Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTX3QFBHWKGC6Q34705R7PX

Run Details

Duration:
1m 33s
Cost:
$0.001742
Provider:
Z.AI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The exhaust fumes of a passing black cab choked the alleyway. I didn’t cough. My lungs held, burning with the familiar, gritty heat of exertion. The fleeing figure ahead vaulted a rusted fence, boots grinding into the rotting mulch of a garden bed. He scrambled over the brick wall on the other side, a blur of heavy wool and panic. I didn't hesitate. I vaulted the fence myself, my leather watch swinging against my wrist. It had stopped working years ago; the second hand was stuck at four minutes past midnight, a permanent marker of the night my partner died. But I still wore it. Tradition. Superstition. Whatever. Rain hacked at my face, stinging my eyes. I dropped to the other side, my boots hitting the wet pavement. The man didn't look back. He knew the score. A quick sprint through Soho, a lucky left turn, and now he was in the deep end. He cut down an alleyway that smelled of industrial drain cleaner and stale piss. Sharp turn, sharp right. He was fast, but then again, panic fuelled the adrenaline. *Herrera*. The name hit me like a physical weight. Tommy. He was supposed to be off the rails tonight. His license was revoked, but the clientele didn't care. Or perhaps, they actively sought out the unlicensed. I skidded around the corner, coming to a sudden halt. The alley dead-ended. A maintenance access door stood wide open, hanging crookedly on its hinges. No train tracks, just darkness and the smell of rising damp. I holstered my .38, checked the chamber. Click. Stepped inside. The concrete gave way to a descent into the earth. The air grew cold instantly, sucking the heat from my skin. My breath fogged in front of me. This wasn't just a subway station. The smell hit me first—musty earth mixed with the sharp, metallic tang of ozone, like high-voltage electricity burning through dust. Then the whispers. Not human, or at least, not all of them. I switched on my torch. The beam cut a thin yellow path through the gloom, illuminating graffiti that wasn't paint. It looked like inscriptions, scratched deep into the stone. *What are you doing here, Harlow?* The thought was a echo in my own head. I stepped deeper. The space expanded. The walls were lined with stalls, crude wooden structures that looked like they’d been cobbled together from shipping crates. Under harsh, unnatural light, the market came alive. The Veil Market. I kept my hands visible. Rule one of undercover work in a place like this. Don't look like a predator, look like a tourist with nowhere else to go. A stall at the end sold dead things. Not animals, but things that wore animal skins. A man with too many fingers stood behind the counter, arranging a pile of dried herbs. Beside him, a woman with skin the texture of parchment was hawking vials of liquid that glowed with an inner fire. "Come on then. Don't be shy." I walked past a stall selling shrunken heads. They weren't real, probably resin or latex. Their painted eyes seemed to follow me regardless. I scanned the faces. No Tommy. *Movement.* A flash of dark hair and olive skin near the back. He was taller than I remembered, but the way he held himself gave him away. Shoulder tense, eyes darting. He was buying something. He pressed a small, bone-white token onto the counter of a vendor that looked like a rotting corpse dressed in velvet. The vendor nodded, speaking in a tongue that felt heavy in my ears, a language that scraped against my thoughts. The man took a small bag from the vendor and turned. He saw me. Our eyes locked across the crowded, suffocating space. He didn't run. He didn't panic. He didn't even flinch. He just reached into his pocket, pulled out the bag, and walked toward me, smiling a smile that didn't reach his eyes. "Detective." The word was a blade in the thick air. He knew who I was. Or he knew I was trouble. "Tomás," I said, keeping my voice level. Controlled. Military precision. "You are late for your shift." He stopped two paces away. The crowd parted around us like water around a rock. "I had a delivery to make." "Unauthorized treatment." "A little over the line. I know." "You're lucky I found you before the local supernaturals decided to harvest your liver." He laughed, a short, dry sound. He reached into his coat and produced a small, silver flask. He didn't offer it to me. He just looked at it. "Drink?" "I don't drink with felons." "Suit yourself." He took a swig, wincing slightly. I checked my watch. The second hand was still stuck at four past midnight. "So, what brings you down here, Harlow? Don't tell me you're here for the fresh stock." "I'm here for you." "Because you care about public health?" "Because I know things you're involved in. The clique. You, Silas, the dealer. I see the patterns." He took a step closer. The smell of the market faded, replaced by the scent of rain and cheap cologne. "And what do you see, Quinn? A group of friends helping each other? Or a business?" "I see bodies." "You see what you want to see." He reached out, a hand hovering near the silver flask, but dropping back to his side. "This," he said, gesturing vaguely at the market, "this is the only place left where you can pay with something other than money. People like us... we don't fit in the daylight anymore. The daylight burns us, Harlow. Don't you know that?" I tightened my grip on my holster. My thumb brushed the cool metal of the grip. "If you're helping them, Tommy, it's going to cost you more than you think." "Maybe." He tilted his head. "Maybe I can get you a price on that demon you're looking for." I froze. The tactical assessment of the room flooded my brain. There were too many exits. The vendor with too many fingers was watching. The rotting corpse-woman was sharpening a knife. I could leave now. Walk out that door and back into the rain. Go back to the Yard. File a report. Blame his disappearance on a cold case. It was the rational choice. The safe choice. The rational choice was the one that got men killed. Especially men whose partners died under unexplained circumstances that were *supernatural*. Tomás turned his back on me and began to walk toward the back of the room, toward a heavy iron door that was slightly ajar. "Come on," he said over his shoulder. "There's someone I want you to meet." I looked at the exit. Then I looked at the man who had saved my life more times than I could count, the man who refused to let go of his humanity. The rain outside wasn't cold. It was fresh. This place... this was the rot. I took a step forward, then another, breaking the line of the crowd. I would get him out. We would go to the Yard. We would sort this out. But not tonight. I followed him into the darkness behind the iron door.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.167
leniency0.333
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.73% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1209
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
highlights
0"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
71.05% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1209
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"familiar"
count1
1
word"weight"
count1
2
word"gloom"
count1
3
word"echo"
count1
4
word"predator"
count1
5
word"scanned"
count1
6
word"velvet"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"weight"
2"gloom"
3"echo"
4"predator"
5"scanned"
6"velvet"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences125
matches(empty)
85.71% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences125
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"look"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences145
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans4
markdownWords9
totalWords1204
ratio0.007
matches
0"Herrera"
1"What are you doing here, Harlow?"
