Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTXM30RPDY7WR4PHZ7JVQ48

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Duration:
47.3s
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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The pavement exploded in shards of glass as Detective Harlow Quinn threw herself behind a parked Transit van. Three seconds later, she heard the distinctive crack of another bottle hitting brick where her head had been. "Bloody hell," she muttered, rain streaming down her sharp jaw. The suspect, a wiry bloke in a torn leather jacket, had already put fifty metres between them and was sprinting toward Camden Lock. Quinn rolled to her feet and gave chase, her worn leather watch catching the amber glow of streetlights as she pumped her arms. Eighteen years on the force had taught her to read a runner's body language. This one wasn't panicking. He had a destination. The narrow cobblestone streets of Camden twisted like arteries through the night, slick with rain that turned every surface into a potential hazard. Quinn's boots found purchase on stone worn smooth by centuries of foot traffic, her military bearing keeping her balanced as she navigated puddles that reflected the neon signs of late-night takeaways and closed market stalls. Her quarry darted left into a passage barely wide enough for two people. Quinn followed, shoulder scraping against damp brick that smelled of decades of piss and desperation. The alley opened onto the main market area, where empty stalls stood like skeletons under the orange sodium lights. The suspect vaulted a wooden barrier with practiced ease. Too practiced. Quinn cleared it seconds later, catching sight of movement near the old railway bridge. She'd worked these streets long enough to know every legitimate hiding spot, every emergency exit, every place a desperate criminal might bolt for sanctuary. This wasn't heading toward any of them. "Stop! Police!" The leather jacket disappeared around a corner that shouldn't have existed. Quinn reached the spot and found herself staring at what appeared to be a solid brick wall. Her fingers traced the mortar, finding the hairline crack that revealed the illusion. A hidden door, perfectly camouflaged. The kind of entrance that spoke of money, planning, and reasons to stay invisible. The metallic taste of adrenaline filled her mouth. Three years ago, DS Morris had followed a suspect into a similar hidden entrance in Whitechapel. They'd found his body a week later, drained of blood, with symbols carved into his chest that the coroner couldn't explain and the case files mysteriously reclassified. The door stood slightly ajar. An invitation or a trap. Quinn drew her asp baton, the familiar weight solid in her palm. The rain had turned from drizzle to downpour, hammering the corrugated metal roof of a nearby market stall like machine gun fire. It would mask any sounds from whatever lay beyond the threshold. She pressed her ear to the gap. Voices. Multiple speakers, though the words remained indistinct. The suspect's breathing should have been ragged from the chase, but she heard nothing that suggested exhaustion. Either he was in remarkable shape, or he'd found friends. A new sound drifted up from below. The unmistakable clink of money changing hands. Lots of money, judging by the volume. Her phone buzzed. Text from the station: "Quinn - surveillance lost contact with UC Davis two hours ago. Last known location Camden Market. Approach with caution." Undercover Davis. The rookie she'd warned about taking chances, about following leads that felt too convenient, about underground markets that appeared and disappeared like smoke. The kid who reminded her too much of Morris before that final case went sideways. The voices below grew louder. She caught fragments now. Something about bone tokens and full moon schedules. The kind of coded language that drug dealers used when they thought they were being clever, except this terminology didn't match any narcotic trade she recognised from eighteen years of busts. A new sound reached her ears. A woman's voice, higher than the others, with a Spanish accent that carried notes of fear. Not Davis, but someone else in trouble. Quinn's grip tightened on the baton. The smart play was to call for backup, wait for the cavalry, approach with overwhelming force and proper lighting. The smart play had got Morris killed, because backup had arrived twenty minutes too late and found only bloodstains and symbols that shouldn't have existed. She pushed the door open another inch. Stone steps descended into darkness, worn smooth by countless feet. The air that rose from below carried scents that didn't belong in London. Something sweet and medicinal, like hospital corridors, mixed with older smells. Incense. Old books. Something metallic that might have been copper pipes or might have been something else entirely. The Spanish woman's voice rose again, clearer now. She was arguing with someone, her tone growing more desperate. Quinn caught the words "medical license" and "no choice." Two missing officers. A hidden market that operated by rules she didn't understand. A suspect who'd led her here with the confidence of someone who knew exactly where he was going. The sensible thing would be to retreat, establish a perimeter, wait for morning when the Metropolitan Police could approach this methodically and safely. The Morris thing had been a fluke, an isolated incident that had nothing to do with whatever black market operation was running beneath Camden. But Davis was down there. And the Spanish woman, whoever she was. Quinn descended the first step, then the second. The stone felt ancient under her boots, older than the Victorian tunnels that honeycomb London's