Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTX6HDKYD8PZRT9S0BBKJN7

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1m 49s
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$0.004937
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OpenAI

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

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Footsteps hammered in my ears as he swerved through the back alley and jerked open a door that creaked with a reluctance it didn’t deserve. I cut the corner, a radius of wet bricks and neon glare closing behind me. He vanished into a corridor that stank of spilled beer and old secrets, and I followed without thinking twice. He sprinted into The Raven’s Nest, the distinctive green neon sign above the entrance throwing a hungry glow across the cobbles. The bar breathed a green hush, old maps and black-and-white photographs crowding the walls, the hum of conversations thinning as I crossed the threshold. The door thudded behind me, muffled by the weight of a world built on shadows and second chances. The suspect wasn’t here to drink; he was here to disappear. I moved in a line, shoulder first, scanning the room. A slim figure pressed against a pillar, eyes narrow, hands taut at his sides. He didn’t look back. The kind of man who believed a crowd couldn’t stop him when he’d already planned the exits. He took a step toward a shadowed stairwell that crawled down beside a shelf of nautical charts. The shelf looked innocent enough, a mosaic of putty-hearted maps and dusty labels. But I’d learned the room wasn’t what it pretended to be. “Not tonight,” I muttered, and for a heartbeat the thought of DS Morris brushed the back of my mind—two lives tangled in a single moment, the supernatural history I didn’t fully understand gnawing at the corners of it all. The suspect hit the shelf with his shoulder, as if to test whether space itself would yield. The shelf shifted. A tiny cough of dust rose, and a narrow door yawned open behind it, revealing a hidden back room. A bookcase facade designed to hide what people preferred not to see. I didn’t hesitate. I shoved forward, shoulder to the door, and the room swallowed me whole. The back room hummed with a different light, pale and precise, like someone had peeled the ribs of the night and laid them out in order. Maps hung with patient care, a thin film of mould along the edges of crates, the air carrying something metallic and old—gun oil, velvet, something unnameable. He was already in motion again, slipping into a narrow corridor that ran behind the bar and down a spiral stair that disappeared into something lower and more intimate than a pub should ever need. I counted steps, felt the wooden stairs grow slick under my boots, and a whisper of wind tell me the door behind me would not hold forever. The staircase opened into something that wasn’t exactly a tunnel and wasn’t exactly a memory. It was an old service artery beneath the city, a throat between aboveground echo and whatever truth lurked below. The air tasted of damp stone and citron wax, the kind of smell that clings to a man’s tongue when he realises he’s walked into something he can’t quite name. The passage opened into the Veil Market’s current cradle. A faint, almost-warm glow threaded between stalls; the air hummed with whispered bargains and half-spoken curses. The Market did not sleep. It moved. It breathed. Every full moon it changed its location, like a beast waking from a dream to remind the city who owned it. A bone token could pass a guard, a bone token could seal a deal, a bone token could kill a knight of the night if the bearer wasn’t careful. The suspect paused at a stall where a gaunt vendor hawked something that looked like a melted candle and called it “clarity in glass.” He pressed a finger to his lips, then slid deeper into the market’s throat, the crowd at his back parting as if the space itself understood the chase. I kept him in sight, across a maze of stalls where enchantments glittered in jars and banned alchemical substances glowed with a pale ferocity. Copper and incense and something else—old rain on iron, if you’ll permit a memory to tag along with a description. I didn’t rely on luck or instinct alone. I moved with a detective’s caution and a hunter’s patience, keeping the suspect in my peripheral like a prey animal knows to watch the feet of its predator. A stall seller crooned about a healing salve that would fix a broken vow, a woman with a shawl of feathers whispered promises into the ear of a boy who didn’t quite know what he wanted, and a hulking man in a hood watched the corridor mouths for traffic. “Keep moving,” I whispered to myself, the words almost a vow. The Market’s scent changed as we threaded through it—the copper tang of iron, the waxy sweetness of candles, and something else that prickled the back of my neck, the feathery sense that something ancient watched us and deemed us worth a closer look. The suspect swung into a tunnel that opened into a broader chamber, where stalls grew closer and the ceiling sagged with age. There, at the far end, a figure stood. The figure wore a Saint Christopher medallion, a glint of metal at the throat, and his eyes held a patient, almost ritual calm. It wasn’t a miracle to see Tomás Herrera here, but it did nothing to ease the tension that knotted my shoulders. Herrera’s gaze flicked to me for a moment, then settled back on the man in front of him. The air between them carried a different weight, a calculation I’d learned to distrust in the price of doing what I did. Tomás spoke first, his voice a low, easy thing, language hovering between casual and dangerous. “Detective. You’re late to the ball.” The words carried the heat of a game being played on a board I wasn’t fully allowed to touch. The suspect—my quarry—glanced at Herrera, then at me, a flicker in his eyes that said he understood the stakes and didn’t care. He wasn’t here for a spectacle. He was here to vanish. “Let me pass,” he said, voice rough, like gravel ground under a boot. “We don’t have to do this the hard way.” Herrera’s smile folded into something more measured, as if he were watching a chess match and that board kitsched with pieces already moved. “The hard way tends to be efficient. You last week, you’re here today. Your luck ran out in Westminster. Don’t pretend you found a new rhythm.” The suspect breathed out, and for a moment he looked toward me as if to measure what he could get away with if he tried. He was not alone here; that much was obvious. The Market’s shadows shifted—faces came and went in the corner of my eye, and the hum thickened, as though the place itself was listening and weighing every move we made. “Quinn,” he said, and there was a half-smirk in it, as if the name was a badge he wore to remind me I’d failed a hundred times before in a dozen different ways. “You think you know the city, detective. You don’t know what lives beneath it.” I kept a steady pace, not answering his provocation, letting the tension write itself across the line of my shoulders. The suspect stepped closer to a stall that offered a glimmering shard of something that looked like ice but burned