Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTY1PA8NQ9W9TFEAN8RPHXB

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37.6s
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$0.040290
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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The suspect's leather jacket disappeared around the corner of Neal Street, swallowed by the downpour. Harlow Quinn pushed harder, her boots slapping through puddles that reflected the neon chaos of Covent Garden. Eighteen years on the force taught you which chases mattered. This one did. Tommy Herrera's medical records, the ones he swore didn't exist, were in that jacket's inside pocket. Proof he'd been treating something that shouldn't exist. Three years since Morris died screaming about shadows with teeth. Three years of dead ends and psychiatric evaluations. Three years of watching cases go cold because no one believed in monsters. The suspect vaulted a newspaper stand. Harlow followed, her knee protesting, reminding her she was forty-one and chasing someone half her age. Rain hammered down harder, turning the street into a river of reflected streetlights and discarded takeaway containers. "Metropolitan Police! Stop!" He didn't stop. They never did. He cut left through an alley that reeked of rotting vegetables and piss. Harlow's hand went to her pepper spray. The alley opened onto a loading bay behind a closed Vietnamese restaurant. Metal shutters. Locked doors. Dead end. The suspect stood in the center of the bay, rain streaming down his face. Young. Twenty-something. Tattoos crawling up his neck, symbols she recognized from Morris's case files. The ones the department psychiatrist said proved her partner had suffered a psychotic break. "Nowhere to go," Harlow said, catching her breath. Her watch pressed cold against her wrist, the leather strap soaked through. "That's what you think." His accent placed him somewhere near Essex. Cocky smile. Too cocky for someone cornered. He reached into his pocket. Harlow's hand moved to her baton. "Slowly." He pulled out something small. White. Curved. A bone. He held it up like a theatre ticket, then pressed it against the brick wall behind him. The wall opened. Not a door swinging out. The bricks themselves peeled back, reality folding like wet paper. Behind it, stairs descended into darkness. Music drifted up, something with too many drums and not enough melody. Voices. Laughter. The smell of incense and something sharper, chemical. "Cheers, Detective." He backed down the first step. "Don't follow. You're not welcome in the Market." The wall started closing. Harlow had maybe five seconds. Morris's voice echoed in her memory. *They took me down there, Quinn. Under Camden. Sold me to something with too many eyes.* She'd found his body three days later. Coroner ruled it natural causes. Heart attack. Thirty-four years old, ran marathons, heart attack. The department closed the case. Harlow kept digging. Lost friends. Lost her marriage. Lost her faith in sanity. But she'd never lost the case. Two seconds. The Veil Market. She'd heard whispers. Informants going quiet when she pushed too hard. Surveillance footage with gaps that made no sense. Witnesses who developed sudden amnesia. An abandoned tube station beneath Camden that officially didn't exist, despite appearing on maps from 1926. One second. Harlow lunged through the gap. The wall sealed behind her with a wet sound like meat slapping tile. Darkness swallowed her whole. The stairs beneath her feet were stone, worn smooth by centuries of footsteps. The music grew louder, resolved into something with stringed instruments that shouldn't exist and vocals in languages she couldn't place. Light bloomed below. Green. Sickly. Wrong. She descended, one hand trailing the wall. Damp. Cold. Living somehow. The stone pulsed under her palm like a heartbeat. She jerked her hand away. The stairs opened onto a platform. Not a modern tube station. Older. Victorian brickwork mixed with something carved from rock that predated London itself. Torches burned in iron sconces despite the lack of oxygen. Market stalls lined both sides of the platform, stretching into darkness in both directions along what should have been tunnel tracks. Harlow stopped breathing for three seconds. Started again. Professional detachment, the kind that kept you sane at crime scenes, settled over her like armor. The suspect stood twenty meters away, talking to something behind a stall. The vendor had too many joints in its fingers. She focused on the suspect instead. People moved between the stalls. Human-shaped, mostly. A woman with flowers growing from her scalp browsed jars of preserved organs. A man whose shadow moved independently examined a rack of knives that whispered. Two teenagers, couldn't be more than sixteen, argued over the price of something that glowed. No one had noticed her yet. The suspect handed over the bone token to the vendor. The creature pocketed it, handed back a small vial of silver liquid. Harlow's radio crackled. Dead. No signal this deep. No backup. No witnesses who'd testify. No jurisdiction that would hold up in any court. Morris had been right. About everything. The suspect turned, saw her, and ran deeper into the Market. Harlow weighed her options. Turn back, lose the lead, spend another three years chasing ghosts. Follow, risk whatever killed Morris, maybe get actual answers. Her worn leather watch ticked steadily. She checked it out of habit. Quarter past eleven. Shift ended at midnight. She started walking forward. A hand grabbed her arm. Olive skin. Saint Christopher medallion catching the torchlight. "Detective Quinn." Tomás Herrera's warm brown eyes held no surprise. "You shouldn't be here." "You're under arrest." The words came automatically, trained response overriding the insanity of the situation. "No." He didn't let go. "I'm trying to save your life. The Market has rules. You broke them by entering without a token. They'll notice soon." "Who will?" "The vendors. The buyers. Everyone." He glanced over his shoulder. Several stall owners had stopped their transactions, heads turning toward them. "You're bleeding wrongness into their space. They can smell it." "Smell what?" "Order. Law. Daylight. Everything the Market isn't." His grip tightened. "That suspect you're chasing? He's got protection here. You don't. And that scar on your forearm won't mean anything to what's watching us right now." Something moved in the darkness between stalls. Multiple somethings. Eyes