Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTY7N3Q3Q1DQFCAVQ403DP1

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49.7s
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$0.041955

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The rain turned the pavement into a slick mirror, reflecting the neon signs of Soho's late-night establishments. Detective Harlow Quinn's worn leather boots found purchase on the wet stone as she pursued the fleeing figure ahead. Her suspect darted between the queue outside a kebab shop, sending drunk university students stumbling into each other. Quinn's sharp jaw clenched as she followed, her salt-and-pepper hair already plastered to her skull despite the brief chase. "Metropolitan Police! Stop!" The figure didn't slow. Quinn caught a glimpse of olive skin and short curly hair as he glanced back. Tomás Herrera. The unlicensed medic she'd been tracking for three weeks. Always one step ahead, always vanishing when she got close. Her worn leather watch caught the streetlight as she vaulted over a toppled bicycle. Eighteen years of decorated service had taught her to read a runner's patterns. Herrera wasn't panicking. He was leading her somewhere. The realisation struck as they passed the distinctive green neon sign of The Raven's Nest. This wasn't a chase. It was an invitation. Herrera ducked left into the narrow alley beside the bar. Quinn hesitated for a heartbeat. The alley led to the old Camden railway tunnels, abandoned since the Blitz. Perfect place for an ambush. She followed anyway. The alley reeked of stale beer and something sharper, medicinal. Blood, maybe. Quinn's hand moved instinctively to her radio, but the static hiss told her what she already suspected. The old brick walls played havoc with signals down here. Herrera's footsteps echoed ahead, growing fainter. Quinn quickened her pace, water dripping from her closely cropped hair. The alley narrowed, forcing her to turn sideways between the brick walls. Then the footsteps stopped. Quinn froze, listening. Rain drummed on the fire escapes above. A cat yowled somewhere in the darkness. But no footsteps. She pulled out her torch, the beam cutting through the gloom. Empty bottles littered the ground. Graffiti covered the walls in languages she couldn't read. And there, at the far end of the alley, a hole in the wall where bricks had been removed. Fresh mortar dust on the ground. Quinn crouched beside the opening. The torch beam revealed a tunnel sloping downward, carved from the same London clay that had swallowed Roman settlements and plague victims alike. The air that wafted up smelled of candles and something else. Spices, maybe. Incense. This was it. The decision point that separated good coppers from dead ones. She thought of DS Morris. Three years since they'd found him in the old Smithfield tunnels, no obvious cause of death. The post-mortem had been inconclusive. Heart failure, the coroner had ruled. But Morris had been thirty-four and fit as a racehorse. "Bugger it." Quinn squeezed through the opening. The tunnel descended at a steep angle, forcing her to brace against the walls. Her torch beam revealed tool marks in the clay, precise and deliberate. This wasn't some Victorian sewer or war-time shelter. Someone had carved this recently. The spice smell grew stronger. Cinnamon and cardamom, but underneath, something organic and unpleasant. Like meat left too long in the sun. The tunnel leveled out and opened into a wider space. Quinn's torch swept across carved pillars and archways that belonged in a cathedral, not under Camden's streets. The ceiling disappeared into shadow above. Voices echoed from deeper in the tunnels. Multiple conversations in different languages. Spanish, she recognised. Something Eastern European. And underneath it all, a rhythmic chanting that raised the hairs on her neck. Quinn switched off her torch. Better to let her eyes adjust than announce her presence. She crept forward, using the carved pillars for cover. The tunnel opened into a vast underground chamber. Candles flickered on makeshift stalls arranged in rough rows. People moved between them, examining goods laid out on blankets and wooden tables. The air thrummed with whispered negotiations and the clink of coins changing hands. An underground market. Hidden beneath London like a secret city. Quinn pressed herself against a pillar and watched. A woman with intricate tattoos covering her scalp haggled over what looked like dried herbs. A man in an expensive suit examined a collection of antique knives. Two teenagers passed a small bottle between them, inhaling whatever was inside. None of it looked legal. She scanned the crowd for Herrera's distinctive silhouette. There. Near a stall selling what