Run: 2026-02-19-01KHVPE3232EC74ZR3AJ5BB0S6

Run Details

Duration:
1m 46s
Cost:
$0.089758
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rory pushed aside the damp bracken, her boots sinking into the loamy earth of Richmond Park. She brushed a wet strand of straight, shoulder-length black hair from her cheek, her bright blue eyes scanning the oppressive darkness. The night air was biting, a typical London chill that cut effortlessly through the thin nylon of her Golden Empress delivery jacket. She should have been back at the flat above Silas’ bar by now, tallying her meager tip money and washing off the smell of fried garlic and exhaust fumes. Instead, she was out here in the dead of night, chasing a myth because Eva had sworn this clearing held the answers she needed. The ancient oak standing stones loomed ahead. They did not look natural. Thick, gnarled trunks stripped of bark stood in a rough, deliberate circle, acting as a boundary marker for a place that only vaguely belonged to Earth. Isolde’s grove. Rory stopped at the edge. Her right thumb found her left wrist, rubbing the small, crescent-shaped scar left over from a childhood accident. It was an old nervous habit. Keep cool, she told herself. Her father, an uncompromising Irish barrister, had spent her entire youth drilling logic and composure into her head, a mindset that had nearly carried her through Pre-Law at Cardiff University before her life unravelled. Apply the facts, Rory. Walk in, find the center of the pocket dimension, leave the offering, and get out. She crossed the threshold. The shift was instantaneous. The distant, continuous hum of the A3 road vanished, replaced by an absolute and suffocating silence. The biting wind died in an instant. Underfoot, the dead autumn leaves were gone, replaced by a carpet of soft, living moss and wildflowers. Pale blue and delicate white petals bloomed in thick clusters, completely defiant of the freezing season outside the oaks. They emitted a faint, cloying sweetness that coated the back of her throat like syrup. Rory took a deep breath, scanning the clearing. The pocket dimension was supposed to be a sanctuary, a neutral space wedged between Earth and the Fae realm. But the air rested heavy on her skin, thick with the charged, metallic static that usually preceded a violent thunderstorm. Against her collarbone, the Heartstone pendant began to stir. She reached her fingers beneath her collar and withdrew the silver chain. The thumbnail-sized gemstone, usually cool and inert against her skin, was radiating a distinct warmth. In the gloom of the unnatural grove, a deep crimson light pulsed from deep within the crystal. Rory frowned, her analytical mind immediately cataloguing the problem. The unknown benefactor who had given her the artifact had been exceedingly clear about its solitary function. The stone possessed a faint inner glow that flared to life for one reason alone. It pulsed when it was near a Hel portal. There were not supposed to be any gateways to the underworld inside a Fae sanctuary. She let the stone drop back against her chest. It rested there like a warning beacon, the heat steadily climbing from warm to feverish. She needed to leave. Whatever magical protection Eva thought the grove offered, it was entirely negated by the creeping influence of Hel. Rory turned back toward the oak standing stones. They were much farther away than they had been a moment ago. She stopped, her breath catching in her throat. She had only taken five steps into the clearing. The standing stones were now at least a hundred yards back, half-swallowed by an unnatural, creeping dark mist that hugged the forest floor. Time moved differently in the grove. She knew that much. An hour inside could equate to minutes or even days in the outside world. But had space warped along with it? She pulled her phone from her pocket. The screen flared to life, casting a harsh white glare into the shadows. The clock in the corner read 23:14. As she watched, the digital numbers shuddered and began flipping wildly. 04:22. 12:00. 88:88. The screen blanked to a dead, unreflective black. Logic, she reminded herself, though her heart had begun a heavy, rhythmic thud against her ribs. Think outside the box. If spatial dimensions were dilated, breaking into a panicked run would only disorient her further. Keep a steady pace. Keep an eye on the oaks. She took a single step toward the boundary. Behind her, a heavy branch snapped. The sound was sharp as a gunshot in the muffled quiet of the Fae clearing. Rory froze entirely. She did not turn around. At five foot six, she was not built for a physical brawl with whatever lurked in the dark, but she had a sharp mind. She listened, straining her ears against the oppressive silence. Nothing. No rustling of wind, no scurrying of scavengers. Just the heavy beating of her own heart. She took another step forward. Behind her came the soft, deliberate crunch of a boot on the moss. A mimic. Or a stalker. The pendant was growing uncomfortably hot against