Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTX2S4W1PTYAV2N4SEFN22H

Run Details

Duration:
8.8s
Cost:
$0.000889
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
--- The bone token burned cold against Quinn’s palm as she skidded around the corner of Camden High Street, her boots splashing through puddles that reflected the sickly green glow of the market’s neon sign. *The Veil Market.* Three years of chasing whispers, and here it was—right under the city’s nose, hidden in the guts of an abandoned Tube station. The suspect had vanished down the rusted metal stairs, his dark coat flapping like a crow’s wings. She didn’t hesitate. The stairs groaned under her weight, each step slick with something darker than rainwater. The air thickened, pressing against her skin like a wet blanket. Copper and damp stone filled her nostrils. *Blood. Recent.* Her fingers tightened around the token. *No turning back now.* The market sprawled before her, a labyrinth of stalls draped in black velvet and flickering lantern light. Shadows moved in ways that defied physics—too long, too sharp, stretching like fingers across the ceiling. A vendor with too many teeth grinned at her from behind a counter of glass vials, their contents swirling with unnatural hues. *"Lost, detective?"* His voice slithered into her ears, too close, too knowing. Quinn ignored him. Her eyes locked onto the suspect’s retreating form, weaving between stalls. He was heading toward the back, where the lanterns dimmed and the air hummed with something electric. *Dangerous territory.* The words echoed in her skull, but she pushed forward. A hand clamped onto her shoulder. She spun, fist raised—only to find herself staring into the warm brown eyes of Tomás Herrera. His Saint Christopher medallion glinted in the dim light, the scar along his forearm standing out like a pale river. *"You shouldn’t be here,"* he said, voice low. *"This isn’t your world."* Quinn jerked free. *"He’s getting away."* Tomás exhaled sharply, his gaze flicking toward the suspect. *"And you think following him into the back rooms is the answer?"* His fingers twitched, as if itching to reach for the medical bag slung over his shoulder. *"You don’t even know what’s back there."* *"I know he’s connected to Morris’s death."* The words tasted like ash. Three years of dead ends, and now—finally—a lead. She wasn’t letting it slip through her fingers. Tomás’s jaw tightened. *"Quinn—"* *"Stay out of it."* She turned, but he grabbed her wrist, his grip firm. *"You don’t understand. The things they sell back there—curses, memories, *pieces of people*—you can’t just walk in and walk out."* She yanked her arm back. *"Then what do you suggest? Let him disappear again?"* A beat of silence. The market’s whispers coiled around them, a living thing. Then Tomás sighed, rubbing his thumb over the medallion. *"Fine. But you don’t go alone."* Before she could argue, he was already moving, his steps silent despite the uneven ground. Quinn followed, her pulse hammering in her throat. The stalls thinned, the lanterns flickered out, and the air grew heavier, pressing against her lungs like a weight. The suspect had stopped at a curtained-off alcove, his back to them. A low murmur of voices seeped through the fabric, too distorted to make out. Quinn’s hand drifted toward her holster—useless here, but old habits died hard. Tomás caught her eye and shook his head. *"No guns. No sudden moves."* He reached into his bag and pulled out a small vial of dark liquid. *"Drink this."* She eyed it. *"What is it?"* *"Protection. Sort of."* He pressed it into her hand. *"It won’t stop a knife, but it’ll keep the worst of the magic off you."* Quinn hesitated, then downed it in one swallow. The liquid burned like whiskey, then settled into a cold knot in her stomach. *"Happy?"* Tomás didn’t answer. He pushed the curtain aside. The alcove was smaller than she expected, the walls lined with shelves of jars and bottles, their contents pulsing with an eerie inner light. A woman sat at a table in the center, her fingers steepled beneath her chin. Her skin was too smooth, too *still*, like a mannequin’s. The suspect stood before her, his posture rigid. *"You brought a guest,"* the woman said, her voice like honey laced with poison. Her gaze flicked to Quinn. *"Detective Harlow Quinn. How… unexpected."* Quinn’s blood turned to ice. *"You know me."* The woman smiled, slow and deliberate. *"I know *of* you. The human who keeps poking at things she doesn’t understand."* She leaned forward. *"Tell me, detective—do you *want* to understand? Or do you just want to win?"* Quinn’s fingers curled into fists. *"I want justice."* The woman laughed, a sound like breaking glass. *"Justice. How quaint."* She turned to the suspect. *"You were right. She’s persistent."* The suspect finally turned, his face half-hidden in shadow. *"She’s also *stupid*."* Quinn lunged. The world exploded. Light flared, blinding her. A force like a freight train slammed into her chest, sending her crashing into the shelves. Glass shattered. Liquid splashed against her skin, burning like acid. She gasped, her vision swimming— —and then Tomás was there, hauling her up, his voice sharp in her ear. *"We need to *go*."* The woman’s laughter followed them as they stumbled back into the market, the curtain fluttering shut behind them. Quinn’s lungs screamed. Her skin prickled, as if a thousand needles were piercing her at once. *"What the hell was that?"