Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTY4NY992NHA688HCF5JWW9

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1m 33s
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OpenAI

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
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Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

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Boots hammered the slick cobbles as he slid around the corner, coat flaring with a desperate puff of fabric, and I kept him in the rain-slick glow of the neon. He juked through a narrow alley, a final, reckless pivot that sprayed rivulets from a half-rotted crate, and I cut in behind him, breath slicing the air that tasted of copper and rain. He knows these streets, I thought. I know him. The Saint Christopher medallion at his sternum winked when he shifted, catching the green glow from a signage board. Herrera—Tomás—hunted the same shadows I hunted, just a few steps ahead. The man wasn’t built to stop for a conversation; he moved like a blade drawn tight between two gears. The first heartbeat of fear is a clean thing, sometimes. It only lets you know what’s real in a flash. Then it’s replaced by the taste of metal on the back of your tongue and the click of a plan snapping into place. "Found you," I hissed under my breath, more command than question, and closed the distance as he ducked beneath a low awning that dripped like a leaky skull. A shiver of rain hissed against brick and glass as the chase spilled into a wider street, car headlights painting the pavement in quick, brutal stabs of light. He skidded past a messenger bike, shoes sparking on the wet stones, and a storefront window—an antique clock show—threw a ghostly reflection of us, two silhouettes chasing one another into the city’s mouth. Where the street curled into shadow, he vanished behind a stack of wooden pallets. I slowed only long enough to switch grip on my service pistol, then forged after him, every step a decision grinding into the next. "Quinn!" The shout came as a ragged breath, a fraction of fear and a lot of anger rolled into one. I didn’t answer. I dashed through the narrowing gap between crates, the air tasting of damp concrete and iron filings. He was gone into the throat of an alley, a tunnel-like passage that turned the city into a claustrophobic maw. The kind of place you keep your gaze fixed and your gut ready to throw up if something sharp and unseen darts from the dark. A metallic clang echoed somewhere ahead, and he reappeared at the far end, forcing a long, dangerous sprint. We traded a breath’s worth of distance in a single heartbeat; then his shoes found a rhythm I could not mirror, a rhythm born of fear and necessity. You don’t catch a man who was trained to vanish, not if he wants to vanish. The alley spat him out into a broader corridor beneath the city’s veins, the hinge of the world opening into a different gravity. The air shifted, cooler and heavier, and a faint, chemical tingle pricked my nostrils. Underground now, where the city’s heartbeat beat in stone and echo. The Veil Market was not the place you expected to find in a Tube tunnel, not in a city that pretended to be orderly. The passage broadened into a cavernous hollow lined with stalls that flickered in and out of existence, as if the place remembered more than it revealed. The current location lay beneath Camden, the Market’s schedule moving with the full moon, a secret kept even from the uninvited. A sign, carved bone-white and glowing with a sickly green hue, hung above an arched entrance—bone token required, it read in something close to a warning: entrance earned, not granted. He slowed at the threshold, watching the space with that practiced caution of someone who’d learned to live off the edge of danger. The bone token on a chain at his neck clinked once, twice, and he stepped forward as the sign shed its light into a hundred uneasy corners. The air tasted metallic and old, like coins left in a drawer for a generation and never touched again. We didn’t speak the same language here, not the city’s language or mine. The Market hummed with a pulse that felt almost alive, a chorus of whispers, a thousand little deals, a hundred rumours pressed into the damp air. Vendors pressed close, faces half-concealed behind veils; the smells—smoke, spice, something medicinal, something sour—made the throat tight. "Gods, what is this place?" a voice whispered from somewhere above, and the echo rolled down the tunnel like a wave. The whisper didn’t come from anyone I knew. It wasn’t the Market speaking, not exactly; it was the city’s old memory waking up and trying to deceive you into thinking you’d found safety. Herrera moved with the