Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTYJ9CRNJ272W8T3SZY8YDG

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Duration:
20.5s
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$0.012820
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Anthropic

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
# Chapter: Into the Veil Detective Harlow Quinn's lungs burned as she rounded the corner onto Tottenham Court Road, her worn leather watch catching the amber streetlights. The rain hammered against the pavement in fat, aggressive drops that turned the tarmac into a sheet of black glass. Her target was fifty metres ahead, moving with the kind of panicked desperation only the guilty possessed. She'd clocked him leaving The Raven's Nest twenty minutes ago. Dark hoodie pulled low. Hand stuffed in his jacket pocket where something rectangular pressed against the fabric. He'd hesitated for precisely three seconds upon catching her eye—that microcosm of hesitation that told her everything. Guilty. Absolutely guilty. Quinn pushed harder, her thighs protesting. Eighteen years on the Metropolitan Police meant her knees weren't what they used to be, but her mind remained sharp as broken glass. The suspect ducked left onto an alley between a shuttered Vietnamese restaurant and a late-night phone repair shop, their windows plastered with handwritten adverts for cash for gold. She followed without thinking. The alley compressed the city, turning it into a tunnel of wet brick and dripping gutters. His trainers splashed through puddles that reflected the occasional neon spill from the main street. Quinn closed the distance. His breathing had turned ragged, panicked. He was young, maybe mid-twenties, built for running away rather than toward anything. At the alley's far end, he made a choice that surprised her. Instead of continuing into the maze of Camden's side streets, he descended. Concrete steps led downward, disappearing into darkness. A rusted sign above the entrance read "Warren Street Station—Closed to Public." The words had been there for decades, faded into the architectural backdrop of London that most people learned to ignore. Storm drains maybe. Utility tunnels. The sort of infrastructure the city buried and forgot about. Quinn slowed at the top of the stairs. Her hand moved instinctively to the torch on her belt. She could call for backup. Should call for backup. A closed Underground station qualified as the sort of confined space that invited complications. But by the time uniforms arrived, the suspect would vanish into whatever network of tunnels ran beneath London's skin. She descended. The darkness swallowed her torch's beam almost immediately. The air tasted of rust and stagnant water. Forty steps down, maybe fifty. Her eyes adjusted to catch the faint phosphorescence of emergency exit signs that hadn't been properly maintained in years. The platform materialized from the black like a ghost ship, tiles covered in moss that felt slick under her trainers. The suspect had stopped running. He stood at the platform's far end, chest heaving, staring at something Quinn couldn't yet see. She raised her torch higher. "Detective Harlow Quinn, Metropolitan Police. Step away from the platform edge. Hands where I can see them." The beam caught his face. Pale. Sweating despite the cold. His eyes held something beyond fear—a kind of calculating desperation that made Quinn's hand drift toward her belt again, not for the torch this time. "You don't understand what you're doing," he said. His accent placed him somewhere south of the river, Peckham maybe. "You can't follow me in there." "In where? There's nothing down here but old railway tracks." But even as she said it, Quinn saw them. Lights. Not the emergency phosphorescence of abandoned infrastructure, but actual lights strung along what should have been a dark tunnel. And beyond the lights, movement. Shadows conducting some kind of business in the guts of London that nobody was supposed to know about. The memory of DS Morris surfaced, unbidden. Three years ago. A case that started with missing persons and ended with Morris disappearing into a warehouse in Hackney, emerging three days later speaking in a voice that wasn't quite his own. The official report called it a psychotic break. The unofficial conversations in pub back rooms suggested something altogether stranger. He'd put in for retirement less than a month later, and Quinn hadn't heard from him since. "You've got one chance," the suspect said. His hands remained at his sides, but his shoulders had relaxed somehow. Resignation. "Walk back up those stairs. Report me as lost in the tunnels. Assume I drowned myself. Tell them you found my shoe at Bethnal Green. Nobody will question it. You'll get commended for closing the case." Quinn kept her torch steady. Her other hand rested on the butt of her pepper spray, though something told her that would be about as effective as throwing water at a house fire. "What's down there?" "Things that don't register on the official map of this city." The lights beneath the platform intensified. Figures began moving with deliberate purpose. Not panicked. Organized. Whatever this operation was, it had infrastructure, systems, people trained in procedures. The kind of thing that didn't exist for three weeks before someone stumbled upon it in conversation. This went deep. Quinn had spent eighteen years investigating the visible crimes—theft, assault, fraud. The paperwork and evidence that fit into neat legal boxes. But that warehouse in Hackney had taught her that London contained layers she'd barely glimpsed. Threads that, when pulled, unraveled into territories where police authority meant nothing. "If I go down there," she said, "I'll need backup. I'll need to document everything." "You'll need to forget everything. And you won't get backup." The suspect stepped backward. One step. Two steps. His hands rose in a gesture that might have been surrender or might have been something else entirely. The lights below caught his silhouette, transforming him into a shadow puppet against the glow. Quinn's jaw tightened. She could see a market forming beneath the platform's edge. Stalls. Merchandise. And she recognized certain items on certain tables—the kind of objects that shouldn't exist outside locked evidence rooms and conspiracy theories. Her watch's leather band felt suddenly too tight around her wrist. The weight of eighteen years of procedure and protocol pressed against her shoulders. She could climb back up those stairs. Call it in as an equipment malfunction. Transfer the case to someone else and spend the next three years not wondering what happened to the suspect. Or she could follow. The suspect reached the platform's edge. He looked directly at her, and for just a moment, his expression changed. It wasn't fear anymore. It was something closer to pity. "Last chance, Detective." He stepped backward into the light. Quinn moved toward the platform edge, her torch cutting through the darkness. Below, the market unfolded in full detail. A bone token exchange. Alchemical bottles arranged in pyramids. And at the back, a figure she recognized with absolute certainty, though he was older than his warrant photo and moved with the careful precision of someone who'd learned to exist in spaces where normal rules of engagement no longer applied. DS Morris. Still alive. Still in London. Still very much working. Quinn's right boot touched the platform edge. Below, faces turned upward. Dozens of them. Maybe hundreds. All watching to see whether she'd continue her descent or retreat to the world above. She pulled her warrant card from her jacket pocket.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags3
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences12
