Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTY8K3MBT053301WCMFXAMG

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The suspect's boot caught the edge of a bin. He stumbled, recovered, disappeared around the corner into the alley. Quinn followed. Her shoulder struck brick as she took the turn too fast, but momentum carried her forward. Rain plastered her hair to her skull and ran in cold rivulets down the back of her collar. She ignored it. The figure ahead had slowed, one hand pressed against his side. Blood seeped between his fingers, dark even in the sodium-orange glow of the streetlamp at the alley's mouth. "Stop! Police!" He didn't. Of course he didn't. They never did. Quinn's boots splashed through a puddle that had once been someone's discarded takeaway. The smell of sour curry mixed with the metallic tang of rain and the faint ozone that always hung over London after midnight. Her lungs burned. Three weeks since her last fitness assessment, and she felt every skipped cardio session. The suspect burst through a gate, its hinges screaming rust. A backyard. Another garden. Then another gate, another wall to vault. Quinn followed, her worn leather watch catching on a nail as she hauled herself over. The strap held. Barely. She landed hard on the other side. Her knees protested. *Thirty-eight more steps.* That's how close he'd been when she'd first spotted him outside the Raven's Nest, climbing out of a back window. Thirty-eight steps and closing. Now he had maybe twenty. "Tomás!" She gambled on the name. The clinic's records had listed a Tomás Herrera, former paramedic, current person of interest in three unsolved assaults with unusual wound patterns. The kind of wounds that made pathologists scratch their heads and reach for stronger coffee. The figure's stride faltered. Just for a second. *Bingo.* They'd reached Camden now, or the rotting edge of it. Closed-up shops with graffitied shutters. A kebab place still belching grease-smoke into the wet air. A pub whose windows flickered with the blue-white of late-night telly. The suspect cut left, down a service road that led toward the old Tube entrance. Quinn knew this area. Knew it was supposed to be sealed. Transport for London had boarded it up six years ago after a structural survey deemed it unsafe. The stairs had crumbled. The tunnels flooded. Standard bureaucratic death trap. The suspect didn't slow. He grabbed a drainpipe, swung himself up onto a low roof, and dropped down the other side. Quinn followed. Her fingers found purchase on wet brick, slipped, found it again. She hauled herself up, over, down. Her landing was graceless, ankle turning on loose rubble, but she stayed upright. The old station entrance gaped ahead. No boards. No warning signs. Just an open mouth of darkness that swallowed the ambient city glow and gave nothing back. The suspect stood at the top of the stairs. He turned. For the first time, Quinn saw his face clearly. Young. Late twenties, maybe. Olive skin gone pale from blood loss. Dark curly hair plastered to his forehead. A Saint Christopher medallion glinted at his throat, incongruous against the dried blood on his shirt. "You don't want to follow me down there, Detective." His accent held traces of Seville. His English was perfect, but the rhythm was wrong. Too careful. "Trust me." "Trust a fugitive? Not my best idea." "I'm not running from you." "Could've fooled me." He glanced down the stairs. Something moved in the darkness below. Quinn caught the suggestion of movement, heard the soft shuffle of feet on concrete. More than one person. More than a few. "I'm running from what happens if I stop." He took a step backward, descending. "You have no idea what you're walking into." "Then enlighten me." "The Veil Market doesn't welcome police. Doesn't welcome anyone without a token." His hand pressed harder against his wound. "You follow me down there, you're not a detective anymore. You're prey." Quinn's hand moved to her hip. Her fingers found her warrant card, her radio, her baton. The standard arsenal of a Metropolitan Police detective. None of it felt adequate. *Three years ago. Morris. The case they'd never closed. The things she'd seen in that warehouse that she'd written up as "unexplained electrical phenomenon" because the truth would have landed her in psychiatric evaluation.* She'd spent three years trying to convince herself she'd imagined it. That the shadows had moved wrong because of stress. Sleep deprivation. Grief. But she hadn't imagined the claw marks on Morris's body. She hadn't imagined the way his eyes had looked afterward. Empty. Wrong. "Who hurt you?" she asked. Tomás laughed. The sound was brittle. "You wouldn't believe me." "Try." "A patient. Or what used to be one. I treated someone I shouldn't have, and now the Market wants to know who approved the supplies I used." Another step down. He was nearly out of sight now. "They're already unhappy with me. Showing up bleeding through their front door with a copper on my tail? That's a death sentence." "So you're going down there anyway." "It's either the Market or what's hunting me." He smiled, but it didn't reach his eyes. "At least the Market has rules. Sort of." Quinn stood at the top of the stairs. Rain hammered against her shoulders. Somewhere below, she heard voices. The clink of glass. A laugh, high and strange, that didn't sound entirely human. *Walk away. Call it in. Wait for backup like a sensible detective with eighteen years of service.* But backup would ask questions. Backup would want to know why she'd been staking out the Raven's Nest on her own time. Backup would file reports that would land on the wrong desks, alert the wrong people, and Tomás Herrera would vanish into whatever underground network had protected him so far. She took a step down. "Detective." Tomás's voice was quieter now. Almost gentle. "I lost my medical license because I treated a woman who was turning into something else. Something that shouldn't exist. The GMC didn't believe me. The police didn't believe me. No one believed me until I found people who'd seen the same things." Another step. Quinn's hand found the wall. The stone was slick with moisture that didn't feel like rain. Something about the texture made her skin crawl. "You're saying monsters are real." "I'm saying the world is bigger than the forms you file." She could still turn back. The rain would wash away any evidence she'd been here. She could go home, pour herself a drink, and pretend tonight was just another dead-end lead. But Morris had been her partner. Her friend. And whatever had killed him was still out there, walking through a world she'd spent three years pretending didn't exist. "How do I get in?" Tomás's eyebrows rose. "You'd need a bone token. They check at the door." "Where do I get one?" "You don't. They're not exactly sold at Tesco." Quinn reached the bottom of the stairs. The tunnel stretched ahead, lit by lanterns that cast strange shadows on the curved walls. The smell hit her next, old copper and something sweet, like decay disguised with perfume. The sounds of the market drifted toward her. Cries of vendors. The rattle of coins. Whispers in languages she didn't recognize. A figure materialized from the darkness. Tall. Cloaked. A face that was all angles and shadows, with eyes that reflected the lantern light like a cat's. "Token," it said. "She's with me," Tomás said. His voice was steadier now, though his hand still pressed against his wound. "Under my protection. For tonight." The figure turned those reflective eyes toward Quinn. Studied her. She felt the weight of that gaze like fingers against her skull, rifling through her thoughts. "One night," the figure said finally. "After that, she's fair game." It stepped aside. Tomás moved forward, then paused. Looked back at her. "Last chance to walk away, Detective." Quinn thought of Morris. Thought of the reports she'd filed and the ones she'd shredded. Thought of all the cases over eighteen years that had ended with suspects who shouldn't have been able to do what they'd done, victims whose wounds didn't match any weapon known to forensics. She followed him into the dark.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"the figure said finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.314