her skin, the crimson light now bright enough to bleed through the thin fabric of her uniform jacket, casting bloody shadows on the damp earth in front of her. Rory tested the rhythm. She took three quick, decisive strides toward the distant oaks, then stopped abruptly. One. Two. Three. The following footsteps matched hers exactly, but they lacked the clean weight of a human stride. They sounded wet and heavy, peeling off the ground with a sickening suction. Running triggers the prey drive, she thought, her barrister father’s voice echoing with cold pragmatism. Do not run. A sudden movement flickered in the extreme upper left corner of her vision. She snapped her head toward the tree line. There was nothing there but the pale wildflowers. Yet the flowers themselves looked fundamentally wrong now. The ambient crimson light from her chest illuminated them, stripping away their ethereal glow. The petals were long and sharply curved, curling inward like skeletal fingers grasping at the empty air. The cloying, sweet smell had mutated. It now carried the metallic stench of oxidized copper and old, stagnant blood. Something brushed the crown of her straight black hair. It was the lightest touch, barely more than a displaced current of freezing air, but it sent a violent, involuntary shudder down her spine. The entity was not behind her anymore. It was directly above her. Rory forced herself to look up. The ancient canopy of the grove was lost in total darkness, a black void that seemed to swallow the dim light of her pendant. But in that void, something was actively shifting. Long, impossible angles folded and unfolded in the gloom silently. It did not have a defined shape, but it had a distinct presence, a chilling, absolute focus directed entirely at her. The thumbnail-sized gemstone was scalding now. It burned against her sternum, a searing point of agony that made her gasp aloud. She grabbed the silver chain, pulling the gem away from her skin. The red light flared aggressively, reflecting fiercely in her wide blue eyes. A voice whispered from the dark. Rory. It was not Eva. It was not Silas. It was Evan. Smooth, coercive, dripping with the false affection that used to make her stomach tie in knots before she finally gathered the courage to flee Cardiff. Come back inside, Rory. You cannot make it out there alone. Pre-law logic fought a desperate battle against raw, paralyzing trauma. It was not Evan. Evan was a human man, hundreds of miles away in another country. This was something else entirely, something scraping through her deepest memories, sifting through the fears she kept buried under her cool exterior. It was using the time dilation, the isolation, to systematically break her nerve. Rory did not answer the voice. Speaking would validate it. Acknowledging it would give it power. She lowered her gaze from the shifting midnight above her and locked her eyes firmly on the oak standing stones. They remained impossibly far, shrouded in the thick, suffocating mist. The temperature in the clearing plummeted sharply. Her breath plumed in the red light, frosting in the stagnant air. The entity was descending. She could not see it directly, but the edge of her vision caught limbs that were far too long and disjointed, moving with a jerky, stop-motion wrongness. It slid into the periphery on her right. A towering silhouette, blotting out the pale mist. Look straight ahead, Rory commanded herself, rubbing her thumb frantically over the crescent scar on her wrist. Just walk. She took a step. The entity matched it instantly, but this time it was right beside her, hovering at the absolute boundary of her vision. As she moved, the wet, peeling sound of its footsteps was accompanied by a low, rhythmic clicking, like large teeth snapping together in anticipation. Rory picked up her pace, dropping into a fast, purposeful walk. The crimson light of the Heartstone swung wildly with her movements. Every time the red glow washed over the empty space to her right, the towering entity vanished, only to reappear instantly the moment the shadows returned. The standing stones were finally getting closer. The warped space was correcting itself, or her sheer force of will was pushing through the illusion. Fifty yards. Thirty yards. You always walk away, the voice whispered. This time it sounded right in her ear, wet and impossibly cold, carrying the undeniable scent of turned earth and graves. You will never be fast enough. Rory clenched her jaw. She refused to look at the shape looming over her shoulder. She gripped the burning gemstone tightly in her fist, letting the searing physical pain anchor her strictly to reality. The heat was immense, blistering her palm, but she held on. The artifact was of ancient Dymas origin, a beacon of warning, but its inner fire was the only thing holding back the absolute freezing dark. She raised her clenched fist, holding the glowing crimson stone out like a lantern. The red light spilled across the damp moss and illuminated the rough, barkless trunks of