Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY85CEACXZGBSKASJ3NYP51

Run Details

Model:
Grok 4
Duration:
1m 54s
Cost:
$0.053748
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rory pushed through the heavy wooden door of The Raven's Nest, the green neon sign flickering like a hesitant beacon above her head. Rain slicked the streets of Soho, and she'd ducked in on impulse, her delivery bag slung over one shoulder, still warm from the last order of dumplings she'd dropped off three blocks away. The air inside hit her like a memory—peat smoke and polished oak, undercut by the faint tang of spilled ale. Dim lights cast long shadows over walls papered with faded maps and black-and-white photographs of forgotten cities. She shook the water from her black hair, shoulder-length strands clinging to her damp jacket, and scanned the room for an empty stool. The bar wasn't crowded, just a few regulars nursing pints in the corners, their conversations murmuring like distant thunder. Behind the counter, a tall man with grey-streaked auburn hair poured a whiskey with practiced ease. He moved with a slight limp, favoring his left leg as he turned to slide the glass to a patron. Something about the way he held himself—quiet authority, like he owned the space without needing to declare it—tugged at the edges of her mind. She froze midway to the bar, her bright blue eyes narrowing. "Silas?" The name slipped out before she could stop it, soft but sharp enough to cut through the low hum. The man looked up, hazel eyes meeting hers. For a split second, his face was a blank mask, the kind honed from years of hiding tells. Then recognition dawned, slow and warm, cracking the facade. "Rory? Aurora Carter?" She laughed, a short, disbelieving sound that echoed off the maps on the walls. "God, it's been... what, fifteen years? More?" She closed the distance, sliding onto a stool as he set down the bottle with a thud. Up close, the changes hit her harder. The auburn hair she'd remembered as vibrant was threaded with grey, matching the neatly trimmed beard that framed his jaw. A silver signet ring glinted on his right hand, unchanged, but the limp—that was new, a hitch in his step as he came around the bar to embrace her. He pulled her into a hug, brief but firm, his frame still solid at six-one, towering over her five-six. "Look at you," he said, stepping back to appraise her. "Last I saw, you were a scrawny kid in pigtails, arguing with your dad over case law at that godforsaken dinner in Cardiff." His voice carried the faint lilt of someone who'd spent too long in shadowed corners, accents blurred by necessity. Rory grinned, but it didn't quite reach her eyes. "Yeah, well, Dad's still arguing with everyone. Mom sends her love, or she would if she knew I was here." She glanced around the bar, taking in the details—the hidden bookshelf in the back that looked too perfectly placed, the photographs of Prague spires and Berlin streets. "This is yours? The Raven's Nest? I just ducked in from the rain. Didn't expect to find you playing barkeep." Silas chuckled, a low rumble, and limped back behind the counter. "Retired life suits me. What'll you have? On the house, for old times' sake." "Whiskey, neat. Whatever you're pouring." She watched him pour, his movements deliberate, the signet ring catching the light. The small crescent scar on her left wrist itched under her sleeve, a phantom reminder of childhood falls and scraped knees. Silas had been there for one of those dinners, a rare guest her father had invited—a colleague from some murky legal consultation, or so Brendan Carter had claimed. Rory had been ten, maybe eleven, eavesdropping on their hushed talks about operations and assets. Silas Blackwood, the enigmatic family friend who'd vanish for months, only to reappear with stories sanitized for young ears. He slid the glass across, settling onto a stool opposite her. "So, what brings you to London? Last I heard from your father, you were buried in pre-law at Cardiff. Brilliant mind like yours, I figured you'd be barrister by now, tearing apart witnesses like Brendan does." Rory sipped the whiskey, the burn steadying her. She traced the rim of the glass with her finger, avoiding his gaze. "Plans change. I... needed a fresh start." The words hung there, heavy with omission. Evan. The bruises she'd hidden, the nights she'd stared at the ceiling, plotting escape. Eva's urgent texts: Come to London. Leave him. She'd fled, backpack and all, landing a gig delivering for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress. Part-time, flexible, anonymous. "I'm working deliveries now. Nothing glamorous. Pays the bills." Silas nodded, his hazel eyes sharp, reading the gaps. He didn't push—never had. Instead, he leaned back, the limp evident as he adjusted his leg. "Fair enough. Life has a way of rerouting us." He tapped his knee absently. "Prague, '08. Botched op. Knee's never been the same. MI6 pensioned me off, and here I am, slinging drinks instead of secrets." She raised an eyebrow. "The Spymaster, reduced to this? Dad always said you were invincible." A shadow crossed his face, fleeting but unmistakable. "Invincible