Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY7V3MWNGXCJ6AXNQB8G66N

Run Details

Model:
Grok 4
Duration:
1m 40s
Cost:
$0.047015
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Aurora Carter pushed open the door to The Raven's Nest, the green neon sign flickering like a hesitant beacon against the Soho drizzle. She hadn't meant to stop here—London was a sprawl of anonymous corners, and she'd been wandering since dusk, her duffel bag slung over one shoulder, heavy with the remnants of a life she'd fled. Cardiff felt like a ghost already, Evan a specter she'd outrun on the train. But the rain had turned insistent, and the bar's dim glow promised shelter, if nothing else. She shook water from her straight black hair, shoulder-length strands clinging to her damp jacket, and scanned the room. Walls papered with faded maps and black-and-white photos of forgotten streets. A handful of patrons nursed pints at scarred wooden tables, their conversations a low murmur beneath the jazz crooning from an old jukebox. She slid onto a stool at the bar, the worn leather creaking under her five-foot-six frame. Her bright blue eyes flicked to the bartender, a tall man with grey-streaked auburn hair and a neatly trimmed beard to match. He moved with a slight limp, favoring his left leg as he polished a glass. Something about him tugged at her memory—a quiet authority, the way he held himself like he was listening to whispers no one else heard. She ordered a whiskey, neat, her Welsh lilt softened by exhaustion. "Make it a double." The man set the glass down with a nod, his hazel eyes meeting hers. He paused, the silver signet ring on his right hand catching the low light. "Rory? Aurora Carter?" She froze, the glass halfway to her lips. The voice—deep, edged with a faint London polish—unlocked a door in her mind. Silas Blackwood. Uncle Silas, her father had called him, back when Brendan Carter's barrister circles overlapped with whatever shadowy world Silas inhabited. They'd met a handful of times during her childhood summers, Silas dropping by the house in Cardiff with stories sanitized for a girl's ears, his laugh a rare, rumbling thing. But that was years ago—fifteen, maybe more. She'd been a kid, all scraped knees and endless questions; he'd been invincible, or so he'd seemed, before the limp, before the grey in his hair. "Silas?" Her voice cracked, surprise blooming into a tentative smile. She set the glass down, tracing the small crescent scar on her left wrist absentmindedly, a habit from nerves. "Bloody hell. What are you doing behind a bar in Soho?" He chuckled, but it didn't reach his eyes, those hazel depths shadowed now, like storm clouds over the Severn. "Running it, last I checked. The Raven's Nest. My little kingdom." He leaned on the bar, his slight limp more pronounced as he shifted weight off his left knee. "And you? Last I heard from your father, you were buried in pre-law books at Cardiff Uni. Not exactly the type to haunt dives like this." She took a sip, the whiskey burning a path down her throat, buying time. Changed—that's what he was. The Silas she remembered had been a ghost in tailored suits, slipping in and out of her family's life with envelopes for her dad, hints of adventures in places like Prague or Berlin. Now, at fifty-eight, he carried the weight of those years in the lines around his mouth, the careful way he moved, as if every step reminded him of a fall he couldn't forget. Retired, she guessed. Or broken. "Uni didn't stick," she said finally, her cool-headed demeanor slipping into place like armor. Rory had always been quick, out-of-the-box thinking her escape hatch from Evan's rages. "Life... intervened. Needed a change of scenery. London called." She didn't mention Evan, the bruises that had faded but left echoes, the way she'd packed in the dead of night after Eva's urgent texts. "What about you? Dad used to say you were some kind of spymaster, always off saving the world. This—" she gestured at the bar, the secret back room hidden behind a bookshelf she hadn't noticed yet "—feels like retirement." Silas poured himself a measure of the same whiskey, his signet ring clinking against the bottle. He raised the glass in a mock toast. "Retirement's a kind word for it. Botched op in Prague, knee took the brunt. MI6 pensioned me off, figured I'd fade into the wallpaper." His voice was steady, but there was a tension in it, like a wire pulled taut. He glanced at the photos on the wall—a grainy shot of the Charles Bridge, another of a rainy London street—and his limp seemed to echo in the silence. "Opened this place as a front. Keeps the old network humming, you know? Clandestine meetings in the back, the odd favor traded over pints." She nodded, sensing the unspoken layers. The weight of time pressed in, the bar's dim light casting long shadows that mirrored the gaps between who they'd been. She remembered him teasing her about her scar, that childhood tumble from a tree in the garden— "Badge of courage, Rory girl," he'd