when touched. He reached for it and the Market flared, a chorus of warnings whispering through the stalls. I moved, blade drawn at my side with the careful speed I’d learned in eighteen years on the force, and the blade met the space where he’d just been. A body collapsed. Not his. Mine. A trap door under a dummy crate gave way, the air rushing through the gap with a sound like a whisper of wind through a hollow bone. The suspect disappeared for an instant, swallowed by the Market’s underbelly, the people in stalls turning with reflexive unease, as if a sudden misstep had pulled a thread from a coat and everyone tightened their elbows. I sprang, catching the edge of the crate with a gloved hand and pulling myself forward, slamming into the other side of a support wall that the Market designers had left too convenient for a chase like this. The chase slowed as I found old pipes and a maintenance ladder that seemed more fit for a ghost than a detective of the modern age. The tunnel was narrow, the walls slick with something slicker than water, and the distance between the upstairs hustle and this subterranean beast felt like a confession. Tomás’s voice rang out again, calm but edged with something like fear disguised as concern. “Cuidado, Quinn. The Veil Market isn’t a place, it’s a mechanism. It takes, and it gives, and it forgets.” The suspect surged into the lower chamber, where a gateway door shimmered as if lit from within. The bone token gleamed on a string around his neck, a small pale bone turning in the light with each breath he took. He touched it, and the door’s shimmer intensified, as if the token unlocked a living truth rather than a mere entrance. “Stop,” I said, not loud, but the command slid through the space with a certainty that pricked at his skin. “This is the moment you ride or you fall. You don’t get to vanish into a market that swallows mercy.” He whirled on me and produced a blade, the blade's edge catching false light in the Market’s glow. He came at me with the practiced economy of a man who had learned to turn fear into weaponry. I stepped back, felt the damp air tug at the edges of my jacket, heard the soft creak of the timber beneath. The blade flashed; I shifted, deflecting with a precise parry, a spark of metal shorting the air as the blade scraped the bone token against the floor and sent a shard skittering across the stones. Herrera appeared at my shoulder, a breath of danger wrapped in civility. “He’s not the worst thing in here,” he said, eyes narrowing as he watched the token glow, not with warmth but with an almost surgical glow. “The Market is a patient thing. It keeps its secrets in the safest places, and it comes with a price.” The suspect lunged again, fury shaping his movements, and I felt the weight of the decision pressing down on me with a cold, indifferent hand. Do I follow him deeper into this living labyrinth, knowing the Market would swallow me as surely as it did those who underestimated it? Or do I retreat, call for reinforcements, wait until they can be brought to the surface and we can pull him back into a world that pretends to function? He pressed, and I pivoted, the sense of danger sharpening into a single, clear image: the Market’s walls were listening, and they were listening to the only language they understood—survival of the clever. If I stepped into the next chamber, I would not simply be chasing a suspect. I would be stepping into a furnace where every choice burned. “Quinn, you’re staring at the exit sign when you should be looking at the door you’ve got to shut behind you,” Herrera said, voice too calm, as if the Market’s breath didn’t reach him and the rain didn’t fall in the city above their heads. “If you go down there, you become part of the mechanism. It doesn’t stop for you.” I studied the bone token again, the pale bone catching the light with a cold honesty. The Market’s current location was Camden’s underworld, yes, but the token could be the city’s way of telling you to enter with a clean purpose—or to walk straight into a trap that would rewrite you in the same moment it rewrites the city. I could feel the weight of the decision, the clockwork loosened in my chest as the Market began to glow with a deeper intention, a readiness to consume. The suspect tailed the glow with his eyes, moving toward a corridor lined with stalls that had an almost ceremonial feel—incense, candles, jars of unknown substances whose lids rattled faintly as he passed. A voice rose from one stall, a whisper like a nail drag across wood, and the Market latched onto it, the whisper traveling through the space as if every item in the place wore the same ear. I stepped after him, not with bravado but with a careful, creeping determination. The Market’s pulse quickened, and the crowd’s murmur grew into a chorus of bargaining winds. The suspect glanced over his shoulder, a flicker of fear crossing his features before resolve returned, raw and sharp, ready to cut through whatever lay ahead. Tomás moved closer, his steps easy, his medallion catching the semi-glow of the room. “If you go in, you’re not hunting him anymore. He hunts you. That’s how this place works.” He paused, the weight of his own past hanging in the air between us. “I’ve seen what the Market does to the unwary. I’ve fed it too many times to pretend it won’t taste me again.” I did not answer. My eyes fixed on the suspect as he threaded between stalls, ducking beneath a low arch that opened into a wider corridor. The air grew cooler, a trick of the Market’s engine that suggested a depth beyond a simple underground. The bone token on his neck vibrated against his chest as if it remembered every time it had opened a door, every time it had bound someone to a choice—return to where they began, or step deeper into something they could not recognise. A stallkeeper leaned out of a corner, the scent of burning wax on his hands. He spoke in a low, careful rhythm, as if negotiating with a partner who might flick a switch and plunge them all into ruin. “Be careful what you wish for, friend. Every bargain here carries a price.” The suspect didn’t slow. He pressed forward until the corridor opened into a vaulted chamber where the Market’s ceiling arched high, ribs of old stone curving above like the belly of a sleeping creature. The glow grew stronger here, and the sounds—the clink of coin, the soft hiss of a dozen whispered deals, the scrape of metal on metal—felt intimate, almost familial, as if the place invited you to forget your old life and become someone new. I moved through the crowd, heat rising in my chest, a desperate need to catch him mingling with a professional curiosity I never admitted to in daylight. The Market’s tenants watched with a quiet patience, as if they’d waited a long time for this moment and would wait longer if they needed to. A woman in a velvet coat offered me a vial that promised “clarity for those with too much to forget.” I declined with a calm shake of my head; I’d learned to accept risk, not surrender to it. The suspect paused near a stall where a man dealt in bones—artfully carved, polished to a gleam, each one carved to resemble a different creature, each