Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTYRS4T8QS5HKK6CYVFE357

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Duration:
1m 16s
Cost:
$0.217200

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Glass shattered against brick. Detective Quinn rolled behind the overturned bin as another bottle exploded where her head had been. "Nowhere left to run, Tommy." Footsteps pounded wet pavement. She counted three seconds, then broke cover. The alley stretched ahead, narrow and slick with rain. A figure in a dark hoodie vaulted a chain-link fence at the far end. Quinn sprinted after him. Her leather watch caught on the fence as she climbed. The strap held. She dropped to the other side, trainers splashing in a puddle deep enough to soak through. Leicester Square materialized around her. Tourists scattered as Tomás Herrera burst through their midst, Saint Christopher medallion bouncing against his chest. Quinn followed, badge raised. "Police! Clear the way!" A hen party in matching pink sashes stumbled aside. One of them dropped her phone. Quinn hurdled it without breaking stride. Tomás cut left into Chinatown. Red lanterns swayed overhead, casting dancing shadows on wet stone. He grabbed a restaurant's outdoor menu board and flung it behind him. Quinn dodged, but her shoulder clipped the corner. Pain flared down her arm. "Don't make this worse, Tomás!" He glanced back. His warm brown eyes held something she couldn't read. Fear? Regret? Then he was moving again, that knife scar on his forearm catching the neon glow from a pharmacy sign. They burst onto Shaftesbury Avenue. Traffic crawled in both directions. Tomás didn't hesitate. He slid across a taxi's bonnet, leaving a smear of rainwater on yellow paint. The driver leaned on his horn. Quinn followed, flashing her warrant card at the furious cabbie. Her salt-and-pepper hair stuck to her forehead. Three years since she'd run like this. Three years since Morris died on a night just as wet, chasing shadows that shouldn't exist. Tomás ducked into a side street she didn't recognize. Victorian buildings pressed close on either side. Water gurgled in the gutters. At the end of the alley, stone steps descended into darkness. He took them three at a time and vanished underground. Quinn skidded to a stop at the top. Camden. They were near Camden. Her mind catalogued the area's underground spaces, old Tube stations, maintenance tunnels, sewers. Nothing official down here. She pulled out her radio. Static crackled back. No signal. The steps were slippery with moss and things she didn't want to identify. Emergency lighting cast sickly yellow pools every ten feet. The air grew thick, tasting of damp stone and something else. Incense? Herbs? Voices echoed from below. Multiple speakers, different languages. Music played somewhere, drums and strings in no rhythm she recognized. The stairs ended at a rusted gate standing ajar. Beyond it, impossible space opened up. Quinn's breath caught. An abandoned Tube platform stretched before her, but changed. Stalls lined both sides, draped in dark cloth and lit by candles that burned without melting. Figures moved between them, some in modern clothes, others in robes that seemed to absorb light. The Veil Market. She'd heard whispers. Cases that went cold when witnesses mentioned "the underground market that moves." Reports filed and mysteriously lost. Tomás stood twenty feet ahead, breathing hard. A woman in a Victorian dress that floated an inch off the ground handed him something small. He closed his fist around it. "Tommy." Quinn stepped through the gate. "Whatever this is, we can sort it. Come back with me." "You don't understand." His Seville accent thickened with exhaustion. "They need me here." "Who needs you?" "People you pretend don't exist." He backed toward the market proper. "People the NHS won't help. People like the ones who killed Morris." Quinn's hand moved to her sidearm. "Don't." "I tried the proper channels. Applied for reinstatement six times. They won't listen because I told the truth about what I saw. What I treated." His free hand touched his medallion. "Saint Christopher protects travelers. Even ones who travel between worlds." A bell chimed somewhere deep in the market. The vendors began packing with practiced efficiency. Cloths folded themselves. Candles winked out. "Market's moving," someone called. "Five minutes to transition." "I'm sorry about your partner," Tomás said. "But if you follow me past that first row of stalls, you might not find your way back. Not tonight." Quinn's jaw tightened. "You're under arrest for assault on a police officer. That bottle could have killed me." "I threw it at the wall. If I wanted to hit you..." He turned the hand with the scar, showing the precision of old knife work. "Paramedics know anatomy, Detective." The market continued its impossible pack-up. Stalls folded into spaces too small to hold them. The platform itself seemed to ripple at the edges. "Three minutes!" Quinn calculated distances, angles, probability of backup finding this place if she didn't return. Morris's face flashed in her memory. They'd found him at his desk three days after he'd disappeared, swearing he'd only been gone an hour. The thing that killed him had left marks no pathologist could explain. "What did you take from that woman?" Tomás opened his hand. A small bone token lay on his palm, carved with symbols that hurt to look at directly. "Payment for a house call. Difficult birth. Mother and child both lived." "You're not licensed—" "Neither is anyone here. That's the point." The platform shuddered. "Two minutes, Detective. Choose." A gap had opened between the gate and the first stall. Beyond it, the market pulsed with impossible life. She caught glimpses of things that shouldn't exist. Bottles filled with moving shadows. Books that read themselves. A man with too many joints in his fingers counting coins that weren't quite round. "Why did you run?" "Because someone's hunting my patients. Leaving bodies marked with symbols. Greek letters written by someone who doesn't know Greek." His eyes found hers. "Bodies you've been finding." The platform lurched. Quinn grabbed the gate for balance. "One minute! Clear the threshold!" "Come back with me," Quinn said. "Help me solve this properly." "Your 'properly' got Morris killed. He saw what you refuse to see." Tomás stepped backward into the market. "The Raven's Nest in Soho. Green neon sign. If you really want answers, start there. Silas owes me a favor." The market collapsed inward like a closing eye. Quinn lunged forward, but the gate slammed shut. Her fingers met solid stone where the market had been. She stood alone on a cramped landing. No platform. No stairs leading down. Just brick walls and the storm drain she'd apparently chased Tomás through. Her radio crackled to life. "DI Quinn, what's your twenty?" She stared at the blank wall, then at her watch. Eleven thirty-seven. She'd entered the stairs at eleven thirty-five. Two minutes. The whole chase through the market had taken two minutes. "Camden," she said into the radio. "Suspect got away. Heading back to the station." Rain still fell as she emerged street level. London looked exactly as she'd left it. Red buses. Black cabs. Tourists with umbrellas. But now she noticed things. A shop window that reflected one too many people. A dog walker whose shadow fell the wrong direction. A woman in a business suit who stepped around puddles that hadn't formed yet. The city had always kept secrets. Quinn had just preferred not to see them. Her phone buzzed. Crime scene photos from this morning's body. She'd missed it before, focused on the reversed Greek letters. But there in the corner, barely visible, was a partial boot print. Medical grade non-slip sole. The kind paramedics wore. She thought of Tomás's patients. The ones someone was hunting. Morris's impossible death. The market that existed in two minutes and forever. The Raven's Nest. Green neon sign. Quinn hailed a taxi. "Soho." The driver's eyes met hers in the mirror. For just a moment, they flashed gold. "Any particular address, love?" She settled back in the seat, hand resting on her sidearm. "I'll know it when I see it."
total_cost0.2172

