Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTX5FDFJZBZJ2FXKEN4SWX3

Run Details

Duration:
7.7s
Cost:
$0.000877
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
--- The bone token burned cold against Quinn’s palm as she skidded around the corner of Camden Lock, her boots splashing through puddles that reflected the sickly green glow of the streetlamps. The suspect—tall, lean, moving like a man who knew the city’s veins better than its arteries—had vanished into the mouth of the abandoned Tube station. The entrance yawned like a rotting tooth, its iron gates pried apart just enough for a body to slip through. *No time.* She didn’t hesitate. The token was her only ticket in, and if she lost him now, she’d lose the thread that connected three missing persons cases, all with the same eerie signature: no bodies, no blood, just empty flats and the faint, metallic tang of something *wrong*. The air inside the station hit her like a slap—thick, damp, and laced with the scent of wet stone and something older, something that made her nostrils flare. The token pulsed once, sharp as a needle, and the darkness ahead *shifted*. Not just shadows. The walls themselves seemed to breathe, the tiles peeling back like dead skin to reveal a passage that hadn’t been there a second ago. Quinn’s fingers twitched toward her radio, but she stopped herself. No backup. Not here. The Veil Market didn’t play by Met rules, and if she called it in, she’d be explaining to the brass why she’d chased a suspect into a black site that didn’t officially exist. She stepped forward. The tunnel sloped downward, the air growing heavier with each step. The distant hum of voices reached her—too many, too close, too *wrong*. The token’s glow flickered, casting jagged shadows that didn’t match the movement of her body. She clenched her jaw. *Focus.* A hand shot out from the darkness and clamped over her mouth. Quinn reacted on instinct—elbow back, heel stomp, twist. The grip broke with a grunt, and she spun, fist raised, ready to drive it into— “Detective.” The voice was low, rough, laced with an accent that curled around the vowels like smoke. A man stood there, barely visible in the dim light, his dark curls damp with sweat or rain, a scar running along his left forearm like a pale river. He held up his hands, palms out. No weapon. Just a Saint Christopher medallion glinting at his throat. “Herrera,” she hissed, lowering her fist but not her guard. “What the hell are you doing here?” Tomás Herrera—former paramedic, current den mother to the city’s supernatural underbelly—exhaled sharply. “Saving your arse, apparently. You’re about to walk into a nest of things that’ll eat you alive and spit out your bones as a warning.” Quinn’s eyes flicked past him, toward the flickering light at the end of the tunnel. The voices had sharpened, becoming distinct—laughter, haggling, the clink of glass. The market. “I’m not here for a social call.” “No,” Herrera said, stepping closer. “You’re here because you’re stubborn. And because you don’t know what you’re walking into.” She bared her teeth. “I know enough.” “Do you?” His voice dropped. “That man you’re chasing? He’s not just some low-level dealer. He’s a *courier*. And the package he’s moving? It’s not heroin. It’s *worse*.” Quinn’s stomach twisted. She’d seen the reports—the missing persons, the empty flats, the way the air in those places *hung* wrong, like the world had taken a breath and forgotten to exhale. “What is it?” Herrera’s jaw tightened. “A name. Written in blood. And if it gets out, a lot of people are going to die.” A scream echoed down the tunnel, high and raw, cut off abruptly. Quinn’s hand flew to her holster. Herrera grabbed her wrist. “Don’t.” “Someone’s in trouble.” “Someone’s *always* in trouble down here,” he snapped. “But if you pull that gun, you’ll start a war. And you’ll lose.” Quinn yanked her arm free. “I didn’t ask for your help.” “No,” he said, voice quiet now. “But you’re going to need it.” She hesitated. The market’s light pulsed like a heartbeat, beckoning. Dangerous. Unknown. Everything she’d been trained to avoid. But the missing persons cases flashed behind her eyes—faces, names, lives snuffed out like candles. And the suspect was getting away. “Fine,” she said. “But if this goes south, I’m dragging you down with me.” Herrera almost smiled. “Wouldn’t have it any other way.” They moved forward, the tunnel swallowing them whole. The air thickened, pressing against Quinn’s skin like a living thing. The voices grew louder, clearer—snatches of languages she didn’t recognize, the hiss of something that wasn’t quite human, the wet *click* of too many joints moving at once. The market sprawled before them, a labyrinth of stalls and shadows, lit by flickering lanterns that cast long, grasping fingers across the stone. The scent hit her first—copper and rot, sweet decay, the sharp tang of ozone. Her stomach lurched. Herrera’s hand found