Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRJ4ESX2FS9B6EC01E9A73

Run Details

Duration:
16.2s
Cost:
$0.002674
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora’s breath hitched as she stepped past the ancient oak standing stones, the twisted bark scratching faint whispers into the night silence. The ground beneath her feet felt almost too soft, a thick tangle of wildflowers brushing against her worn boots, their blooms glowing pale in the silver gleam of the Heartstone pendant resting low against her chest. The pendant’s deep crimson gemstone pulsed faintly, warmth seeping through her thin jumper. Too warm for just a trinket. She had come here to find answers. To isolate whatever shadow had clawed at her thoughts since that strange message arrived—a scrap of cryptic lore mentioning Hel portals and the Fae Grove. Logical, cold reasoning told her to tread carefully, but instinct snarled an alert: this pocket of Richmond Park wasn’t quite Earth, not anymore. The fire opal flickered in her mind’s eye as she ventured deeper. The music of the city, muffled and distant, was a mere echo here. Only the crackling of dry leaves shifting underfoot, a breath drawn in the night air, and the faint rustle of something moving just beyond clear sight. Aurora pulled her black coat tighter around her. The crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist prickled with a sudden chill, the old ache rising from beneath her skin—childhood trauma, a reminder she never quite fully understood. She pressed her fingers over it, seeking steadiness. The wildflowers bloomed brightly, impossibly so, petals shimmering despite the late hour. Time twisted inside the Grove; she recalled Eva’s words: an hour here might stretch like days outside. The thought urged her to move faster, but hesitation squeezed her chest when a dry twig snapped behind her. She flicked her eyes sharply to the thick trunk of a nearby oak. Nothing. Yet the sensation of being watched made her skin crawl. That whisper. A shift? No breeze stirred the air. The Heartstone pulsed again, more insistent now—as if urging her toward something. Then it moved. Out of the corner of her eye, shape curled and twisted, dark figure too agile and vague to grasp. Her heart kicked, harsh and erratic, but her lips drew into a taut line. Rory wasn’t the sort to run on a whim. "Who's there?" Her voice barely rose above the night’s breath. Silence answered, thick and heavy. The flowers rustled, then stilled. Aurora's hands brushed her pockets for the folded note she’d risked coming here to decipher—a map scrawled hastily, a name cryptic as the pendant: Hel’s Crossing. The Grove. Her breath caught again as a faint humming hummed low beneath the rustling leaves, almost melodic but off-key, like a lullaby sung wrong. Her skin prickled. The Grove was shifting; the boundary between realms felt thinner than before, raw and tremulous. A soft crunch echoed behind. She spun—empty space. "It’s the woods playing tricks," she muttered, stepping forward. The wildflowers throbbed beneath silver light as if alive, their colours bleeding into the shadows. Aurora's eyes flicked to a dark stain on the mossy floor—too rich, too red. Her pulse galloped. Then whispering voices, so soft they could have been her imagination. Distant, close, layered, shifting. She swallowed, straining to listen. A phrase emerged, spindly and warped. "Come… come." Her heartbeat thundered. The pendant flared fiercely, warmth blossoming in the palm of her hand. The night felt suddenly suffocating—as if the Grove itself closed in, breath caught in mist. Movement again—flitting at the edge of vision. Not human. Not quite. Small, swift. Watching. Waiting. Rory’s instincts screamed retreat, but the promise of truth rooted her to the spot. The ground beneath her began to pulse, syncing with the pendant’s beat, and shadows wriggled into unsettling forms. A figure, tall, impossibly thin, its face shrouded in a veil of leaves and darkness, stepped from behind a tree. "Why have you come here, child of Man?" The voice slithered through the night, sibilant and hollow. Aurora swallowed the shock, grounding her gaze in bright blue defiance. "To find answers." "Answers are costly." The figure’s smile was sharp as broken glass. "Are you ready to pay?" The air thickened with something ancient and unspeakable. The wildflowers bowed as if under weight, the whispering growing louder, crowding her senses. She took a slow breath. “I’ve walked through worse.” A crook of blackened fingers beckoned her closer. From the thicket, rustling grew louder—more shapes, eyes glittering—circling, patient, hungry. Aurora’s fingers tightened around the Heartstone. The glow flared, bathing the Grove in crimson light. The figures froze, recoiling. "So," the veiled figure hissed, voice sharp and mocking. "You carry the token. The link." She nodded. No turning back now. The figures began to advance, fluid shadows crossing the wildflowers, silent but relentless. A sudden scream ripped through the Grove—piercing, unnatural—and the shadows stopped, shuddering as the Grove convulsed, the wildflowers snapping upright. Aurora spun, heart lodged in throat. The path back was swallowed in creeping mist. "Trapped." The word hit her like a blade. Deep laughter echoed, cold and cruel. "Welcome to the Grove, Carter." The pendant burned fiercely, pulsing against her breastbone like a heartbeat gone mad. The veil of night seemed to fold inward, suffocating. Shapes converged, eyes glinting madly. Aurora lifted a trembling hand, steel sharpening in her glare. "Not today."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences13
tagDensity0.308
leniency0.615
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
83.03% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount884
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
1
adverb"sharply"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
1"sharply"
2"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount884
totalAiIsms21
found
0
word"silence"
count2
1
word"pulsed"
count2
2
word"warmth"
count2
3
word"flickered"
count1
4
word"echo"
count1
5
word"chill"
count1
6
word"reminder"
count1
7
word"flicked"
count2
8
word"whisper"
count1
9
word"echoed"
count2
10
word"throbbed"
count1