the ancient boundary oaks. Ten yards. The clicking grew frantic. A deafening roar of snapping jaws filled the air around her, vibrating deeply in her chest. The shadows writhed, lunging aggressively from the corners of her eyes, a sensory assault designed to force her to turn, to look, to finally submit. Rory broke into a dead sprint. She threw herself forward, her boots slipping precariously on the slick, fleshy petals of the corrupted wildflowers. The entity emitted a violent shriek, a sound composed of television static and grinding metal that tore painfully at her eardrums. Icy, elongated fingers grazed the back of her Golden Empress jacket, catching the nylon fabric and pulling with immense, unnatural strength. She pitched forward, ignoring the pull, throwing all her momentum into a violent lunge toward the narrow gap between the two largest standing stones. The precise moment she crossed the threshold, the agonizing screech was severed like a cut wire. Rory collapsed heavily onto hard, wet pavement, scraping her knees through her jeans. Her lungs burned as she sucked in huge, desperate gasps of freezing air. The suffocating sweetness of the rotting flowers vanished instantly, replaced by the sharp, familiar scent of London rain and wet asphalt. She lay there stunned for a long moment, her straight black hair plastered to her cheeks with cold sweat. Slowly, with shaking arms, she pushed herself up and looked back. Richmond Park was completely quiet. The ancient oaks stood peacefully in their unassuming circle, looking like nothing more than weathering wood illuminated by the dull orange glow of distant streetlamps. Inside the boundary circle, there were no glowing wildflowers, only damp, dead autumn leaves and overgrown brown bracken. Rory opened her right hand. The gemstone had cooled the second she crossed the boundary, returning to a lifeless, dark ruby color within its silver chain. Her palm was perfectly unblemished. There was no burn mark, only the phantom memory of incredible heat. She pulled her phone from her pocket. The screen lit up cleanly on the first try. The glowing white time read 22:15. She had only been gone a few minutes. Her hands were shaking uncontrollably. Cool-headed Rory Carter, who prided herself on out-thinking any disastrous delivery route and outmaneuvering the worst panic rushes at the restaurant, sat alone on the freezing path of Richmond Park and stared deeply into the dark woods. The Fae grove was supposed to be a refuge. Whatever had been waiting in there was not of the Fae, and it had known exactly exactly how to get inside her head. She pushed herself unsteadily to her feet, zipped her jacket tightly up to her chin, and started the long walk back to the city lights. She did not look back again.
created_at"2026-02-19T19:36:07.84Z" 2/19/2026, 7:36:07 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags1
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences0
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
81.36% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2146
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"completely"
count2
1
adverb"sharply"
count2
2
adverb"tightly"
count2
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
4
adverb"perfectly"
count1
highlights
0"completely"
1"sharply"
2"tightly"
3"slowly"
4"perfectly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
13.79% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2146
totalAiIsms37
found
0
word"scanning"
count2
1
word"oppressive"
count2
2
word"chill"
count1
3
word"loomed"
count1
4
word"silence"
count2
5
word"sanctuary"
count2
6
word"charged"
count1
7
word"warmth"
count1
8
word"gloom"
count2
9
word"pulsed"
count2
10
word"crystal"
count1
11
word"solitary"
count1
12
word"beacon"
count2
13
word"rhythmic"
count2
14
word"footsteps"
count2
15
word"weight"
count1
16
word"echoing"
count1
17
word"flickered"
count1
18
word"down her spine"
count1
19
word"chilling"
count1
20
word"searing"
count2
21
word"affection"
count1
22
word"stomach"
count1
23
word"firmly"
count1
24
word"anticipation"
count1
25
word"looming"
count1
26
word"familiar"
count1
highlights
0"scanning"
1"oppressive"
2"chill"
3"loomed"
4"silence"
5"sanctuary"
6"charged"
7"warmth"
8"gloom"
9"pulsed"
10"crystal"
11"solitary"
12"beacon"
13"rhythmic"
14"footsteps"
15"weight"
16"echoing"
17"flickered"
18"down her spine"
19"chilling"
20"searing"
21"affection"
22"stomach"
23"firmly"
24"anticipation"
25"looming"
26"familiar"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count2
highlights
0"clenched her jaw"
1"clenched fist"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences184
matches
0"r in anticipation"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences184
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences184
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen38
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2139
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions1
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Keep cool, she told herself."
