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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
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Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The storm drain gurgled as Detective Quinn waded knee-deep in the pitching darkness. Her torch cut a wavering circle in the blackness. "Shine your lights over there, Tony. Behind those barrels." DC Tony Davies obligingly panned his torch, illuminating a frightful sight. Two bare feet protruded from the fetid water, the rest of the body hidden by barrel. Teflon boots snickered as Quinn struggled to maneuver into position. Her lover's Navy t-shirt, given to her three months earlier as a joke, was now her prized coverall. "Dead?" Quinn dipped a gloved finger in the drainage water and swished it about. "Not yet. Foot's still warm. Must be injured or drugged out." She hated Drains, with their relentless ambience of pestilence and possibility. You never knew what you'd find. Sanitation was Key. "Give me your aid here Tony, nice and easy. We need to keep the corpse on the move once we extradite them. Let's keep my baby undisturbed, eh?" She rubbed her belly, feeling the gentle kick emanating through the denim of her jeans. The dead weight lifted and Quinn dangled the slack body above the surface of the water. She lowered her face, coming face to face with the Flotational Victim. Unconscious but not dead, her victim was a young man, 20something judging by his semi-rigid appearance. Blood from his lacerated mouth and nose spiked the water coffee black. Quinn rolled metaphorical sleeves of her thoughts. She knew this man. The lavender scent of his hair betrayed a well-heeled upbringing and expensive tastes. His clean shave and groom fingered him as a cultivated urban pro who'd given an abundant life buying society's Kool-Aid. Court records would soon identify him. But not from his dental work or tattoos or social media thirstiness. This man had been history, predicted conservative retirement as soon as he'd saved his first thou. The noose eccentrically dangled above the Flotant's chin. The wool constricting his neck pulsed red-tinted. An amateurish way to keep his body afloat in the current. She could easily lift him from its circle without creasing her favourite jeans. Quinn noted a series of black fonts burning into his skin, crudely etched by the severe pressure of a searing laser. Fallen Men Don't Crave Glory had been etched vertically against his right cheek and strapped his jaw together with steel wires. Under his left arm was painted BEAL - Brown's Eternal Army Loyal. "Jesus, he's been branded." Quinn bagged her hands. "Can you find a dry spot to lay out the meat, Tony? I'm going to take a closer look." But when she lifted him, a white envelope at eye level waited patiently taped to a grease coated brick wall. Heart nervously thrumming, Quinn peeled away its seal to read the distinctive hand. I Killed a Man Here The letter smelled of sweet basil and lavender. The stationery was stiff, creamy and held ink violence that soaked even through the envelope. Beneath the initialism I would give her the full reasoning behind my actions, Mrs. D. "How's that there? She easily hoisted him above the thrashing waters. "The Flotant smells like Pears soap. Lavender and hamamasoap. You get a wash all you can eat in those award-winning sub shops." Quinn shivered as a sudden chill blew down from the surface. The letter observable in the dark fell between the barrel of beer cans littering the ground. From what she could discern from the faint circle of light, it appeared to be one of the tyrannical terror tactics deployed by seminal serial killers of our generation. "This death is no accident." "Maybe just keeping his nose above the water as a joke..." Tony softly remarked, obviously unaware of her mental gears turning." She shook her head. No, it's not a joke. Not that kind, anyway. The men with their flashlights kept his weight in the air throughout most of the abraded insulation. They moved him to the dingy precinct office, where the other men departed to their taps. John took out a quarter of the half inch of the rubber band bound his wrist and ankle. The bands yielded without slipping from their grip. John rolled the victim over onto his stomach. The skin of the Westside territories was trembling around him, but only until the infectious had to be removed. The plunge to the sidewalk was cold and ruthless, but nothing was said as people gathered at high windows and lowered their drape-nets. John's arms crept around his head and shoulders, working the layers of clothing free with little tugs and wrenches of his back and of the ruler's skin. His right eye held close to the open eye with a small gauge thermometer pressed to the closed eye. The full of his eye darkened as the cold of the afternoon peeked over the area. Quinn unlocked the precinct office, lugging the inert body toward the medical examiner's table. She could feel the momentum pick up pace, force of the waves pushing them faster than someone walking. She stared down at the Flotant's blistered neck now in her care. Carved unidentifiable symbols marred his nape and temples. She swore they pulsed against the fluorescent lights. "Those marks... they look like the Sheriff's seal." Quinn circled the Medical Examiner's table, torchlight dusting