said, ruffling her hair. Now, she was twenty-five, cool and intelligent on the surface, but carrying regrets like stones in her pockets. Evan had changed her, twisted her trust into something wary, made her flee to a city where she knew no one. Or so she'd thought. "You look different," she said, her bright blue eyes searching his face. "Not just the hair. The limp—it's from Prague?" He set his glass down harder than necessary, the sound sharp in the quiet bar. "Yeah. Bullet shattered the knee. Docs pieced it back together, but it's never the same. You learn to live with the reminders." His hazel gaze flicked to her wrist, the scar peeking from her sleeve. "We all have our badges, don't we?" The comment hung there, laced with regret he didn't voice. Silas had always been the mentor type, even in those fleeting visits—guiding her dad's cases with whispered intel, teaching her card tricks that relied on misdirection. But time had eroded that invincibility. She wondered if he regretted the life that left him limping in a bar, trading secrets instead of chasing them. And her—did he see the changes in her? The way her quick wit now masked a deeper caution, the out-of-the-box thinking born from survival rather than play? "Tell me about it," she prompted, leaning in. The bar felt smaller now, the other patrons fading into the background hum. "Prague. Sounds like one of your stories, but real." He hesitated, fingers drumming on the bar, the signet ring a dull gleam. "Not much to tell that isn't classified. Target was a arms dealer, slippery bastard. Intel went south—ambush in a back alley. I got out, but not clean." His voice lowered, the narrative voice of the spymaster slipping through. "Partner didn't. Left him there, bleeding out on cobblestones. You make choices in the field, Rory. Split-second, and they haunt you." Unspoken regret thickened the air between them. She saw it in the way he avoided her eyes, focusing on the maps instead—old worlds he could no longer traverse without pain. Silas, the man who'd once seemed larger than life, reduced to this dimly lit nest, his quiet authority a shield against what he'd lost. And her own regrets mirrored it: leaving uni, staying with Evan too long, the way she'd let fear dictate her path until Eva's pleas pulled her free. Time had carved them both, widening the chasm between past selves and present shadows. "I'm sorry," she said softly, the words inadequate. "Dad never mentioned... any of that." "Your father knows enough to keep quiet." Silas straightened, his limp evident as he turned to grab a cloth, wiping the bar with unnecessary vigor. "And you? This 'change of scenery'—doesn't sound like a holiday. Running from something?" She traced the rim of her glass, the whiskey's warmth doing little to thaw the chill of memory. "Someone. Ex-boyfriend. Evan. Things got... ugly." Her voice stayed even, intelligence shining through in the careful omission of details—the black eyes, the shattered phone, the nights locked in the bathroom. "Eva—childhood friend—pushed me to leave. Said London would swallow me up, let me start over." Silas nodded, his beard twitching with a suppressed frown. "Smart girl, Eva. And you're here now. That's something." But his eyes held a flicker of regret, perhaps for not being there sooner, for the years that had slipped away while he chased shadows and she navigated her own storms. He poured them both another round, the liquid amber in the low light. "You know, I always thought you'd end up like your dad—barrister, sharp as a tack. What happened to pre-law?" She laughed, bitter and short. "Felt like a cage. Lectures, essays, the weight of expectation. Then Evan came along, made it all seem secondary until it wasn't." The tension coiled in her gut, the unspoken why didn't I leave sooner echoing in her mind. Time had stolen her momentum, left her adrift in a city that felt both vast and confining. "Regrets, right? We collect them like those maps on your wall—paths not taken." He glanced at the wall, his hazel eyes distant. "Regrets are the worst operatives. They infiltrate, sabotage from within." His limp carried him a step back, as if putting distance from the admission. "I regret Prague every day. The choices that left me here, limping through life instead of running it. But you—you're young, Rory. Don't let them define you." The conversation stretched, the bar's jazz underscoring their words like a melancholy soundtrack. She told him about the delivery job she'd lined up—Golden Empress restaurant, part-time gigs on a scooter, weaving through London's chaos. He offered her the flat above the bar, a spare room gathering dust. "No strings," he said, but she sensed the mentor in him stirring, the spymaster seeing a protégé in her quick mind. Yet beneath it, the regret lingered—the years they'd lost, the changes that time had wrought. Silas, no longer the invincible uncle; Rory, no longer the wide-eyed girl. As the night deepened, patrons trickling out into the rain, they talked of lighter things—her