Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRJR87940M1SXTMD7NW6K3

Run Details

Duration:
21.5s
Cost:
$0.003005
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The undergrowth whispered beneath Aurora’s boots, crisp and whisper-thin as she skirted the rough edge of Richmond Park. The faint bloom of wildflowers caught glimpses in a moonless night, petals ghostly pale under the shroud of shadow. The ancient oak standing stones rose like watchful sentinels ahead, their rough bark ridged and knotted with years uncounted. She paused just before the boundary, hand tightening around the delicate silver chain of the Heartstone pendant hidden beneath her jacket. It pulsed softly against her palm, a faint warmth that thrummed like a cautious heartbeat. Time was supposed to bend here, fold or unravel into something unrecognisable. The Fae Grove, Eva’s whispered promise, the place where truth might bleed through the veil. But from the first step past the stones, the air had shifted — not just thickened, but pinched tight like breath held too long. Aurora’s breath caught on the invisible pressure. Every nerve prickled with unwelcome attention. An unfamiliar song—barely a whisper—slithered through the trees. Something wasn’t right. The path before her curled unexpectedly, a ribbon of moss and leaf litter twisting between towering oaks and thickets that shimmered with impossible wildflowers. They always said these blooms grew year-round here, but the cold, bitter scent clinging to the air reeked of decay despite the blossom. She moved forward, careful, each step soft but purposeful. Her eyes flashed toward a movement flickering against the edge of vision — a shape, slender and shifting, vanishing the moment she blinked. The wrongness drew taut; the sensation of eyes slicing through the dark no longer a suggestion but a certainty. “Hello?” Her voice was low, steady, but swallowed swiftly by the heavy air. The trees leaned in closer; the shadows deepened. The pendant flared—an almost imperceptible glow, like a dying ember in its depths. Her fingers brushed the crescent-shaped scar on her wrist, a childhood token turned shield. She remembered her father’s low voice, warning her about places that whispered promises but swallowed souls. The grove pulsed around her in a rhythm not quite her own. The wildflowers released a honeyed scent that twisted subtle and sour beneath the nostalgia. Somewhere close, a delicate rustling. Not a breeze; something alive. Something watching. Aurora’s steps paused. A soft snap, a deliberate crack of broken twigs nearby. She swore the pulse in the pendant grew stronger, warmth surging beneath her skin. Her blue eyes scanned fast, catching a flicker — no, a pair of flickers — high above, disappearing like smoke in a gale. “Show yourself.” The voice was hers but tighter now, edged with a thread of command she hadn’t meant to summon. The grove answered with a silence so solid it felt like stone pressing on her chest. Footsteps—a careful shuffle—from beyond a thicket. Not human. Too... too light and measured. She drew a breath slow enough to steady her thudding heart. Behind her, the stones hummed faintly, ancient magic thrumming cold and stern. The way was barred, but for what? What creature draped in moonless shadow slinked through the wildflowers? A soft, mocking laughter fluttered, fragile and sharp as the bite of frost. It danced among the branches then dropped suddenly, gone. Aurora’s pulse pinched tighter. The shadows around her congealed, shapes pulling closer from the periphery. She swung her body around, senses flaring. “Who’s there?” No reply but the scrape of stone against stone, a slow creak that didn’t belong to the grove itself. Her grip on the pendant tightened, silver links cool yet pulsing life beneath her touch. A quick shiver ran down her spine. Time here was strange, mercurial. She touched the Heartstone—its warmth like a breath, fragrant and fierce. Drawn toward it, as if the pendant knew the answer but refused to speak. From the corner of her eye, a flash of movement—a figure, stretched and skewed, stepping between the wildflowers yet refusing form. Aurora eased backwards, unaware until her heel slipped against a wet root hidden beneath moss. The ground pitched, and she caught herself just in time. Her lungs burned with sharp breaths. She glanced down—dark stains soaked the soil, fresh and cruel, but no sound of dripping filled the quiet. A figure emerged from the darkness—ethereal and light as smoke—too tall, limbs too long, hunched beneath a tangled crown of twigs. “You shouldn’t be here,” it said, voice like broken glass sliding over silk. Aurora swallowed a stinging knot. “I came for answers.” The being’s eyes glowed, pits of pale blue ice that froze her blood in place. “Answers bleed here,” it whispered, drifting closer. “You carry what you do not understand.” “My name is