Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY7WXA3MTEA1B0RV754RTQ4

Run Details

Duration:
2m 10s
Cost:
$0.012303
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Harlow slams into a brick wall, her left elbow splitting open as she overreaches for the suspect’s collar. The man bolts around the next corner, his ratty navy coat flapping behind him like a tattered flag. Harlow’s military precision falters—three days of tailing this clique courier have frayed her focus, the unresolved ghost of DS Morris’s death nipping at her heels like a rabid dog. She yanks a crumpled linen handkerchief from her trench coat pocket, presses it to her elbow, and takes off again, her worn leather watch digging into her left wrist as she clutches the fabric tight. The handkerchief soaks through fast, copper stinging her nostrils with every gasp for air. She rounds the corner into a narrow Soho alley she’s mapped a dozen times—its walls streaked with faded graffiti, lined with overflowing bin bags that reek of rotting mangoes and stale lager. The suspect’s scuffed leather shoes slap faster against the wet pavement, heading for a rusted metal door half-buried in ivy at the alley’s end. That’s no ordinary door—Harlow’s confidential intel links it to the abandoned Tube station beneath Camden, the current home of the Veil Market. She’d spent two weeks hacking old Transport for London records to track the market’s latest move, its full-moon relocation schedule a puzzle she’d only cracked last night. She skids to a halt as the suspect pauses to fumble with a small, pale object in his hand. A bone token—she’s read witness statements of the market’s non-negotiable entry requirement, though she’s never seen one firsthand. The man’s fingers slip (rain slicking his palms), and the token clatters to the pavement. He curses in a guttural dialect Harlow doesn’t recognize, shoves the metal door open with his shoulder, and vanishes into the dark below. The door slams shut behind him, leaving a faint, thrumming hum to hang in the damp air—like a beehive stirred from sleep. Harlow kneels, her knees scraping against the rough tarmac, and picks up the bone token. It’s smooth, worn thin from years of use, the texture of old ivory against her blood-sticky fingers. A tiny, carved raven adorns its surface—she recognizes the symbol from The Raven’s Nest, the dimly lit Soho bar she’d staked out last month. The bar’s distinctive green neon sign had glowed like a warning in the night, its walls lined with yellowed old maps and black-and-white photographs of long-dead criminals. She’d watched through a cracked window as Tomás Herrera, the former paramedic, patched up a clique member in the bar’s hidden back room—accessible only through a sliding bookshelf stacked with dusty leather tomes. She’d been unable to get inside without a warrant, the secret room’s door clicking shut before she could catch a clear look at what they’d been hiding. A voice cuts through the alley’s silence, sharp as a knife. “Your elbow needs stitches.” Harlow spins, her hand going to her belt where her nightstick hangs. Tomás Herrera leans against an overflowing bin bag, his short curly dark brown hair matted from the rain, his Saint Christopher medallion glinting faintly in the alley’s dim streetlight. His olive skin glistens with moisture, the scar along his left forearm (a memento from a knife attack he’d never explained) visible as he pushes off the bin to step closer. His boots squelch in a puddle of discarded beer, the sound loud in the quiet alley. She’s encountered him twice before—once at The Raven’s Nest, once outside a Camden flat where a clique member had been found with unexplained burn marks. Each time, he’d vanished before she could question him properly. “Your off-the-books services don’t extend to me,” Harlow says, her sharp jaw set in a familiar scowl. “I don’t pick sides. Just fix what’s broken.” Tomás’s warm brown eyes narrow, his voice steady despite the rain dripping off his chin. “You fix clique members. Clique members who tie to unsolved deaths.” Harlow steps closer, her military bearing making the narrow alley feel smaller. She’s 5’9”, but her posture makes her seem taller, her presence pressing in on him. “You know what’s in that market. What they sell. Enchanted goods that twist minds, banned alchemical substances that melt flesh—things that could’ve killed my partner.” “Your partner’s death wasn’t my doing.” Tomás’s hand brushes the Saint Christopher medallion around his neck, a nervous tic Harlow had noted during their first encounter. “Morris was ignored. His death was swept under the rug by superiors who feared what they’d find.” Harlow’s voice drops, her anger simmering just below the surface. “You lost your NHS license for helping supernatural patients. You know the darkness they live in. Tell me what the courier’s carrying.” Tomás hesitates, his fingers tightening around the medallion. “I can’t. They’ll skin me alive if I talk. The market’s leaders don’t tolerate snitches—they feed them to the stone hounds guarding the main hall.” “Then move. I’m going in.” Harlow turns to the metal door, her hand hovering over the handle. Tomás grabs her arm, his fingers tight around her bicep. “You don’t have a token. They’ll tear you apart before you take three steps.” Harlow