Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTX8MVRJYX5DYDK60VFSH98

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1m 37s
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$0.004909
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OpenAI

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

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Boots hammered the slick pavement as he slammed into the tight alley, a shadow shedding rain in a spray of neon reflections. I twisted after him, catching the blur of a hood, the tremor of breath. He spun, foot catching a puddle, and went down into a knee-bend slide that could have mislaid a man twice his size. I lunged, caught the back of his jacket, yanked him upright, and pressed him into the rain-slick brick. “Not today,” I said, voice low, body closing the gap. The city hissed around us, rain bead-music on the metal of fire escapes, but no one else moved. Not yet. He twisted free, hard eyes glinting under hood and shadow. “Quinn.” The word came out soft, almost a dare. “Too late to give up now.” I read him in a heartbeat: someone slick and prepared, the kind who knows he’s being hunted and enjoys the chase more than the outcome. He darted left, the way a fish darts through a current, and I followed. The trench between us filled with the rhythm of rain, the slap of our boots, the murmur of distant traffic. A streetlight blinked; the green neon of a doorway coughed to life somewhere ahead—the Raven’s Nest. The Nest wasn’t just a bar; it was a maze, a memory, a doorway. We hit the street edge where the city’s noise peeled off into narrow lanes. The Nest’s distinctive green neon sign above the entrance seemed to glow brighter as if it hadn’t slept in years. He shoved through the door like a bolt of shadow, and I followed, slipping into the kind of chase that knows every stone, every smell, every sound the city is hiding. Inside, the air changed. Damp and tobacco-sweet, with a scent of old wood and new fears. The Nest held maps on the walls, black-and-white photographs that watched you as you moved, and a silence that waited for someone to break it. The suspect pressed into the back room first, a doorway hidden behind a bookshelf, not a door at all so much as a suggestion of one. Stay sharp. He wants to trap you in a memory, not a room. I knocked the edges of the shelf with a gloved knuckle; a soft click answered, and the shelf shivered, sliding aside to reveal a narrow stair that dropped into darkness. The stairs smelled of damp and something coppery, a hint of old blood or old secrets. The air grew cooler, heavier, as if we’d left a party and entered a private chamber where the clock’s hands are turned backward. Down, down, down. The city’s noise dimmed to a distant drum, the only sound a distant drip, drip, drip. The pulse of the chase sharpened. My wristwatch felt heavier than usual, the leather worn from years of duty; it had taught me to measure time by the rhythm of lungs and footsteps, not minutes on a face. The stair ended in a basement corridor, that same scent of rain-soaked stone seeping through a weak lamp’s halo. He paused, listening for the world above, then pushed forward with a practiced calm. We moved through the Nest’s lower workings—pipes, a maintenance door painted black, a ledger fluttering open on a wooden crate like a mouth trying to tell me something it wasn’t allowed to say. “Not your usual haunt, Quinn,” the suspect whispered, glancing back with that sly, smug smile of his. He knew I’d come. He always did. “Seems your taste for danger matches mine.” “Not a fucking game,” I snapped, though the edge of fear kept skimming my nerves. I was a detective with eighteen years’ decorated service and a partner I’d never properly learned to grieve. I didn’t chase to play; I chased because someone had to stop the drift into the dark. He pivoted into a wider shaft, a tunnel that ran beneath the city’s ribs. A draft breathed through the bricks, carrying a faint metallic tang. He moved fast, the kind of speed that belonged to a man who’d trained in the dark and never blinked. The Nest’s echoing rooms fell away; we pressed into a corridor that felt engineered for constant passage, as if the building itself leaned into the secret. The air grew cooler, then cooler still, until the ceiling arched in a rough curve, like a tunnel carved by the city’s long, careful hands. “Think you’re clever, Harlow?” his voice came from somewhere ahead, a dry rasp that made the air between us feel thinner. “You’re chasing the wrong truths.” I didn’t answer with bravado. I moved, using walls as cover, letting the space tell me more than he did. A cold draft swirled from a vent in the floor, coins of dust dancing in the pale light as I pressed on. The city’s pulse had changed here; it wasn’t a market yet, just a labyrinth of service corridors feeding into something bigger. The sound of our shoes—one heavy boot, one steady sneaker—hammered in a quiet rhythm that could wake the dead in a cellar like this. Then the faintest scent found me: something spicy, something medicinal, something that reminded me of Tomás Herrera—Tomás. The name prickled at the back of my neck, a reminder of the clique’s quiet network of care and complicity. He was a former paramedic who’d moved to London’s shadows after he’d lost his license, after he’d given unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients. He wore a Saint Christopher medallion around his neck, a talisman that once drew him to the light and now clung to the darkness. If the suspect had cornered him here, I wouldn’t pretend innocence would win the day. We turned a corner into a low-ceilinged alcove, a space that wasn’t meant to be seen by eyes that didn’t belong to the right kind of person. The air tasted of iron and rain. In the middle of the corridor stood a heavy door. It wasn’t a door so much as a barrier, a line drawn in the sand. Beyond it lay a world that had learned to survive on whispers and boldness—an underground market where enchanted goods and forbidden alchemical substances moved like breath through a body. I slowed, calculating. The Veil Market sat beneath Camden, moving each full moon from one abandoned tube tunnel to another. The rules were severe: to enter, you needed a bone token, a whispered contract with the city’s hidden economy. The token itself was a thing of bone-white grain, carved with sigils that looked ancient and wise and dangerous all at once. I’d heard of those tokens in rumours and fear and the kind of talk that never saw daylight again. The suspect stepped toward the door, and for a moment I considered nailing him there, in