Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTYDXR32Q6MJS28TF780WVW

Run Details

Duration:
2m 39s
Cost:
$0.024112
Provider:
Together

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The Saint Christopher medallion swung wild as he vaulted the Camden Road barrier. Quinn's worn leather watch strap dug into her left wrist, the cracked face catching sodium light. Eighteen years of decorated service had drilled military precision into her bones, yet her breath came ragged now, hot against the driving rain. She cleared the same barrier without breaking stride, her service shoes sliding on the wet metal. Traffic thundered overhead on the High Street, but down here, in the service alleys behind the Lock Market, the sound muffled into a wet thrum. Her heart hammered against her ribs. Some hunts required velocity over tactics. Herrera's short curly hair vanished around the corner of the old dairy building. She knew that distinctive scar on his left forearm, pale against olive skin, the souvenir from a knife attack in Seville before the NHS had licensed him, before they'd stripped that license for treating things that refused medical charts. He moved like a man who understood exactly where sanctuary waited. Rain drilled the pavement. It plastered her salt-and-pepper crop against her sharp jaw and soaked through her tactical jacket. She'd lost her umbrella at The Raven's Nest three hours ago, abandoned it beside the sticky bar when Herrera had bolted from the hidden back room, recognition flooding his warm brown eyes. He'd seen her badge before she'd even flashed it. "Police!" The word dissolved in the downpour. He didn't hesitate. He sprinted past the shuttered kebab shops and darkened charity stores, weaving toward the canal. Quinn's longer stride ate the distance between them. Her fingers brushed her holster. No backup tonight. No partner to watch her six. She calculated the gap. Four metres. Then three. Her fingertips grazed the damp cotton of his shirt. He twisted. The scar whipped past her vision. He dodged left, toward the canal, then vaulted a low wall and dropped onto the towpath below. She followed. Her landing sent shockwaves through her knees. Three years since Morris had died in circumstances the coroner had sealed with Classification 4 stamps. Three years of hunting the edges of cases that smelled of ozone and copper instead of blood. The abandoned Tube station at Kentish Town West rose from the urban decay like a broken tooth. Herrera hit the service stairs running. Chains hung loose across the entrance, the padlock open, gleaming new brass against rusted iron. He slipped through the gap and vanished into the dark maw. Quinn paused. Her torch beam caught the warning signs. Trespassers Prosecuted. Danger of Death. Beneath the standard Metropolitan Police notices, older symbols marked the brickwork, white paint that looked almost like bone fragments arranged in patterns. The air here tasted different. Sharp. Electric. Like the air in Morris's flat during those final weeks when he'd stopped sleeping and started watching the shadows. She knew about thresholds. Morris had whispered about them, raving about markets that moved with the moon, about tokens carved from femurs that opened doors between worlds. She'd filed the reports herself, attributed his paranoia to stress. Now she stood before a door that shouldn't be open, smelling air that shouldn't exist in London, chasing a man who stitched wounds for creatures that lacked medical records. Her Glock felt heavy against her ribs. No bone token hung around her neck. The entry requirement glowed faintly on a discoloured sign: Veil Market. Full Moon. Bone Key. The moon hung full overhead, invisible behind the storm clouds but pressing down with tidal certainty. Herrera's footsteps had stopped. Silence waited below. She touched Morris's old case number, three-two-four, tattooed in her memory, and stepped through the gap. The stairs spiralled down far deeper than the station's blueprints allowed. The walls sweated moisture that felt thick, almost gelatinous. Her torch flickered, then steadied, revealing brickwork etched with market scenes: figures trading eyes for gold, hands for secrets, breath for time. The temperature dropped. Her breath misted. Then the stairs ended. Quinn emerged onto a platform that stretched into impossible distance. The abandoned station had transformed. Stalls of dark wood and living bone lined tracks where trains no longer ran. Phosphorescent fungi provided sickly green light, illuminating vendors with too many joints in their fingers or none at all. Glass jars filled with swirling purple vapours lined one table. Another vendor sold bottled screams that rattled against their corks. The metallic scent of myrrh and copper stung Quinn's nostrils. A creature with skin like wet clay arranged vials of liquid mercury on a counter carved from a single sternum. Herrera stood at the edge of the platform, his medallion catching the fungal light. He turned. His chest heaved. The panic in his eyes wasn't for himself. "You shouldn't have followed." A vendor with a face obscured by layers of silk stepped forward. The silk moved, breathing. "No entry without token," it said. The voice was dust and velvet. Every merchant on the platform stopped. Heads turned. Eyes, some clustered in patterns of seven, some absent entirely, fixed on Quinn. She saw Morris's watch then, hanging from the silk vendor's belt, the worn leather strap unmistakable, the cracked face reflecting the sickly light and ticking backwards. She'd held that watch at the crime scene, searching for a second hand that refused to move. Now it counted down to something. Her hand found her Glock. "Market's closed to your kind," the silk figure said. The phosphorescent fungi dimmed. Shadows lengthened toward her boots. Herrera raised his scarred forearm, not in surrender, but warning. "Run," he whispered. But the stairs had vanished behind her. Only the tracks remained, leading into tunnels that smelled of old graves and fresh power. "Detective Quinn," a new voice called from the dark. It knew her name. A figure stepped from the shadows, wearing the face of a man she'd buried three years ago. Morris's face, but wrong, stretched too tight across the skull. "We've been expecting someone from the Met. Your partner left debts unpaid. The Market remembers." The vendors leaned forward. The air thickened, pressing against her eardrums. The Glock cleared leather. The click sounded very small against the sudden hush. Something wet wrapped around her ankle. "Shit," she said. The lights went out.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags6
