Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTX6NFA234MSMWGWARMRF00

Run Details

Duration:
45.2s
Cost:
$0.038550

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The knife clattered across wet pavement as Tomás Herrera stumbled into the street lamp's amber circle. Blood seeped through the fingers pressed against his shoulder. Detective Harlow Quinn rounded the corner at full sprint, her worn leather boots finding purchase on rain-slicked cobblestones. Her sharp jaw clenched as she spotted him thirty metres ahead, weaving between late-night revellers outside The Raven's Nest. The distinctive green neon sign cast everything in sickly hues. "Stop! Police!" Tomás glanced back, his olive skin pale under the streetlights. The Saint Christopher medallion around his neck caught the light as he pivoted hard left down a narrow alley. Quinn cursed and followed, her military bearing keeping her stride efficient despite the pursuit. The alley led to Camden's maze of side streets. Market stalls sat shuttered for the night, their metal frames creating angular shadows. Quinn's breathing stayed controlled, eighteen years of decorated service keeping her focused. The scar running along Tomás's left forearm had been fresh during their last encounter. Now it looked months old. "Tomás! There's nowhere to go!" He stumbled again, leaving a crimson handprint on a brick wall. Quinn gained ground. Twenty metres. Fifteen. She could hear his laboured breathing now, see the way he favoured his left side. Former paramedic or not, blood loss was blood loss. The rain intensified, drumming against shop awnings and turning the street into a river of reflected streetlights. Quinn's salt-and-pepper hair stayed plastered to her skull, but her brown eyes never wavered from her target. Tomás reached a dead end where construction barriers blocked the street. He spun around, his warm brown eyes darting between Quinn and the barriers. The knife wound in his shoulder had torn wider during the chase. "Unauthorised medical treatment. Practising without a licence. Conspiracy." Quinn advanced slowly, her left hand near her radio. "How many more charges should we add tonight?" "You don't understand what you're interfering with." "Enlighten me." Tomás pressed harder against his wound. "Some things the NHS can't heal. Some patients can't wait for proper channels." "Supernatural patients?" Quinn had read the reports. Heard the whispers in station corridors. Strange cases that got buried. Files that disappeared. "Like whoever gave you that scar?" His fingers twitched toward the medallion. "That scar saved my life. And my patient's." "Your patient tried to kill three people in Whitechapel last month." "Because he wasn't getting treatment!" Blood flecked Tomás's lips. "Because people like you think everything can be solved with handcuffs and paperwork." Quinn's radio crackled. Backup was fifteen minutes out. Too long. She needed answers now, before he bled out or disappeared again. Tomás moved toward the construction barriers. Not away from them. Toward them. "Where do you think you're going?" He smiled, the expression grim. "Somewhere your warrant doesn't reach." The barrier's metal sheeting had been cut. Recently. The edges showed fresh tool marks, and beyond the gap, Quinn glimpsed stone steps descending into darkness. Old stone. Victorian era. The kind that predated modern Camden's street layout. "Underground again?" Quinn's voice carried three years of frustration. Three years since DS Morris had disappeared chasing leads into London's hidden spaces. "Always bloody underground." "Above ground, you have jurisdiction. Down here..." Tomás backed toward the gap. "Different rules apply." Quinn drew her torch, its beam cutting through the rain to illuminate worn steps disappearing into black. The stonework looked official. Maintenance access to old tunnel systems. But the symbols carved into the archway definitely weren't Transport for London standard. "Stop running, Tomás. Let me help." "Help?" He laughed, the sound harsh. "Three years ago, you lost your partner investigating places like this. Did you ever find out what happened to DS Morris?" Quinn's blood went cold. Morris's case file sat locked in her desk drawer. Officially closed. Unofficially haunting her dreams. "How do you know about Morris?" "Because I tried to save him." Tomás pressed his back against the barrier's gap. "He came looking for answers in the Veil Market. Found them too late." The Veil Market. Quinn had heard whispers. An underground bazaar that dealt in impossible things. Moved locations every full moon according to the rumours. Hidden beneath London's forgotten spaces. "Morris is dead?" "Worse than dead." Tomás's voice dropped. "But that's what happens when surface world investigators stumble into places they don't understand." Thunder rolled overhead. The storm was getting worse, turning the alley into a temporary stream. Quinn's boots splashed through ankle-deep water as she advanced. "Then explain it. Help me understand." "Can't. Not here. Not like this." Tomás pulled something from his pocket. Small. White. Carved. "But if you're determined to follow, you'll need this." He tossed the object at Quinn's feet. She crouched to examine it without taking her eyes off him. Bone. Carved with intricate symbols. Still warm to the touch despite the rain. "Admission token," Tomás said. "The Market's open tonight. New moon." He winced as fresh blood seeped between his fingers. "But once you're inside, Detective Quinn, there's no calling for backup. No proper channels. Just survival." Quinn pocketed the bone token. Her radio crackled again. Backup was ten minutes out. Standard procedure said to wait. Establish a perimeter. Call for specialist support. But Morris hadn't followed standard procedure either. And Morris had never come back. "Why help me? Why give me the token?" "Because someone needs to know the truth. About Morris. About what's happening beneath London. About why people like me provide medical care to patients your system can't handle." Tomás stepped backward into the gap. "And because eventually, the surface world is going to collide with what's down here. Better to have one detective who understands than a whole force that doesn't." His footsteps echoed on stone stairs. Getting fainter. Quinn reached the barrier and shone her torch down. The steps curved out of sight after twenty metres, carved from London's bedrock. The symbols on the archway seemed to writhe in the torchlight. Her radio buzzed. Control room asking for status update. Standard response would be suspect fled on foot. Search expanded to surrounding streets. Case file updated. Another dead end. But Morris's ghost whispered in her memory. Three years of unanswered questions. Three years of official silence and unofficial nightmares. Quinn clicked off her radio and stepped through the gap. The bone token grew warmer in her pocket as she descended into London's forgotten depths, following Tomás Herrera toward answers that might destroy everything she thought she knew about her city. Behind her, the storm raged on, washing away their trail and leaving no evidence that Detective Harlow Quinn had chosen the darkness over procedure.
total_cost0.03855