the hallway, where the stale air tasted of damp and fear. Then the glint of metal at his belt caught my eye and I did something I’d learned in the force years ago but hoped never to need again: I studied his feet, the way his knees stayed loose, his breathing kept even. The thing about a chase in unfamiliar territory was not just following but deciding whether to risk the unknown. The shoes on his feet—well worn, reliable—told me he’d done this dance before; the lack of fear in his eyes told me he’d done worse. “Turn the corner with me, Quinn. See what you’re really made of,” he hissed, not daring to look back as he reached for a small, hidden door that had been welded into the wall, a secondary escape that wasn’t visible unless you knew where to look. I caught his ankle, felt his weight teeter, and he slammed a knee into my shin, a skirmish move you don’t forget once you’ve learned it in bad weather and worse streets. He tumbled forward, sprawling into a crouch and pistol in hand, the metal catching the pale light in a glimmer that felt like a promise of blood and blame. But before he could press the trigger, the corridor seemed to tilt, a sign that the gate to the Market might have opened its mouth. “Not there,” I said, grabbing the arm with the gun, flipping him onto his back so his shot would hit the ceiling and ricochet somewhere far from him and me. The weapon clattered away, skittering across damp concrete. He rolled again, and for a moment the look on his face was pure calculation, as if he’d sized me up and found me wanting. Then he scrambled to his feet and bolted toward the door. He didn’t make it. Not before I slammed a shoulder into him, corkscrewing him toward the wall. The door behind the door—if that makes sense—shuddered and slid just enough to reveal a crack of yellowish light, then disappeared into the wall entirely as if the building itself had decided this chase wasn’t for show. “The Veil Market,” I muttered, tasting the word like iron on my tongue. Beneath Camden, the air tasted different—more ancient, older than the bricks, older than the rain. The market wasn’t a place you simply walked into; you learned to listen to the rumours whispering between stalls, to the tremor that ran through the air the moment a new oath was spoken, to the way a token glowed faintly in the dark when danger was near. The suspect hesitated only a heartbeat, eyes darting toward a hidden staircase behind a crate, a path toward a deeper, more dangerous world. A world that moved in time with the full moon, a world where the price of secrets was paid in blood and paper-thin trust. He looked back, as if to measure my resolve, then drew a breath that seemed to pull the cold into his lungs. “This is your last chance, Quinn,” he said, voice tight with edge, a blade of sound. “The Market chooses who walks out in one piece.” I stepped forward, not to threaten but to test, to see if he’d break and tell me what I needed to know. The secretive atmosphere pressed in, and for the first time in a long while I felt the weight of every choice I’d made in the line of duty settle on my shoulders like a cloak that would never come off. “Who are you really running from?” I asked, keeping my voice steady, letting the question ride the air between us like a blade. His response came as a shrug, not a confession. “Not running from you, detective. Running toward something you’ll never understand.” The line of dialogue fell away into a swirl of market noise, the kind that makes you strain to hear the whisper behind a scream. A vendor shouted in a language I almost recognized, the clang of a trinket hitting a wooden counter answering the cry. The market’s walls were lined with stalls selling all manner of enchanted items, a smell of resin, spice, and something sharp and dangerous. The crowd around us moved like a swarm, faceless in the shadows; eyes watched through the plumes of steam and smoke. The market breathed. Behind a curtain of pipework, a narrow corridor opened into a dim parlor of sorts—the kind of intimate ceremony where the clique did its illegal business, where medical care and black market cures finessed into a single dangerous art. A figure dressed in a stained coat leaned over a table, needles and vials arranged with meticulous care, the room perfumed with something antiseptic and metallic. A Saint Christopher medallion flashed against a chest that had learned to lie very still. The name registered in a single flash—Tomás Herrera. He looked up as we entered. The room fell quiet as a church during confession, and then resumed its murmur of whispers, the kind you hear when you’re looking at something you’re not supposed to be looking at. “Detective,” Tomás said softly, a hint of a smile on his lips that didn’t reach his eyes. “I didn’t expect you to follow this far.” He spoke with a quiet certainty, the calm of a man who’d learned to tread through danger without letting it bruise him. “He’s a courier for the clique,” I said, nodding toward the suspect, who stood near the door, eyes flicking between Tomás and me as if the room might dissolve into a trap at any moment. “Where did you get the token?” Tomás’s gaze didn’t waver. “Tokens aren’t handed out; they’re earned. He earned one because he did the thing you’d expect a person to do—protect something you can’t see.” He paused, measuring his next words. “And you? Do you protect what you can’t see, Detective, or do you pretend it isn’t there until it bites you?” The suspect moved again, a quick duck toward the back room beyond the curtain; a scream muffled by a door. Tomás rose, his hands calm, eyes clear as if the rain had washed over him and left him with a bright, clean truth he clung to. “Tomás, what are you doing here?” I asked, keeping the question simple, avoiding any hint of accusation that could shatter the delicate balance in this room. “Helping,” he said, the word heavy with implication. The Saint Christopher medallion glinted under the lamp. “If you’re chasing him into the Market, I’d suggest you be careful which hole you choose to poke. The Market feeds on fear as much as gold.” The suspect lunged again, this time toward a side corridor where crates were stacked like a labyrinth. A cry rose from somewhere in the back, a sound that wasn’t just fear but a plea for mercy, a call to someone who might not answer in time. The suspect disappeared behind a curtain of steam, and the Market seemed to lean closer, listening to the chase as if the entire underground economy held its breath. “Call it in,” I said, but the words came out as a breath held tight in the throat. “Lock down the exits. I’ll handle him.” Tomás stepped