same understated menace that had defined him since the day we had first met—quiet, efficient, untrusting of everything that wasn’t useful. He threaded a path between stands that sold foreign talismans, charms, and banned alchemical brews, their wares glowing with a sickly sheen. There was something ritualistic about the way he looked around, a paranoid caution that suggested he expected a trap behind every veil. The market’s guardians watched us with pale eyes—silent, expressionless, as if they’d forgotten how to blink. The breath at the back of my neck hissed with the memory of a badge, a life spent with people who believed in order. Here, order dissolved into a mesh of corners and covenants, a network of corners where you’d better know what you want because someone else might want it more. "Quinn," Herrera breathed softly, as if the word itself tasted like something addictive and dangerous. The sound carried with it a warning. He knew I’d follow, even with a choice scribbled in my mind and a finger hovering over the trigger. "Tomás," I replied, not giving him the satisfaction of surprise. The name tasted like a memory. A life I hadn’t lived since the day the partner died, the partner who fell into a case that had never concluded, a case with a shadow that refused to be named. The crowd moved around us, a river of damp coats and cautious footsteps. The bark of a vendor’s cry—an offer for something that could bend reality—grazed my ear. The Market’s patrons knew something I didn’t; they spoke in a rhythm I hadn’t learned to translate. The chase paused for a step, then resumed with a new kind of fear—the fear of what waited beyond the Market’s veiled edges. The alley that led down here had become a trap, a spine of stone and memory, and Herrera’s silhouette moved with a certain certainty I recognised: the certainty of someone who’d made a choice to live outside the law to protect those who drove him to it. I studied the ground, checking for signs of where he’d moved next. The Market’s aisles wound like a labyrinth of possibilities, each stand a potential doorway to trouble. A vendor whispered something to another beneath a veil, and their whispered bargain carried on a current of danger that brushed my skin. The scent of something burnt, something medicinal and bitter, clung to the air. "Come on, Quinn. You know the way," Herrera whispered, almost to himself, a murmur that could be a dare, a promise, or a threat. The words rolled from his mouth and threaded into the Market’s noise. No one here wore a uniform. Everyone wore a mask of some kind, be it a talisman, a whispered oath, or a price paid to stay in the loop. I stepped closer to Herrera, closer to the glint of steel at his belt, closer to the moment this chase would redefine what I believed I could survive. The bone token at his neck shifted when he moved, a pale bone circle catching the Market’s green glow. He looked deliberately at me; and for a moment it felt as if time slowed, as if the crowd thinned to a single line of light that stretched between us. "Stay above ground," he said, his tone flat, almost compassionate in its clarity. "You aren’t ready for what lives down here, and I’m not in the mood to pull you from a god-damned tomb." I took a breath I didn’t want to take, the kind that clears a path or cuts a lung. The decision pressed on me like a weight: follow him deeper into the Market, where I could lose him in a web of deals and enchantments, or pull back, keep my feet above ground, and risk losing him forever to whatever he’d become in the humidity of these tunnels. "Quinn." He spoke again, the name a soft warning. I spoke back, not loud but enough to sound like an order, a line I wouldn’t cross but would pretend to draw. "No more games, Tomás." The phrase tasted like smoke and truth, a directive with teeth. He flashed a brief, crooked smile—half defiance, half invitation. Then he started moving again, deeper into the Market’s labyrinth, the crowd bending around him as if he walked through water. The chase tightened. A child clutched a string of beads, eyes wide as he watched the two of us move through the stalls. An old man counted coins with a tremor in his hand. A woman offered a vial that bubbled with an odd green light. Everything here felt like a hand that could shove you into a decision you would regret. The Market was not merely a backdrop; it was a living scene with rules that did not include you. Herrera ducked behind a stall that sold what looked like weathered maps from a past century, the kind that folded and refolded into new places, ideas, and lies. I followed, keeping my eyes on his shoulders, the way lean muscle and a trained instinct could reveal a man’s next move before he made it. A voice from behind