underground. Her phone lost signal immediately. The voices grew clearer with each step. She recognised the cadence now, the rhythms of a market in full swing. Haggling, negotiations, the subtle threats that underpinned any criminal enterprise. But the subject matter remained alien. References to enchantments and bloodlines, to ingredients that didn't exist in any chemistry textbook. At the bottom of the steps, she found herself in a tunnel that belonged in a museum. Brick archwork that spoke of Georgian engineering, gas lamp fixtures converted to electricity, and the kind of stonework that suggested this space had been forgotten by official London decades ago. A soft green glow emanated from around a bend in the tunnel. Not electric light, but something that moved and shifted like living flame. Quinn pressed herself against the wall and edged forward, every instinct screaming that she was walking into something far beyond a simple drug bust or illegal market. But Davis was somewhere ahead, and Morris's ghost wouldn't let her turn back now. The tunnel opened into a vast space that defied the geography of Camden above. Market stalls stretched into shadows that electric lights couldn't penetrate, tended by vendors who moved with purpose and spoke in languages she couldn't identify. The Spanish woman stood at a nearby stall, her olive skin pale with fear as she examined something that glowed with its own inner light. Quinn recognised her from a case file. Tomás Herrera, former NHS paramedic, license revoked for unauthorised treatment protocols. The woman beside him matched no description from any database. The suspect in the leather jacket stood three stalls away, no longer running, no longer hiding. He was home. And somewhere in this impossible market beneath London, UC Davis was either shopping or bleeding. Quinn's hand found her radio, knowing it wouldn't work but needing the familiar weight of backup that wouldn't come.
total_cost0.03813

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags2
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences4
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.74% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1210
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
38.02% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1210
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"streaming"
count1
1
word"potential"
count1
2
word"navigated"
count1
3
word"practiced ease"
count1
4
word"sanctuary"
count1
5
word"traced"
count1
6
word"familiar"
count2
7
word"weight"
count2
8
word"remarkable"
count1
9
word"coded"
count1
10
word"electric"
count2
11
word"database"
count1
highlights
0"streaming"
1"potential"
2"navigated"
3"practiced ease"
4"sanctuary"
5"traced"
6"familiar"
7"weight"
8"remarkable"
9"coded"
10"electric"
11"database"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences95
matches
0"e with fear"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences95
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"appeared to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences96
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen36
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1210
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions4
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
95.05% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions47
wordCount1183
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity1.1
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Detective1
Harlow1
Quinn13
Transit1
Camden4
Lock1
Morris5
Whitechapel1
Undercover1
Davis5
Spanish4
London4
Two1
Metropolitan1
Police1
Victorian1
Georgian1
Herrera1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Morris"
3"Undercover"
4"Davis"
5"Police"
6"Victorian"
7"Herrera"
places
0"Whitechapel"
1"London"
globalScore0.951
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences76
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
34.71% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.653
wordCount1210
matches
0"Not Davis, but someone else in trouble"
1"Not electric light, but something"
97.22% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences96
matches
0"tunnels that honeycomb"
1"screaming that she"
87.49% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs35
mean34.57
std15.77
cv0.456
sampleLengths
036
133
245
358
447
511
645
72
811
949
1051
1110
1245
1342
1421
1526
1640
1748
1829
1950
2059
2127
2231
2347
2412
2529
2650
2747
2824
2941
3063
3128
3219
3315
3419
97.88% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences95
matches
0"been ragged"
1"been forgotten"
0.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount8
totalVerbs193
matches
0"was sprinting"
1"wasn't panicking"
2"wasn't heading"
3"were being"
4"was arguing"
5"was going"
6"was running"
7"was walking"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences96
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1184
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount34
adverbRatio0.028716216216216218
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.008445945945945946
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences96
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences96
mean12.6
std7.6
cv0.603
sampleLengths
018
118
210
323
423
514
64
74
823
935
1013
1115
1219
139
142
1514
1624
177
182
1911
2017
2113
225
2314
248
2516
2627
275
285
2912
3022
3111
327
331
347
3517
3610
377
387
397
403
4123
422
4323
4415
455
464
478
4831
496
51.39% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.3645833333333333
totalSentences96
uniqueOpeners35
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences90
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount15
totalSentences90
matches
0"she muttered, rain streaming down"
1"He had a destination."