gets people killed. I lost good agents that night. Should've seen the double-cross coming." He swirled his own drink, the ice clinking softly. Unspoken regret thickened the air between them, like the smoke from a patron's cigarette in the corner. Silas had always been the one with the plan, the quiet authority who'd slip her extra dessert at those dinners, whispering tales of far-off places to distract from her parents' arguments. Now, he looked worn, the grey in his hair a testament to years she'd missed. Rory felt it too—the weight of time. She'd changed, hardened by Evan's temper, the way he'd isolate her, chip away at her confidence until she barely recognized the quick-thinking girl she'd been. "Remember that time in Cardiff, when you taught me that card trick? The one with the hidden ace?" She smiled faintly, pulling at the scar on her wrist. "I used it to impress Evan once. My ex. Thought it was clever." Silas's eyes softened. "Did it work?" "For a while." She looked away, staring at a photograph on the wall—a grainy shot of a raven in flight over misty hills. "He wasn't who I thought. Got... controlling. I left. Eva dragged me here." The confession spilled out, quieter than intended. Regret clawed at her—why hadn't she seen the signs sooner? Why had she wasted years on someone who dimmed her light? He reached across, his hand covering hers briefly, the signet ring cool against her skin. "Smart move. You're tougher than you know, Rory. Always were." But his voice carried its own undercurrent, the limp a constant reminder of his own failures. He'd retired not just from injury, but from the ghosts of Prague—friends buried, reports redacted. The bar was his sanctuary, a front for whatever network he still maintained, but it couldn't erase the what-ifs. They sat in companionable silence for a moment, the bar's dim light softening the edges of their faces. A regular called for a refill, and Silas rose with a wince, limping to pour it. Rory watched him, noting how he'd aged into this role, the quiet authority now laced with weariness. She felt it mirror her own transformation—from the wide-eyed girl debating law with her father to this version, delivery bag at her feet, scars hidden under sleeves. When he returned, she asked, "Do you ever regret it? The life you chose?" Silas paused, beard twitching as he considered. "Every day. But regret's a lousy drinking partner. What about you? Cardiff calling you back?" She shook her head. "Not yet. London's... freeing. But sometimes I wonder if I ran too far." The unspoken hung there—regret for the paths not taken, the versions of themselves left behind. Evan had stolen her confidence, but time had given her resilience. Silas's career had forged him, then broken him, leaving this bar as his quiet atonement. He raised his glass. "To reroutes, then. And old friends." She clinked hers against it, the sound sharp in the muted bar. "To whatever comes next." But as they drank, the tension lingered, a bridge between who they'd been and who they'd become—two souls marked by time, regrets whispering in the spaces between words. The rain outside picked up, drumming against the windows like insistent fingers. Rory finished her whiskey, the warmth spreading through her, chasing away the chill. Silas busied himself wiping down the counter, but his eyes kept flicking back to her, as if assessing an asset he hadn't seen in too long. "You know, your father mentioned you once, years back. Said you had that out-of-the-box thinking. Like me in my prime." She snorted. "Prime? You're not done yet, old man." He grinned, but it didn't mask the flicker of pain as he shifted his weight. "Maybe not. But the game's changed. No more chasing shadows in the dark." His words carried layers—regret for the adrenaline, the purpose he'd lost. Prague had taken more than his knee; it had stolen his invincibility, left him here in this dimly lit haven, surrounded by maps of places he'd never return to. Rory felt a pang, mirroring her own losses. Evan had been her shadow, controlling, possessive, until she'd broken free. But freedom came with its own ghosts—nights alone in cheap flats, questioning every choice. "I get it," she said softly. "Sometimes I miss the girl I was. The one who believed in happy endings." Silas nodded, pouring them another round without asking. "We all do. But that girl's still in there. Smarter now. Scarred, but stronger." He glanced at her wrist, where the crescent scar peeked from her cuff. "Like that mark from the bike fall. Remember? I bandaged it while your parents argued about dinner." She laughed, genuine this time. "You did. Told me scars tell stories." "And they do." He tapped his knee. "This one's a novel." Their conversation flowed easier then, dipping into lighter memories—Cardiff winters, her father's endless case files, Silas's cryptic visits with gifts from abroad. But beneath it, the tension simmered: the years apart had carved them into new shapes. Rory, once reluctant pre-law student, now navigated London's underbelly with quick wits and a delivery bike. Silas, the spymaster, reduced to clandestine meetings in a hidden back room she hadn't yet noticed behind