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
91.89% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Quinn advanced slowly [slowly]"
1"Tomás stepped backward [backward]"
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.324
leniency0.649
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.108
95.47% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1103
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
36.54% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1103
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"jaw clenched"
count1
1
word"efficient"
count1
2
word"encounter"
count1
3
word"wavered"
count1
4
word"standard"
count4
5
word"determined"
count1
6
word"intricate"
count1
7
word"footsteps"
count1
8
word"echoed"
count1
9
word"silence"
count1
10
word"depths"
count1
highlights
0"jaw clenched"
1"efficient"
2"encounter"
3"wavered"
4"standard"
5"determined"
6"intricate"
7"footsteps"
8"echoed"
9"silence"
10"depths"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"blood ran cold"
count1
1
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"blood went cold"
1"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences105
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences105
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences130
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1098
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
25.16% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions66
wordCount801
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity2.5
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Tomás14
Herrera2
Harlow2
Quinn20
Raven1
Nest1
Saint1
Christopher1
Camden2
Heard1
Three3
Morris5
London5
Transport1
Veil1
Market2
Thunder1
Small1
Detective2
persons
0"Tomás"
1"Herrera"
2"Harlow"
3"Quinn"
4"Saint"
5"Christopher"
6"Camden"
7"Morris"
8"Thunder"
places
0"Raven"
1"London"
globalScore0.252
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences59
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1098
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences130
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs48
mean22.88
std13.91
cv0.608
sampleLengths
025
147
22
343
453
55
641
734
836
925
107
112
1219
1327
1414
1511
1622
1721
1812
196
2010
2137
2225
2315
2440
256
2627
2719
286
2927
3029
313
3220
3324
346
3524
3631
3735
3826
3913
408
4161
4241
4328
4420
4510
4631
4724
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences105
matches
0"got buried"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs148
matches
0"was getting"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences130
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount806
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount16
adverbRatio0.019851116625310174
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.007444168734491315
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences130
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences130
mean8.45
std6
cv0.71
sampleLengths
016
19
218
319
410
52
610
719
814
99
1013
1112
1214
135
145
1511
163
172
181
1915
209
2117
2217
2311
2413
2512
2617
278
287
292
306
3113
327
336
345
353
366
376
388
3911
409
4113
423
435
442
4511
466
474
482
496
90.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.5538461538461539
totalSentences130
uniqueOpeners72
73.26% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences91
matches
0"Unofficially haunting her dreams."
1"Still warm to the touch"
ratio0.022
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount14
totalSentences91
matches
0"Her sharp jaw clenched as"
1"He stumbled again, leaving a"
2"She could hear his laboured"
3"He spun around, his warm"
4"His fingers twitched toward the"
5"She needed answers now, before"
6"He smiled, the expression grim."
7"He laughed, the sound harsh"
8"He tossed the object at"
9"She crouched to examine it"
10"He winced as fresh blood"
11"Her radio crackled again."
12"His footsteps echoed on stone"
13"Her radio buzzed."
ratio0.154
97.36% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount66
totalSentences91
matches
0"The knife clattered across wet"
1"Blood seeped through the fingers"
2"Detective Harlow Quinn rounded the"
3"Her sharp jaw clenched as"
4"The distinctive green neon sign"
5"Tomás glanced back, his olive"
6"The Saint Christopher medallion around"
7"Quinn cursed and followed, her"
8"The alley led to Camden's"
9"Quinn's breathing stayed controlled, eighteen"
10"The scar running along Tomás's"
11"He stumbled again, leaving a"
12"Quinn gained ground."
13"She could hear his laboured"
14"The rain intensified, drumming against"
15"Quinn's salt-and-pepper hair stayed plastered"
16"Tomás reached a dead end"
17"He spun around, his warm"
18"The knife wound in his"
19"Quinn advanced slowly, her left"
ratio0.725
54.95% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences91
matches
0"Now it looked months old."
ratio0.011
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences30
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Quinn drew her torch, its beam cutting through the rain to illuminate worn steps disappearing into black."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
95.95% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"He laughed (laugh)"
1"Tomás pressed (press)"
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.081
leniency0.162
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.108
90.9077%