2"Movement."
3"supernatural"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions8
wordCount1012
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity0.2
worstName"Tommy"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Yard"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Veil1
Market1
Tommy2
Controlled1
Yard2
persons
0"Market"
1"Tommy"
places
0"Soho"
1"Yard"
globalScore1
windowScore1
45.83% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences72
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"looked like inscriptions, scratched deep"
1"looked like they’d been cobbled together"
2"looked like a rotting corpse dressed in v"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.831
wordCount1204
matches
0"Not animals, but things"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences145
matches
0"out that door"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs61
mean19.74
std16.26
cv0.824
sampleLengths
060
148
246
328
41
535
636
78
82
966
1029
1115
1233
133
1429
1553
166
1723
186
191
2055
2131
223
238
2432
251
2620
2716
2815
296
302
317
3214
3328
341
355
362
376
3814
3916
404
416
4217
4336
443
457
4616
4742
4816
4914
94.04% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences125
matches
0"was stuck"
1"was supposed"
2"was revoked"
3"were lined"
4"been cobbled"
49.34% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs177
matches
0"was hawking"
1"was buying"
2"was watching"
3"was sharpening"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences145
ratio0.014
matches
0"It had stopped working years ago; the second hand was stuck at four minutes past midnight, a permanent marker of the night my partner died."
1"The smell hit me first—musty earth mixed with the sharp, metallic tang of ozone, like high-voltage electricity burning through dust."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1017
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"Under harsh, unnatural light,"
1"small, bone-white token"
adverbCount34
adverbRatio0.03343166175024582
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.007866273352999017
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences145
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences145
mean8.3
std6.24
cv0.752
sampleLengths
011
13
211
318
417
53
612
725
85
91
101
111
128
1312
145
154
1617
1714
184
1910
201
218
221
239
249
258
2610
273
2812
2911
307
311
322
3310
3411
357
366
3720
383
399
405
4115
429
4315
443
453
4619
478
483
495
48.51% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats18
diversityRatio0.36551724137931035
totalSentences145
uniqueOpeners53
89.29% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences112
matches
0"Then the whispers."
1"Especially men whose partners died"
2"Then I looked at the"
ratio0.027
16.43% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount57
totalSentences112
matches
0"I didn’t cough."
1"My lungs held, burning with"
2"He scrambled over the brick"
3"I didn't hesitate."
4"I vaulted the fence myself,"
5"It had stopped working years"
6"I dropped to the other"
7"He knew the score."
8"He cut down an alleyway"
9"He was fast, but then"
10"He was supposed to be"
11"His license was revoked, but"
12"I skidded around the corner,"
13"I holstered my .38, checked"
14"My breath fogged in front"
15"I switched on my torch."
16"It looked like inscriptions, scratched"
17"I stepped deeper."
18"I kept my hands visible."
19"I walked past a stall"
ratio0.509
53.75% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount91
totalSentences112
matches
0"The exhaust fumes of a"
1"I didn’t cough."
2"My lungs held, burning with"
3"The fleeing figure ahead vaulted"
4"He scrambled over the brick"
5"I didn't hesitate."
6"I vaulted the fence myself,"
7"It had stopped working years"
8"Rain hacked at my face,"
9"I dropped to the other"
10"The man didn't look back."
11"He knew the score."
12"A quick sprint through Soho,"
13"He cut down an alleyway"
14"He was fast, but then"
15"The name hit me like"
16"He was supposed to be"
17"His license was revoked, but"
18"I skidded around the corner,"
19"The alley dead-ended."
ratio0.813
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences112
matches(empty)
ratio0
53.57% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences40
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"The beam cut a thin yellow path through the gloom, illuminating graffiti that wasn't paint."
1"The walls were lined with stalls, crude wooden structures that looked like they’d been cobbled together from shipping crates."
2"Beside him, a woman with skin the texture of parchment was hawking vials of liquid that glowed with an inner fire."
3"He pressed a small, bone-white token onto the counter of a vendor that looked like a rotting corpse dressed in velvet."
4"Especially men whose partners died under unexplained circumstances that were *supernatural*."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.125
leniency0.25
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
82.9081%