” She yanked free, spotting a familiar silhouette a few stands down, dodging between tables. “Caution! You’re stepping into unknown waters,” he called after her, exasperation and concern lining his voice. But the pounding thrum of the chase rushed through her veins, drowning out any sensible retort. She rolled past a table cluttered with vials that glowered menacingly in the candlelight—some overflowing with an unidentifiable liquid, others promising compassion and vengeance. She continued, feet pounding against the floor, dodging buyers and sellers in this den of the forbidden. She reached a darkened corner of the market, where silks hung thick, blocking her view. Counting her heartbeats now, she squeezed through the fabric, catching a quick glimpse of a room farther back, faintly lit—and oh, yes! There was the suspect, slipping away. “Stop!” The word choked in her throat as she lunged ahead, using the last vestiges of strength. But he all but disappeared behind the curtain, too fast, too sought-after like a shadow in the dark. She charged forward, throwing aside the draping fabric. What loomed before her was a secret chamber, a space cluttered with more peculiar items and a lingering scent of charred cedar. In the center of the chaos, she spotted him again, cornered now, profiled against the light, the glint of desperation in his eyes revealing how far he’d come from her grasp. Her heart raced—he turned, eyes locked onto hers, chaos swirling around them both. “Quinn!” Herrera’s voice broke through the din, but she was too focused, too fervent in this solitary pursuit. “There’s nowhere left to run!” she declared, advancing. “Is there?” He grinned knowingly, eyes darting towards a hidden door at the far end of the room. And just like that, adrenaline surged again as he bolted for it, disappearing behind the door. Quinn collided with the wall, holding herself steady as her mind raced. Follow him further down the rabbit hole of this clandestine world, or turn back and regroup above? But hesitation cost lives, and she wouldn’t let him escape justice, not in the underbelly of something she didn't fully comprehend. "Tomás," she called, eyes fixed resolutely on the now steadily closing door. "Are you coming or staying?" "Quinn, you have to listen—" Ignoring him, she dashed towards the doorway, the metal handle cool against her palm, the weight of what lay behind it hanging provocatively in the air. Whatever awaited her, it would follow the chase, inching ever closer to whatever darkness lingered there. And before she knew it, she yanked the door wide, racing headlong into the heart of the unknown.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"He grinned knowingly [knowingly]"
dialogueSentences21
tagDensity0.714
leniency1
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.067
87.42% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1192
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"truly"
count1
1
adverb"quickly"
count1
2
adverb"knowingly"
count1
highlights
0"truly"
1"quickly"
2"knowingly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1192
totalAiIsms28
found
0
word"echoed"
count1
1
word"footsteps"
count1
2
word"calculated"
count1
3
word"pulse"
count2
4
word"throbbed"
count1
5
word"flickered"
count2
6
word"pounding"
count3
7
word"flicker"
count1
8
word"familiar"
count2
9
word"scanning"
count2
10
word"unspoken"
count1
11
word"quickened"
count1
12
word"could feel"
count1
13
word"charged"
count1
14
word"loomed"
count1
15
word"glint"
count1
16
word"raced"
count2
17
word"solitary"
count1
18
word"clandestine"
count1
19
word"weight"
count1
20
word"racing"
count1
highlights
0"echoed"
1"footsteps"
2"calculated"
3"pulse"
4"throbbed"
5"flickered"
6"pounding"
7"flicker"
8"familiar"
9"scanning"
10"unspoken"
11"quickened"
12"could feel"
13"charged"
14"loomed"
15"glint"
16"raced"
17"solitary"
18"clandestine"
19"weight"
20"racing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"without second thought"
count1
highlights
0"without a second thought"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences71
matches
0"g with panic"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences71
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences76
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1181
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions19
wordCount1104
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity0.54
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Detective1
Harlow1
Quinn6
Soho1
London1
Veil1
Market1
Tomás2
Herrera2
Saint1
Christopher1
Ignoring1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Market"
3"Tomás"
4"Herrera"
5"Saint"
6"Christopher"
places
0"Soho"
1"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
69.35% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences62
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"appeared almost desperate in its fight against the dark"
1"as if telling her to turn back while she still could"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1181
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences76
matches
0"like that, adrenaline"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs36
mean32.81
std19.25
cv0.587
sampleLengths
071
125
262
349
421
566
649
752
817
951
1029
1137
1219
1352
1423
154
1643
1756
188
1913
2017
2116
2257
2343
2435
2561
2613
2718
288
2918
3045
3121
3217
335
3442
3518
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences71
matches
0"was drenched"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs177
matches
0"was closing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences76
ratio0.092
matches
0"The Veil Market wasn’t just a bazaar—it was a catacomb of whispers and forbidden commodities."