one attracting a small crowd with whispered novelties and subtle promises. He touched the nearest token with a finger, and the entire stall dimmed as if the room itself had drawn a breath. The suspect looked back at me, his eyes readable as an open book—he was considering the one route I would not take, the route that could deliver him into the heart of the Market’s deeper workings. “Don’t,” I said, forcing the delicate edge into my voice to cut through the chorus of voices. “You don’t know what you’re bargaining for.” He did not answer in words. He stepped closer to me, a dangerous proximity that told me he’d invite a fight so long as it kept him moving. Then, out of the murmur, a single sound rose above the rest—something heavy landing somewhere beyond the stalls, a thud that reminded me the Market wasn’t just a stage for whispered deals; it was a trapdoor for people who thought they could outrun it. The suspect shrugged off the distraction and pressed on, drawing his blade with a practiced ease that spoke of years spent in rooms far darker than this. I moved faster, the weapon in my hand settling along my thigh with the tremor of a weapon ready for action. Herrera watched us both with an expression that was almost paternal and almost predatory at the same time. “Quinn,” he said, avoiding the direct address, “the Market isn’t a place for a fight that ends with a body. It’s a place for a choice that ends with a lie or a revelation.” He spoke softly, almost as if speaking to himself as much as to me. “If you want him, you must be prepared to listen to what the Market is telling you about yourself.” The suspect lunged, and I caught his wrist with a controlled brace, turning the attack into a leg sweep that hurled him toward a row of iron cages containing artefacts that looked too valuable to be safe in such a place. He managed to grab the edge of one cage and pulled himself upright, the blade sliding free with a clean rasp that sent a shiver through the crowd. “Enough games,” I said, stepping forward. The Market's walls seemed to lean closer, listening to the exchange as if a chorus of unseen witnesses leaned in to hear the outcome. My breath hitched. In here, a single misstep could turn a chase into a permanent loss of self. The suspect’s gaze shifted toward a narrow passage that led into a tunnel beyond the cages. A token clinked against the man’s chest as he moved, and the edge of the token caught a stray beam of light, turning it into a pale, bone-white beacon. The beam revealed a form at the far end of the tunnel—someone waiting with a calm, almost ceremonial air. It wasn’t a guard in the usual sense; it was someone who understood how the Market really worked, a facilitator or perhaps something more. Tomás stepped into the beam’s circle, his presence a steadying force and a threat all at once. “I can hear your heart,” he said to the suspect. “It’s loud enough to tell me when you’re lying. The Market will not protect you from what you’ve done, not here, not now.” The suspect swallowed, eyes flicking from Tomás to me, and back again. He knew that contrary to what the Market might promise, this space did not forget. It remembered. It kept track of everything—every choice, every drop of blood, every whispered deal that went too far. I considered the risk. The Market’s guard, the unknown behind the bone token, the distinct possibility we were about to walk into a den of the supernatural in a city that pretended not to notice the monsters underneath its feet. The decision pressed hard: follow the suspect deeper into this living labyrinth or pull back, call for backup, and contain him at the threshold so the Market wouldn’t consume us both. The suspect moved again, and I stepped into his line of pursuit, letting discipline guide my steps as much as any instinct. The tunnel narrowed; the walls pressed in; the Market’s pulse grew louder, a tremor of energy that pushed at my ribs like wind trying to press through a too-thin wall. The suspect slowed, perhaps sensing the consequence of the decision he had already made in his head—the decision to trust an entrance to the Market more than the world above it. A sudden scream—a sharp, brittle sound—split the air from behind us. The crowd surged, then froze, a living wave of faces and teeth and glimmering eyes. Herrera, always a step ahead of danger, moved with a speed that suggested he’d spent long hours in smaller, darker rooms than this. He reached out, catching the suspect by the shoulder and spinning him away from a hidden crease in the tunnel wall. “Not yet,” Herrera hissed, the warning not directed at the suspect alone, but at the Market that seemed to relish a good chase as though it fed on it. He seized the man’s blade and tucked it into a hidden sheath at his own hip, a practised motion that spoke of long training and old habits of control. The suspect yanked free and whipped toward the tunnel’s exit, a desperate leap that would have carried him into the next chamber if not for my hand sliding around his forearm, pinning it to his side in a moment of steady force. The crowd roared with the kind of collective breath you hear in theatres when the villain makes a fatal misstep, and the Market itself seemed to lean closer, listening for the crack in his resolve. “Give it up, mate,” I said, my voice kept low, professional, a thread of steel. “You’re not getting out of this by bleeding into a crowd you don’t know how to read.” He spat near my boot, the saliva warm and accusing against the cold stone. The corner of his mouth twisted, a nasty smirk that told me he’d learned to survive the long game by reading people the way a hunter reads a map. Then his eyes flicked to a darker corridor, one I hadn’t yet dared to follow. The Market’s glow there was deeper, more sinister, and the door to that passage seemed to hum with a life that wasn’t mine to command. Herrera gave a soft, almost fond exhale. “If you go there, you won’t be able to walk back out and pretend nothing happened. The Market will remember your face.” The suspect jerked his head toward the deeper corridor and, for a heartbeat, looked as if he might sprint into the unknown. The glow flickered, casting long, pale shadows that stretched across the floor like fingers. A thin wail of wind teased at the edge of the passage, and a low hum rose up, a chorus of voices that didn’t belong to any living thing I’d ever known. It wasn’t the sound of fear so much as the sound of a city choosing its next memory. I tightened my grip, the weight of the decision pressing down on me with a brutal clarity. If I followed him, I would enter a chamber where the Market’s rules would apply to me as much as to him. I would have to confront things I did not fully understand and, worst of all, risk losing myself to a place that could rewrite my purpose in a single, merciless breath. “Quinn,” Tomás called softly, a warning and a suggestion rolled into one. “If you go in, you do not come back the same. And you might not bring him out either.” The moment stretched, a thin thread of possibility and danger, and I allowed it to unspool in the space between action and consequence. The suspect’s breath grew ragged, the blade