Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY7QZYK4ECE5KM8ZJXYEV8K

Run Details

Model:
Grok 4
Duration:
1m 8s
Cost:
$0.037248
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Aurora Carter pushed through the underbrush at the edge of Richmond Park, the chill of the autumn night seeping through her thin jacket. The pendant hung heavy against her chest, its crimson gem pulsing with that faint, insistent warmth she'd first noticed earlier that evening. It had drawn her here, like a compass needle twitching toward true north, ever since the anonymous package arrived at her flat above Silas' bar. No note, just the silver chain and the thumbnail-sized stone, glowing softly in the dim light of her room. She'd come seeking answers—about the pendant, about the strange dreams that had plagued her since fleeing Cardiff, dreams of shadowed figures and voices whispering her name. Laila, they called her sometimes, a name she'd never used. The grove, hidden in the park's depths, was a rumor she'd overheard at the Golden Empress, Yu-Fei Cheung muttering about a place where time bent and the air hummed with secrets. If anywhere could explain this artifact, it was here. The city sounds faded behind her—distant traffic, the occasional siren—replaced by the rustle of leaves underfoot. Her boots crunched on fallen acorns as she navigated by the pendant's glow, her bright blue eyes scanning the darkness. At 5'6", she felt small against the towering oaks, her straight black hair brushing her shoulders like a shroud. The small crescent scar on her left wrist itched faintly, a reminder of childhood clumsiness, but she ignored it, focusing on the path ahead. There—a circle of ancient oak standing stones, their bark twisted into shapes that mimicked human forms, arms outstretched as if in eternal supplication. The boundary, she thought, stepping between two of them. The air shifted, grew thicker, warmer, like stepping into a greenhouse. Wildflowers bloomed underfoot, impossible in the October chill: vibrant poppies and daisies nodding in a breeze she couldn't feel on her skin. The grove unfolded before her, a hidden clearing bathed in moonlight that seemed too bright, too silver, casting long shadows that danced without wind. She paused, heart quickening. Something felt off already, a subtle wrongness like a note played slightly flat in a symphony. The pendant warmed against her sternum, its inner glow intensifying, but the warmth didn't comfort her. It felt... watchful. Rory shook her head, chiding herself. Cool-headed, that's what Eva always called her. Intelligent, quick-thinking. She wouldn't spook at shadows. She moved deeper into the grove, the grass soft and springy beneath her feet, releasing a sweet, cloying scent that reminded her of overripe fruit. Her reason for coming sharpened in her mind: the pendant had been given to her by an unknown benefactor, or so the codex-like note in the package claimed—origins in some place called Dymas, behavior tied to portals. Hel portals, whatever that meant. She'd laughed it off at first, but the dreams persisted, and tonight, delivering takeout for Yu-Fei, the stone had throbbed hot against her skin as she passed near the park. It wanted her here. Needed her here. To understand, to uncover whatever truth hid in her fractured past—her abusive ex Evan, the flight from Cardiff, the nagging sense that her life was a puzzle missing pieces. The grove was silent at first, unnaturally so. No crickets, no rustling wildlife. Just her breathing, steady but louder than it should be. She circled the clearing, eyes drawn to the center where a low mound rose, covered in those eternal wildflowers. The moonlight painted everything in monochrome, but the flowers retained their colors—reds and yellows vivid as blood and sunlight. She knelt, fingers brushing petals that felt velvety, almost alive under her touch. The pendant pulsed again, syncing with her heartbeat. Then, a sound. Faint, like a sigh carried on the wind. Rory froze, head tilting. It came from the edges of the grove, beyond the standing stones. Not wind—too deliberate, too human. She straightened, scanning the shadows. Nothing. Just the oaks, their bark etched with patterns that now looked like eyes, watching. She rubbed her scar absentmindedly, a habit from stress, and took a step back. "Hello?" Her voice emerged steady, but it echoed strangely, as if the grove swallowed it and spat it back distorted. No answer. She shook off the unease, reminding herself why she was here. Answers. The pendant had led her, and she wouldn't bolt like some frightened girl. Evan had called her that once—frightened, weak—and she'd proven him wrong by leaving. She paced the mound, examining the flowers more closely. They bloomed year-round, the rumors said, in this pocket between worlds. Earth and Fae-touched, whatever that entailed. Time moved differently here; an hour inside could be minutes or days outside. She checked her watch—11:47 PM. Fine. She'd give it ten minutes, explore, then head back to her flat, maybe text Eva about the weirdness. Another sound, this time a soft rustle, like fabric brushing against leaves. From her left, at the periphery of her vision. She whipped her head around, but the shadows remained still, the standing stones unmoving sentinels. Her pulse quickened, the pendant's warmth spreading like a flush across her chest. Not alone. The thought crept in unbidden, but she pushed it down. Paranoia, that's all. The isolation of the place, the night pressing in. She moved toward the sound, boots silent on the grass, her delivery-person instincts kicking in—quick, out-of-the-box thinking, navigating unfamiliar terrain. The rustle came again, closer now, from behind one of the oaks. She circled it slowly, breath held. Nothing there but more flowers, their petals trembling slightly. As if something had just passed. She reached out, touching the bark. Rough, ancient, but warm—too warm for night. Like the pendant. A chill skittered down her spine despite the warmth. Whispers next. Indistinct, murmuring voices overlapping, too low to make out words. They seemed to emanate from the ground itself, or the air, surrounding her. Rory spun, eyes darting. The grove felt smaller suddenly, the standing stones