the counter hissed, “Bone tokens only for entry,” as if we needed reminding of the Market’s rule. The words sounded more ceremonial than practical, a ritual to remind entrants that they were far from the city’s safe daylight. We moved on, and the Market’s heart began to beat louder: a chorus of murmurs, footsteps, the rustle of fabric, the clink of a vial being set on a wooden surface, the scrape of a blade against a sheath. The stalls dissolved in a shimmer of light and shadow, as if the Market were trying to hide its own truth behind a curtain of illusion. Herrera paused at a doorway that opened into a dim corridor, and the corridor’s walls bore carved runes with a warmth that suggested a warmth of some other world. The Space Beyond A Market, a thought flickered through my head, a memory of a phrase I hadn’t spoken aloud in years. The Market had a language all its own. "A bargain," Herrera finally said, half to me, half to the air. "A single bargain, and you get your exit, Detective." I saw the price in his eyes: a choice between the life I had on the surface and the life I could have underneath, where a human body might be disposable for the sake of someone’s greater plan. The decision wasn’t just about catching him; it was about choosing the kind of world I lived in. "Your bargain first," I replied, my own voice steady, the knife’s edge of fear kept sharp by habit. He turned, the hint of a grimace crossing his face. The bag on his shoulder rustled, a soft sound that could hide a pistol, a vial, or something more sinister. He glanced toward a line of stalls that offered trinkets and curses in equal measure, and then back at me, a calculating glint in his eyes. Then he spoke again, his words clipped, careful, and alive with purpose. "Stay here and pretend you didn’t see anything," he said, almost as a test rather than a threat. "Or follow me, and you’ll learn that some doors, once opened, do not close again." The conversation wasn’t between two people alone; it felt like a test set by the Market itself, a gauntlet meant to prove which side you belonged to. I knew which side I stood on. I always did. But the price of stepping through that doorway could be more than I could bear. He moved again, and the crowd shifted as if he carried them with him. A narrow alcove led to a stairwell; the kind that spiralled downward into a museum of secrets. He slipped through, and I followed, letting the Market’s noise seal us in a corridor of damp stone and flickering globes. The stair throat gave a violent echo, a kind of scream that belonged to places you don’t talk about in daylight. The air was cooler here, and the smell changed to something colder, metallic, something unnameable that crawled under the skin. We descended into a tunnel whose walls were damp with the dampness of years, the track dusting every surface a pale, chalky white. My grip tightened on the gun. Herrera’s fingers brushed the bone token at his neck as if drawing a line through the air, making a circle around a boundary I could not see but could feel. He glanced back at me, his expression a mask of calm that only someone who had spent a lifetime negotiating with danger could wear. The tunnel widened, and a sullen light appeared up ahead: a seam in the rock that opened into a room bright with a strange, unnatural light. The Market’s nerve centre, perhaps, or a back room where you paid for things you could not buy anywhere else. A rush of whispers rose to meet us, a hundred voices speaking at once, then dying to nothing when they recognised the two of us as intruders. Herrera paused at the entrance proper and turned to face me. "Your choice. Follow, or stay here and pretend you never saw the face of what’s coming." He spoke softly enough that the words felt like a suggestion rather than a threat, but the weight behind them pressed into my chest as a solid, undeniable force. A drip of something sweet and rotten touched my lip from the air, and a cold shiver crawled along my spine. The Market’s subterranean room hummed with life—bargains struck in hushed tones, the exchange of blood and breath for the kind of power that could not be named in polite company. I stepped closer to the threshold, and the sound of a distant bell / the rattle of chains / a soft cry somewhere in the dark—these sounds stitched themselves into the moment. If I stepped through, I’d be beyond the city’s reach, beyond the rules that kept the surface world honest. If I stayed, I’d be denying the kind of truth I’d sworn to chase. The choice was not about the chase anymore. It was about what kind of night I believed in. Then a scream split the Market like a knife through cloth. It wasn’t mine, and it wasn’t Herrera’s. It came from somewhere beyond the light, a