Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY8ASP2HYXDQH5T7A1M3Z63

Run Details

Duration:
37.3s
Cost:
$0.002148
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rain slicked the Soho streets, turning the pavements into mirrors that shattered under Rory's boots. She hunched against the drizzle, the cardboard box from her last Golden Empress delivery sodden and useless now, abandoned in an alley behind the theater district. Her shoulder-length black hair clung to her neck like wet ink, and her jacket—cheap nylon from a market stall—did little to fend off the chill seeping into her bones. It was past midnight, the kind of hour when London felt like a conspiracy against the living, all neon haze and echoing footsteps. The green neon sign of The Raven's Nest flickered above the door, casting its sickly glow on the wet cobbles. Rory hadn't set foot inside in over two years, not since the day she'd hauled her duffel up the creaky stairs to the flat above, courtesy of Eva's frantic call: "Si's got a place for you, Rory. Just go. Don't think." She'd nodded, signed the sublet papers with trembling hands, and then vanished into her routine—deliveries by day, silence by night. The bar below had pulsed on without her, a distant heartbeat she ignored. Tonight, though, the pull was magnetic. Her flat's boiler had sputtered its last, leaving her shivering in damp clothes with no hot shower in sight. And whiskey called louder than pride. She shoved the door open, the brass handle cold and gritty under her palm. The Nest enveloped her like an old coat: dim amber light from pendant lamps swaying gently, walls papered in faded maps of forgotten empires and sepia photographs of stern-faced men in trench coats. The air hung thick with peat smoke, spilled stout, and the faint metallic tang of polished brass. A handful of patrons hunched at the scarred oak bar—two suits nursing pints, a woman in a red coat scrolling her phone—or clustered in booths, murmuring over half-empty glasses. Jazz crackled from hidden speakers, Miles Davis weaving melancholy through the haze. Rory slid onto a stool at the far end, away from the light. Her bright blue eyes scanned the bottles behind the bar, landing on the amber glow of Jameson. She traced the small crescent scar on her left wrist with her thumb, a habit when nerves frayed. "Whiskey, neat," she said to the empty stretch of bar top, voice rough from the cold. A shadow shifted, and then he was there—silas Blackwood, materializing like smoke. Taller than she remembered, though time had etched lines around his hazel eyes and streaked his auburn hair with grey. His beard was neatly trimmed, framing a jaw that still held the cut of authority. He moved with a slight hitch in his left leg, the limp subtle but unmistakable, like a clock with a jammed gear. On his right hand, the silver signet ring caught the light, engraved with some crest she couldn't quite place. He poured the whiskey without a word, the bottle glugging golden liquid into a heavy tumbler. Then he slid it across, his gaze locking on her face. Recognition dawned slow, like dawn over the Thames fog. "Aurora Carter," he said, voice low and gravelly, laced with Welsh valleys she'd almost forgotten. "Christ. Rory." She froze, fingers midway to the glass. The name hit like a slap—Rory, not Laila the delivery ghost, not Carter the runaway. She looked up, really looked, and saw the man beneath the barman: the Spymaster, her father's old shadow. "Silas." It came out sharper than intended, a blade unsheathed. "Didn't think you'd remember." He leaned on the bar, forearms corded with muscle that spoke of old disciplines, not bar towels. "Remember? You were fourteen, trailing Brendan into that pub in Cardiff like a feral cat. Blue eyes sharp as scalpels, asking me about Prague before I could sip my pint." A ghost of a smile tugged his lips. "Your da said you were Pre-Law material already. Outfoxed him in arguments over breakfast." Heat flushed her cheeks, not from the whiskey she'd yet to taste. That summer, fifteen years gone, her father had dragged her to The Mermaid Inn, boasting to his barrister mates about his clever girl. Silas had been there, fresh from some classified hellhole, all quiet command and stories veiled in half-truths. He'd sketched maps on napkins, shown her tricks with lockpicks disguised as keys. "Stay sharp, Rory," he'd said, pressing a coin into her palm—a fake sovereign that later bought her first leather jacket. "World's