closer together, as if the boundary had constricted. "Who's there?" she called, voice sharper now, echoing back with a faint mockery: there... there... Her mind raced. Not imagination. Something was here, toying with her. The wrongness built, layer by layer—a pressure in her ears, like descending in an elevator, the air thickening. She glanced at her watch: 11:49 PM. Only two minutes? It felt like longer. Time bending, she thought, stomach twisting. The whispers grew, resolving into fragments: Rory... Laila... Carter... Her aliases, her names, whispered like secrets shared in the dark. Movement at the edge of vision again—a flicker, shadow detaching from shadow, slipping behind a stone. She pursued, heart hammering, but found only empty space, flowers crushed as if by footsteps not her own. The pendant glowed brighter, its crimson light casting eerie reflections on the petals, making them look like they were bleeding color into the night. She wasn't alone. The certainty settled like ice in her veins. Eyes on her, multiple, watching from the gloom. The whispers intensified, calling her deeper, toward the mound. Something waited there, she knew it now—not answers, but a presence, ancient and hungry. The grove's flora seemed to lean toward her, petals unfurling like grasping fingers. Another rustle, this time from all sides, encircling. Panic clawed at her cool-headed facade. She backed toward the standing stones, but they loomed taller, their twisted forms now unmistakably humanoid, branches like limbs reaching. The moonlight dimmed, or perhaps the shadows deepened, swallowing the glow. Her watch: still 11:49. Time had stalled, trapping her. A shape materialized at the mound's crest—amorphous, shifting, not quite solid. It didn't approach, but it watched, and the whispers coalesced into a single voice, soft and insistent: Stay... belong... Rory bolted, legs pumping, but the grove stretched, the boundary receding. The pendant burned against her skin, not warmth now but heat, branding her. Shadows flickered everywhere, brushing her ankles, her hair, intangible yet real. She stumbled over roots that hadn't been there before, scar throbbing as if freshly cut. The standing stones finally neared, but as she lunged between them, a hand—not a hand, a tendril of shadow—grazed her wrist, cold and clinging. She wrenched free, bursting into the park proper, the city noise crashing back like a wave. But the whispers followed, faint in her mind: Come back... Laila... She ran, pendant still pulsing, the grove's wrongness clinging to her like dew. The night had only begun its unraveling. (Word count: 1247)
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags3
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences3
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
82.46% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1425
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count2
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
3
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"slightly"
2"slowly"
3"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1425
totalAiIsms37
found
0
word"chill"
count3
1
word"warmth"
count5
2
word"depths"
count1
3
word"navigated"
count1
4
word"scanning"
count2
5
word"reminder"
count1
6
word"symphony"
count1
7
word"throbbed"
count1
8
word"fractured"
count1
9
word"almost alive"
count1
10
word"pulsed"
count1
11
word"etched"
count1
12
word"echoed"
count1
13
word"sentinels"
count1
14
word"pulse"
count1
15
word"quickened"
count1
16
word"navigating"
count1
17
word"down her spine"
count1
18
word"echoing"
count1
19
word"raced"
count1
20
word"stomach"
count1
21
word"resolving"
count1
22
word"flicker"
count1
23
word"footsteps"
count1
24
word"gloom"
count1
25
word"facade"
count1
26
word"loomed"
count1
27
word"pumping"
count1
28
word"flickered"
count1
29
word"unraveling"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"warmth"
2"depths"
3"navigated"
4"scanning"
5"reminder"
6"symphony"
7"throbbed"
8"fractured"
9"almost alive"
10"pulsed"
11"etched"
12"echoed"
13"sentinels"
14"pulse"
15"quickened"
16"navigating"
17"down her spine"
18"echoing"
19"raced"
20"stomach"
21"resolving"
22"flicker"
23"footsteps"
24"gloom"
25"facade"
26"loomed"
27"pumping"
28"flickered"
29"unraveling"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences30
matches(empty)
0.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences30
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"look"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences30
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen111
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1397
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions31
wordCount1350
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity0.37
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Carter2
Richmond1
Park1
Cardiff2
Golden1
Empress1
Yu-Fei2
Cheung1
October1
Eva2
Dymas1
Evan2
Fae-touched1
Rory5
Stay1
Come1
Laila3
Time3
persons
0"Carter"
1"Yu-Fei"
2"Cheung"
3"Eva"
4"Evan"
5"Rory"
6"Stay"
7"Come"
8"Laila"
9"Time"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Cardiff"
3"Golden"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences28
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"looked like eyes, watching. She rubbed he"
1"felt like longer. Time bending, she tho"
2"not quite solid"
56.84% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.432
wordCount1397
matches
0"not answers, but a presence, ancient"
1"not warmth now but heat, branding her"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences30
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs21
mean66.52
std36.03
cv0.542
sampleLengths
0165
179
289
384
4108
582
686
7103
893
958
1060
1169
1258
1363
1446
1530
1650
1740
1811
1920
203
93.57% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences30
matches
0"been given"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs251
matches
0"were bleeding"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount19
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences14
totalSentences30
ratio0.467
matches
0"She'd come seeking answers—about the pendant, about the strange dreams that had plagued her since fleeing Cardiff, dreams of shadowed figures and voices whispering her name."