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences8
tagDensity0.75
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.18% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1037
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
22.85% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1037
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"thundered"
count1
1
word"sanctuary"
count1
2
word"calculated"
count1
3
word"gleaming"
count1
4
word"maw"
count1
5
word"standard"
count1
6
word"electric"
count1
7
word"footsteps"
count1
8
word"silence"
count1
9
word"flickered"
count1
10
word"etched"
count1
11
word"silk"
count4
12
word"velvet"
count1
highlights
0"thundered"
1"sanctuary"
2"calculated"
3"gleaming"
4"maw"
5"standard"
6"electric"
7"footsteps"
8"silence"
9"flickered"
10"etched"
11"silk"
12"velvet"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences105
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences105
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences107
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1033
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions46
wordCount1000
uniqueNames28
maxNameDensity0.6
worstName"Herrera"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Morris"
discoveredNames
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Christopher1
Camden1
Road1
High1
Street1
Lock1
Market2
Seville1
Raven1
Nest1
Herrera6
Morris6
Classification1
Tube1
Kentish1
Town1
West1
Prosecuted1
Death1
Metropolitan1
Police1
London1
Glock3
Veil1
Moon1
Key1
Quinn6
persons
0"Saint"
1"Christopher"
2"Market"
3"Herrera"
4"Morris"
5"Metropolitan"
6"Glock"
7"Moon"
8"Quinn"
places
0"Camden"
1"Road"
2"High"
3"Street"
4"Seville"
5"Raven"
6"Kentish"
7"Town"
8"West"
9"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences66
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.968
wordCount1033
matches
0"not in surrender, but warning"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences107
matches
0"stripped that license"
1"held that watch"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs32
mean32.28
std28.08
cv0.87
sampleLengths
013
192
263
360
47
557
667
749
862
966
1029
1116
127
1316
1448
154
1698
1727
184
1916
2012
2170
225
239
2419
253
2622
2755
2824
296
303
314
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences105
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs176
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences107
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1004
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"open, gleaming new brass"
adverbCount27
adverbRatio0.026892430278884463
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.0069721115537848604
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences107
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences107
mean9.65
std7.3
cv0.756
sampleLengths
013
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223
316
425
56
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104
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1232
139
147
153
1615
178
185
193
206
214
222
232
249
252
266
2717
282
297
3016
3117
3217
336
3415
3511
362
377
382
393
4022
415
421
431
4419
454
4623
4710
4829
497
65.73% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.4392523364485981
totalSentences107
uniqueOpeners47
74.07% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences90
matches
0"Then the stairs ended."
1"Only the tracks remained, leading"
ratio0.022
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences90
matches
0"She cleared the same barrier"
1"Her heart hammered against her"
2"She knew that distinctive scar"
3"He moved like a man"
4"It plastered her salt-and-pepper crop"
5"She'd lost her umbrella at"
6"He'd seen her badge before"
7"He didn't hesitate."
8"He sprinted past the shuttered"
9"Her fingers brushed her holster."
10"She calculated the gap."
11"Her fingertips grazed the damp"
12"He dodged left, toward the"
13"Her landing sent shockwaves through"
14"He slipped through the gap"
15"Her torch beam caught the"
16"She knew about thresholds."
17"She'd filed the reports herself,"
18"Her Glock felt heavy against"
19"She touched Morris's old case"
ratio0.3
37.78% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount76
totalSentences90
matches
0"The Saint Christopher medallion swung"
1"Quinn's worn leather watch strap"
2"She cleared the same barrier"
3"Traffic thundered overhead on the"
4"Her heart hammered against her"
5"Some hunts required velocity over"
6"Herrera's short curly hair vanished"
7"She knew that distinctive scar"
8"He moved like a man"
9"Rain drilled the pavement."
10"It plastered her salt-and-pepper crop"
11"She'd lost her umbrella at"
12"He'd seen her badge before"
13"The word dissolved in the"
14"He didn't hesitate."
15"He sprinted past the shuttered"
16"Quinn's longer stride ate the"
17"Her fingers brushed her holster."
18"She calculated the gap."
19"Her fingertips grazed the damp"
ratio0.844
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences90
matches
0"Now she stood before a"
1"Now it counted down to"
ratio0.022
93.02% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences43
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"She knew that distinctive scar on his left forearm, pale against olive skin, the souvenir from a knife attack in Seville before the NHS had licensed him, before…"
1"Beneath the standard Metropolitan Police notices, older symbols marked the brickwork, white paint that looked almost like bone fragments arranged in patterns."
2"Now she stood before a door that shouldn't be open, smelling air that shouldn't exist in London, chasing a man who stitched wounds for creatures that lacked med…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags6
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
50.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"he whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences8
tagDensity0.625
leniency1
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.2
91.0880%