Aurora Carter.” She forced the words, steadying the tremble in her fingertips. “I have a right.” The creature paused, a shiver passing through the grove like a ripple of cold wind. “And what right has a shadow-born mortal in the land of the hidden?” The pendant flared fiercely, blinding in sudden light. Aurora brandished it, the deep crimson gem pulsing like a heart caught in storm. The figure recoiled, a hiss slipping between its cracked lips. “Malphora.” The name cut deeper than the chill wrapping the trees. Aurora’s breath hitched, memories bleeding up from the scar on her wrist. Malphora — her oldest name, the one she buried beneath layers of ordinary. “You know what I seek.” Her voice cracked, then solidified. “Tell me what waits here.” The creature’s form dissolved into wind and shadow. Laughter spilled forth, cruel and jagged. “Wait here?” The trees leaned in ever closer, unheard eyes pricking at her flesh. “What waits is hunger, endless and patient.” Aurora’s heart slammed like a caged thing. A sudden crash behind her ripped the night apart — a twist of branches, a snap of bone perhaps, or a door slamming. The air jumped. Something plunged from the shadows, fast and wild. Her legs moved before thought, breaking into a run along the twisted, flower-strewn path. Leaves whipped her face. Roots grabbed at her ankles. The pendant shone hot against her chest, warning, pulsing frantic. Behind her, a chorus of whispers spiraled — broken promises, shattered names, and calls to some dark forgotten debt. She dared a glance back—darkness bloomed, swallowing the light. Not alone. And not safe. The grove reached for her, its ancient breath cold and alive, grinding a silent vow beneath the wildflowers: every secret here devours its seeker.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
66.67% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags5
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Her voice cracked then [then]"
dialogueSentences15
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.133
90.65% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1070
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1070
totalAiIsms23
found
0
word"whisper"
count2
1
word"sentinels"
count1
2
word"pulsed"
count2
3
word"warmth"
count3
4
word"unravel"
count1
5
word"shimmered"
count1
6
word"depths"
count1
7
word"pulse"
count2
8
word"scanned"
count1
9
word"flicker"
count1
10
word"silence"
count1
11
word"footsteps"
count1
12
word"measured"
count1
13
word"fluttered"
count1
14
word"down her spine"
count1
15
word"silk"
count1
16
word"chill"
count1
17
word"shattered"
count1
highlights
0"whisper"
1"sentinels"
2"pulsed"
3"warmth"
4"unravel"
5"shimmered"
6"depths"
7"pulse"
8"scanned"
9"flicker"
10"silence"
11"footsteps"
12"measured"
13"fluttered"
14"down her spine"
15"silk"
16"chill"
17"shattered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences87
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences87
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences95
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen24
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1061
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions16
wordCount996
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity0.9
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora9
Richmond1
Park1
Heartstone2
Fae1
Grove1
Eva1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Eva"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Fae"
3"Grove"
globalScore1
windowScore1
77.54% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences69
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"not quite her own"
1"felt like stone pressing on her chest"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords2.828
wordCount1061
matches
0"not just thickened, but pinched tight like breath held too long"
1"no longer a suggestion but"
2"No reply but"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences95
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs42
mean25.26
std17.23
cv0.682
sampleLengths
092
151
224
356
442
521
643
738
850
92
1034
1124
1229
1322
1422
1521
1652
1736
1834
1921
2013
219
2215
2314
2419
2515
2613
2722
2811
2935
3015
3114
3221
337
3434
3514
3619
3719
389
392
403
4124
97.20% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences87
matches
0"was supposed"
1"was barred"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs165
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount18
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences17
totalSentences95
ratio0.179
matches
0"But from the first step past the stones, the air had shifted — not just thickened, but pinched tight like breath held too long."
1"An unfamiliar song—barely a whisper—slithered through the trees."
2"Her eyes flashed toward a movement flickering against the edge of vision — a shape, slender and shifting, vanishing the moment she blinked."