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions62
wordCount2119
uniqueNames21
maxNameDensity0.9
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond3
Park3
London2
Golden2
Empress2
Eva3
Earth2
Irish1
Pre-Law1
Cardiff2
University1
Rory19
Fae5
Heartstone2
Hel2
Silas1
Evan3
Dymas1
Carter1
Keep3
You3
persons
0"Eva"
1"Rory"
2"Heartstone"
3"Silas"
4"Evan"
5"Carter"
6"You"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Earth"
4"Cardiff"
5"Fae"
6"Hel"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences139
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"void that seemed to swallow the dim light of her pendant"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2139
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences184
matches
0"chill that cut"
1"knew that much"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs61
mean35.07
std24.13
cv0.688
sampleLengths
0112
140
287
34
478
547
69
744
850
915
1046
118
1212
1340
1480
1545
168
176
1856
1917
205
2113
2241
2317
243
2529
2618
2768
2819
299
3036
316
3263
3345
346
351
3636
3711
3861
3946
4050
4116
4219
4349
4448
4528
4634
4770
4835
4945
90.01% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount8
totalSentences184
matches
0"were gone"
1"was supposed"
2"were dilated"
3"was lost"
4"was accompanied"
5"was severed"
6"been gone"
7"was supposed"
44.51% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount8
totalVerbs343
matches
0"was biting"
1"was radiating"
2"was scalding"
3"was using"
4"was descending"
5"was correcting was pushing"
6"were shaking"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences184
ratio0
matches(empty)
71.59% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount69
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount5
adverbRatio0.07246376811594203
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.014492753623188406
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences184
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences184
mean11.63
std7.66
cv0.659
sampleLengths
016
121
222
329
424
57
65
726
82
95
1018
116
125
1334
144
1515
164
174
1816
197
2017
2119
2215
238
2419
2520
269
2712
2815
2917
309
3117
3215
339
3415
359
3615
374
3818
398
4012
418
429
4323
446
454
4614
477
487
4913
45.12% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats15
diversityRatio0.32044198895027626
totalSentences181
uniqueOpeners58
78.43% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences170
matches
0"Instead, she was out here"
1"Pale blue and delicate white"
2"Just the heavy beating of"
3"Slowly, with shaking arms, she"
ratio0.024
83.53% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount58
totalSentences170
matches
0"She brushed a wet strand"
1"She should have been back"
2"They did not look natural."
3"Her right thumb found her"
4"It was an old nervous"
5"Her father, an uncompromising Irish"
6"She crossed the threshold."
7"They emitted a faint, cloying"
8"She reached her fingers beneath"
9"It pulsed when it was"
10"She let the stone drop"
11"It rested there like a"
12"She needed to leave."
13"They were much farther away"
14"She stopped, her breath catching"
15"She had only taken five"
16"She knew that much."
17"She pulled her phone from"
18"She took a single step"
19"She did not turn around."
ratio0.341
71.76% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount132
totalSentences170
matches
0"Rory pushed aside the damp"
1"She brushed a wet strand"
2"The night air was biting,"
3"She should have been back"
4"The ancient oak standing stones"
5"They did not look natural."
6"Rory stopped at the edge."
7"Her right thumb found her"
8"It was an old nervous"
9"Her father, an uncompromising Irish"
10"She crossed the threshold."
11"The shift was instantaneous."
12"The distant, continuous hum of"
13"The biting wind died in"
14"Underfoot, the dead autumn leaves"
15"They emitted a faint, cloying"
16"Rory took a deep breath,"
17"The pocket dimension was supposed"
18"She reached her fingers beneath"
19"The thumbnail-sized gemstone, usually cool"
ratio0.776
29.41% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences170
matches
0"If spatial dimensions were dilated,"
ratio0.006
55.56% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences90
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"Her father, an uncompromising Irish barrister, had spent her entire youth drilling logic and composure into her head, a mindset that had nearly carried her thro…"
1"They emitted a faint, cloying sweetness that coated the back of her throat like syrup."
2"The unknown benefactor who had given her the artifact had been exceedingly clear about its solitary function."
3"The stone possessed a faint inner glow that flared to life for one reason alone."
4"The standing stones were now at least a hundred yards back, half-swallowed by an unnatural, creeping dark mist that hugged the forest floor."
5"Running triggers the prey drive, she thought, her barrister father’s voice echoing with cold pragmatism."
6"It burned against her sternum, a searing point of agony that made her gasp aloud."
7"Smooth, coercive, dripping with the false affection that used to make her stomach tie in knots before she finally gathered the courage to flee Cardiff."
8"She could not see it directly, but the edge of her vision caught limbs that were far too long and disjointed, moving with a jerky, stop-motion wrongness."
9"The entity emitted a violent shriek, a sound composed of television static and grinding metal that tore painfully at her eardrums."
10"Cool-headed Rory Carter, who prided herself on out-thinking any disastrous delivery route and outmaneuvering the worst panic rushes at the restaurant, sat alone…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags1
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
84.3915%