1"The city sounds faded behind her—distant traffic, the occasional siren—replaced by the rustle of leaves underfoot."
2"There—a circle of ancient oak standing stones, their bark twisted into shapes that mimicked human forms, arms outstretched as if in eternal supplication. The boundary, she thought, stepping between two of them. The air shifted, grew thicker, warmer, like stepping into a greenhouse. Wildflowers bloomed underfoot, impossible in the October chill: vibrant poppies and daisies nodding in a breeze she couldn't feel on her skin. The grove unfolded before her, a hidden clearing bathed in moonlight that seemed too bright, too silver, casting long shadows that danced without wind."
3"Her reason for coming sharpened in her mind: the pendant had been given to her by an unknown benefactor, or so the codex-like note in the package claimed—origins in some place called Dymas, behavior tied to portals. Hel portals, whatever that meant. She'd laughed it off at first, but the dreams persisted, and tonight, delivering takeout for Yu-Fei, the stone had throbbed hot against her skin as she passed near the park. It wanted her here. Needed her here. To understand, to uncover whatever truth hid in her fractured past—her abusive ex Evan, the flight from Cardiff, the nagging sense that her life was a puzzle missing pieces."
4"The grove was silent at first, unnaturally so. No crickets, no rustling wildlife. Just her breathing, steady but louder than it should be. She circled the clearing, eyes drawn to the center where a low mound rose, covered in those eternal wildflowers. The moonlight painted everything in monochrome, but the flowers retained their colors—reds and yellows vivid as blood and sunlight. She knelt, fingers brushing petals that felt velvety, almost alive under her touch. The pendant pulsed again, syncing with her heartbeat."
5"Then, a sound. Faint, like a sigh carried on the wind. Rory froze, head tilting. It came from the edges of the grove, beyond the standing stones. Not wind—too deliberate, too human. She straightened, scanning the shadows. Nothing. Just the oaks, their bark etched with patterns that now looked like eyes, watching. She rubbed her scar absentmindedly, a habit from stress, and took a step back. \"Hello?\" Her voice emerged steady, but it echoed strangely, as if the grove swallowed it and spat it back distorted."
6"No answer. She shook off the unease, reminding herself why she was here. Answers. The pendant had led her, and she wouldn't bolt like some frightened girl. Evan had called her that once—frightened, weak—and she'd proven him wrong by leaving. She paced the mound, examining the flowers more closely. They bloomed year-round, the rumors said, in this pocket between worlds. Earth and Fae-touched, whatever that entailed. Time moved differently here; an hour inside could be minutes or days outside. She checked her watch—11:47 PM. Fine. She'd give it ten minutes, explore, then head back to her flat, maybe text Eva about the weirdness."
7"Another sound, this time a soft rustle, like fabric brushing against leaves. From her left, at the periphery of her vision. She whipped her head around, but the shadows remained still, the standing stones unmoving sentinels. Her pulse quickened, the pendant's warmth spreading like a flush across her chest. Not alone. The thought crept in unbidden, but she pushed it down. Paranoia, that's all. The isolation of the place, the night pressing in. She moved toward the sound, boots silent on the grass, her delivery-person instincts kicking in—quick, out-of-the-box thinking, navigating unfamiliar terrain."
8"The rustle came again, closer now, from behind one of the oaks. She circled it slowly, breath held. Nothing there but more flowers, their petals trembling slightly. As if something had just passed. She reached out, touching the bark. Rough, ancient, but warm—too warm for night. Like the pendant. A chill skittered down her spine despite the warmth."