mother's teaching tales, his bar's eccentric regulars—but the tension remained, a undercurrent pulling at them. Who they'd been haunted the space between words, the weight of unspoken apologies heavy as the duffel at her feet. Silas limped to the bookshelf, revealing the hidden door with a wry smile. "For old times' sake, a tour of the real Nest." She followed, stepping into the secret room, its walls lined with files and flickering screens. Here, in this clandestine heart, the changes felt starkest—his world shrunk to whispers, hers expanded into uncertainty. Regret bound them, time's invisible thread, drawing old friends together in a bar that smelled of whiskey and rain, where past and present collided like waves against a weathered shore. They sat there until closing, the conversation ebbing into comfortable silences, but the regret never fully dissipated. It lingered in his limp as he locked up, in her scar as she climbed the stairs to the flat he'd offered. Two souls, altered by the years, finding in each other a mirror to what was lost—and perhaps, a path forward.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
82.35% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"she said finally [finally]"
1"she said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0.118
effectiveRatio0.118
97.38% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1906
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
10.81% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1906
totalAiIsms34
found
0
word"beacon"
count1
1
word"scanned"
count1
2
word"flicked"
count2
3
word"lilt"
count1
4
word"tracing"
count1
5
word"depths"
count1
6
word"weight"
count4
7
word"carried the weight"
count1
8
word"echoes"
count1
9
word"tension"
count3
10
word"echo"
count1
11
word"silence"
count1
12
word"clandestine"
count2
13
word"unspoken"
count4
14
word"shattered"
count2
15
word"fleeting"
count1
16
word"traced"
count1
17
word"warmth"
count1
18
word"chill"
count1
19
word"flicker"
count1
20
word"navigated"
count1
21
word"echoing"
count1
22
word"comfortable"
count1
highlights
0"beacon"
1"scanned"
2"flicked"
3"lilt"
4"tracing"
5"depths"
6"weight"
7"carried the weight"
8"echoes"
9"tension"
10"echo"
11"silence"
12"clandestine"
13"unspoken"
14"shattered"
15"fleeting"
16"traced"
17"warmth"
18"chill"
19"flicker"
20"navigated"
21"echoing"
22"comfortable"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences90
matches
0"d with regret"
1"a flicker of regret"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences90
filterMatches
0"see"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences106
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen40
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1867
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Retired, she guessed."
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions45
wordCount1464
uniqueNames22
maxNameDensity0.82
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Carter2
Raven1
Nest1
Soho1
London4
Evan5
Welsh1
Blackwood1
Silas12
Brendan1
Cardiff2
Severn1
Prague1
Berlin1
Rory2
Eva2
Charles1
Bridge1
Unspoken1
Time2
Golden1
Empress1
persons
0"Carter"
1"Evan"
2"Blackwood"
3"Silas"
4"Brendan"
5"Rory"
6"Eva"
7"Time"
places
0"Raven"
1"Soho"
2"London"
3"Cardiff"
4"Prague"
5"Berlin"
6"Charles"
7"Bridge"
8"Unspoken"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
59.64% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences83
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"felt like a ghost already, Evan a spect"
1"seemed larger than life, reduced to this dimly lit nest, his quiet authority a shield against what he'd lost"
2"as if putting distance from the admission"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1867
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences106
matches
0"eroded that invincibility"
77.18% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs26
mean71.81
std30.17
cv0.42
sampleLengths
0140
192
231
3106
440
574
689
7100
8116
997
1020
1157
1289
1330
1472
1595
1614
1738
1863
1981
2074
2160
2295
2373
2462
2559
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences90
matches
0"been haunted"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs248
matches
0"was listening"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount20
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences19
totalSentences106
ratio0.179
matches
0"She hadn't meant to stop here—London was a sprawl of anonymous corners, and she'd been wandering since dusk, her duffel bag slung over one shoulder, heavy with the remnants of a life she'd fled."
1"Something about him tugged at her memory—a quiet authority, the way he held himself like he was listening to whispers no one else heard."
2"The voice—deep, edged with a faint London polish—unlocked a door in her mind."
3"But that was years ago—fifteen, maybe more."
4"She'd been a kid, all scraped knees and endless questions; he'd been invincible, or so he'd seemed, before the limp, before the grey in his hair."
5"Changed—that's what he was."