at his side catching a shard of reflected glow as he prepared to make a run for it. The Market’s doors hummed with a language only those who had bargained here could hear, and I found myself listening, listening for a rhythm I could trust. Then, a sound like a shallow bell, a bell that announced a new cycle in a place that never slept, clanged somewhere above us. The bone token around the suspect’s neck gave a final, patient tinkle and then stilled as if listening to the Market’s next instruction. The choice lay before me in stark, brutal clarity: go deeper into this living maze and risk becoming a piece of the Market’s own machinery, or step back and seal this entrance, let the Market live on in its hidden world without dragging me into its shadows. I did not hesitate long. The decision landed with a decisive thump in my chest and a hard resolve in my voice. “Down there,” I said, jerking my chin toward the tunnel, and I saw a flash of relief and a flash of fear in the suspect’s eyes at the same moment. He understood the choice I had made. The suspect moved, and I followed, the Market’s hum rising to a fever pitch as if it anticipated the moment we’d learn something important about ourselves. Herrera’s hand brushed the air near my sleeve, a quiet, almost protective gesture that still managed to feel dangerous. Tomás spoke again, low and purposeful. “Remember your purpose,” he warned, not entirely to me, but to the space we now occupied. “You’re not chasing him. You’re chasing what lives inside him.” We threaded through the Market’s heart, where the walls breathed with a rhythmic sigh and the crowd’s murmurs settled into a single, ominous note. The suspect reached a final, narrow archway that opened into a courtyard-like space within the subterranean market—an area lit by a ring of weak lamps, each one throwing a pale halos onto stalls cluttered with charms, talismans, and relics that felt almost sacred in their juxtaposition with the violence of the chase. There, at the centre, a platform rose above a shallow pit, and the suspect paused, eyes locked on a figure who waited with quiet, inexorable patience. The figure wore a cloak that seemed woven from night itself and carried the weight of a centuries-long secret. On the figure’s chest hung a second token, identical in its pale bone glow to the one around the suspect’s neck. The crowd pressed closer, and I could feel the Market’s power coiling tighter around us, a living thing that fed on fear, hunger, and glory. The suspect took a breath and spoke, the words clipped, calculated, and almost ceremonial. “You wanted in,” he said, eyes never leaving the cloaked figure. “Now you’ve got a price to pay.” The cloaked figure inclined the head, not a nod, but a sentence delivered with the gravity of a verdict. “The price is the truth you carry. We do not pretend it does not exist merely because you fear it.” I stepped between the suspect and the platform, the blade in his hand catching the light of the lamps and throwing a short, sharp glimmer across the crowd. The Market thickened, a living fog of aroma and possibility, and the bone token on the suspect’s neck gave a soft, warning chime, a sound that said: doors will open and doors will close, and you will be judged by the doors you chose to walk through. Herrera moved closer still, almost merging with the shadows. His voice rose, controlled and intimate. “Quinn, think,” he whispered, as if not to be overheard by the Market itself. “You came here to catch him. You’ll leave with what you brought to catch him, or you’ll leave with nothing but a memory.” The suspect met my gaze, thin-lipped and taut, and the crowd’s murmur grew into a whip-whirr of voices. He raised the blade, a last, violent impulse to seize the thread of his fate and snap it for good. And then the ground answered, not with a voice, but with a noise—metal on stone, a long sigh of rock giving way—and the floor beneath us shuddered. A trapdoor opened with a stubborn creak above the pit, revealing a rough steel ladder that dropped down into a deeper, darker world below. The suspect lunged, but a second of hesitation betrayed him; he glanced at the ladder with a calculated risk and took the leap into the pit, vanishing into the black. The platform doors snapped shut in a heartbeat, and the Market roared. The bone token around the suspect’s neck wrung with a final, silver chime as it slid along his skin, his scream carried away by the Market’s phonetic wind and swallowed by the plummet into the darkness. I shot forward, breaking from the circle of onlookers, and reached for the ladder just as Herrera’s hand closed around my wrist, gripping with a force that told me he’d known this would happen and this was the moment he’d warned me about years ago. “Always a price to pay,” he said in a low, iron voice, his eyes gleaming with something like approval and fear in equal measure. “And you chose the cost.” The ladder turned to slick iron under our hands as we descended into the lower depths. The Market’s glow faded into the indifferent shadow that clung to the stone like a second skin. The echo of the crowd above us thinned, replaced by the drip of water and the whisper of unseen currents. We moved as a single unit, a pair of shadows with a shared purpose and a stubborn reluctance to be swallowed by a world we hadn’t chosen but now could not escape. The corridor opened into a cavernous, damp hall where the Market’s true machinery lay in wait: crates stacked like a city’s dark skyline, pulsating jars, charms in a hundred shapes, and a central chamber that seemed to breathe with a living pressure, the sound of air moving through a throat. The suspect lay on the floor in front of a door that looked like a mouth, the bone token still clutched in his hand, shining with a pale intensity. A moment later a pair of figures moved from the shadows—two enforcers of the Market, their faces obscured by hoods, their fingers stained with something dark and unnameable. They halted, not daring to cross the threshold into the central chamber without the Market’s express permission. The suspect squirmed, eyes wild with fear and relief in equal measure—relief that someone else had arrived, fear that someone would take him from the place he’d finally believed he could own. Tomás’s arm slid in beside me, a calm blade of restraint. “This is where it ends for now,” he said softly, as if to cool the heat of a world that burned too bright for ordinary men. “We can take him above ground, if you want. Or we can let the Market decide what happens next.” I felt the weight of the decision again—deep, heavy, inevitable. The Market’s breath pressed into my skin, a cold whisper that promised revelations if I dared to listen. The suspect turned his head, meeting my eyes with a desperate plea that required no words to convey: spare me the long, slow unraveling of a life that had finally come to its reckoning. “No,” I said, the word crisp and final. “You’ll tell me what I want to know, here, now, or we’ll do this the hard way, and you’ll tell me after.” The Market trembled in response, a low thrumming that sounded in my bones more than my ears. The suspect’s mouth opened, but no