11
word"pulse"
count2
12
word"thundered"
count1
13
word"weight"
count1
14
word"glinting"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"pulsed"
2"warmth"
3"flickered"
4"echo"
5"chill"
6"reminder"
7"flicked"
8"whisper"
9"echoed"
10"throbbed"
11"pulse"
12"thundered"
13"weight"
14"glinting"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences81
matches(empty)
89.95% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences81
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences88
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen36
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords870
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions29
wordCount823
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity0.97
worstName"Grove"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Heartstone3
Hel2
Fae1
Grove8
Richmond1
Park1
Earth1
Eva1
Silence1
Crossing1
Aurora8
Deep1
persons
0"Hel"
1"Eva"
2"Silence"
3"Aurora"
places
0"Fae"
1"Grove"
2"Richmond"
3"Park"
globalScore1
windowScore1
59.09% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences55
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"quite Earth, not anymore"
1"as if urging her toward something"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount870
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences88
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs43
mean20.23
std16.55
cv0.818
sampleLengths
077
155
251
344
448
524
621
745
810
95
105
1128
1241
138
149
1532
1615
1711
182
193
2027
2115
2214
2338
2417
2514
2616
2722
289
298
3011
3119
3215
336
3413
3520
366
378
388
3911
4027
4110
422
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences81
matches
0"was swallowed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs150
matches
0"was shifting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences88
ratio0.136
matches
0"To isolate whatever shadow had clawed at her thoughts since that strange message arrived—a scrap of cryptic lore mentioning Hel portals and the Fae Grove."
1"The crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist prickled with a sudden chill, the old ache rising from beneath her skin—childhood trauma, a reminder she never quite fully understood."
2"Time twisted inside the Grove; she recalled Eva’s words: an hour here might stretch like days outside."
3"The Heartstone pulsed again, more insistent now—as if urging her toward something."
4"Aurora's hands brushed her pockets for the folded note she’d risked coming here to decipher—a map scrawled hastily, a name cryptic as the pendant: Hel’s Crossing."
5"The Grove was shifting; the boundary between realms felt thinner than before, raw and tremulous."
6"She spun—empty space."
7"Aurora's eyes flicked to a dark stain on the mossy floor—too rich, too red."
8"The night felt suddenly suffocating—as if the Grove itself closed in, breath caught in mist."
9"Movement again—flitting at the edge of vision."
10"From the thicket, rustling grew louder—more shapes, eyes glittering—circling, patient, hungry."
11"A sudden scream ripped through the Grove—piercing, unnatural—and the shadows stopped, shuddering as the Grove convulsed, the wildflowers snapping upright."
86.14% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount837
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"resting low against her"
adverbCount41
adverbRatio0.04898446833930705
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.017921146953405017
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences88
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences88
mean9.89
std7.21
cv0.729
sampleLengths
022
136
213
36
47
525
623
712
813
926
108
1128
128
1312
1417
1519
1613
171
1810
192
202
215
2212
233
2419
2514
269
2710
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62.88% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.4318181818181818
totalSentences88
uniqueOpeners38
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences71
matches
0"Too warm for just a"
1"Only the crackling of dry"
2"Then it moved."
3"Then whispering voices, so soft"
ratio0.056
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount13
totalSentences71
matches
0"She had come here to"
1"She pressed her fingers over"
2"She flicked her eyes sharply"
3"Her heart kicked, harsh and"
4"Her voice barely rose above"
5"Her breath caught again as"
6"Her skin prickled."
7"She spun—empty space."
8"she muttered, stepping forward"
9"Her pulse galloped."
10"She swallowed, straining to listen."
11"Her heartbeat thundered."
12"She took a slow breath."
ratio0.183
58.59% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount57
totalSentences71
matches
0"Aurora’s breath hitched as she"
1"The ground beneath her feet"
2"The pendant’s deep crimson gemstone"
3"She had come here to"
4"The fire opal flickered in"
5"The music of the city,"
6"Aurora pulled her black coat"
7"The crescent-shaped scar on her"
8"She pressed her fingers over"
9"The wildflowers bloomed brightly, impossibly"
10"The thought urged her to"
11"She flicked her eyes sharply"
12"The Heartstone pulsed again, more"
13"Her heart kicked, harsh and"
14"Rory wasn’t the sort to"
15"Her voice barely rose above"
16"Silence answered, thick and heavy."
17"The flowers rustled, then stilled."
18"Aurora's hands brushed her pockets"
19"Her breath caught again as"
ratio0.803
70.42% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences71
matches
0"To isolate whatever shadow had"
ratio0.014
61.22% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences35
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"The ground beneath her feet felt almost too soft, a thick tangle of wildflowers brushing against her worn boots, their blooms glowing pale in the silver gleam o…"
1"The Heartstone pulsed again, more insistent now—as if urging her toward something."
2"The wildflowers throbbed beneath silver light as if alive, their colours bleeding into the shadows."
3"The wildflowers bowed as if under weight, the whispering growing louder, crowding her senses."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"figure hissed, voice sharp and mocking"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"figure hissed (hiss)"
dialogueSentences13
tagDensity0.154
leniency0.308
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.308
79.0442%