sound that told me a plan had changed its course and was now aimed directly at us. Herrera smiled this time—thin and knowing—and stepped through the arch. The bone token under his shirt flashed once, an ill omen in green glow. He was through, the void opened, and I had to decide whether I would take the risk and follow him into the unknown, or cut my losses, back out, and keep faith with a law that had never quite kept us safe in the first place. Footsteps clattered behind, a flood of bodies and muffled yells from people who had learned to survive in places like this. The Market’s breath grew louder, a chorus that pressed against the walls and demanded action. I took a breath that felt like a long, clean line and moved after him. The moment he crossed the threshold, the room’s energy snapped tight—like the last thread in a tapestry you know will unravel. I stepped after him, feeling the cold kiss of damp air close around me, as the underground Market’s entire mass adjusted to the arrival of two strangers in a world not meant for daylight. Shouts turned to a quiet hush, the kind that follows the moment a predator realises it is not alone in a room. And then the quiet exploded into something else—a muffled roar and the wet slap of something heavy meeting stone. The lights flickered once, twice, and the Market’s magic—or something like it—seized the room with a gust of wind so sudden you could have believed we’d been pulled into a storm. I moved, not thinking, just doing, catching the shape of Herrera’s silhouette as he vanished into a corridor lined with stalls offering the kind of power you paid for in a currency you could not name. The chase was no longer about accuracy or justice; it was about survival in a place that didn’t care for those words. And then the floor beneath us lurched, a tremor that sent crates tumbling and bodies scattering. The Market reeled, and for a moment, I thought I’d seen something move behind the stalls—something large, something watchful, something old enough to remember a time before glass and neon. The chase intensified into a roar. Herrera’s voice cut the noise, calm and close, the edge of a blade in his words. "This is what you wanted, Quinn. This is what you’ll get." I kept on his tail, the bone token in my pocket suddenly heavy with promise and threat. The Market opened to reveal a hidden back room, bookshelf doors sighing as they shifted, a shelf sliding aside to reveal a space that did not exist in the daylight world. The air grew colder and damper, and the room pulsed with a light that didn’t come from lamps but from the walls’ own breath. A figure stepped from the shadows, tall and shrouded, eyes like coals. The kind you see in dreams you cannot wake from. Herrera slowed, his form guiding me toward the thing that stood between us and the possible exit. The stranger studied us with a pale, careful gaze, as if weighing the weight of a decision he hadn’t asked for, either. The air between us thrummed with danger, as if the Market itself had decided to test us, to see if we would break. The stranger finally spoke, his voice a whisper that carried the sound of bells through a cathedral’s nave. "Bone tokens do not always grant entry," he said, "and not every bargain holds a life you can keep." Herrera’s lips moved in a tight line, his reply almost a whisper of a threat. "We’ll see about that." The stranger’s hand rose, drawing attention to the gleam of a blade tucked at his side. The Market hummed in a low, anticipatory note, as if the walls waited for us to choose the next moment’s violence. Herrera took a step forward, and I followed, a decision pulled tight by years of training and a partner’s absence that never quite stopped echoing. The scene snapped into motion, a quick-fire exchange of movement, a choreography of risk and consequence. And just as the first strike split the air, the world seemed to tilt on its axis, the Market’s truth laying itself bare in a single, bright moment. I reached for Herrera, and the room shattered into a thousand small, glittering fragments of possibility. Then, from the dark, a new sound rose—a chorus of multiple voices, not pleading, not threatening, but demanding. It was the Market’s own crackle, the sound of rules bending, of doors opening where none should. And behind it all, the question that would haunt me as I walked back through the rain-slicked streets to the surface: would I follow him deeper, or would I pull away and let the unknown swallow us both? The answer came with the first move he made, a decision that sealed ours. We went again, into the shadowed corridor that led further underground, where the breath of the Veil Market grew louder, and the night finally decided to show its teeth.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount5