closer, a careful, almost affectionate precision in his movements. His voice lowered, a soft rasp that still carried authority. “You’re not a killer, Detective. You’re a hunter. It’s different.” The words pried at me, but I refused to let that truth loosen my grip. I moved through the market with a purpose that felt like a weapon in itself, a steady, unrelenting pace that knew where it was going even when the lights flickered and a vendor’s bells clanged in the distance. The Market’s denizens paid us no mind and everyone paid a price. The air hummed with a quiet electricity, the kind that prickles at the back of the neck and makes your skin crawl with the memory of danger you’ve yet to face. I caught a glint of something metallic—the suspect’s bootheel tapping in a hollow rhythm at the threshold of another door. A whisper of a new doorway behind crates suggested an exit, but it wasn’t an exit in the sense a normal person might understand. It was a breach, a passage of sorts that led to a deeper, darker tunnel than the one we had left behind—a route that would take us to a place where the Market’s rules were written in blood, not in ink. “Quinn,” Tomás murmured, stepping closer. He didn’t sound like a man who was about to offer help. He sounded like a man who understood how fragile the balance could be in a place like this. “This world—he’s not just selling things. He’s selling a future, a piece of the city you won’t be able to reclaim if you chase him where you’ll only get lost.” The words settled in me with a cold weight. The Market was a living thing, a creature with teeth made of bone and scales of glass and whispers; it didn’t care about the police or the rules of the surface. It moved where it pleased, crossing into the light when it wished and retreating to the dark when it needed to hide its secrets. The suspect paused at a narrow gate, a place where wind curled like a cat through a corridor that smelled of resin and something older, something almost primed with ritual. He peered over his shoulder, meeting my eyes with a challenge that didn’t pretend to be anything other than a warning. “Time’s up, Quinn,” he breathed, that same hard edge returning to his voice. “You’ve walked into a living thing you don’t understand, and now you’re going to learn what it can do to you.” The gate behind him hummed, a low, tired sound that reminded me of the city’s heartbeat during a long night when a storm is about to break. The token wasn’t just a key; it was a symbol of choice—the choice to step beyond knowledge into something else entirely. My hand found the bone token in my pocket—the thing I’d never imagined using, the thing I’d hoped would stay where it belonged, in the hands of the people who understood its power. It wasn’t mine, not originally. It was the Market’s currency, its way of sealing an oath in a world where oaths held meaning only when fear kept them honest. Tomás moved with the quiet grace of someone who had spent years navigating a maze of miracles and misdemeanours. He touched the Saint Christopher medallion with a thumb, then looked up at me with eyes that had seen far more than a city deserves. “Use what you have,” he said, his voice soft but clear. “Not for vengeance, detective. For protection. For them.” He gestured toward a shadowed corner where a narrow stair led up into the darkness, a cradle of secrets. It was a reckless choice, to chase through a place that could swallow you whole, but I’d spent eighteen years chasing the truth through doors that were kept shut for a reason. The Market wouldn’t reveal its worst secrets if I stood outside and talked about how brave I was. I stepped toward the gate, eyes locked on the suspect. The crowd pressed closer, their whispers turning into a chorus. A vendor’s laugh, sharp as a knife, cut through the murmur, and the suspect’s shoulders tensed as if accepting the final push from a world that would not let him go. “Show me what you’re willing to lose,” I said, not shouting but letting the words land where they would. The Market didn’t sparkle with glamour here; it breathed with something darker, more intimate. The bone token’s runes warmed against my skin, a small flame in a storm. The suspect started to slip through the gate, the bone token’s sigils leaning toward him as if approving his pass. The barrier glowed a pale, sickly green, the colour of old things waking. The crowd’s breath caught; the room smelled of fear and money and something else—the possibility of power slipping from people’s hands into the world’s claws. The moment stretched, a thread about to snap. I moved, not with the desperate rush of the chase but with the measured, efficient violence that made up the long hours of my career. A side door opened, a shaft of light spilling across crates, and a figure stepped into view behind the suspect—Tomás, his medallion catching a glimmer of whatever provided a friend in this shadowed quarter. “Not him,” Tomás said, voice calm but edged with a warning that meant more than words could spell out. The suspect glanced back and realised he wasn’t alone; the game had changed. The Market’s whispers swelled into a chorus and then a scream, a sound that seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere at once. I didn’t hesitate. The token hum grew louder, a pulse racing through my bones, and I moved to intercept. The suspect twisted, a practiced grace, and went for a feint past a stall that sold chimerical trinkets, a place where a girl could sell her dreams and a man might buy them back with interest. The Market’s denizens circled like fish, watching, waiting, counting on the moment when fear would become currency. “Quinn,” the suspect hissed as I closed the distance, his breath rancid with fear and bravado. “You can keep your badge, but you’ll never leave this place clean.” “Keep talking,” I said, every fibre taut, every sense straining for a crack in the Market’s armor. The chase surged into a tunnel deeper than any street known to daylight; a corridor where crates leaned against walls like lean, patient sentinels and the air hummed with a low, vibrating sound—like a heart trying to keep a cruel secret beating. The tunnel opened into a vast space that was part auction house, part sanctuary, part trap. The Market breathed again here, alive with the soft glow of enchantments and the cold gleam of copper coins stacked in a pyramid of guilt and desire. The suspect stumbled into a half-light chamber where a row of stalls faced a makeshift stage, the kind of place where a whispered deal might become a permanent scar. The Market’s power was in its ability to test one’s courage, to show you what