leniency0.629
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.057
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1368
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
81.73% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1368
totalAiIsms5
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"standard"
count2
2
word"perfect"
count1
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word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"standard"
2"perfect"
3"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences144
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences144
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"tend to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences167
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen43
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans4
markdownWords55
totalWords1361
ratio0.04
matches
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1"Bingo."
2"Three years ago. Morris. The case they'd never closed. The things she'd seen in that warehouse that she'd written up as \"unexplained electrical phenomenon\" because the truth would have landed her in psychiatric evaluation."
3"Walk away. Call it in. Wait for backup like a sensible detective with eighteen years of service."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions8
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
90.75% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions40
wordCount1097
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity1.19
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Tomás"
discoveredNames
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Raven2
Nest2
Tomás7
Herrera2
Camden1
Tube1
Quinn13
Saint1
Christopher1
Seville1
English1
Metropolitan1
Police1
Morris4
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Tomás"
3"Herrera"
4"Quinn"
5"Saint"
6"Christopher"
7"Morris"
places
0"London"
1"Seville"
globalScore0.907
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences73
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1361
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences167
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs61
mean22.31
std17.64
cv0.791
sampleLengths
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453
540
610
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108
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1421
1532
1627
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213
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3632
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100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences144
matches
0"was supposed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs191
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences167
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1104
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"former paramedic, current person"
adverbCount35
adverbRatio0.03170289855072464
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.006340579710144928
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences167
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences167
mean8.15
std6.79
cv0.834
sampleLengths
09
110
22
316
418
53
611
718
82
92
104
113
1213
1323
143
1514
1610
172
182
197
2015
213
221
237
243
2523
264
275
286
2922
3015
314
324
331
3410
355
3610
3711
3815
394
407
4117
424
433
444
454
4617
472
4811
496
65.07% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats13
diversityRatio0.437125748502994
totalSentences167
uniqueOpeners73
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount8
totalSentences117
matches
0"Of course he didn't."
1"Then another gate, another wall"
2"Just for a second."
3"Just an open mouth of"
4"Dark curly hair plastered to"
5"More than one person."
6"More than a few."
7"Somewhere below, she heard voices."
ratio0.068
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount30
totalSentences117
matches
0"He stumbled, recovered, disappeared around"
1"Her shoulder struck brick as"
2"She ignored it."
3"They never did."
4"Her lungs burned."
5"She landed hard on the"
6"Her knees protested."
7"She gambled on the name"
8"They'd reached Camden now, or"
9"He grabbed a drainpipe, swung"
10"Her fingers found purchase on"
11"She hauled herself up, over,"
12"Her landing was graceless, ankle"
13"His accent held traces of"
14"His English was perfect, but"
15"He glanced down the stairs."
16"He took a step backward,"
17"His hand pressed harder against"
18"Her fingers found her warrant"
19"She'd spent three years trying"
ratio0.256
83.93% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount88
totalSentences117
matches
0"The suspect's boot caught the"
1"He stumbled, recovered, disappeared around"
2"Her shoulder struck brick as"
3"Rain plastered her hair to"
4"She ignored it."
5"The figure ahead had slowed,"
6"Blood seeped between his fingers,"
7"They never did."
8"Quinn's boots splashed through a"
9"The smell of sour curry"
10"Her lungs burned."
11"The suspect burst through a"
12"Quinn followed, her worn leather"
13"The strap held."
14"She landed hard on the"
15"Her knees protested."
16"*Thirty-eight more steps.* That's how"
17"She gambled on the name"
18"The clinic's records had listed"
19"The kind of wounds that"
ratio0.752
42.74% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences117
matches
0"Now he had maybe twenty."
ratio0.009
76.41% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences43
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"*Thirty-eight more steps.* That's how close he'd been when she'd first spotted him outside the Raven's Nest, climbing out of a back window."
1"Backup would file reports that would land on the wrong desks, alert the wrong people, and Tomás Herrera would vanish into whatever underground network had prote…"
2"A face that was all angles and shadows, with eyes that reflected the lantern light like a cat's."
3"Thought of all the cases over eighteen years that had ended with suspects who shouldn't have been able to do what they'd done, victims whose wounds didn't match…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"His hand pressed (press)"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.143
leniency0.286
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.057
94.4874%