adverbTags
0"Herrera breathed softly [softly]"
1"He spoke again [again]"
2"The phrase tasted like [like]"
3"Herrera finally said [finally]"
4"He spoke softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences20
tagDensity0.8
leniency1
rawRatio0.313
effectiveRatio0.313
94.09% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3386
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"softly"
count2
1
adverb"deliberately"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"deliberately"
2"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
48.32% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3386
totalAiIsms35
found
0
word"maw"
count1
1
word"echoed"
count1
2
word"echo"
count3
3
word"flickered"
count3
4
word"pulse"
count1
5
word"almost alive"
count1
6
word"whisper"
count3
7
word"efficient"
count1
8
word"footsteps"
count3
9
word"potential"
count1
10
word"glint"
count2
11
word"weight"
count3
12
word"warmth"
count2
13
word"sinister"
count1
14
word"calculating"
count1
15
word"could feel"
count1
16
word"tapestry"
count1
17
word"unravel"
count1
18
word"predator"
count1
19
word"lurched"
count1
20
word"pulsed"
count1
21
word"echoing"
count1
22
word"shattered"
count1
highlights
0"maw"
1"echoed"
2"echo"
3"flickered"
4"pulse"
5"almost alive"
6"whisper"
7"efficient"
8"footsteps"
9"potential"
10"glint"
11"weight"
12"warmth"
13"sinister"
14"calculating"
15"could feel"
16"tapestry"
17"unravel"
18"predator"
19"lurched"
20"pulsed"
21"echoing"
22"shattered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences166
matches(empty)
74.01% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences166
filterMatches
0"know"
1"see"
hedgeMatches
0"tended to"
1"tend to"
2"began to"
3"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences171
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen49
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3357
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions28
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions59
wordCount3218
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity0.99
worstName"Market"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Market"
discoveredNames
Saint1
Christopher1
Tomás1
Veil2
Market32
Tube1
Camden1
Herrera19
Space1
persons
0"Saint"
1"Christopher"
2"Tomás"
3"Market"
4"Herrera"
places
0"Tube"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences161
glossingSentenceCount12
matches
0"something close to a warning: entrance earned, n"
1"tasted like something addictive and dange"
2"tasted like a memory"
3"tasted like smoke and truth, a directive"
4"felt like a hand that could shove you i"
5"looked like weathered maps from a past ce"
6"felt like a test set by the Market itse"
7"as if drawing a line through the air, making a circle around a boundary I could not see but could feel"
8"felt like a suggestion rather than a th"
9"felt like a long, clean line and moved"
10"something like it—seized the room with a gus"
11"as if weighing the weight of a decision he hadn’t asked for, either"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords0.894
wordCount3357
matches
0"not loud but enough to sound like an order, a line I wouldn’t cross but w"
1"not pleading, not threatening, but demanding"
2"not threatening, but demanding"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences171
matches(empty)
65.28% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs67
mean50.1
std18.96
cv0.378
sampleLengths
063
19
249
343
428
561
638
720
865
946
1016
1148
12101
1369
1456
1554
1669
1768
1841
1948
2045
2170
2264
2336
2457
2549
2634
2768
289
2937
3030
3181
3254
3342
3465
3559
3621
3756
3818
3968
4033
4152
4252
4364
4460
4573
4656
4751
4865
4918
98.92% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences166
matches
0"was gone"
1"was trained"
2"been pulled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs513
matches
0"were trying"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount23
semicolonCount11
flaggedSentences27
totalSentences171
ratio0.158
matches
0"Herrera—Tomás—hunted the same shadows I hunted, just a few steps ahead."
1"The man wasn’t built to stop for a conversation; he moved like a blade drawn tight between two gears."
2"He skidded past a messenger bike, shoes sparking on the wet stones, and a storefront window—an antique clock show—threw a ghostly reflection of us, two silhouettes chasing one another into the city’s mouth."
3"We traded a breath’s worth of distance in a single heartbeat; then his shoes found a rhythm I could not mirror, a rhythm born of fear and necessity."
4"A sign, carved bone-white and glowing with a sickly green hue, hung above an arched entrance—bone token required, it read in something close to a warning: entrance earned, not granted."