pulls the bone token from her trench coat pocket, holds it up to the streetlight. The carved raven glints. “He dropped it.” Tomás’s face falls, his lips parting in a quiet gasp. “That’s a branded token. The raven mark means he’s a courier for the market’s ruling council. They’ll smell the fake entry—their guards have scaled noses that pick up fear and foreign scents. You’re a cop. They’ll taste your badge on your skin.” Harlow yanks her arm free, her military training making the movement quick and sharp. “I don’t fear them. I fear letting Morris’s killer get away with whatever they did three years ago. I fear walking past his empty desk every day, knowing I failed him.” She turns back to the metal door, her eyes scanning its surface for a hidden indentation to place the token. She’d watched the courier press the token to a small, circular mark just above the handle—she spots it now, a faint groove hidden by ivy. She brushes the ivy aside, presses the bone token to the mark. The door rumbles, its metal hinges groaning in protest. It swings open a crack, releasing a wave of cold air that makes her elbow throb. The scent of burnt herbs and iron hits her nostrils, a sharp contrast to the alley’s rot. Inside, she hears the murmur of voices, the clink of glass vials, the scratch of claws on stone—sounds that make her skin prickle. Tomás calls after her, his voice urgent. “Harlow—wait!” She steps over the threshold, the door slamming shut behind her before she can glance back. The darkness swallows her, the murmur of voices cutting off abruptly. Then, a shadow looms over her—tall, scaled, with glowing red eyes that pierce the dark. A stone hound, Tomás had called it. It sniffs the air, its tongue flicking out to taste the blood on her elbow. “Fake token,” it growls, its voice like grinding stone. Every head in the market turns to look at her.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Tomás hesitates his fingers tightening around [around]"
dialogueSentences23
tagDensity0.739
leniency1
rawRatio0.059
effectiveRatio0.059
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1204
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
66.78% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1204
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"silence"
count1
1
word"glinting"
count1
2
word"familiar"
count1
3
word"encounter"
count1
4
word"simmering"
count1
5
word"scanning"
count1
6
word"throb"
count1
7
word"looms"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"glinting"
2"familiar"
3"encounter"
4"simmering"
5"scanning"
6"throb"
7"looms"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences58
matches(empty)
68.97% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences58
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"feel"
2"know"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences61
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen66
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1182
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions41
wordCount1074
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity1.02
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Tomás"
discoveredNames
Morris2
Soho2
Harlow11
Tube1
Camden2
Veil1
Market1
Transport1
London1
Raven2
Nest2
Tomás9
Herrera2
Saint2
Christopher2
persons
0"Morris"
1"Harlow"
2"Raven"
3"Tomás"
4"Herrera"
5"Saint"
6"Christopher"
places
0"Soho"
1"Camden"
2"Market"
3"London"
globalScore0.988
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences54
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1182
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences61
matches
0"noses that pick"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs26
mean45.46
std35.46
cv0.78
sampleLengths
018
196
2105
397
4143
511
64
788
835
917
1023
1163
1226
1349
1433
1517
1624
1723
1852
1945
2057
2165
228
2364
249
2510
93.16% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences58
matches
0"been found"
1"was swept"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs173
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount14
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences14
totalSentences61
ratio0.23
matches
0"Harlow’s military precision falters—three days of tailing this clique courier have frayed her focus, the unresolved ghost of DS Morris’s death nipping at her heels like a rabid dog."
1"She rounds the corner into a narrow Soho alley she’s mapped a dozen times—its walls streaked with faded graffiti, lined with overflowing bin bags that reek of rotting mangoes and stale lager."
2"That’s no ordinary door—Harlow’s confidential intel links it to the abandoned Tube station beneath Camden, the current home of the Veil Market."
3"A bone token—she’s read witness statements of the market’s non-negotiable entry requirement, though she’s never seen one firsthand."
4"The door slams shut behind him, leaving a faint, thrumming hum to hang in the damp air—like a beehive stirred from sleep."
5"A tiny, carved raven adorns its surface—she recognizes the symbol from The Raven’s Nest, the dimly lit Soho bar she’d staked out last month."
6"She’d watched through a cracked window as Tomás Herrera, the former paramedic, patched up a clique member in the bar’s hidden back room—accessible only through a sliding bookshelf stacked with dusty leather tomes."