across his blistered skin. Carved unidentifiable characters glistened darkly against the red. Getkel picked up his pen and traced the imposed letters. "B - E - A - L. Beal. I'm not familiar with anything related to him or the Sheriff's." The room when they entered it was murky with a humidity that settled deep in Quinn's lungs. It was a smell that made her question why she still had a job. The older man, this murderer, had used that smell to let himself in. Getkel set his pen down to rub at his own reddened своём nose. "We'll need to have the kid startled. Are you okay doing it?" Getkel asked. Quinn was alone in the room, and walked towards a mop bucket full of soapy water andTORches and cleanser and pails. She did it swiftly, to save the kid from whatever was infecting the tetanus. With each splash of water on his neck, the crimson letters bit more vividly as if lit by an unknown scorerch. Beal. Quinn returned to her station, plumbing the diluted waters for evidence. She held up a silver amulet bearing the sigil of a obscure crime lord. Its features were rendered in ebonwood, teeth carved out to conceal black candles. Quinn turned to Getkel. "Does this look Lox?" Getkel paled and nodded, reaching for a pack of Fresh Fruit Strips. Lox. Rihanna's Blood unit. Fucked up to the extreme. He chewed hard and swished, trying to unsee that amulet. Quinn sloshed through the oily water back to the corpse, fighting gravity with each step. Light slanted through the doorway, illuminating drops like diamonds on her weathered Docs. Tufts of his blonde hair floated, silt coating his discolored nape. Beal. She pulled Getkel aside and showed him the neck wound in detail. "It's healing crudely from a laser incision. The amulet looks like Lox's seal." Quinn glanced back toward where their other men and last night's kill huddled under blood-stained sheet." What the hell do you make of it all?" Getkel examined the corpse. Necrotic scar tissue glistened atop crusted punctures on his nose and mouth, encircling the amulet. A faint scarlet glow emanated from it against the door's black light. Getkel inhaled sharply, nostrils flaring as he muted his voice. "You tell me. What's our angle?" Quinn brushed tangles of drowned hair from his temples. She recognized fresh burn marks there behind the matted locks, carved in stylized script, and palm-sized. "Beal," she whispered, running her gloved fingers along its scored edges." Christ, he's branded. What sick fuck could do this to a kid?" Quinn sealed the amulet in an evidence bag then, avoiding eye contact, continued her search." Let's get a reading at the door. Should tell us if anything rises out of those Drain fens that's not him." They implications ate at Quinn as she signed off the body and its effects to Getkel. Beal. That fat crooked judge who'd more than once obstructed justice to protect his son's sordid preferences. The glassine shard of amulet just uncovered promised a sordid carve out tension between the bulky plastic bins plugged into the disposal chute. Then, as if answering a question she hadn't posed, Getkel re-entered the coroner's domain bearing the corpse. "What in God's name is this?" He tapped an iPad to stream surveillance feeds of a dirty expense office. "Footage from a few hours ago, directly below the drain you found him in. Looks like he was being held there." Onscreen, a frozen frame caught Noe's white face turned up toward Quinn's position. Flecks of blood suffused his eyes and he held a letter. Not one of Brunan's standoffish notes either but an explosion of ink and watercolor in eye-piercing cirous. It's his handwriting, Quinn confirmed, her stomach knotting. He'd noticed me, knew exactly what I'd connect this to. "Brunan was there. That fucker implicates himself." She turned to Getkel, laying the iPad on the steel table where her dead victim awaited. "Send it to Operations, to our head of Counter-Terrorism. I think it's time we theorize."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Quinn glanced back [back]"
dialogueSentences21
tagDensity0.524
leniency1
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.091
90.40% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1563
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"nervously"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
2
adverb"sharply"
count1
highlights
0"nervously"
1"softly"
2"sharply"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
52.02% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1563
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"wavering"
count1
1
word"weight"
count2
2
word"pulsed"
count2
3
word"etched"
count2
4
word"searing"
count1
5
word"chill"
count1
6
word"stomach"
count2
7
word"could feel"
count1
8
word"traced"
count1
9
word"familiar"
count1
10
word"tension"
count1
highlights
0"wavering"
1"weight"
2"pulsed"
3"etched"
4"searing"
5"chill"
6"stomach"
7"could feel"
8"traced"
9"familiar"
10"tension"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences105
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences105
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"appeared to"
97.40% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences114
gibberishSentences1
adjustedGibberishSentences1
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen59
ratio0.009
matches
0"Getkel set his pen down to rub at his own reddened своём nose."