5"Vendors pressed close, faces half-concealed behind veils; the smells—smoke, spice, something medicinal, something sour—made the throat tight."
6"It wasn’t the Market speaking, not exactly; it was the city’s old memory waking up and trying to deceive you into thinking you’d found safety."
7"Herrera moved with the same understated menace that had defined him since the day we had first met—quiet, efficient, untrusting of everything that wasn’t useful."
8"The market’s guardians watched us with pale eyes—silent, expressionless, as if they’d forgotten how to blink."
9"The bark of a vendor’s cry—an offer for something that could bend reality—grazed my ear."
10"The Market’s patrons knew something I didn’t; they spoke in a rhythm I hadn’t learned to translate."
11"The chase paused for a step, then resumed with a new kind of fear—the fear of what waited beyond the Market’s veiled edges."
12"He looked deliberately at me; and for a moment it felt as if time slowed, as if the crowd thinned to a single line of light that stretched between us."
13"He flashed a brief, crooked smile—half defiance, half invitation."
14"The Market was not merely a backdrop; it was a living scene with rules that did not include you."
15"The decision wasn’t just about catching him; it was about choosing the kind of world I lived in."
16"The conversation wasn’t between two people alone; it felt like a test set by the Market itself, a gauntlet meant to prove which side you belonged to."
17"A narrow alcove led to a stairwell; the kind that spiralled downward into a museum of secrets."
18"The Market’s subterranean room hummed with life—bargains struck in hushed tones, the exchange of blood and breath for the kind of power that could not be named in polite company."
19"I stepped closer to the threshold, and the sound of a distant bell / the rattle of chains / a soft cry somewhere in the dark—these sounds stitched themselves into the moment."
20"Herrera smiled this time—thin and knowing—and stepped through the arch."
21"The moment he crossed the threshold, the room’s energy snapped tight—like the last thread in a tapestry you know will unravel."
22"And then the quiet exploded into something else—a muffled roar and the wet slap of something heavy meeting stone."
23"The lights flickered once, twice, and the Market’s magic—or something like it—seized the room with a gust of wind so sudden you could have believed we’d been pulled into a storm."
24"The chase was no longer about accuracy or justice; it was about survival in a place that didn’t care for those words."
25"The Market reeled, and for a moment, I thought I’d seen something move behind the stalls—something large, something watchful, something old enough to remember a time before glass and neon."
26"Then, from the dark, a new sound rose—a chorus of multiple voices, not pleading, not threatening, but demanding."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2901
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount92
adverbRatio0.0317132023440193
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.005170630816959669
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences171
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences171
mean19.63
std8.79
cv0.448
sampleLengths
030
133
26
33
419
511
619
710
810
923
1028
1128
1233
1314
1424
1520
163
1717
1820
1925
2018
2128
2216
2323
2414
2511
2624
2726
2821
2930
3023
3127
3219
3313
3426
3517
3621
378
3825
3925
4022
4122
4216
4324
4428
4515
467
4719
4810
496
35.96% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats24
diversityRatio0.2046783625730994
totalSentences171
uniqueOpeners35
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences165
matches
0"Then it’s replaced by the"
1"Then he started moving again,"
2"Then he spoke again, his"
3"Then a scream split the"
4"Then, from the dark, a"
ratio0.03
91.52% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount53
totalSentences165
matches
0"He juked through a narrow"
1"He knows these streets, I"
2"I know him."
3"It only lets you know"
4"I hissed under my breath,"
5"He skidded past a messenger"
6"I slowed only long enough"
7"I didn’t answer."
8"I dashed through the narrowing"
9"He was gone into the"
10"We traded a breath’s worth"
11"You don’t catch a man"
12"He slowed at the threshold,"
13"We didn’t speak the same"
14"It wasn’t the Market speaking,"
15"He threaded a path between"
16"He knew I’d follow, even"
17"I replied, not giving him"
18"I studied the ground, checking"
19"I stepped closer to Herrera,"
ratio0.321
11.52% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount148
totalSentences165
matches
0"Boots hammered the slick cobbles"
1"He juked through a narrow"
2"He knows these streets, I"
3"I know him."