the bookshelf. As the evening wore on, a patron stumbled out, leaving the bar quieter. Rory checked her phone—another delivery pinged, but she ignored it. "I should go," she said, reluctant. "Stay dry out there." Silas walked her to the door, limp more pronounced in the quiet. "Don't be a stranger, Rory. Flat above is empty if you need it." She paused, hand on the door. "Really? I might take you up on that." The offer felt like a lifeline, bridging the gap time had wrought. He squeezed her shoulder. "Anytime. We've got catching up to do." She stepped into the rain, the green neon sign blurring in the downpour. Glancing back, she saw him watching from the doorway, hazel eyes reflecting unspoken sorrows. Time had changed them, yes—etched regrets into their bones—but in that unexpected reunion, it had also offered a thread of redemption, fragile but real.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags24
adverbTagCount6
adverbTags
0"She glanced around [around]"
1"Silas had always [always]"
2"She smiled faintly [faintly]"
3"She looked away [away]"
4"she said softly [softly]"
5"The offer felt like [like]"
dialogueSentences42
tagDensity0.571
leniency1
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.25
89.49% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1903
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count2
2
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"softly"
2"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
23.80% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1903
totalAiIsms29
found
0
word"beacon"
count1
1
word"scanned"
count1
2
word"practiced ease"
count1
3
word"facade"
count1
4
word"echoed"
count1
5
word"lilt"
count1
6
word"reminder"
count2
7
word"enigmatic"
count1
8
word"traced"
count1
9
word"eyebrow"
count1
10
word"fleeting"
count1
11
word"unspoken"
count3
12
word"testament"
count1
13
word"weight"
count2
14
word"sanctuary"
count1
15
word"silence"
count1
16
word"tension"
count2
17
word"warmth"
count1
18
word"chill"
count1
19
word"flicker"
count1
20
word"pang"
count1
21
word"navigated"
count1
22
word"clandestine"
count1
23
word"etched"
count1
highlights
0"beacon"
1"scanned"
2"practiced ease"
3"facade"
4"echoed"
5"lilt"
6"reminder"
7"enigmatic"
8"traced"
9"eyebrow"
10"fleeting"
11"unspoken"
12"testament"
13"weight"
14"sanctuary"
15"silence"
16"tension"
17"warmth"
18"chill"
19"flicker"
20"pang"
21"navigated"
22"clandestine"
23"etched"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences104
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences104
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences123
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen48
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1870
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions48
wordCount1419
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity0.99
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Soho1
Rory10
Prague3
Berlin1
Silas14
Brendan1
Carter1
Blackwood1
Evan4
Come1
London2
Yu-Fei1
Cheung1
Golden1
Empress1
Unspoken1
Regret1
Cardiff1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Rory"
2"Silas"
3"Brendan"
4"Carter"
5"Blackwood"
6"Evan"
7"Yu-Fei"
8"Cheung"
9"Unspoken"
10"Regret"
places
0"Soho"
1"Prague"
2"Berlin"
3"London"
4"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
64.77% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences88
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"quite reach her eyes"
1"as if assessing an asset he hadn't seen in too long"
2"felt like a lifeline, bridging the gap"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.535
wordCount1870
matches
0"not just from injury, but from the ghosts of Prague"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences123
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs37
mean50.54
std30.52
cv0.604
sampleLengths
0116
190
220
338
494
571
676
725
8101
947
1083
1161
1215
1395
1473
156
1664
1775
1878
1914
2022
2158
2210
2344
2471
259
2668
2753
2852
2912
3011
3172
3229
3329
3426
3511
3651
98.52% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences104
matches
0"was threaded"
1"been ten"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs248
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount20
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences19
totalSentences123
ratio0.154
matches
0"The air inside hit her like a memory—peat smoke and polished oak, undercut by the faint tang of spilled ale."
1"Something about the way he held himself—quiet authority, like he owned the space without needing to declare it—tugged at the edges of her mind."
2"A silver signet ring glinted on his right hand, unchanged, but the limp—that was new, a hitch in his step as he came around the bar to embrace her."
3"\"Yeah, well, Dad's still arguing with everyone. Mom sends her love, or she would if she knew I was here.\" She glanced around the bar, taking in the details—the hidden bookshelf in the back that looked too perfectly placed, the photographs of Prague spires and Berlin streets."
4"Silas had been there for one of those dinners, a rare guest her father had invited—a colleague from some murky legal consultation, or so Brendan Carter had claimed."