3"The wrongness drew taut; the sensation of eyes slicing through the dark no longer a suggestion but a certainty."
4"The trees leaned in closer; the shadows deepened."
5"The pendant flared—an almost imperceptible glow, like a dying ember in its depths."
6"Not a breeze; something alive."
7"Her blue eyes scanned fast, catching a flicker — no, a pair of flickers — high above, disappearing like smoke in a gale."
8"Footsteps—a careful shuffle—from beyond a thicket."
9"She touched the Heartstone—its warmth like a breath, fragrant and fierce."
10"From the corner of her eye, a flash of movement—a figure, stretched and skewed, stepping between the wildflowers yet refusing form."
11"She glanced down—dark stains soaked the soil, fresh and cruel, but no sound of dripping filled the quiet."
12"A figure emerged from the darkness—ethereal and light as smoke—too tall, limbs too long, hunched beneath a tangled crown of twigs."
13"Malphora — her oldest name, the one she buried beneath layers of ordinary."
14"A sudden crash behind her ripped the night apart — a twist of branches, a snap of bone perhaps, or a door slamming."
15"Behind her, a chorus of whispers spiraled — broken promises, shattered names, and calls to some dark forgotten debt."
16"She dared a glance back—darkness bloomed, swallowing the light."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1004
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"twisted, flower-strewn path."
adverbCount38
adverbRatio0.037848605577689244
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.008964143426294821
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences95
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences95
mean11.17
std6.21
cv0.556
sampleLengths
018
119
219
321
415
512
615
724
87
96
108
113
1224
1323
149
1523
1619
1713
188
1913
2014
2116
2212
2314
245
255
262
273
2810
2914
3023
312
3218
3316
346
352
361
374
3811
3912
407
4110
4213
439
444
4511
467
4721
4815
497
53.33% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.35789473684210527
totalSentences95
uniqueOpeners34
80.32% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences83
matches
0"Somewhere close, a delicate rustling."
1"too light and measured."
ratio0.024
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount23
totalSentences83
matches
0"She paused just before the"
1"It pulsed softly against her"
2"They always said these blooms"
3"She moved forward, careful, each"
4"Her eyes flashed toward a"
5"Her voice was low, steady,"
6"Her fingers brushed the crescent-shaped"
7"She remembered her father’s low"
8"She swore the pulse in"
9"Her blue eyes scanned fast,"
10"She drew a breath slow"
11"It danced among the branches"
12"She swung her body around,"
13"Her grip on the pendant"
14"She touched the Heartstone—its warmth"
15"Her lungs burned with sharp"
16"She glanced down—dark stains soaked"
17"it said, voice like broken"
18"it whispered, drifting closer"
19"She forced the words, steadying"
ratio0.277
32.29% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount71
totalSentences83
matches
0"The undergrowth whispered beneath Aurora’s"
1"The faint bloom of wildflowers"
2"The ancient oak standing stones"
3"She paused just before the"
4"It pulsed softly against her"
5"Time was supposed to bend"
6"The Fae Grove, Eva’s whispered"
7"Aurora’s breath caught on the"
8"Every nerve prickled with unwelcome"
9"An unfamiliar song—barely a whisper—slithered"
10"Something wasn’t right."
11"The path before her curled"
12"They always said these blooms"
13"She moved forward, careful, each"
14"Her eyes flashed toward a"
15"The wrongness drew taut; the"
16"Her voice was low, steady,"
17"The trees leaned in closer;"
18"The pendant flared—an almost imperceptible"
19"Her fingers brushed the crescent-shaped"
ratio0.855
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences83
matches(empty)
ratio0
69.97% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences49
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"It pulsed softly against her palm, a faint warmth that thrummed like a cautious heartbeat."
1"The path before her curled unexpectedly, a ribbon of moss and leaf litter twisting between towering oaks and thickets that shimmered with impossible wildflowers…"
2"She remembered her father’s low voice, warning her about places that whispered promises but swallowed souls."
3"The being’s eyes glowed, pits of pale blue ice that froze her blood in place."
4"The pendant shone hot against her chest, warning, pulsing frantic."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags5
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
83.33% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"it whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences15
tagDensity0.133
leniency0.267
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.133
78.1767%