her elbow, steadying her. “Breathe through your mouth,” he murmured. “And whatever you do, *don’t* make eye contact with the things in the cages.” Quinn’s gaze flicked to the side. A row of iron-barred pens lined the wall, their occupants shifting in the dim light. Too many eyes. Too many *teeth*. She swallowed hard. “Where’s my suspect?” Herrera’s grip tightened. “There.” A figure moved through the crowd, tall, familiar. The suspect. He was heading toward a stall draped in black silk, its wares hidden behind a curtain that rippled as if touched by an unseen wind. Quinn started forward, but Herrera’s fingers dug into her arm. “Wait.” “For what?” “For *him*.” A man stepped out from behind the stall’s curtain. Tall. Pale. Dressed in a suit that looked like it had been tailored in the 1800s and never taken off since. His face was all sharp angles, his eyes— Quinn’s breath caught. His eyes were *wrong*. Too large. Too dark. Like pools of oil, reflecting nothing. The suspect handed him a small, leather-bound book. The man took it, his long fingers tracing the cover. Then he looked up. Directly at Quinn. A slow, knowing smile curled his lips. “Detective Quinn,” he said, his voice like silk dragging over glass. “How *delightful* to finally meet you.” The market fell silent. Herrera’s curse was lost beneath the sudden, deafening *click* of too many teeth snapping shut at once.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags8
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.258
leniency0.516
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.28% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1059
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count1
highlights
0"sharply"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
33.90% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1059
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"pulsed"
count2
1
word"flickered"
count1
2
word"glinting"
count1
3
word"flicked"
count2
4
word"stomach"
count2
5
word"echoed"
count1
6
word"lurched"
count1
7
word"familiar"
count1
8
word"silk"
count2
9
word"tracing"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"flickered"
2"glinting"
3"flicked"
4"stomach"
5"echoed"
6"lurched"
7"familiar"
8"silk"
9"tracing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
highlights
0"clenched her jaw"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences90
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences90
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences113
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen44
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans16
markdownWords17
totalWords1044
ratio0.016
matches
0"No time."
1"wrong"
2"shifted"
3"wrong"
4"Focus."
5"courier"
6"worse"
7"hung"
8"always"
9"click"
10"don’t"
11"teeth"
12"him"
13"wrong"
14"delightful"
15"click"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
79.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions30
wordCount849
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity1.41
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Quinn12
Camden1
Lock1
Tube1
Veil1
Market1
Met1
Saint1
Christopher1
Tomás1
Herrera9
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Market"
2"Met"
3"Saint"
4"Christopher"
5"Tomás"
6"Herrera"
places(empty)
globalScore0.793
windowScore0.833
50.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences50
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"quite human, the wet *click* of too many joints moving at once"
1"looked like it had been tailored in the 1"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1044
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences113
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs49
mean21.31
std18.31
cv0.86
sampleLengths
01
176
22
347
468
547
63
743
812
924
101
1163
1217
1337
1435
1519
167
1728
1835
1921
2018
215
223
2321
2411
2512
2618
2721
2814
299
3047
3140
3227
3327
346
354
3635
3711
382
392
4038
413
4214
4322
443
457
4617
474
4817
97.47% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences90
matches
0"been trained"
1"been tailored"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs152
matches
0"was heading"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount14
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences113
ratio0.106
matches
0"The suspect—tall, lean, moving like a man who knew the city’s veins better than its arteries—had vanished into the mouth of the abandoned Tube station."
1"The air inside the station hit her like a slap—thick, damp, and laced with the scent of wet stone and something older, something that made her nostrils flare."
2"The distant hum of voices reached her—too many, too close, too *wrong*."
3"Quinn reacted on instinct—elbow back, heel stomp, twist."
4"The grip broke with a grunt, and she spun, fist raised, ready to drive it into—"
5"Tomás Herrera—former paramedic, current den mother to the city’s supernatural underbelly—exhaled sharply."