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1556
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions4
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
65.19% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
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wordCount1297
uniqueNames40
maxNameDensity1.7
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
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Quinn22
Tony2
Davies1
Navy1
Drains1
You2
Key1
Flotational1
Victim1
Kool-Aid1
Flotant3
Men1
Don1
Crave1
Glory1
Brown1
Eternal1
Army1
Loyal1
Killed1
Man1
Mrs1
Pears1
Lavender1
Westside1
Medical1
Examiner1
Carved2
Getkel11
Fresh1
Fruit1
Strips1
Blood2
Docs1
Onscreen1
Noe1
Brunan1
John3
Beal3
persons
0"Detective"
1"Quinn"
2"Tony"
3"Davies"
4"You"
5"Victim"
6"Flotant"
7"Men"
8"Glory"
9"Brown"
10"Man"
11"Mrs"
12"Examiner"
13"Carved"
14"Getkel"
15"Blood"
16"Noe"
17"Brunan"
18"John"
places
0"Medical"
globalScore0.652
windowScore0.667
92.53% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences87
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"ftly remarked, obviously unaware of her ment"
1"as if answering a question she hadn't posed, Getkel re-entered the coroner's domain bearing the corpse"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.643
wordCount1556
matches
0"Not one of Brunan's standoffish notes either but an explosion of ink"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences114
matches
0"used that smell"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs40
mean38.9
std20.78
cv0.534
sampleLengths
031
155
245
343
456
544
634
739
854
927
1033
115
1238
1333
1456
155
1621
1713
1867
19104
2060
2128
2229
2357
2414
2557
2642
274
2831
2940
3050
3141
326
3384
3456
3517
3640
3741
3825
3931
95.24% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences105
matches
0"been etched"
1"was said"
2"were rendered"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs218
matches
0"was infecting"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences114
ratio0.009
matches
0"Under his left arm was painted BEAL - Brown's Eternal Army Loyal."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1253
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"under blood-stained Getkel"
adverbCount29
adverbRatio0.02314445331205108
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.011971268954509178
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences114
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences114
mean13.65
std8.97
cv0.657
sampleLengths
013
19
29
311
416
510
618
714
822
96
103
1143
1216
1312
1416
1512
167
174
1813
1920
206
2112
2216
238
247
2511
2613
2721
2821
2912
308
3119
3220
3313
3413
3515
3614
371
3817
393
4013
4156
425
4321
444
455
464
4717
4816
4918
85.09% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.5263157894736842
totalSentences114
uniqueOpeners60
33.67% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences99
matches
0"Then, as if answering a"
ratio0.01
98.79% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount30
totalSentences99
matches
0"Her torch cut a wavering"
1"Her lover's Navy t-shirt, given"
2"She hated Drains, with their"
3"You never knew what you'd"
4"She rubbed her belly, feeling"
5"She lowered her face, coming"
6"She knew this man."
7"His clean shave and groom"
8"She could easily lift him"
9"I Killed a Man Here"
10"You get a wash all"
11"She shook her head."
12"They moved him to the"
13"His right eye held close"
14"She could feel the momentum"
15"She stared down at the"
16"She swore they pulsed against"
17"It was a smell that"
18"She did it swiftly, to"
19"She held up a silver"
ratio0.303
45.86% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount82
totalSentences99
matches
0"The storm drain gurgled as"
1"Her torch cut a wavering"
2"DC Tony Davies obligingly panned"
3"Teflon boots snickered as Quinn"
4"Her lover's Navy t-shirt, given"
5"Quinn dipped a gloved finger"
6"She hated Drains, with their"
7"You never knew what you'd"
8"Sanitation was Key."
9"She rubbed her belly, feeling"
10"The dead weight lifted and"
11"She lowered her face, coming"
12"Blood from his lacerated mouth"
13"Quinn rolled metaphorical sleeves of"
14"She knew this man."
15"The lavender scent of his"
16"His clean shave and groom"
17"This man had been history,"
18"The noose eccentrically dangled above"
19"The wool constricting his neck"
ratio0.828
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences99
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences65
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"His clean shave and groom fingered him as a cultivated urban pro who'd given an abundant life buying society's Kool-Aid."
1"It was a smell that made her question why she still had a job."
2"Then, as if answering a question she hadn't posed, Getkel re-entered the coroner's domain bearing the corpse."
79.55% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Quinn circled, torchlight dusting across his blistered skin"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences21
tagDensity0.095
leniency0.19
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.095
87.6574%