appeared to be old medical equipment. He was deep in conversation with a tall man whose face remained hidden in shadow. Quinn edged closer, using the market's natural chaos for cover. A vendor tried to catch her attention, holding up a necklace that seemed to pulse with its own light. She ignored him, focused on Herrera. "The detective's here." The words froze her blood. The tall man had spoken without turning around, but somehow Quinn knew he was addressing her. Herrera turned. Even in the candlelight, she could see the Saint Christopher medallion glinting at his throat. "Detective Quinn." His accent carried the warm cadences of southern Spain. "You're persistent." "Tomás Herrera, you're under arrest for practising medicine without a licence." The words sounded absurd in this underground cathedral of illegal commerce. Several nearby vendors chuckled. "Am I?" Herrera stepped forward. "You're not exactly in Magistrates' Court territory, Detective." Quinn's hand moved to her radio again. Still static. "This market operates under different rules," the tall man said. His voice carried an authority that made the nearby conversations quiet. "Surface law doesn't apply here." "Surface law applies everywhere in London." "Does it?" The man finally turned. His face was angular, almost aristocratic, with eyes that seemed older than his apparent age. "Tell me, Detective, what happened to your partner three years ago?" Morris. The question hit like a physical blow. "Heart failure." "In tunnels much like these." The man stepped closer. "Pursuing suspects into places where surface rules don't apply." The market had gone quiet around them. Quinn became aware of dozens of eyes watching the exchange. Predatory. Patient. "Surface dwellers who venture too deep sometimes find more than they bargained for," the man continued. "Your partner learned that lesson." Quinn's hand found her radio again. Still nothing but static. "But you already knew that, didn't you?" The man smiled, revealing teeth that were too sharp. "Otherwise you wouldn't be here. Wouldn't be following breadcrumbs into the dark." Herrera shifted uncomfortably. Whatever this was, it was beyond his comfort zone too. "The question, Detective, is what you plan to do with what you've found." Quinn looked around the market. The illegal goods. The impossible architecture. The people who moved like shadows made flesh. Her phone buzzed. Text message. *QUINN WHERE ARE YOU BACKUP EN ROUTE YOUR SIGNAL DROPPED* Davies. Her current partner. Probably already at the alley entrance, calling for armed response. The tall man read her expression. "Choices, Detective. Call your friends. Drag surface law down into the depths. See how well it protects you." Quinn's thumb hovered over her phone's reply button. "Or?" "Learn why your partner really died. Learn what's been happening in London's forgotten places. Learn why some missing persons stay missing." The candles flickered as if blown by an unfelt wind. The shadows between the stalls seemed to move independently of their sources. Quinn looked at Herrera. At the tall man with his impossible smile. At the market that shouldn't exist. Her phone buzzed again. *ARMED RESPONSE ETA 5 MINUTES* Five minutes to decide. Five minutes to choose between the world she knew and the one that had been hiding beneath it. The world that had killed Morris. The world that might finally give her answers.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags6
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.25
leniency0.5
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
96.07% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1272
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
33.18% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1272
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"jaw clenched"
count1
1
word"perfect"
count1
2
word"footsteps"
count3
3
word"echoed"
count2
4
word"quickened"
count1
5
word"gloom"
count1
6
word"rhythmic"
count1
7
word"flickered"
count2
8
word"intricate"
count1
9
word"scanned"
count1
10
word"pulse"
count1
11
word"glinting"
count1
12
word"depths"
count1
highlights
0"jaw clenched"
1"perfect"
2"footsteps"
3"echoed"
4"quickened"
5"gloom"
6"rhythmic"
7"flickered"
8"intricate"
9"scanned"
10"pulse"
11"glinting"
12"depths"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences137
matches(empty)
90.72% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences137
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"appeared to"
1"seemed to"
2"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences154
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen23
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords15
totalWords1266
ratio0.012
matches
0"QUINN WHERE ARE YOU BACKUP EN ROUTE YOUR SIGNAL DROPPED"