you would do when the price of your choice rose with every breath. “Hide,” Tomás said, not to me but to the other people in the room, the ones who would be forced to take sides the moment the chimes of the full moon began to ring in the air beyond. He touched the Saint Christopher medallion again, and the air in the room shifted, cooled, softened, as if a part of the Market obeyed him in this moment and not the one who was chasing. The suspect turned toward me with a cold grin, a weapon of some sort clutched in his right hand. He stepped back, and a door—the Market’s trap—slid shut behind him with a dry, decisive sound. The room flickered, the lights strobing as if the building itself were considering whether to collapse this night or spare us for the moment. “Give it up, you little ghost,” he said, the words slurring with fear and pride in equal measure. His finger trembled on the trigger; the hammer clicked harmlessly, a warning shot that spoke of intention rather than consequence. I stepped closer, my own breath steady, my heart a steady drum that refused to surrender. The bone token I carried felt heavier, more insistent, a reminder of the line between law and the Market’s savage justice. The suspect lunged, and I moved, a practiced fork of steel and sinew, catching his arm in a tight grip, twisting him toward me with a clinician’s precision, squeezing the weapon from his fingers and sending it clattering across the crate-strewn floor. Tomás watched from the shadows, calm as a man who understood the tide’s turn but did not fear the flood. The Market hissed, then settled, as if satisfied by the small taste of violence it had just witnessed and ready to deal again with any who dared to meddle with its chemistry. “Drop it,” I said, not shouting but letting the words carry the force of experience. “You’re done here.” The suspect’s eyes flickered, a final defiance that said more than a confession could. He dropped to his knees, defeated, eyes adjusting to the dim glow of the Market’s lamplight, the shadows around us stretching like dark, obedient animals. Behind me, the Market’s crowd shifted; a couple of vendors wove through the stalls, their faces half-lit by the glow of talismans and the shimmer of charms that blurred the line between magic and memory. The air tasted of wet stone and copper, of rain and risk, of lives bought with lies and paid for in fear. Tomás stepped forward, his hands up, palms open as if to show he carried no weapon but truth. “It ends here,” he said softly, with that quiet certainty that had kept him alive in this city’s many shadows. “You’re not the first to think you could outpace the Market, Detective. You won’t be the last. But you can walk away from this room with your head intact.” “I don’t walk away from the truth,” I replied, keeping my tone low, controlled, careful. The truth, in this case, was that the Market’s power wasn’t something I could simply erase with a badge or a heavy boot. It would outlive me and outlive the suspect. It would endure long after we left this chamber with the record of tonight’s violence tucked away in a drawer of the city’s memory. The suspect’s body remained rigid in its surrender, a shell of a man who’d learned to harness fear and wield it as if fear were a weapon and he its master. The crowd around us exhaled as if relieved, or as if they’d merely found a new anchor to cling to in this world of shifting loyalties and hidden doors. The gate behind us hummed again, a warning and a whisper that we were not done. The Market wasn’t finished with us; it was merely pausing, sorting its next choices, waiting for a new moon to tilt the balance in its favour. I stepped closer to Tomás, closer to the suspect, closer still to the Market’s breath of ancient magic and modern greed. The token’s glow pulsed against my palm, a slow heartbeat that reminded me of someone else’s life out there somewhere—the partner I’d lost, the life I’d saved, the line I still walked. “Leverage the truth, not the fear,” Tomás said, lower now, more intimate, as if he hoped I’d hear him through the Market’s murmur. “And if you must choose, choose to protect those who can’t protect themselves.” The suspect’s eyes flicked toward the door that had sealed us in, toward the passage that would lead back up into the rain and the city’s indifferent glare. He swallowed, a sound almost obscene in the calm that followed violence. “Turn the tide, Harlow,” he whispered, a last blade of intent. “Turn it now, or the Market will turn you into a story you tell yourself to sleep at night.” I looked from his pale, determined face to Tomás’s calm mask, to the glow of the token in my hand, to the crowd that watched us like a jury. The street’s rain had cooled, the neon lights flickered like a heartbeat, and somewhere above us the city kept breathing—uno, dos, tres—counting the seconds until the full moon would push the Market into a new chamber of its labyrinth. I knew the decision I would make would sting forever, but it would be mine to own. I stepped away from the suspect, keeping him within arm’s reach but now clearly on the wrong side of the Market’s gravity. The moment stretched thin and taut, every edge sharpened by danger, every shadow a potential ally or a trap. The Bone Token’s faint glow thrummed in my hand, a sly, patient beacon. “Quinn,” the suspect breathed, voice flatter, almost bored with the end of the chase. “This isn’t over.” I didn’t dignify him with a reply. I raised the token and pressed it toward the gate’s sigils, watching as the runes blurred and then sharpened, as if the token itself was singing a quiet, dangerous note that only this place could hear. The barrier wavered, a shimmer of light, and then solidified again, the gate a stubborn, silent wall between us. Tomás stepped into the light, eyes meeting mine with a clear, practical ruthlessness. “If you follow him, you enter a room where the rules aren’t yours. If you pull him back, you might pull your world apart in the process.” The crowd shifted, the Market’s pulse intensifying as it absorbed the moment like heat takes to metal. The suspect raised his head, a half-smile edged with bitterness, and then he lunged again, not at me but toward the passage that promised a way out, a pathway deeper into the Market’s sanctuaries where the clique’s power—its medicine, its lies, its bargains—thrived. The floor trembled beneath us, a distant rumble like a train’s long sigh through tunnels of stone. A shaft of light lanced from the ceiling, a sign perhaps of the Market’s own interest in this confrontation. And suddenly, with the crowd’s collective breath held, something within the