sound came out at first; then he exhaled, a shuddering breath that carried the exhaustion of someone who had fought the wrong battle for far too long. “Ask,” he said at last, the word torn from him as if the truth were a blade he could no longer keep sheathed. The Market warmed a fraction, and the two hooded enforcers shifted, their heads tilting toward the suspected answer that hung in the air like smoke. The central chamber’s door slid open with a sound like a sigh, and the space beyond glowed with a mad, green light that suggested the Market was about to reveal its most intimate secrets. The moment stretched. Then, from somewhere deep within the Market, a thing moved—the thing that existed between an ally and a weapon, between a memory and a consequence. A figure stepped into the glow, tall and patient, a presence that felt older than the city’s bones. It was not the kind of figure you’d call a guard or a boss; it was the Market’s own personification, the part of the space that decided who lived and who did not through the quiet arithmetic of fear and desire. The suspect’s eyes widened with dawning understanding as the figure approached. Herrera’s breath pressed against my ear, a reminder of the stakes and the costs, the promises and the betrayals we’d signed up for when we chose to chase a man through the depths of a city that refused to stay quiet. “Quinn,” Herrera murmured, and the word carried a weight that wasn’t simply concern. It was a warning, a reminder of what this chase might demand of us, and what it might cost the city we wore like a badge. I moved a step closer to the central chamber, the Market’s glow tracing the lines of my own fear and resolve. The suspect lay still, listening to the Market’s heartbeat, ready to use whatever truth the space would give him if we pressed harder. Then the figure in the glow spoke, a voice that sounded like the turning of pages in a book you shouldn’t be reading aloud. “The truth you seek is not a weapon, Detective. It’s a door. Step through, and you’ll see where the real danger lives—the danger that built the city and feeds on its fear.” The Market’s breath grew warmer, the glow turning almost iron-like in its intensity. The suspect jerked his head toward me as if begging for rescue, then looked back toward the figure with a tremor of realization and fear that this moment had already decided the course of his life. I took a breath, felt the weight of the decision settle into my bones and spine. The Market wasn’t a place you could outthink. It wasn’t a place you could outrun. It was a thing you could only survive by choosing your truth and paying its price. “Tell me what you did,” I said, voice as steel-edged as the blade at my hip. The suspect opened his mouth, but at that moment the central chamber’s doors shifted again, and the glow intensified. A crowd of shadows gathered behind the hooded enforcers, their faces indistinct, their voices a low whisper that rose into a chorus of names I did not recognise, a litany of the Market’s long memory. Everything blurred for a moment—the Market’s hum, the ache in my knees, Herrera’s quiet, the suspect’s breath, and the green glow that seemed to drink in the city’s fear as if it were a draught. Then a force, strong and inexorable, moved through the room, a wind of decision that would not be denied. The last thing I saw before the darkness swallowed us was the suspect’s face, a mask of relief and horror in equal measure, and Herrera steadying himself against the wall, eyes fixed on a future that was about to be rewritten. And then we were gone, swallowed by the Market’s private machinery, the bone token’s pale light fading as if someone had turned off a lamp in the middle of a room that refused to sleep. The door behind us snapped shut with a sound like a lock sliding into place, and the Market’s breath steadied, as if waiting for the next move in a game only it could fully understand. We disappeared into the deep, the kind of pursuit that did not end with a single gesture or a neat arrest. It ended with the city learning something it hadn’t wanted to know and with a detective who would live with that knowledge for years, every memory of that chase etched into her flesh and her resolve. The Market would remember us, and we would remember it, the moment we decided to walk into its heart and face whatever lay waiting there, knowing that the truth we found would demand yet another price to be paid.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags28
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Tomás called softly [softly]"
1"he said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.549
leniency1
rawRatio0.071
effectiveRatio0.071
96.67% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount6003
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"softly"
count3
1
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
40.86% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount6003
totalAiIsms71
found
0
word"footsteps"
count1
1
word"weight"
count9
2
word"scanning"
count1
3
word"mosaic"
count1
4
word"facade"
count1
5
word"velvet"
count2
6
word"whisper"
count7
7
word"echo"
count2
8
word"predator"
count1
9
word"hulking"
count1
10
word"glint"
count1
11
word"tension"
count2
12
word"flicked"
count2
13
word"flicker"
count2
14
word"measured"
count1
15
word"efficient"
count1
16
word"shimmered"
count1
17
word"warmth"
count1
18
word"sense of"
count1
19
word"could feel"
count2
20
word"pulse"
count2
21
word"quickened"
count1
22
word"resolve"
count5
23
word"vibrated"
count1
24
word"practiced ease"
count1
25
word"beacon"
count1
26
word"sinister"
count1
27
word"flickered"
count1
28
word"stark"
count1
29
word"rhythmic"
count1
30
word"carried the weight"
count1
31
word"calculated"
count2
32
word"gleaming"
count1
33
word"depths"
count2
34
word"intensity"
count2
35
word"unraveling"
count1
36
word"trembled"
count1
37
word"desire"
count1
38
word"reminder"
count2
39
word"tracing"
count1
40
word"the last thing"
count1
41
word"etched"
count1
highlights
0"footsteps"
1"weight"
2"scanning"
3"mosaic"
4"facade"
5"velvet"
6"whisper"
7"echo"
8"predator"
9"hulking"
10"glint"
11"tension"
12"flicked"
13"flicker"
14"measured"
15"efficient"
16"shimmered"
17"warmth"
18"sense of"
19"could feel"
20"pulse"
21"quickened"
22"resolve"
23"vibrated"
24"practiced ease"
25"beacon"
26"sinister"
27"flickered"
28"stark"
29"rhythmic"
30"carried the weight"
31"calculated"
32"gleaming"
33"depths"
34"intensity"
35"unraveling"
36"trembled"
37"desire"
38"reminder"
39"tracing"
40"the last thing"
41"etched"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches5
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"hung in the air"
count1
2
label"sent a shiver through"
count1
3
label"flicker of emotion"
count2
highlights
0"eyes widened"
1"hung in the air"
2"sent a shiver through"
3"a flicker of fear"
4"a flash of fear"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells3
narrationSentences252
matches
0"t with warmth"
1"a flicker of fear"
2"d with fear"
74.83% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount11
narrationSentences252
filterMatches
0"hear"
hedgeMatches
0"tended to"
1"tends to"
2"began to"
3"managed to"