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Tomás stepped backward [backward]"
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.317
leniency0.634
rawRatio0.077
effectiveRatio0.049
96.22% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1323
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
73.54% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1323
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"shattered"
count1
1
word"footsteps"
count1
2
word"dancing"
count1
3
word"echoed"
count1
4
word"calculated"
count1
5
word"pulsed"
count1
6
word"lurched"
count1
highlights
0"shattered"
1"footsteps"
2"dancing"
3"echoed"
4"calculated"
5"pulsed"
6"lurched"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences143
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences143
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences171
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen31
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1316
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
67.15% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions51
wordCount1026
uniqueNames21
maxNameDensity1.66
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Quinn17
Square1
Tomás10
Herrera1
Saint1
Christopher1
Chinatown1
Shaftesbury1
Avenue1
Morris3
Camden2
Tube2
Veil1
Market1
Reports1
Victorian2
Seville1
Rain1
Greek1
Raven1
Nest1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Square"
2"Tomás"
3"Herrera"
4"Saint"
5"Christopher"
6"Morris"
7"Reports"
8"Rain"
9"Raven"
places
0"Chinatown"
1"Shaftesbury"
2"Avenue"
3"Camden"
4"Victorian"
5"Seville"
globalScore0.672
windowScore0.833
89.76% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences83
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"robes that seemed to absorb light"
1"rm drain she'd apparently chased Tomás throug"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1316
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences171
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs63
mean20.89
std12.97
cv0.621
sampleLengths
020
15
234
333
425
54
621
740
85
933
1033
1140
1232
1310
1430
1510
1635
1719
1815
1944
2023
2130
2217
2313
243
2523
267
2741
2821
298
3027
3118
3230
3324
342
3550
367
3733
383
3914
4051
414
4227
439
445
4511
4638
4726
4830
495
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences143
matches
0"been gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs188
matches
0"was hunting"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences171
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1033
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount30
adverbRatio0.02904162633107454
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.006776379477250726
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences171
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences171
mean7.7
std5.09
cv0.662
sampleLengths
04
116
25
34
47
59
614
74
810
93
1016
115
1216
134
144
159
166
176
185
1910
2012
218
225
235
243
259
261
271
2819
295
305
313
3214
336
3410
357
367
3716
389
397
405
4111
4210
438
441
454
4613
474
485
493
75.83% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.47953216374269003
totalSentences171
uniqueOpeners82
51.68% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences129
matches
0"Then he was moving again,"
1"Just brick walls and the"
ratio0.016
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount32
totalSentences129
matches
0"She counted three seconds, then"
1"Her leather watch caught on"
2"She dropped to the other"
3"He grabbed a restaurant's outdoor"
4"He glanced back."
5"His warm brown eyes held"
6"They burst onto Shaftesbury Avenue."
7"He slid across a taxi's"
8"Her salt-and-pepper hair stuck to"
9"He took them three at"
10"They were near Camden."
11"Her mind catalogued the area's"
12"She pulled out her radio."
13"She'd heard whispers."
14"He closed his fist around"
15"His Seville accent thickened with"
16"He backed toward the market"
17"His free hand touched his"
18"He turned the hand with"
19"They'd found him at his"
ratio0.248
25.89% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount112
totalSentences129
matches
0"Glass shattered against brick."
1"Detective Quinn rolled behind the"
2"Footsteps pounded wet pavement."
3"She counted three seconds, then"
4"The alley stretched ahead, narrow"
5"A figure in a dark"
6"Quinn sprinted after him."
7"Her leather watch caught on"
8"The strap held."
9"She dropped to the other"
10"Leicester Square materialized around her."
11"Tourists scattered as Tomás Herrera"
12"Quinn followed, badge raised."
13"A hen party in matching"
14"Quinn hurdled it without breaking"
15"Tomás cut left into Chinatown."
16"He grabbed a restaurant's outdoor"
17"Quinn dodged, but her shoulder"
18"Pain flared down her arm."
19"He glanced back."
ratio0.868
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences129
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences34
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"witnesses mentioned (mention)"
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.122
leniency0.244
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.049
89.3359%