Market shifted—whether by intention or accident I couldn’t tell—and the room’s quiet erupted into a chorus of startled yells, clattering crates, and the obscene clink of metal as weapons found new hands. The suspect’s final move came in a surge of desperate speed, his form ghosting through the crowd toward the back of the chamber, toward a passage that would spit him out into the chaos of a different night. I lunged, catching him at the shoulder, drawing him back into the middle of the space where Tomás stood, where the Market’s lights flickered and the token’s glow grew stronger, not weaker, as if feeding on his fear and mine. The moment felt suspended, a thread pulling tight between two fates. Then the lights failed with a thunderous pop, plunging us into a darkness so absolute I could sense every breath, every heartbeat, every plan I’d made since I first put on my badge. The Market’s cry rose around us, a thousand whispered bargains seeking a new owner, a new victim, a new witness. Somewhere above, a window into the rain’s night closed with a soft, final thud. The suspect’s shape vanished behind the cascade of crates, and Tomás’s voice came again, steady and close. “Choose now, Detective. Before the Market makes your choice for you.” I inched closer to the gate, the token’s glow burning through my glove, the air prickling with something ancient and hungry. The Market’s breath pressed against me, cold and intimate, as if it wanted to keep me, to claim me, to teach me a lesson in fear and power that would go far beyond this chase. The last thing I saw before the world exploded into a storm of sparks and sound was the suspect’s eyes, bright with triumph or terror I couldn’t tell which, and the green glow of the Market’s sigils, a living thing lighting up the hollow of this night. Then the crate fell, the tunnel shook, and the subterranean city shifted its weight like a colossal creature waking up from a centuries-long sleep. We were in the middle of a decision that mattered more than the matter of a single chase. The Market wasn’t a backdrop anymore; it was a participant, a collaborator, a judge. And I was about to learn what it would demand from me when the rain finally, finally began to fall in earnest again, washing away the chalky dust of a room soaked in secrets. A scream ripped through the chamber, not from the suspect but from somewhere beyond the crates, somewhere roped into a different story within the Market’s many rooms. It didn’t belong to me or Tomás or the suspect. It belonged to the Market’s own ledger of lives—an accounting of fear, of debts owed, of fates exchanged. And just as I steadied my breath, just as I prepared to decide whether to push forward or retreat into the familiar shadows of the surface, the ground gave a final, brutal sigh, and the scene collapsed into chaos. I tightened my grip on the bone token, stepped into the glimmering fog that now filled the tunnel, and moved toward the sound of the struggling cry. The Market’s world swept closer, its many doors creaking open as if inviting me to test a new boundary. Shouts, the rattle of metal, a boot slipping on slick stone, and then, suddenly, a heavy silence that felt like a trap closing. The aftertaste of rain, copper, and old wood filled my mouth. Tomás’s voice spoke again, but softer, closer, as if he stood at my shoulder and not in the dark: “Harlow, the Market has answers, but they aren’t answers you want to hear.” I did not glance back. I stepped forward, deeper into the Market, toward whatever its next move would demand of us all. The gate’s light pulsed once, twice, and then stuttered into a feeble glow as if the Market itself was drawing breath, preparing to exhale a future none of us could predict. The chase ended not with a confession but with a choice—follow into the unknown, or hold, and risk losing him to a place where the Rules were written in bone and the truth wore a veil you could never lift. Tonight, the rain would not provide mercy. Tonight, we would have to learn what mercy cost. And as the Market girded itself for what came next, I stepped through the glow and into the uncertain night, ready to see what the world would demand of me when the Market decided who deserved to walk out alive.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags33
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"Tomás said softly [softly]"
1"he said softly [softly]"
2"Tomás’s voice spoke again [again]"
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.611
leniency1
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.091
93.67% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount5532
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"really"
count2
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count2
3
adverb"suddenly"
count2
highlights
0"really"
1"very"
2"softly"
3"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
56.62% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount5532
totalAiIsms48
found
0
word"glinting"
count1
1
word"silence"
count2
2
word"pulse"
count4
3
word"footsteps"
count1
4
word"echoing"
count1
5
word"dancing"
count1
6
word"reminder"
count2
7
word"calculating"
count1
8
word"glint"
count2
9
word"dance"
count1
10
word"weight"
count4
11
word"resolve"
count1
12
word"whisper"
count3
13
word"implication"
count1
14
word"flickered"
count5
15
word"navigating"
count1
16
word"measured"
count1
17
word"efficient"
count1
18
word"racing"
count1
19
word"sentinels"
count1
20
word"sanctuary"
count1
21
word"desire"
count1
22
word"trembled"
count2
23
word"pulsed"
count2
24
word"flicked"
count1
25
word"determined"
count1
26
word"potential"
count1
27
word"beacon"
count1
28
word"wavered"
count1
29
word"the last thing"
count1
30
word"familiar"
count1
highlights
0"glinting"
1"silence"
2"pulse"
3"footsteps"
4"echoing"
5"dancing"
6"reminder"
7"calculating"
8"glint"
9"dance"
10"weight"
11"resolve"
12"whisper"
13"implication"
14"flickered"
15"navigating"
16"measured"
17"efficient"
18"racing"
19"sentinels"
20"sanctuary"
21"desire"
22"trembled"
23"pulsed"
24"flicked"
25"determined"
26"potential"
27"beacon"
28"wavered"
29"the last thing"
30"familiar"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"room fell silent"
count1
highlights
0"The room fell quiet"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells4
narrationSentences250
matches
0"d with fear"
1"g with fear"
2"r in fear"
3"n in fear"
80.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount9
narrationSentences250
filterMatches
0"feel"
1"hear"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tend to"
2"started to"
3"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences271