4"The Saint Christopher medallion at"
5"Herrera—Tomás—hunted the same shadows I"
6"The man wasn’t built to"
7"The first heartbeat of fear"
8"It only lets you know"
9"I hissed under my breath,"
10"A shiver of rain hissed"
11"He skidded past a messenger"
12"I slowed only long enough"
13"The shout came as a"
14"I didn’t answer."
15"I dashed through the narrowing"
16"He was gone into the"
17"The kind of place you"
18"A metallic clang echoed somewhere"
19"We traded a breath’s worth"
ratio0.897
60.61% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences165
matches
0"If I stepped through, I’d"
1"If I stayed, I’d be"
ratio0.012
42.33% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences135
technicalSentenceCount19
matches
0"He juked through a narrow alley, a final, reckless pivot that sprayed rivulets from a half-rotted crate, and I cut in behind him, breath slicing the air that ta…"
1"The passage broadened into a cavernous hollow lined with stalls that flickered in and out of existence, as if the place remembered more than it revealed."
2"He slowed at the threshold, watching the space with that practiced caution of someone who’d learned to live off the edge of danger."
3"Herrera moved with the same understated menace that had defined him since the day we had first met—quiet, efficient, untrusting of everything that wasn’t useful…"
4"The market’s guardians watched us with pale eyes—silent, expressionless, as if they’d forgotten how to blink."
5"The bark of a vendor’s cry—an offer for something that could bend reality—grazed my ear."
6"The alley that led down here had become a trap, a spine of stone and memory, and Herrera’s silhouette moved with a certain certainty I recognised: the certainty…"
7"A vendor whispered something to another beneath a veil, and their whispered bargain carried on a current of danger that brushed my skin."
8"Then he started moving again, deeper into the Market’s labyrinth, the crowd bending around him as if he walked through water."
9"Herrera ducked behind a stall that sold what looked like weathered maps from a past century, the kind that folded and refolded into new places, ideas, and lies."
10"The stalls dissolved in a shimmer of light and shadow, as if the Market were trying to hide its own truth behind a curtain of illusion."
11"Herrera paused at a doorway that opened into a dim corridor, and the corridor’s walls bore carved runes with a warmth that suggested a warmth of some other worl…"
12"The tunnel widened, and a sullen light appeared up ahead: a seam in the rock that opened into a room bright with a strange, unnatural light."
13"The Market’s subterranean room hummed with life—bargains struck in hushed tones, the exchange of blood and breath for the kind of power that could not be named …"
14"And then the floor beneath us lurched, a tremor that sent crates tumbling and bodies scattering."
15"The Market opened to reveal a hidden back room, bookshelf doors sighing as they shifted, a shelf sliding aside to reveal a space that did not exist in the dayli…"
16"The stranger finally spoke, his voice a whisper that carried the sound of bells through a cathedral’s nave."
17"The Market hummed in a low, anticipatory note, as if the walls waited for us to choose the next moment’s violence."
18"And behind it all, the question that would haunt me as I walked back through the rain-slicked streets to the surface: would I follow him deeper, or would I pull…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"a voice whispered, and the echo rolled down the tunnel like a wave"
1"Herrera breathed softly, as if the word itself tasted like something addictive and dangerous"
2"I replied, not giving him the satisfaction of surprise"
3"he said, his tone flat, almost compassionate in its clarity"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags13
fancyCount7
fancyTags
0"I hissed (hiss)"
1"a voice whispered (whisper)"
2"Herrera breathed softly (breathe)"
3"Herrera whispered (whisper)"
4"He spoke again (speak)"
5"A voice from behind the counter hissed (hiss)"
6"He spoke softly (speak)"
dialogueSentences20
tagDensity0.65
leniency1
rawRatio0.538
effectiveRatio0.538
70.1963%