5"He didn't push—never had."
6"Rory felt it too—the weight of time."
7"\"For a while.\" She looked away, staring at a photograph on the wall—a grainy shot of a raven in flight over misty hills."
8"Regret clawed at her—why hadn't she seen the signs sooner?"
9"He'd retired not just from injury, but from the ghosts of Prague—friends buried, reports redacted."
10"She felt it mirror her own transformation—from the wide-eyed girl debating law with her father to this version, delivery bag at her feet, scars hidden under sleeves."
11"\"Not yet. London's... freeing. But sometimes I wonder if I ran too far.\" The unspoken hung there—regret for the paths not taken, the versions of themselves left behind."
12"\"To whatever comes next.\" But as they drank, the tension lingered, a bridge between who they'd been and who they'd become—two souls marked by time, regrets whispering in the spaces between words."
13"\"Maybe not. But the game's changed. No more chasing shadows in the dark.\" His words carried layers—regret for the adrenaline, the purpose he'd lost."
14"Prague had taken more than his knee; it had stolen his invincibility, left him here in this dimly lit haven, surrounded by maps of places he'd never return to."
15"But freedom came with its own ghosts—nights alone in cheap flats, questioning every choice."
16"Their conversation flowed easier then, dipping into lighter memories—Cardiff winters, her father's endless case files, Silas's cryptic visits with gifts from abroad."
17"Rory checked her phone—another delivery pinged, but she ignored it."
18"Time had changed them, yes—etched regrets into their bones—but in that unexpected reunion, it had also offered a thread of redemption, fragile but real."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount918
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount34
adverbRatio0.037037037037037035
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.006535947712418301
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences123
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences123
mean15.2
std8.59
cv0.565
sampleLengths
023
133
220
317
423
519
616
720
824
911
1020
118
1218
139
143
1514
1624
177
1820
1929
2019
2110
2242
239
2447
2520
2611
2714
2818
2921
3028
3115
3219
3311
3436
358
3613
3714
381
3913
406
412
4214
433
449
459
464
4712
4814
4922
79.95% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.4796747967479675
totalSentences123
uniqueOpeners59
66.01% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences101
matches
0"Then recognition dawned, slow and"
1"Instead, he leaned back, the"
ratio0.02
69.50% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount38
totalSentences101
matches
0"She shook the water from"
1"He moved with a slight"
2"She froze midway to the"
3"She laughed, a short, disbelieving"
4"She closed the distance, sliding"
5"He pulled her into a"
6"he said, stepping back to"
7"His voice carried the faint"
8"She glanced around the bar,"
9"She watched him pour, his"
10"He slid the glass across,"
11"She traced the rim of"
12"She'd fled, backpack and all,"
13"He didn't push—never had."
14"He tapped his knee absently"
15"She raised an eyebrow."
16"He swirled his own drink,"
17"She'd changed, hardened by Evan's"
18"She smiled faintly, pulling at"
19"She looked away, staring at"
ratio0.376
44.16% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount84
totalSentences101
matches
0"Rory pushed through the heavy"
1"Rain slicked the streets of"
2"The air inside hit her"
3"She shook the water from"
4"The bar wasn't crowded, just"
5"He moved with a slight"
6"Something about the way he"
7"She froze midway to the"
8"The name slipped out before"
9"The man looked up, hazel"
10"She laughed, a short, disbelieving"
11"She closed the distance, sliding"
12"The auburn hair she'd remembered"
13"A silver signet ring glinted"
14"He pulled her into a"
15"he said, stepping back to"
16"His voice carried the faint"
17"Rory grinned, but it didn't"
18"She glanced around the bar,"
19"Silas chuckled, a low rumble,"
ratio0.832
49.50% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences101
matches
0"Now, he looked worn, the"
ratio0.01
91.84% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences56
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"A silver signet ring glinted on his right hand, unchanged, but the limp—that was new, a hitch in his step as he came around the bar to embrace her."
1"Silas Blackwood, the enigmatic family friend who'd vanish for months, only to reappear with stories sanitized for young ears."
2"Why had she wasted years on someone who dimmed her light?"
3"Silas busied himself wiping down the counter, but his eyes kept flicking back to her, as if assessing an asset he hadn't seen in too long."
62.50% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags24
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"The name slipped out, soft but sharp enough to cut through the low hum"
1"He swirled, the ice clinking softly"
2"she said, reluctant"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences42
tagDensity0.071
leniency0.143
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
81.3347%