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen48
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords5485
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions54
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions91
wordCount5031
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity0.83
worstName"Market"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Tomás"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest6
Tomás23
Herrera2
London1
Saint5
Christopher5
Veil1
Market42
Camden2
Bone1
Token1
Rules1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Tomás"
3"Herrera"
4"Saint"
5"Christopher"
6"Market"
7"Camden"
8"Token"
places
0"London"
1"Bone"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
43.62% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences235
glossingSentenceCount10
matches
0"felt like a promise of blood and blame"
1"breath that seemed to pull the cold into his lungs"
2"felt like a weapon in itself, a steady"
3"sounded like a man who understood how frag"
4"as if accepting the final push from a world that would not let him go"
5"as if approving his pass"
6"sound that seemed to come from everywhere and nowhere at once"
7"as if feeding on his fear and mine"
8"as if inviting me to test a new boundary"
9"felt like a trap closing"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches12
per1kWords2.188
wordCount5485
matches
0"not just following but deciding whether to risk the unknown"
1"not to threaten but to test, to see if he’d break"
2"not shouting but letting the words land"
3"not with the desperate rush of the chase but with the measured, efficient violence"
4"Not him,” Tomás said, voice calm but edged with a warning"
5"not to me but to the other people in the room, the ones who would be force"
6"not shouting but letting the words carry the force of experience"
7"no weapon but"
8"not at me but toward the passage"
9"not from the suspect but from somewhere beyond the crates, somewhere roped into a dif"
10"not in the dark: “Harlow, the Market has answers, but they aren’t answers you want to hear"
11"not with a confession but with a choice"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences271
matches
0"let that truth"
1"was that the"
70.92% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs96
mean57.14
std22.75
cv0.398
sampleLengths
076
130
225
389
465
567
613
769
857
966
1031
1150
1245
1351
1426
1587
1699
1788
1880
19113
2046
2186
2274
2354
2476
2569
2625
2762
2823
2920
3093
3188
3238
3347
3441
3555
3646
3726
3843
3974
4025
4131
4296
4385
4465
4564
4651
4734
48110
4944
91.23% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount10
totalSentences250
matches
0"being hunted"
1"are turned"
2"been welded"
3"was spoken"
4"was paid"
5"were lined"
6"were stacked"
7"were written"
8"were kept"
9"were written"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs805
matches
0"was going"
1"was chasing"
2"were considering"
3"was singing"
4"was drawing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount31
semicolonCount22
flaggedSentences41
totalSentences271
ratio0.151
matches
0"A streetlight blinked; the green neon of a doorway coughed to life somewhere ahead—the Raven’s Nest."
1"The Nest wasn’t just a bar; it was a maze, a memory, a doorway."
2"I knocked the edges of the shelf with a gloved knuckle; a soft click answered, and the shelf shivered, sliding aside to reveal a narrow stair that dropped into darkness."
3"My wristwatch felt heavier than usual, the leather worn from years of duty; it had taught me to measure time by the rhythm of lungs and footsteps, not minutes on a face."
4"We moved through the Nest’s lower workings—pipes, a maintenance door painted black, a ledger fluttering open on a wooden crate like a mouth trying to tell me something it wasn’t allowed to say."
5"I didn’t chase to play; I chased because someone had to stop the drift into the dark."
6"The Nest’s echoing rooms fell away; we pressed into a corridor that felt engineered for constant passage, as if the building itself leaned into the secret."
7"The city’s pulse had changed here; it wasn’t a market yet, just a labyrinth of service corridors feeding into something bigger."
8"The sound of our shoes—one heavy boot, one steady sneaker—hammered in a quiet rhythm that could wake the dead in a cellar like this."
9"Then the faintest scent found me: something spicy, something medicinal, something that reminded me of Tomás Herrera—Tomás."
10"Beyond it lay a world that had learned to survive on whispers and boldness—an underground market where enchanted goods and forbidden alchemical substances moved like breath through a body."
11"The shoes on his feet—well worn, reliable—told me he’d done this dance before; the lack of fear in his eyes told me he’d done worse."
12"The door behind the door—if that makes sense—shuddered and slid just enough to reveal a crack of yellowish light, then disappeared into the wall entirely as if the building itself had decided this chase wasn’t for show."
13"Beneath Camden, the air tasted different—more ancient, older than the bricks, older than the rain."
14"The market wasn’t a place you simply walked into; you learned to listen to the rumours whispering between stalls, to the tremor that ran through the air the moment a new oath was spoken, to the way a token glowed faintly in the dark when danger was near."
15"The crowd around us moved like a swarm, faceless in the shadows; eyes watched through the plumes of steam and smoke."
16"Behind a curtain of pipework, a narrow corridor opened into a dim parlor of sorts—the kind of intimate ceremony where the clique did its illegal business, where medical care and black market cures finessed into a single dangerous art."
17"The name registered in a single flash—Tomás Herrera."
18"“Tokens aren’t handed out; they’re earned. He earned one because he did the thing you’d expect a person to do—protect something you can’t see.” He paused, measuring his next words."
19"The suspect moved again, a quick duck toward the back room beyond the curtain; a scream muffled by a door."
20"I caught a glint of something metallic—the suspect’s bootheel tapping in a hollow rhythm at the threshold of another door."
21"It was a breach, a passage of sorts that led to a deeper, darker tunnel than the one we had left behind—a route that would take us to a place where the Market’s rules were written in blood, not in ink."
22"The Market was a living thing, a creature with teeth made of bone and scales of glass and whispers; it didn’t care about the police or the rules of the surface."
23"The token wasn’t just a key; it was a symbol of choice—the choice to step beyond knowledge into something else entirely."