6"The voices had sharpened, becoming distinct—laughter, haggling, the clink of glass."
7"She’d seen the reports—the missing persons, the empty flats, the way the air in those places *hung* wrong, like the world had taken a breath and forgotten to exhale."
8"But the missing persons cases flashed behind her eyes—faces, names, lives snuffed out like candles."
9"The voices grew louder, clearer—snatches of languages she didn’t recognize, the hiss of something that wasn’t quite human, the wet *click* of too many joints moving at once."
10"The scent hit her first—copper and rot, sweet decay, the sharp tang of ozone."
11"His face was all sharp angles, his eyes—"
82.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount864
adjectiveStacks3
stackExamples
0"suspect—tall, lean, moving like"
1"former paramedic, current den"
2"small, leather-bound book."
adverbCount34
adverbRatio0.03935185185185185
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.009259259259259259
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences113
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences113
mean9.23
std8.44
cv0.914
sampleLengths
031
125
220
32
43
544
628
713
83
924
1010
112
122
1333
143
1511
1612
1715
184
191
2012
218
2216
231
2416
2529
267
272
289
2910
307
3112
3225
3315
3411
352
367
375
3814
394
403
415
4223
433
4429
453
463
4718
4812
496
49.26% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats16
diversityRatio0.3805309734513274
totalSentences113
uniqueOpeners43
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences73
matches
0"Just a Saint Christopher medallion"
1"Too many eyes."
2"Too many *teeth*."
3"Then he looked up."
4"Directly at Quinn."
ratio0.068
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount16
totalSentences73
matches
0"She didn’t hesitate."
1"She stepped forward."
2"She clenched her jaw."
3"He held up his hands,"
4"she hissed, lowering her fist"
5"She bared her teeth."
6"His voice dropped"
7"She’d seen the reports—the missing"
8"he said, voice quiet now"
9"They moved forward, the tunnel"
10"Her stomach lurched."
11"She swallowed hard."
12"He was heading toward a"
13"His face was all sharp"
14"His eyes were *wrong*."
15"he said, his voice like"
ratio0.219
28.49% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount63
totalSentences73
matches
0"The bone token burned cold"
1"The suspect—tall, lean, moving like"
2"The entrance yawned like a"
3"She didn’t hesitate."
4"The token was her only"
5"The air inside the station"
6"The token pulsed once, sharp"
7"The walls themselves seemed to"
8"Quinn’s fingers twitched toward her"
9"The Veil Market didn’t play"
10"She stepped forward."
11"The tunnel sloped downward, the"
12"The distant hum of voices"
13"The token’s glow flickered, casting"
14"She clenched her jaw."
15"A hand shot out from"
16"Quinn reacted on instinct—elbow back,"
17"The grip broke with a"
18"The voice was low, rough,"
19"A man stood there, barely"
ratio0.863
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences73
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences32
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"The bone token burned cold against Quinn’s palm as she skidded around the corner of Camden Lock, her boots splashing through puddles that reflected the sickly g…"
1"The suspect—tall, lean, moving like a man who knew the city’s veins better than its arteries—had vanished into the mouth of the abandoned Tube station."
2"The token was her only ticket in, and if she lost him now, she’d lose the thread that connected three missing persons cases, all with the same eerie signature: …"
3"The air inside the station hit her like a slap—thick, damp, and laced with the scent of wet stone and something older, something that made her nostrils flare."
4"The Veil Market didn’t play by Met rules, and if she called it in, she’d be explaining to the brass why she’d chased a suspect into a black site that didn’t off…"
5"The voices grew louder, clearer—snatches of languages she didn’t recognize, the hiss of something that wasn’t quite human, the wet *click* of too many joints mo…"
6"The market sprawled before them, a labyrinth of stalls and shadows, lit by flickering lanterns that cast long, grasping fingers across the stone."
7"He was heading toward a stall draped in black silk, its wares hidden behind a curtain that rippled as if touched by an unseen wind."
62.50% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags8
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"he said, voice quiet now"
53.23% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"she hissed (hiss)"
1"he snapped (snap)"
2"he murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.226
leniency0.452
rawRatio0.429
effectiveRatio0.194
77.7151%