4"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences275
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen53
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords5960
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions54
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions94
wordCount5412
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity1.13
worstName"Market"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Market"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Morris1
Veil1
Market61
Saint1
Christopher1
Tomás9
Herrera17
Camden1
persons
0"Morris"
1"Market"
2"Saint"
3"Christopher"
4"Tomás"
5"Herrera"
6"Camden"
places
0"Raven"
1"Veil"
globalScore0.936
windowScore0.833
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences233
glossingSentenceCount19
matches
0"quite name"
1"looked like a melted candle and called it"
2"quite know what he wanted, and a hulking man in a hood watched the corridor mouths for traffic"
3"looked like ice but burned when touched"
4"seemed more fit for a ghost than a detective of the modern age"
5"felt like a confession"
6"something like fear disguised as concern"
7"as if negotiating with a partner who might flick a switch and plunge them all into ruin"
8"as if speaking to himself as much as to me"
9"Market that seemed to relish a good chase as though it fed on it"
10"as if listening to the Market’s next instruction"
11"seemed woven from night itself and carried the weight of a centuries-long secret"
12"something like approval and fear in equal me"
13"chamber that seemed to breathe with a living pressure, the sound of air moving through a throat"
14"looked like a mouth, the bone token still"
15"sounded like the turning of pages in a boo"
16"as if begging for rescue, then looked back toward the figure with a tremor of realization and fear that this moment had already decided the course of his life"
17"glow that seemed to drink in the city’s fear as if it were a draught"
18"as if waiting for the next move in a game only it could fully understand"
65.77% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches8
per1kWords1.342
wordCount5960
matches
0"not loud, but the command slid through the space with a certainty"
1"not with warmth but with an almost surgical glow"
2"not with bravado but with a careful, creeping determination"
3"Not yet,” Herrera hissed, the warning not directed at the suspect alone, but at the Market"
4"not directed at the suspect alone, but at the Market"
5"not entirely to me, but to the space we now occupied"
6"not a nod, but a sentence delivered with the gravity of a verdict"
7"not with a voice, but with a noise"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences275
matches
0"fear that someone"
59.95% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs99
mean60.2
std21.66
cv0.36
sampleLengths
059
174
286
339
467
587
691
784
896
985
1054
1174
1255
1325
1433
1522
1649
1764
1847
1987
2069
2191
2234
2361
2440
2594
2658
2778
2859
2961
3087
3170
3254
3367
3487
3552
3677
3791
3895
3924
4072
4166
4267
4369
4448
4588
4650
4746
4871
4983
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences252
matches
0"being played"
1"were gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs838
matches
0"were watching"
1"was listening"
2"were listening, were listening"
3"was considering"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount29
semicolonCount12
flaggedSentences35
totalSentences275
ratio0.127
matches
0"The suspect wasn’t here to drink; he was here to disappear."
1"“Not tonight,” I muttered, and for a heartbeat the thought of DS Morris brushed the back of my mind—two lives tangled in a single moment, the supernatural history I didn’t fully understand gnawing at the corners of it all."
2"Maps hung with patient care, a thin film of mould along the edges of crates, the air carrying something metallic and old—gun oil, velvet, something unnameable."
3"A faint, almost-warm glow threaded between stalls; the air hummed with whispered bargains and half-spoken curses."
4"Copper and incense and something else—old rain on iron, if you’ll permit a memory to tag along with a description."
5"The Market’s scent changed as we threaded through it—the copper tang of iron, the waxy sweetness of candles, and something else that prickled the back of my neck, the feathery sense that something ancient watched us and deemed us worth a closer look."
6"The suspect—my quarry—glanced at Herrera, then at me, a flicker in his eyes that said he understood the stakes and didn’t care."
7"He was not alone here; that much was obvious."
8"The Market’s shadows shifted—faces came and went in the corner of my eye, and the hum thickened, as though the place itself was listening and weighing every move we made."
9"The blade flashed; I shifted, deflecting with a precise parry, a spark of metal shorting the air as the blade scraped the bone token against the floor and sent a shard skittering across the stones."
10"He pressed, and I pivoted, the sense of danger sharpening into a single, clear image: the Market’s walls were listening, and they were listening to the only language they understood—survival of the clever."
11"The Market’s current location was Camden’s underworld, yes, but the token could be the city’s way of telling you to enter with a clean purpose—or to walk straight into a trap that would rewrite you in the same moment it rewrites the city."
12"The suspect tailed the glow with his eyes, moving toward a corridor lined with stalls that had an almost ceremonial feel—incense, candles, jars of unknown substances whose lids rattled faintly as he passed."
13"The bone token on his neck vibrated against his chest as if it remembered every time it had opened a door, every time it had bound someone to a choice—return to where they began, or step deeper into something they could not recognise."
14"The glow grew stronger here, and the sounds—the clink of coin, the soft hiss of a dozen whispered deals, the scrape of metal on metal—felt intimate, almost familial, as if the place invited you to forget your old life and become someone new."
15"A woman in a velvet coat offered me a vial that promised “clarity for those with too much to forget.” I declined with a calm shake of my head; I’d learned to accept risk, not surrender to it."
16"The suspect paused near a stall where a man dealt in bones—artfully carved, polished to a gleam, each one carved to resemble a different creature, each one attracting a small crowd with whispered novelties and subtle promises."
17"The suspect looked back at me, his eyes readable as an open book—he was considering the one route I would not take, the route that could deliver him into the heart of the Market’s deeper workings."
18"Then, out of the murmur, a single sound rose above the rest—something heavy landing somewhere beyond the stalls, a thud that reminded me the Market wasn’t just a stage for whispered deals; it was a trapdoor for people who thought they could outrun it."
19"The beam revealed a form at the far end of the tunnel—someone waiting with a calm, almost ceremonial air."
20"It wasn’t a guard in the usual sense; it was someone who understood how the Market really worked, a facilitator or perhaps something more."