1"ARMED RESPONSE ETA 5 MINUTES"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
58.84% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions54
wordCount1097
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity1.82
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Harlow1
Quinn20
Herrera10
Raven1
Nest1
Camden2
Blitz1
London2
Roman1
Morris4
Smithfield1
Victorian1
Eastern1
European1
Saint1
Christopher1
Spain1
Davies1
Five2
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Herrera"
3"Raven"
4"Camden"
5"Roman"
6"Morris"
7"Saint"
8"Christopher"
9"Davies"
places
0"Soho"
1"London"
2"Spain"
globalScore0.588
windowScore0.667
58.54% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences82
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"looked like dried herbs"
1"necklace that seemed to pulse with its own light"
2"seemed older than his apparent age"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1266
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences154
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs65
mean19.48
std13.11
cv0.673
sampleLengths
036
137
23
340
435
523
633
73
839
929
104
1120
1244
136
1442
1513
1642
172
185
1939
2022
2133
2232
2324
2443
2510
2647
275
2835
2935
303
3121
3217
3313
3411
3515
3613
379
3826
396
4032
418
422
4318
4419
4521
4610
4728
4813
4913
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences137
matches
0"been removed"
94.74% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs190
matches
0"wasn't panicking"
1"was leading"
2"was addressing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences154
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1103
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount33
adverbRatio0.029918404351767906
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.009066183136899365
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences154
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences154
mean8.22
std5
cv0.608
sampleLengths
017
119
218
319
43
54
615
72
89
910
1014
1113
123
135
1415
154
164
1710
185
1913
205
213
2210
232
2417
2510
266
2711
2812
294
303
317
327
333
3411
355
369
3719
386
395
4023
4111
422
431
443
4510
465
4716
485
496
68.61% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.45454545454545453
totalSentences154
uniqueOpeners70
80.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences125
matches
0"Always one step ahead, always"
1"Then the footsteps stopped."
2"Probably already at the alley"
ratio0.024
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount18
totalSentences125
matches
0"Her suspect darted between the"
1"Her worn leather watch caught"
2"He was leading her somewhere."
3"It was an invitation."
4"She followed anyway."
5"She pulled out her torch,"
6"She thought of DS Morris."
7"Her torch beam revealed tool"
8"She crept forward, using the"
9"She scanned the crowd for"
10"He was deep in conversation"
11"She ignored him, focused on"
12"His accent carried the warm"
13"His voice carried an authority"
14"His face was angular, almost"
15"Her phone buzzed."
16"Her current partner."
17"Her phone buzzed again."
ratio0.144
64.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount99
totalSentences125
matches
0"The rain turned the pavement"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn's worn leather"
2"Her suspect darted between the"
3"Quinn's sharp jaw clenched as"
4"The figure didn't slow."
5"Quinn caught a glimpse of"
6"The unlicensed medic she'd been"
7"Her worn leather watch caught"
8"Herrera wasn't panicking."
9"He was leading her somewhere."
10"The realisation struck as they"
11"This wasn't a chase."
12"It was an invitation."
13"Herrera ducked left into the"
14"Quinn hesitated for a heartbeat."
15"The alley led to the"
16"She followed anyway."
17"The alley reeked of stale"
18"Quinn's hand moved instinctively to"
19"The old brick walls played"
ratio0.792
40.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences125
matches
0"Even in the candlelight, she"
ratio0.008
85.71% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences50
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"The torch beam revealed a tunnel sloping downward, carved from the same London clay that had swallowed Roman settlements and plague victims alike."
1"And underneath it all, a rhythmic chanting that raised the hairs on her neck."
2"His voice carried an authority that made the nearby conversations quiet."
3"His face was angular, almost aristocratic, with eyes that seemed older than his apparent age."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags6
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"the man continued (continue)"
dialogueSentences24
tagDensity0.083
leniency0.167
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.083
89.0137%