7"She’s encountered him twice before—once at The Raven’s Nest, once outside a Camden flat where a clique member had been found with unexplained burn marks."
8"Enchanted goods that twist minds, banned alchemical substances that melt flesh—things that could’ve killed my partner.”"
9"The market’s leaders don’t tolerate snitches—they feed them to the stone hounds guarding the main hall.”"
10"They’ll smell the fake entry—their guards have scaled noses that pick up fear and foreign scents."
11"She turns back to the metal door, her eyes scanning its surface for a hidden indentation to place the token. She’d watched the courier press the token to a small, circular mark just above the handle—she spots it now, a faint groove hidden by ivy. She brushes the ivy aside, presses the bone token to the mark."
12"The door rumbles, its metal hinges groaning in protest. It swings open a crack, releasing a wave of cold air that makes her elbow throb. The scent of burnt herbs and iron hits her nostrils, a sharp contrast to the alley’s rot. Inside, she hears the murmur of voices, the clink of glass vials, the scratch of claws on stone—sounds that make her skin prickle."
13"She steps over the threshold, the door slamming shut behind her before she can glance back. The darkness swallows her, the murmur of voices cutting off abruptly. Then, a shadow looms over her—tall, scaled, with glowing red eyes that pierce the dark. A stone hound, Tomás had called it. It sniffs the air, its tongue flicking out to taste the blood on her elbow."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount818
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount14
adverbRatio0.017114914425427872
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.007334963325183374
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences61
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences61
mean19.38
std12.79
cv0.66
sampleLengths
018
118
229
335
414
532
624
722
827
919
1018
1115
1223
1322
1415
1517
1624
1727
1833
1927
2011
214
2212
2329
2431
2516
2625
2710
2817
2923
3023
3121
323
3316
3426
353
3633
377
386
3910
407
4116
422
4315
4415
459
4623
4714
4812
4916
50.82% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.3442622950819672
totalSentences61
uniqueOpeners21
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences57
matches(empty)
ratio0
51.58% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences57
matches
0"She yanks a crumpled linen"
1"She rounds the corner into"
2"She’d spent two weeks hacking"
3"She skids to a halt"
4"He curses in a guttural"
5"It’s smooth, worn thin from"
6"She’d watched through a cracked"
7"She’d been unable to get"
8"His olive skin glistens with"
9"His boots squelch in a"
10"She’s encountered him twice before—once"
11"She’s know what’s in that"
12"His death was swept under"
13"You know the darkness they"
14"They’ll skin me alive if"
15"They’ll tear you apart before"
16"They’ll smell the fake entry—their"
17"You’re a cop."
18"They’ll taste your badge on"
19"I fear letting Morris’s killer"
ratio0.421
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount54
totalSentences57
matches
0"Harlow slams into a brick"
1"The man bolts around the"
2"Harlow’s military precision falters—three days"
3"She yanks a crumpled linen"
4"The handkerchief soaks through fast,"
5"She rounds the corner into"
6"The suspect’s scuffed leather shoes"
7"That’s no ordinary door—Harlow’s confidential"
8"She’d spent two weeks hacking"
9"She skids to a halt"
10"A bone token—she’s read witness"
11"The man’s fingers slip (rain"
12"He curses in a guttural"
13"The door slams shut behind"
14"Harlow kneels, her knees scraping"
15"It’s smooth, worn thin from"
16"A tiny, carved raven adorns"
17"The bar’s distinctive green neon"
18"She’d watched through a cracked"
19"She’d been unable to get"
ratio0.947
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences57
matches(empty)
ratio0
58.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences34
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Harlow’s military precision falters—three days of tailing this clique courier have frayed her focus, the unresolved ghost of DS Morris’s death nipping at her he…"
1"She’d been unable to get inside without a warrant, the secret room’s door clicking shut before she could catch a clear look at what they’d been hiding."
2"The door rumbles, its metal hinges groaning in protest. It swings open a crack, releasing a wave of cold air that makes her elbow throb. The scent of burnt herb…"
3"She steps over the threshold, the door slamming shut behind her before she can glance back. The darkness swallows her, the murmur of voices cutting off abruptly…"
34.09% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"brown eyes narrow, his voice steady despite the rain dripping off his chin"
1"Harlow steps, her military bearing making the narrow alley feel smaller"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"it growls (growl)"
dialogueSentences23
tagDensity0.13
leniency0.261
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.087
76.9184%