21"It kept track of everything—every choice, every drop of blood, every whispered deal that went too far."
22"The tunnel narrowed; the walls pressed in; the Market’s pulse grew louder, a tremor of energy that pushed at my ribs like wind trying to press through a too-thin wall."
23"The suspect slowed, perhaps sensing the consequence of the decision he had already made in his head—the decision to trust an entrance to the Market more than the world above it."
24"A sudden scream—a sharp, brittle sound—split the air from behind us."
25"The suspect reached a final, narrow archway that opened into a courtyard-like space within the subterranean market—an area lit by a ring of weak lamps, each one throwing a pale halos onto stalls cluttered with charms, talismans, and relics that felt almost sacred in their juxtaposition with the violence of the chase."
26"And then the ground answered, not with a voice, but with a noise—metal on stone, a long sigh of rock giving way—and the floor beneath us shuddered."
27"The suspect lunged, but a second of hesitation betrayed him; he glanced at the ladder with a calculated risk and took the leap into the pit, vanishing into the black."
28"A moment later a pair of figures moved from the shadows—two enforcers of the Market, their faces obscured by hoods, their fingers stained with something dark and unnameable."
29"The suspect squirmed, eyes wild with fear and relief in equal measure—relief that someone else had arrived, fear that someone would take him from the place he’d finally believed he could own."
30"I felt the weight of the decision again—deep, heavy, inevitable."
31"The suspect’s mouth opened, but no sound came out at first; then he exhaled, a shuddering breath that carried the exhaustion of someone who had fought the wrong battle for far too long."
32"Then, from somewhere deep within the Market, a thing moved—the thing that existed between an ally and a weapon, between a memory and a consequence."
33"It was not the kind of figure you’d call a guard or a boss; it was the Market’s own personification, the part of the space that decided who lived and who did not through the quiet arithmetic of fear and desire."
34"Everything blurred for a moment—the Market’s hum, the ache in my knees, Herrera’s quiet, the suspect’s breath, and the green glow that seemed to drink in the city’s fear as if it were a draught."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount5454
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"pale, bone-white beacon."
1"suspect lay still, listening"
adverbCount124
adverbRatio0.022735606894022736
lyAdverbCount27
lyAdverbRatio0.0049504950495049506
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences275
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences275
mean21.67
std10.79
cv0.498
sampleLengths
025
115
219
321
424
518
611
710
814
94
1017
1117
1213
1311
1439
1517
163
1719
1812
193
2013
2126
2226
2335
2427
2515
2619
2730
289
2916
305
312
322
3321
3429
3552
3624
3720
388
3928
4049
4111
4243
4322
448
4523
4621
4718
4822
4915
34.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats44
diversityRatio0.16727272727272727
totalSentences275
uniqueOpeners46
80.97% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount6
totalSentences247
matches
0"Then, out of the murmur,"
1"Then his eyes flicked to"
2"Then, a sound like a"
3"Then, from somewhere deep within"
4"Then the figure in the"
5"Then a force, strong and"
ratio0.024
72.63% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount91
totalSentences247
matches
0"I cut the corner, a"
1"He vanished into a corridor"
2"He sprinted into The Raven’s"
3"I moved in a line,"
4"He didn’t look back."
5"He took a step toward"
6"I muttered, and for a"
7"I didn’t hesitate."
8"I shoved forward, shoulder to"
9"He was already in motion"
10"I counted steps, felt the"
11"It was an old service"
12"I kept him in sight,"
13"I didn’t rely on luck"
14"I moved with a detective’s"
15"I whispered to myself, the"
16"It wasn’t a miracle to"
17"He wasn’t here for a"
18"He was here to vanish."
19"he said, voice rough, like"
ratio0.368
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount232
totalSentences247
matches
0"Footsteps hammered in my ears"
1"I cut the corner, a"
2"He vanished into a corridor"
3"He sprinted into The Raven’s"
4"The bar breathed a green"
5"The door thudded behind me,"
6"The suspect wasn’t here to"
7"I moved in a line,"
8"A slim figure pressed against"
9"He didn’t look back."
10"The kind of man who"
11"He took a step toward"
12"The shelf looked innocent enough,"
13"I muttered, and for a"
14"The suspect hit the shelf"
15"The shelf shifted."
16"A tiny cough of dust"
17"A bookcase facade designed to"
18"I didn’t hesitate."
19"I shoved forward, shoulder to"
ratio0.939
40.49% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences247
matches
0"If I stepped into the"
1"If I followed him, I"
ratio0.008
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences194
technicalSentenceCount52
matches
0"He was already in motion again, slipping into a narrow corridor that ran behind the bar and down a spiral stair that disappeared into something lower and more i…"
1"The Market’s shadows shifted—faces came and went in the corner of my eye, and the hum thickened, as though the place itself was listening and weighing every mov…"
2"I kept a steady pace, not answering his provocation, letting the tension write itself across the line of my shoulders."
3"The suspect stepped closer to a stall that offered a glimmering shard of something that looked like ice but burned when touched."
4"The suspect disappeared for an instant, swallowed by the Market’s underbelly, the people in stalls turning with reflexive unease, as if a sudden misstep had pul…"
5"The chase slowed as I found old pipes and a maintenance ladder that seemed more fit for a ghost than a detective of the modern age."
6"The Market’s current location was Camden’s underworld, yes, but the token could be the city’s way of telling you to enter with a clean purpose—or to walk straig…"
7"The suspect tailed the glow with his eyes, moving toward a corridor lined with stalls that had an almost ceremonial feel—incense, candles, jars of unknown subst…"
8"My eyes fixed on the suspect as he threaded between stalls, ducking beneath a low arch that opened into a wider corridor."
9"The bone token on his neck vibrated against his chest as if it remembered every time it had opened a door, every time it had bound someone to a choice—return to…"
10"He spoke in a low, careful rhythm, as if negotiating with a partner who might flick a switch and plunge them all into ruin."