24"My hand found the bone token in my pocket—the thing I’d never imagined using, the thing I’d hoped would stay where it belonged, in the hands of the people who understood its power."
25"The Market didn’t sparkle with glamour here; it breathed with something darker, more intimate."
26"The crowd’s breath caught; the room smelled of fear and money and something else—the possibility of power slipping from people’s hands into the world’s claws."
27"A side door opened, a shaft of light spilling across crates, and a figure stepped into view behind the suspect—Tomás, his medallion catching a glimmer of whatever provided a friend in this shadowed quarter."
28"The suspect glanced back and realised he wasn’t alone; the game had changed."
29"The chase surged into a tunnel deeper than any street known to daylight; a corridor where crates leaned against walls like lean, patient sentinels and the air hummed with a low, vibrating sound—like a heart trying to keep a cruel secret beating."
30"He stepped back, and a door—the Market’s trap—slid shut behind him with a dry, decisive sound."
31"His finger trembled on the trigger; the hammer clicked harmlessly, a warning shot that spoke of intention rather than consequence."
32"Behind me, the Market’s crowd shifted; a couple of vendors wove through the stalls, their faces half-lit by the glow of talismans and the shimmer of charms that blurred the line between magic and memory."
33"The Market wasn’t finished with us; it was merely pausing, sorting its next choices, waiting for a new moon to tilt the balance in its favour."
34"The token’s glow pulsed against my palm, a slow heartbeat that reminded me of someone else’s life out there somewhere—the partner I’d lost, the life I’d saved, the line I still walked."
35"The street’s rain had cooled, the neon lights flickered like a heartbeat, and somewhere above us the city kept breathing—uno, dos, tres—counting the seconds until the full moon would push the Market into a new chamber of its labyrinth."
36"The suspect raised his head, a half-smile edged with bitterness, and then he lunged again, not at me but toward the passage that promised a way out, a pathway deeper into the Market’s sanctuaries where the clique’s power—its medicine, its lies, its bargains—thrived."
37"And suddenly, with the crowd’s collective breath held, something within the Market shifted—whether by intention or accident I couldn’t tell—and the room’s quiet erupted into a chorus of startled yells, clattering crates, and the obscene clink of metal as weapons found new hands."
38"The Market wasn’t a backdrop anymore; it was a participant, a collaborator, a judge."
39"It belonged to the Market’s own ledger of lives—an accounting of fear, of debts owed, of fates exchanged."
40"The chase ended not with a confession but with a choice—follow into the unknown, or hold, and risk losing him to a place where the Rules were written in bone and the truth wore a veil you could never lift."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount922
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount21
adverbRatio0.0227765726681128
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.005422993492407809
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences271
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences271
mean20.24
std9.98
cv0.493
sampleLengths
022
114
222
318
410
518
62
710
89
96
1025
1114
1220
1316
1414
1514
1620
1731
184
1912
2025
2126
222
2311
2430
2516
2623
273
2816
296
3032
3119
3214
3333
3417
354
363
377
3815
3918
4017
4114
4211
4320
4426
4525
4621
475
485
4915
31.18% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats51
diversityRatio0.18081180811808117
totalSentences271
uniqueOpeners49
80.65% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount6
totalSentences248
matches
0"Then the faintest scent found"
1"Then the glint of metal"
2"Then he scrambled to his"
3"Then the lights failed with"
4"Somewhere above, a window into"
5"Then the crate fell, the"
ratio0.024
63.55% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount97
totalSentences248
matches
0"I twisted after him, catching"
1"He spun, foot catching a"
2"I lunged, caught the back"
3"I said, voice low, body"
4"He twisted free, hard eyes"
5"I read him in a"
6"He darted left, the way"
7"We hit the street edge"
8"He shoved through the door"
9"He wants to trap you"
10"I knocked the edges of"
11"My wristwatch felt heavier than"
12"He paused, listening for the"
13"We moved through the Nest’s"
14"He knew I’d come."
15"He always did."
16"I snapped, though the edge"
17"I was a detective with"
18"I didn’t chase to play;"
19"He pivoted into a wider"
ratio0.391
4.35% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount226
totalSentences248
matches
0"Boots hammered the slick pavement"
1"I twisted after him, catching"
2"He spun, foot catching a"
3"I lunged, caught the back"
4"I said, voice low, body"
5"The city hissed around us,"
6"He twisted free, hard eyes"
7"The word came out soft,"
8"I read him in a"
9"He darted left, the way"
10"The trench between us filled"
11"A streetlight blinked; the green"
12"The Nest wasn’t just a"
13"We hit the street edge"
14"The Nest’s distinctive green neon"
15"He shoved through the door"
16"The Nest held maps on"
17"The suspect pressed into the"
18"He wants to trap you"
19"I knocked the edges of"
ratio0.911
20.16% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences248
matches
0"If the suspect had cornered"
ratio0.004
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences189
technicalSentenceCount43
matches
0"The Nest’s distinctive green neon sign above the entrance seemed to glow brighter as if it hadn’t slept in years."
1"He shoved through the door like a bolt of shadow, and I followed, slipping into the kind of chase that knows every stone, every smell, every sound the city is h…"
2"The Nest held maps on the walls, black-and-white photographs that watched you as you moved, and a silence that waited for someone to break it."
3"The Nest’s echoing rooms fell away; we pressed into a corridor that felt engineered for constant passage, as if the building itself leaned into the secret."
4"The sound of our shoes—one heavy boot, one steady sneaker—hammered in a quiet rhythm that could wake the dead in a cellar like this."