* Tomás didn’t answer. He was already dragging her toward the stairs, his grip bruising. *"We’re not safe here. Not anymore."* Quinn glanced back. The alcove’s curtain rippled, as if something were pressing against it from the inside. *"She knew my name."* *"I *told* you,"* Tomás snapped. *"This isn’t your world."* The market’s whispers rose around them, a chorus of voices that weren’t quite human. The vendor with too many teeth grinned as they passed, his fingers tapping against a jar of something that *twitched*. Quinn’s hand went to her holster again. Empty. Useless. Tomás yanked her forward. *"Move."* They burst onto the street, the rain hitting them like a slap. Quinn gasped, her lungs filling with cold, clean air. The market’s neon sign flickered above them, the green light bleeding into the night. Tomás didn’t let go of her arm. *"You’re not ready for this."* Quinn wiped rain from her face, her fingers trembling. *"I don’t have a choice."* He studied her for a long moment, his expression unreadable. Then he sighed, his grip loosening. *"Then we do this my way."* Behind them, the market’s whispers slithered into the night, hungry and waiting.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"The words tasted like [like]"
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.297
leniency0.595
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.054
95.38% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1083
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count1
highlights
0"sharply"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
39.98% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1083
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"weight"
count2
1
word"velvet"
count1
2
word"electric"
count1
3
word"echoed"
count1
4
word"silence"
count1
5
word"pulse"
count1
6
word"flickered"
count2
7
word"stomach"
count1
8
word"flicked"
count1
9
word"shattered"
count1
10
word"unreadable"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"velvet"
2"electric"
3"echoed"
4"silence"
5"pulse"
6"flickered"
7"stomach"
8"flicked"
9"shattered"
10"unreadable"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences91
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences91
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences117
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
0.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans43
markdownWords190
totalWords1073
ratio0.177
matches
0"The Veil Market."
1"Blood. Recent."
2"No turning back now."
3"\"Lost, detective?\""
4"Dangerous territory."
5"\"You shouldn’t be here,\""
6"\"This isn’t your world.\""
7"\"He’s getting away.\""
8"\"And you think following him into the back rooms is the answer?\""
9"\"You don’t even know what’s back there.\""
10"\"I know he’s connected to Morris’s death.\""
11"\"Quinn—\""
12"\"Stay out of it.\""
13"\"You don’t understand. The things they sell back there—curses, memories, *pieces of people"
14"\"Then what do you suggest? Let him disappear again?\""
15"\"Fine. But you don’t go alone.\""
16"\"No guns. No sudden moves.\""
17"\"Drink this.\""
18"\"What is it?\""
19"\"Protection. Sort of.\""
20"\"It won’t stop a knife, but it’ll keep the worst of the magic off you.\""
21"\"Happy?\""
22"still"
23"\"You brought a guest,\""
24"\"Detective Harlow Quinn. How… unexpected.\""
25"\"You know me.\""
26"\"I know *of"
27"\"Tell me, detective—do you *want"
28"\"I want justice.\""
29"\"Justice. How quaint.\""
30"\"You were right. She’s persistent.\""
31"\"She’s also *stupid"
32"\"We need to *go"
33"\"What the hell was that?\""
34"\"We’re not safe here. Not anymore.\""
35"\"She knew my name.\""
36"\"I *told"
37"\"This isn’t your world.\""
38"twitched"
39"\"Move.\""
40"\"You’re not ready for this.\""
41"\"I don’t have a choice.\""
42"\"Then we do this my way.\""
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions36
wordCount867
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity1.73
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Quinn15
Camden1
High1
Street1
Veil1
Three2
Tube1
Tomás11
Herrera1
Saint1
Christopher1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Tomás"
2"Herrera"
3"Saint"
4"Christopher"
places
0"Camden"
1"High"
2"Street"
globalScore0.635
windowScore0.5
68.03% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences61
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"as if itching to reach for the medical bag slung over his shoulder"
1"quite human"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1073
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences117
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs45
mean23.84
std17.85
cv0.749
sampleLengths
01
176
23
344
467
543
66
748
86
944
1028
114
1234
1314
1428
1542
1638
1729
186
1924
2023
218
2257
2324
248
2537
268
2721
2812
292
303
3135
3218
3339
3420
3521
369
3734
389
395
4035
4112
4214
4322
4412
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences91
matches(empty)
70.13% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs154
matches
0"was heading"
1"wasn’t letting"
2"were piercing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences117
ratio0.06
matches
0"*The Veil Market.* Three years of chasing whispers, and here it was—right under the city’s nose, hidden in the guts of an abandoned Tube station."