11"The glow grew stronger here, and the sounds—the clink of coin, the soft hiss of a dozen whispered deals, the scrape of metal on metal—felt intimate, almost fami…"
12"The suspect looked back at me, his eyes readable as an open book—he was considering the one route I would not take, the route that could deliver him into the he…"
13"He stepped closer to me, a dangerous proximity that told me he’d invite a fight so long as it kept him moving."
14"Then, out of the murmur, a single sound rose above the rest—something heavy landing somewhere beyond the stalls, a thud that reminded me the Market wasn’t just …"
15"The suspect shrugged off the distraction and pressed on, drawing his blade with a practiced ease that spoke of years spent in rooms far darker than this."
16"Herrera watched us both with an expression that was almost paternal and almost predatory at the same time."
17"The suspect lunged, and I caught his wrist with a controlled brace, turning the attack into a leg sweep that hurled him toward a row of iron cages containing ar…"
18"The Market's walls seemed to lean closer, listening to the exchange as if a chorus of unseen witnesses leaned in to hear the outcome."
19"It wasn’t a guard in the usual sense; it was someone who understood how the Market really worked, a facilitator or perhaps something more."
20"It kept track of everything—every choice, every drop of blood, every whispered deal that went too far."
21"The Market’s guard, the unknown behind the bone token, the distinct possibility we were about to walk into a den of the supernatural in a city that pretended no…"
22"The tunnel narrowed; the walls pressed in; the Market’s pulse grew louder, a tremor of energy that pushed at my ribs like wind trying to press through a too-thi…"
23"Herrera, always a step ahead of danger, moved with a speed that suggested he’d spent long hours in smaller, darker rooms than this."
24"He seized the man’s blade and tucked it into a hidden sheath at his own hip, a practised motion that spoke of long training and old habits of control."
25"The suspect yanked free and whipped toward the tunnel’s exit, a desperate leap that would have carried him into the next chamber if not for my hand sliding arou…"
26"The glow flickered, casting long, pale shadows that stretched across the floor like fingers."
27"A thin wail of wind teased at the edge of the passage, and a low hum rose up, a chorus of voices that didn’t belong to any living thing I’d ever known."
28"I would have to confront things I did not fully understand and, worst of all, risk losing myself to a place that could rewrite my purpose in a single, merciless…"
29"Then, a sound like a shallow bell, a bell that announced a new cycle in a place that never slept, clanged somewhere above us."
30"The bone token around the suspect’s neck gave a final, patient tinkle and then stilled as if listening to the Market’s next instruction."
31"The suspect moved, and I followed, the Market’s hum rising to a fever pitch as if it anticipated the moment we’d learn something important about ourselves."
32"The suspect reached a final, narrow archway that opened into a courtyard-like space within the subterranean market—an area lit by a ring of weak lamps, each one…"
33"There, at the centre, a platform rose above a shallow pit, and the suspect paused, eyes locked on a figure who waited with quiet, inexorable patience."
34"The figure wore a cloak that seemed woven from night itself and carried the weight of a centuries-long secret."
35"I stepped between the suspect and the platform, the blade in his hand catching the light of the lamps and throwing a short, sharp glimmer across the crowd."
36"The Market thickened, a living fog of aroma and possibility, and the bone token on the suspect’s neck gave a soft, warning chime, a sound that said: doors will …"
37"A trapdoor opened with a stubborn creak above the pit, revealing a rough steel ladder that dropped down into a deeper, darker world below."
38"I shot forward, breaking from the circle of onlookers, and reached for the ladder just as Herrera’s hand closed around my wrist, gripping with a force that told…"
39"The corridor opened into a cavernous, damp hall where the Market’s true machinery lay in wait: crates stacked like a city’s dark skyline, pulsating jars, charms…"
40"The suspect lay on the floor in front of a door that looked like a mouth, the bone token still clutched in his hand, shining with a pale intensity."
41"The suspect turned his head, meeting my eyes with a desperate plea that required no words to convey: spare me the long, slow unraveling of a life that had final…"
42"The suspect’s mouth opened, but no sound came out at first; then he exhaled, a shuddering breath that carried the exhaustion of someone who had fought the wrong…"
43"The Market warmed a fraction, and the two hooded enforcers shifted, their heads tilting toward the suspected answer that hung in the air like smoke."
44"The central chamber’s door slid open with a sound like a sigh, and the space beyond glowed with a mad, green light that suggested the Market was about to reveal…"
45"It was not the kind of figure you’d call a guard or a boss; it was the Market’s own personification, the part of the space that decided who lived and who did no…"
46"Herrera’s breath pressed against my ear, a reminder of the stakes and the costs, the promises and the betrayals we’d signed up for when we chose to chase a man …"
47"The suspect jerked his head toward me as if begging for rescue, then looked back toward the figure with a tremor of realization and fear that this moment had al…"
48"Everything blurred for a moment—the Market’s hum, the ache in my knees, Herrera’s quiet, the suspect’s breath, and the green glow that seemed to drink in the ci…"
49"The last thing I saw before the darkness swallowed us was the suspect’s face, a mask of relief and horror in equal measure, and Herrera steadying himself agains…"
50"And then we were gone, swallowed by the Market’s private machinery, the bone token’s pale light fading as if someone had turned off a lamp in the middle of a ro…"
51"The door behind us snapped shut with a sound like a lock sliding into place, and the Market’s breath steadied, as if waiting for the next move in a game only it…"
17.86% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags28
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"I whispered, the words almost a vow"
1"he said, voice rough, like gravel ground under a boot"
2"he said, eyes never leaving the cloaked figure"
3"he whispered, as if not to be overheard by the Market itself"
4"he said softly, as if to cool the heat of a world that burned too bright for ordinary men"
5"Herrera murmured, and the word carried a weight that wasn’t simply concern"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags26
fancyCount8
fancyTags
0"I muttered (mutter)"
1"it He pressed (press)"
2"I whispered (whisper)"
3"a velvet coat offered (offer)"
4"Herrera hissed (hiss)"
5"he warned (warn)"
6"he whispered (whisper)"
7"Herrera murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.51
leniency1
rawRatio0.308
effectiveRatio0.308
67.4011%