6"\"What about you? Dad used to say you were some kind of spymaster, always off saving the world. This—\" she gestured at the bar, the secret back room hidden behind a bookshelf she hadn't noticed yet \"—feels like retirement.\""
7"He glanced at the photos on the wall—a grainy shot of the Charles Bridge, another of a rainy London street—and his limp seemed to echo in the silence."
8"She remembered him teasing her about her scar, that childhood tumble from a tree in the garden— \"Badge of courage, Rory girl,\" he'd said, ruffling her hair."
9"Silas had always been the mentor type, even in those fleeting visits—guiding her dad's cases with whispered intel, teaching her card tricks that relied on misdirection."
10"And her—did he see the changes in her?"
11"She saw it in the way he avoided her eyes, focusing on the maps instead—old worlds he could no longer traverse without pain."
12"\"Someone. Ex-boyfriend. Evan. Things got... ugly.\" Her voice stayed even, intelligence shining through in the careful omission of details—the black eyes, the shattered phone, the nights locked in the bathroom."
13"She told him about the delivery job she'd lined up—Golden Empress restaurant, part-time gigs on a scooter, weaving through London's chaos."
14"Yet beneath it, the regret lingered—the years they'd lost, the changes that time had wrought."
15"Silas, no longer the invincible uncle; Rory, no longer the wide-eyed girl."
16"As the night deepened, patrons trickling out into the rain, they talked of lighter things—her mother's teaching tales, his bar's eccentric regulars—but the tension remained, a undercurrent pulling at them."
17"Here, in this clandestine heart, the changes felt starkest—his world shrunk to whispers, hers expanded into uncertainty."
18"Two souls, altered by the years, finding in each other a mirror to what was lost—and perhaps, a path forward."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1188
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.020202020202020204
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.004208754208754209
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences106
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences106
mean17.61
std9.35
cv0.531
sampleLengths
023
134
214
316
419
511
623
716
822
915
1024
1111
124
1314
1414
153
168
1713
182
1920
2030
217
2226
2310
2419
2511
2619
2729
2826
2914
304
3133
3233
333
342
3514
3613
3734
3839
3916
408
4140
4228
4324
446
4521
4627
4718
4821
494
84.91% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.5094339622641509
totalSentences106
uniqueOpeners54
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences88
matches(empty)
ratio0
20.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount44
totalSentences88
matches
0"She hadn't meant to stop"
1"She shook water from her"
2"She slid onto a stool"
3"Her bright blue eyes flicked"
4"He moved with a slight"
5"She ordered a whiskey, neat,"
6"He paused, the silver signet"
7"She froze, the glass halfway"
8"They'd met a handful of"
9"She'd been a kid, all"
10"Her voice cracked, surprise blooming"
11"She set the glass down,"
12"He chuckled, but it didn't"
13"He leaned on the bar,"
14"She took a sip, the"
15"she said finally, her cool-headed"
16"She didn't mention Evan, the"
17"she gestured at the bar,"
18"He raised the glass in"
19"His voice was steady, but"
ratio0.5
56.59% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount71
totalSentences88
matches
0"Aurora Carter pushed open the"
1"She hadn't meant to stop"
2"Cardiff felt like a ghost"
3"She shook water from her"
4"Walls papered with faded maps"
5"A handful of patrons nursed"
6"She slid onto a stool"
7"Her bright blue eyes flicked"
8"He moved with a slight"
9"Something about him tugged at"
10"She ordered a whiskey, neat,"
11"The man set the glass"
12"He paused, the silver signet"
13"She froze, the glass halfway"
14"The voice—deep, edged with a"
15"Uncle Silas, her father had"
16"They'd met a handful of"
17"She'd been a kid, all"
18"Her voice cracked, surprise blooming"
19"She set the glass down,"
ratio0.807
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences88
matches
0"Now, at fifty-eight, he carried"
1"Now, she was twenty-five, cool"
ratio0.023
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences57
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"She took a sip, the whiskey burning a path down her throat, buying time."
1"Silas, the man who'd once seemed larger than life, reduced to this dimly lit nest, his quiet authority a shield against what he'd lost."
2"Regret bound them, time's invisible thread, drawing old friends together in a bar that smelled of whiskey and rain, where past and present collided like waves a…"
95.59% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"His hazel gaze flicked, the scar peeking from her sleeve"
91.18% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"She didn't (do)"
1"She remembered (remember)"
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.176
leniency0.353
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.118
81.9649%