5"Then the faintest scent found me: something spicy, something medicinal, something that reminded me of Tomás Herrera—Tomás."
6"We turned a corner into a low-ceilinged alcove, a space that wasn’t meant to be seen by eyes that didn’t belong to the right kind of person."
7"Beyond it lay a world that had learned to survive on whispers and boldness—an underground market where enchanted goods and forbidden alchemical substances moved…"
8"The token itself was a thing of bone-white grain, carved with sigils that looked ancient and wise and dangerous all at once."
9"He tumbled forward, sprawling into a crouch and pistol in hand, the metal catching the pale light in a glimmer that felt like a promise of blood and blame."
10"The door behind the door—if that makes sense—shuddered and slid just enough to reveal a crack of yellowish light, then disappeared into the wall entirely as if …"
11"The secretive atmosphere pressed in, and for the first time in a long while I felt the weight of every choice I’d made in the line of duty settle on my shoulder…"
12"The line of dialogue fell away into a swirl of market noise, the kind that makes you strain to hear the whisper behind a scream."
13"A Saint Christopher medallion flashed against a chest that had learned to lie very still."
14"The suspect disappeared behind a curtain of steam, and the Market seemed to lean closer, listening to the chase as if the entire underground economy held its br…"
15"I moved through the market with a purpose that felt like a weapon in itself, a steady, unrelenting pace that knew where it was going even when the lights flicke…"
16"The suspect paused at a narrow gate, a place where wind curled like a cat through a corridor that smelled of resin and something older, something almost primed …"
17"He peered over his shoulder, meeting my eyes with a challenge that didn’t pretend to be anything other than a warning."
18"The gate behind him hummed, a low, tired sound that reminded me of the city’s heartbeat during a long night when a storm is about to break."
19"My hand found the bone token in my pocket—the thing I’d never imagined using, the thing I’d hoped would stay where it belonged, in the hands of the people who u…"
20"Tomás moved with the quiet grace of someone who had spent years navigating a maze of miracles and misdemeanours."
21"A vendor’s laugh, sharp as a knife, cut through the murmur, and the suspect’s shoulders tensed as if accepting the final push from a world that would not let hi…"
22"The suspect started to slip through the gate, the bone token’s sigils leaning toward him as if approving his pass."
23"A side door opened, a shaft of light spilling across crates, and a figure stepped into view behind the suspect—Tomás, his medallion catching a glimmer of whatev…"
24"The suspect twisted, a practiced grace, and went for a feint past a stall that sold chimerical trinkets, a place where a girl could sell her dreams and a man mi…"
25"The tunnel opened into a vast space that was part auction house, part sanctuary, part trap."
26"The room flickered, the lights strobing as if the building itself were considering whether to collapse this night or spare us for the moment."
27"I stepped closer, my own breath steady, my heart a steady drum that refused to surrender."
28"The suspect lunged, and I moved, a practiced fork of steel and sinew, catching his arm in a tight grip, twisting him toward me with a clinician’s precision, squ…"
29"The Market hissed, then settled, as if satisfied by the small taste of violence it had just witnessed and ready to deal again with any who dared to meddle with …"
30"The suspect’s eyes flickered, a final defiance that said more than a confession could."
31"Behind me, the Market’s crowd shifted; a couple of vendors wove through the stalls, their faces half-lit by the glow of talismans and the shimmer of charms that…"
32"Tomás stepped forward, his hands up, palms open as if to show he carried no weapon but truth."
33"The token’s glow pulsed against my palm, a slow heartbeat that reminded me of someone else’s life out there somewhere—the partner I’d lost, the life I’d saved, …"
34"I raised the token and pressed it toward the gate’s sigils, watching as the runes blurred and then sharpened, as if the token itself was singing a quiet, danger…"
35"The suspect raised his head, a half-smile edged with bitterness, and then he lunged again, not at me but toward the passage that promised a way out, a pathway d…"
36"The suspect’s final move came in a surge of desperate speed, his form ghosting through the crowd toward the back of the chamber, toward a passage that would spi…"
37"I lunged, catching him at the shoulder, drawing him back into the middle of the space where Tomás stood, where the Market’s lights flickered and the token’s glo…"
38"I inched closer to the gate, the token’s glow burning through my glove, the air prickling with something ancient and hungry."
39"The Market’s breath pressed against me, cold and intimate, as if it wanted to keep me, to claim me, to teach me a lesson in fear and power that would go far bey…"
40"The Market’s world swept closer, its many doors creaking open as if inviting me to test a new boundary."
41"Shouts, the rattle of metal, a boot slipping on slick stone, and then, suddenly, a heavy silence that felt like a trap closing."
42"The gate’s light pulsed once, twice, and then stuttered into a feeble glow as if the Market itself was drawing breath, preparing to exhale a future none of us c…"
34.09% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags33
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"I said, voice low, body closing the gap"
1"he said, voice tight with edge, a blade of sound"
2"I said, but the words came out as a breath held tight in the throat"
3"he said, his voice soft but clear"
4"I said, not shouting but letting the words land where they would"
5"he said, the words slurring with fear and pride in equal measure"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags30
fancyCount11
fancyTags
0"the suspect whispered (whisper)"
1"I snapped (snap)"
2"he hissed (hiss)"
3"I muttered (mutter)"
4"He spoke (speak)"
5"Tomás murmured (murmur)"
6"he breathed (breathe)"
7"I closed (close)"
8"he whispered (whisper)"
9"the suspect breathed (breathe)"
10"Tomás’s voice spoke again (speak)"
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.556
leniency1
rawRatio0.367
effectiveRatio0.367
68.4456%