reflected the torchlight, too many eyes, positioned wrong. "I need those records," Harlow said. "I need proof." "Of what?" "Everything. What killed my partner. What you're treating. What this place is." Tomás studied her face. "You won't survive getting that proof tonight." "Then help me." "I can't. I lost my license helping people like you understand things you shouldn't." He released her arm. "But I can buy you time to run. The exit seals for everyone except token holders after midnight. You've got thirty minutes." "I'm not leaving without answers." "Then you're not leaving at all." He stepped back. "Your choice, Detective." The shadows moved closer. The music had stopped. Every face on the platform turned toward her, human and otherwise. The suspect stood at the far end, grinning, flanked by two figures in robes that seemed to be made of smoke. Harlow's hand went to her baton. Useless, probably. But it was something. "Last chance," Tomás said. The smoke figures started walking toward her.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
62.07% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"The words came automatically [automatically]"
1"He stepped back [back]"
dialogueSentences29
tagDensity0.414
leniency0.828
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.138
95.69% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1161
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
78.47% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1161
totalAiIsms5
found
0
word"streaming"
count1
1
word"echoed"
count1
2
word"footsteps"
count1
3
word"resolved"
count1
4
word"pulsed"
count1
highlights
0"streaming"
1"echoed"
2"footsteps"
3"resolved"
4"pulsed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences147
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences147
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences164
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen26
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords16
totalWords1157
ratio0.014
matches
0"They took me down there, Quinn. Under Camden. Sold me to something with too many eyes."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.06% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions47
wordCount971
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity1.34
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Neal1
Street1
Quinn2
Covent1
Garden1
Herrera2
Morris5
Vietnamese1
Essex1
Cocky1
Camden2
Veil1
Market3
London1
Christopher1
Several1
Tomás3
Harlow13
Three3
Lost3
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Herrera"
2"Morris"
3"Christopher"
4"Tomás"
5"Harlow"
places
0"Neal"
1"Street"
2"Covent"
3"Garden"
4"Essex"
5"Market"
6"London"
globalScore0.831
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences71
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"robes that seemed to be made of smoke"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1157
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences164
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs59
mean19.61
std15.25
cv0.778
sampleLengths
015
154
231
339
43
56
638
742
820
918
105
117
1226
133
1443
1516
169
1722
1839
196
202
2143
222
235
2450
256
2625
2755
2824
2927
3048
3128
3223
336
3411
3524
3619
374
3813
3914
4015
4126
422
4331
442
4535
4618
479
482
4912
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences147
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs175
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences164
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount975
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount29
adverbRatio0.029743589743589743
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.0071794871794871795
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences164
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences164
mean7.05
std5.19
cv0.736
sampleLengths
015
117
210
33
416
58
610
78
813
96
1016
1117
123
133
143
1513
167
1712
182
192
202
2114
221
231
2412
2514
268
2712
2811
292
305
315
326
331
345
351
361
372
3817
393
405
4110
426
4312
441
451
468
478
488
494
82.93% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.5487804878048781
totalSentences164
uniqueOpeners90
29.24% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences114
matches
0"Too cocky for someone cornered."
ratio0.009
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount23
totalSentences114
matches
0"He didn't stop."
1"They never did."
2"He cut left through an"
3"Her watch pressed cold against"
4"His accent placed him somewhere"
5"He reached into his pocket."
6"He pulled out something small."
7"He held it up like"
8"He backed down the first"
9"*They took me down there,"
10"She'd found his body three"
11"She'd heard whispers."
12"She descended, one hand trailing"
13"She jerked her hand away."
14"She focused on the suspect"
15"Her worn leather watch ticked"
16"She checked it out of"
17"She started walking forward."
18"He didn't let go"
19"He glanced over his shoulder"
ratio0.202
65.26% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount90
totalSentences114
matches
0"The suspect's leather jacket disappeared"
1"Harlow Quinn pushed harder, her"
2"This one did."
3"Tommy Herrera's medical records, the"
4"Proof he'd been treating something"
5"The suspect vaulted a newspaper"
6"Harlow followed, her knee protesting,"
7"He didn't stop."
8"They never did."
9"He cut left through an"
10"Harlow's hand went to her"
11"The alley opened onto a"
12"The suspect stood in the"
13"Tattoos crawling up his neck,"
14"The ones the department psychiatrist"
15"Harlow said, catching her breath"
16"Her watch pressed cold against"
17"His accent placed him somewhere"
18"He reached into his pocket."
19"Harlow's hand moved to her"
ratio0.789
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences114
matches(empty)
ratio0
63.49% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences36
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Harlow Quinn pushed harder, her boots slapping through puddles that reflected the neon chaos of Covent Garden."
1"Harlow followed, her knee protesting, reminding her she was forty-one and chasing someone half her age."
2"The music grew louder, resolved into something with stringed instruments that shouldn't exist and vocals in languages she couldn't place."
3"Professional detachment, the kind that kept you sane at crime scenes, settled over her like armor."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences29
tagDensity0.103
leniency0.207
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
88.6737%