9"Her mind raced. Not imagination. Something was here, toying with her. The wrongness built, layer by layer—a pressure in her ears, like descending in an elevator, the air thickening. She glanced at her watch: 11:49 PM. Only two minutes? It felt like longer. Time bending, she thought, stomach twisting. The whispers grew, resolving into fragments: Rory... Laila... Carter... Her aliases, her names, whispered like secrets shared in the dark."
10"Movement at the edge of vision again—a flicker, shadow detaching from shadow, slipping behind a stone. She pursued, heart hammering, but found only empty space, flowers crushed as if by footsteps not her own. The pendant glowed brighter, its crimson light casting eerie reflections on the petals, making them look like they were bleeding color into the night."
11"She wasn't alone. The certainty settled like ice in her veins. Eyes on her, multiple, watching from the gloom. The whispers intensified, calling her deeper, toward the mound. Something waited there, she knew it now—not answers, but a presence, ancient and hungry. The grove's flora seemed to lean toward her, petals unfurling like grasping fingers. Another rustle, this time from all sides, encircling."
12"A shape materialized at the mound's crest—amorphous, shifting, not quite solid. It didn't approach, but it watched, and the whispers coalesced into a single voice, soft and insistent: Stay... belong..."
13"The standing stones finally neared, but as she lunged between them, a hand—not a hand, a tendril of shadow—grazed her wrist, cold and clinging. She wrenched free, bursting into the park proper, the city noise crashing back like a wave."
97.46% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1282
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount55
adverbRatio0.042901716068642744
lyAdverbCount16
lyAdverbRatio0.0124804992199688
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences30
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences30
mean46.57
std30.55
cv0.656
sampleLengths
023
122
225
319
426
510
631
79
816
920
1043
1189
1284
13108
1482
1586
16103
1793
1858
1960
2069
2158
2263
2346
2430
2550
2640
2711
2820
293
100.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.6333333333333333
totalSentences30
uniqueOpeners19
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences29
matches
0"Then, a sound. Faint, like"
ratio0.034
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount8
totalSentences29
matches
0"It had drawn her here,"
1"She'd come seeking answers—about the"
2"Her boots crunched on fallen"
3"She paused, heart quickening. Something"
4"Her reason for coming sharpened"
5"Her mind raced. Not imagination."
6"She wasn't alone. The certainty"
7"She ran, pendant still pulsing,"
ratio0.276
63.45% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount23
totalSentences29
matches
0"Aurora Carter pushed through the"
1"The pendant hung heavy against"
2"It had drawn her here,"
3"She'd come seeking answers—about the"
4"Laila, they called her sometimes,"
5"The grove, hidden in the"
6"The city sounds faded behind"
7"Her boots crunched on fallen"
8"There—a circle of ancient oak"
9"She paused, heart quickening. Something"
10"Her reason for coming sharpened"
11"The grove was silent at"
12"Another sound, this time a"
13"The rustle came again, closer"
14"Her mind raced. Not imagination."
15"Movement at the edge of"
16"She wasn't alone. The certainty"
17"Panic clawed at her cool-headed"
18"A shape materialized at the"
19"Rory bolted, legs pumping, but"
ratio0.793
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences29
matches
0"If anywhere could explain this"
ratio0.034
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences24
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"She'd come seeking answers—about the pendant, about the strange dreams that had plagued her since fleeing Cardiff, dreams of shadowed figures and voices whisper…"
1"There—a circle of ancient oak standing stones, their bark twisted into shapes that mimicked human forms, arms outstretched as if in eternal supplication. The bo…"
2"She paused, heart quickening. Something felt off already, a subtle wrongness like a note played slightly flat in a symphony. The pendant warmed against her ster…"
3"The grove was silent at first, unnaturally so. No crickets, no rustling wildlife. Just her breathing, steady but louder than it should be. She circled the clear…"
4"Another sound, this time a soft rustle, like fabric brushing against leaves. From her left, at the periphery of her vision. She whipped her head around, but the…"
5"The rustle came again, closer now, from behind one of the oaks. She circled it slowly, breath held. Nothing there but more flowers, their petals trembling sligh…"
6"Movement at the edge of vision again—a flicker, shadow detaching from shadow, slipping behind a stone. She pursued, heart hammering, but found only empty space,…"
7"She wasn't alone. The certainty settled like ice in her veins. Eyes on her, multiple, watching from the gloom. The whispers intensified, calling her deeper, tow…"
8"Rory bolted, legs pumping, but the grove stretched, the boundary receding. The pendant burned against her skin, not warmth now but heat, branding her. Shadows f…"
9"She ran, pendant still pulsing, the grove's wrongness clinging to her like dew. The night had only begun its unraveling."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags3
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she called, voice sharper now, echoing back with a faint mockery: there"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Whispers next. Indistinct (whisper)"
dialogueSentences3
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.667
73.1256%