tagDensity0.25
leniency0.5
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
87.43% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1193
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"precisely"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"precisely"
1"suddenly"
2"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
87.43% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1193
totalAiIsms3
found
0
word"absolutely"
count1
1
word"calculating"
count1
2
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"absolutely"
1"calculating"
2"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences110
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences110
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"watch's"
hedgeMatches
0"happened to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences118
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen41
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1186
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
88.79% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions38
wordCount1062
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity1.22
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
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Veil1
Detective1
Harlow1
Quinn13
Tottenham1
Court1
Road1
Raven1
Nest1
Metropolitan1
Police1
Vietnamese1
Camden1
London5
Underground1
Peckham1
Morris3
Hackney2
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Raven"
3"Police"
4"Camden"
5"Morris"
places
0"Veil"
1"Tottenham"
2"Court"
3"Road"
4"London"
5"Hackney"
globalScore0.888
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences66
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"quite his own"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.843
wordCount1186
matches
0"Not the emergency phosphorescence of abandoned infrastructure, but actual lights strung along what should have been a dark tunn"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences118
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs38
mean31.21
std22.45
cv0.719
sampleLengths
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247
357
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554
624
754
860
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1060
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1217
1335
1425
1510
1652
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203
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2247
2348
2415
2510
2641
2736
2857
294
3029
313
326
3369
347
354
3631
379
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences110
matches
0"was supposed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs174
matches(empty)
46.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences118
ratio0.034
matches
0"He'd hesitated for precisely three seconds upon catching her eye—that microcosm of hesitation that told her everything."
1"His eyes held something beyond fear—a kind of calculating desperation that made Quinn's hand drift toward her belt again, not for the torch this time."
2"Quinn had spent eighteen years investigating the visible crimes—theft, assault, fraud."
3"And she recognized certain items on certain tables—the kind of objects that shouldn't exist outside locked evidence rooms and conspiracy theories."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1068
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount40
adverbRatio0.03745318352059925
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.009363295880149813
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences118
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences118
mean10.05
std7.97
cv0.793
sampleLengths
027
120
217
310
44
513
617
71
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1415
154
166
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1812
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223
232
2410
258
2610
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328
338
345
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3620
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4611
476
4810
499
75.42% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.4830508474576271
totalSentences118
uniqueOpeners57
36.23% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences92
matches
0"Instead of continuing into the"
ratio0.011
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences92
matches
0"Her target was fifty metres"
1"She'd clocked him leaving The"
2"He'd hesitated for precisely three"
3"She followed without thinking."
4"His trainers splashed through puddles"
5"His breathing had turned ragged,"
6"He was young, maybe mid-twenties,"
7"Her hand moved instinctively to"
8"She could call for backup."
9"Her eyes adjusted to catch"
10"He stood at the platform's"
11"She raised her torch higher."
12"His eyes held something beyond"
13"His accent placed him somewhere"
14"He'd put in for retirement"
15"His hands remained at his"
16"Her other hand rested on"
17"His hands rose in a"
18"She could see a market"
19"Her watch's leather band felt"
ratio0.283
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount64
totalSentences92
matches
0"# Chapter: Into the Veil"
1"The rain hammered against the"
2"Her target was fifty metres"
3"She'd clocked him leaving The"
4"He'd hesitated for precisely three"
5"Quinn pushed harder, her thighs"
6"The suspect ducked left onto"
7"She followed without thinking."
8"The alley compressed the city,"
9"His trainers splashed through puddles"
10"Quinn closed the distance."
11"His breathing had turned ragged,"
12"He was young, maybe mid-twenties,"
13"A rusted sign above the"
14"The sort of infrastructure the"
15"Quinn slowed at the top"
16"Her hand moved instinctively to"
17"She could call for backup."
18"A closed Underground station qualified"
19"The darkness swallowed her torch's"
ratio0.696
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences92
matches(empty)
ratio0
3.11% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences46
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"The rain hammered against the pavement in fat, aggressive drops that turned the tarmac into a sheet of black glass."
1"He'd hesitated for precisely three seconds upon catching her eye—that microcosm of hesitation that told her everything."
2"His trainers splashed through puddles that reflected the occasional neon spill from the main street."
3"Her eyes adjusted to catch the faint phosphorescence of emergency exit signs that hadn't been properly maintained in years."
4"His eyes held something beyond fear—a kind of calculating desperation that made Quinn's hand drift toward her belt again, not for the torch this time."
5"A case that started with missing persons and ended with Morris disappearing into a warehouse in Hackney, emerging three days later speaking in a voice that wasn…"
6"Her other hand rested on the butt of her pepper spray, though something told her that would be about as effective as throwing water at a house fire."
7"And she recognized certain items on certain tables—the kind of objects that shouldn't exist outside locked evidence rooms and conspiracy theories."
8"And at the back, a figure she recognized with absolute certainty, though he was older than his warrant photo and moved with the careful precision of someone who…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags3
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences12
tagDensity0.167
leniency0.333
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
87.4805%