1"Shadows moved in ways that defied physics—too long, too sharp, stretching like fingers across the ceiling."
2"She spun, fist raised—only to find herself staring into the warm brown eyes of Tomás Herrera."
3"Three years of dead ends, and now—finally—a lead."
4"Quinn’s hand drifted toward her holster—useless here, but old habits died hard."
5"She gasped, her vision swimming—"
6"—and then Tomás was there, hauling her up, his voice sharp in her ear."
92.04% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount876
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"heavier, pressing against her"
adverbCount37
adverbRatio0.04223744292237443
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.005707762557077625
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences117
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences117
mean9.16
std6.32
cv0.69
sampleLengths
034
125
217
33
414
511
67
71
87
94
1017
1116
1222
1312
143
1511
1617
1712
186
1916
2020
218
224
233
243
259
2628
277
2812
298
308
313
321
3314
3420
355
369
374
389
399
406
4115
428
4319
4412
4514
4612
478
4819
492
53.28% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.3504273504273504
totalSentences117
uniqueOpeners41
78.43% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences85
matches
0"Then Tomás sighed, rubbing his"
1"Then he sighed, his grip"
ratio0.024
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences85
matches
0"She didn’t hesitate."
1"His voice slithered into her"
2"Her eyes locked onto the"
3"He was heading toward the"
4"She spun, fist raised—only to"
5"His Saint Christopher medallion glinted"
6"he said, voice low"
7"His fingers twitched, as if"
8"She wasn’t letting it slip"
9"She turned, but he grabbed"
10"She yanked her arm back."
11"He reached into his bag"
12"She eyed it."
13"He pressed it into her"
14"He pushed the curtain aside."
15"Her skin was too smooth,"
16"Her gaze flicked to Quinn."
17"She leaned forward"
18"She turned to the suspect"
19"She gasped, her vision swimming—"
ratio0.282
12.94% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount76
totalSentences85
matches
0"The bone token burned cold"
1"*The Veil Market.* Three years"
2"The suspect had vanished down"
3"She didn’t hesitate."
4"The stairs groaned under her"
5"The air thickened, pressing against"
6"Copper and damp stone filled"
7"The market sprawled before her,"
8"Shadows moved in ways that"
9"A vendor with too many"
10"His voice slithered into her"
11"Quinn ignored him."
12"Her eyes locked onto the"
13"He was heading toward the"
14"A hand clamped onto her"
15"She spun, fist raised—only to"
16"His Saint Christopher medallion glinted"
17"he said, voice low"
18"Quinn jerked free."
19"Tomás exhaled sharply, his gaze"
ratio0.894
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences85
matches
0"Before she could argue, he"
1"—and then Tomás was there,"
ratio0.024
43.65% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences36
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"The bone token burned cold against Quinn’s palm as she skidded around the corner of Camden High Street, her boots splashing through puddles that reflected the s…"
1"A force like a freight train slammed into her chest, sending her crashing into the shelves."
2"The alcove’s curtain rippled, as if something were pressing against it from the inside."
3"The market’s whispers rose around them, a chorus of voices that weren’t quite human."
4"The vendor with too many teeth grinned as they passed, his fingers tapping against a jar of something that *twitched*."
34.09% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"he said, voice low"
1"His fingers twitched, as if itching to reach for the medical bag slung over his shoulder"
95.95% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"He pressed (press)"
1"Tomás snapped (snap)"
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.108
leniency0.216
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.108
77.7969%