2"Her quarry darted left into"
3"She'd worked these streets long"
4"Her fingers traced the mortar,"
5"They'd found his body a"
6"It would mask any sounds"
7"She pressed her ear to"
8"Her phone buzzed."
9"She caught fragments now."
10"She pushed the door open"
11"She was arguing with someone,"
12"Her phone lost signal immediately."
13"She recognised the cadence now,"
14"He was home."
ratio0.167
54.44% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount73
totalSentences90
matches
0"The pavement exploded in shards"
1"she muttered, rain streaming down"
2"The suspect, a wiry bloke"
3"Quinn rolled to her feet"
4"This one wasn't panicking."
5"He had a destination."
6"The narrow cobblestone streets of"
7"Quinn's boots found purchase on"
8"Her quarry darted left into"
9"Quinn followed, shoulder scraping against"
10"The alley opened onto the"
11"The suspect vaulted a wooden"
12"Quinn cleared it seconds later,"
13"She'd worked these streets long"
14"This wasn't heading toward any"
15"The leather jacket disappeared around"
16"Quinn reached the spot and"
17"Her fingers traced the mortar,"
18"A hidden door, perfectly camouflaged."
19"The kind of entrance that"
ratio0.811
55.56% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences90
matches
0"Either he was in remarkable"
ratio0.011
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences56
technicalSentenceCount13
matches
0"Quinn's boots found purchase on stone worn smooth by centuries of foot traffic, her military bearing keeping her balanced as she navigated puddles that reflecte…"
1"Quinn followed, shoulder scraping against damp brick that smelled of decades of piss and desperation."
2"Her fingers traced the mortar, finding the hairline crack that revealed the illusion."
3"The rookie she'd warned about taking chances, about following leads that felt too convenient, about underground markets that appeared and disappeared like smoke…"
4"A woman's voice, higher than the others, with a Spanish accent that carried notes of fear."
5"The smart play had got Morris killed, because backup had arrived twenty minutes too late and found only bloodstains and symbols that shouldn't have existed."
6"She was arguing with someone, her tone growing more desperate."
7"The Morris thing had been a fluke, an isolated incident that had nothing to do with whatever black market operation was running beneath Camden."
8"Haggling, negotiations, the subtle threats that underpinned any criminal enterprise."
9"References to enchantments and bloodlines, to ingredients that didn't exist in any chemistry textbook."
10"Brick archwork that spoke of Georgian engineering, gas lamp fixtures converted to electricity, and the kind of stonework that suggested this space had been forg…"
11"Market stalls stretched into shadows that electric lights couldn't penetrate, tended by vendors who moved with purpose and spoke in languages she couldn't ident…"
12"The Spanish woman stood at a nearby stall, her olive skin pale with fear as she examined something that glowed with its own inner light."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags2
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences4
tagDensity0.25
leniency0.5
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.5
76.7832%