1"A wave of heat enveloped her, thick with the scent of incense and something sharper—like ozone after a storm."
2"Old tomes, trinkets that sparkled dully under the weak light—everything about the market felt illicit, glimmering with unacknowledged danger."
3"She could feel it—the prickling sensation on the nape of her neck."
4"She rolled past a table cluttered with vials that glowered menacingly in the candlelight—some overflowing with an unidentifiable liquid, others promising compassion and vengeance."
5"Counting her heartbeats now, she squeezed through the fabric, catching a quick glimpse of a room farther back, faintly lit—and oh, yes!"
6"Her heart raced—he turned, eyes locked onto hers, chaos swirling around them both."
85.30% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1114
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"against rain-slicked pavement"
1"dismal, half-lit space"
adverbCount48
adverbRatio0.04308797127468582
lyAdverbCount16
lyAdverbRatio0.01436265709156194
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences76
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences76
mean15.54
std7.1
cv0.457
sampleLengths
027
119
225
325
45
520
616
721
816
917
1016
1121
1232
1322
1412
154
1615
1725
185
1919
2018
2115
2217
233
2419
2510
2619
274
285
2920
308
3129
3219
336
3410
3526
3610
3723
384
3916
4013
4114
4223
4316
445
4512
468
4710
483
4917
67.54% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.42105263157894735
totalSentences76
uniqueOpeners32
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences70
matches(empty)
ratio0
71.43% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences70
matches
0"She could hear the man’s"
1"she shouted, her voice reverberating"
2"He ducked around a corner,"
3"He darted through an alley,"
4"She pressed on, heart pounding"
5"She could hear the faint"
6"Her instincts twinged uneasily."
7"He could be lost in"
8"she snapped, scanning the crowd"
9"he replied, shrugging"
10"He leaned in closer, lowering"
11"She didn’t have time for"
12"She edged deeper, focused, but"
13"She heard snatches of conversations:"
14"She could feel it—the prickling"
15"she muttered, frustration bubbling inside"
16"She yanked free, spotting a"
17"he called after her, exasperation"
18"She rolled past a table"
19"She continued, feet pounding against"
ratio0.371
95.71% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount51
totalSentences70
matches
0"The sound of a shoe"
1"She could hear the man’s"
2"The scent of wet concrete"
3"she shouted, her voice reverberating"
4"Quinn calculated her next move."
5"He ducked around a corner,"
6"The city had a heartbeat,"
7"Shadows flickered mischievously, and as"
8"He darted through an alley,"
9"She pressed on, heart pounding"
10"Quinn skidded to a stop"
11"She could hear the faint"
12"The sign above read with"
13"Her instincts twinged uneasily."
14"The Veil Market wasn’t just"
15"Quinn had heard far too"
16"This was no ordinary chase."
17"The narrow alley was drenched"
18"The air shifted."
19"A wave of heat enveloped"
ratio0.729
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences70
matches(empty)
ratio0
51.67% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences47
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"The sound of a shoe slapping against rain-slicked pavement echoed through the narrow, dimly lit streets as Detective Harlow Quinn sprinted, her breath coming ha…"
1"Quinn skidded to a stop in front of the entrance, a heavy metal door with peeling paint and a flickering light overhead that appeared almost desperate in its fi…"
2"She could hear the faint thumping of club music beyond, pulsing with an enticing beat that felt both close and far away."
3"Old tomes, trinkets that sparkled dully under the weak light—everything about the market felt illicit, glimmering with unacknowledged danger."
4"Tomás Herrera, a familiar face emerging from the thrumming shadows, his short dark curls sticking to his forehead as if he had just stepped out of the rain hims…"
5"She rolled past a table cluttered with vials that glowered menacingly in the candlelight—some overflowing with an unidentifiable liquid, others promising compas…"
58.33% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"she muttered, frustration bubbling inside her"
1"she called, eyes fixed resolutely on the now steadily closing door"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"she shouted (shout)"
1"she muttered (mutter)"
2"she snapped (snap)"
3"she muttered (mutter)"
4"The word choked (choke)"
5"she declared (declare)"
dialogueSentences21
tagDensity0.429
leniency0.857
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.571
76.2254%