full of locks." She lifted the glass, the liquor burning a path to her gut. "That was a lifetime ago. Da's stories made you sound like James Bond. Turns out you're slinging pints in Soho." His laugh was dry, like rustling leaves. He straightened, wincing as his knee protested, and poured himself a finger of the same. "Bond got the girl and the gadgets. I got this." He tapped his left leg, the limp's culprit. "Prague, '09. Botched op. Knee shattered like glass. Retired with a pension and a pat on the back." His eyes darkened, hazel flecked with old storms. "Opened this place as a... hobby. Keeps the ghosts at bay." Rory sipped again, the warmth spreading, loosening the knot in her chest. He hadn't changed entirely—the authority lingered, in the way he scanned the room without seeming to, noting the suits' whispered deal, the red-coat woman's furtive glance at her watch. But the fire had banked. No more field agent swagger; now it was measured pours and a ring that clinked against glass. "You've changed more," he said, nodding at her wrist. "Scar's new. Or did I miss it?" "Childhood," she said, too quick. Tumble from a tree at ten, chasing her brother. But it felt like a lie by omission. "And the rest? Life." She shrugged, but her shoulders ached from the bike courier grind, parcels strapped tight against rain and rush-hour snarl. He didn't buy it. Silas never had. "Eva called me two years back. Said you'd bolted from Cardiff. Abusive prick named Evan. Dropped uni. Said you needed a bolt-hole." He glanced up at the ceiling, toward her flat. "Gave you the keys. Figured you'd come down eventually." Regret twisted in her gut, sharp as the whiskey's bite. Two years under his roof, dodging his gaze through the floorboards, deliveries her shield. "I meant to. But..." Evan’s fists, the bruises blooming like ink under her skin. The Pre-Law dreams shattered on a Cardiff pavement. "Didn't want pity. Or questions." Silas's jaw tightened, beard shadowing the clench. "Pity? From me?" He set his glass down harder than needed, the thud echoing. "Brendan trusted me with you, Rory. Showed you my tricks because he knew I'd keep you safe. Then I ghosted—ops took me dark. Prague happened, and I washed up here. Should've checked in after he passed." Her father. Cancer, three years prior, quick and merciless. She'd been neck-deep in Evan then, arguments masking screams. Silas at the funeral? She couldn't recall faces through the haze. "Da spoke of you till the end. 'Silas'll set you straight, girl.' Thought you'd be off saving the world." "World saved itself." He rubbed his knee absently. "Missed the small stuff. Like watching you argue circles round those profs." His voice softened, regret threading through. "Heard you were top of your class. What happened?" The question hung, heavy as the maps on the walls—uncharted territories of what-ifs. Rory traced the bar's grain, scarred from a thousand elbows. "Evan happened. Started sweet, ended with me dodging punches. Uni felt like another cage. Fled to Eva, ended up here." She met his eyes, unflinching. "Delivery gig pays rent. Out-of-the-box thinking: pedal faster than the posties." He shook his head, grey streaks catching light. "That's not you, Rory. You're sharper than that. Remember the safe? Cardiff safe, your da's office. Cracked it in ten minutes with a paperclip and spite." Laughter bubbled up, surprising her—real, not the polite bark she faked at Yu-Fei's. "Spite was key. Da locked my essays away to make me study." She leaned in, voice dropping. "You showed me the tension trick. Wire against pin. Click." Silas mirrored her, elbows on the bar, the space between them shrinking. "Tension's everything. In locks, ops... life." His signet ring tapped rhythmically. "I lost mine in Prague. Chased a ghost down an alley, knee gave out. Bullet missed me by inches, but the fall? That lingered." Pause, eyes distant. "Regret it every rainy night. Should've pulled back sooner. Seen you more. Brendan asked me once, after a pint too many: 'Keep an eye, Si. She's got fire, but fires need tending.'" Unspoken weight settled, thick as the smoke. Rory felt it—the years stolen, regrets unspoken. She'd idolized him as the uncle she never had, the spy who made law seem tame. Now? He was mortal, limping through shadows. And she? No longer the girl with scalpels for eyes, but a survivor pedaling through drizzle, scar a reminder of falls taken. "You could've knocked," she said softly. "Upstairs. Tea, even. I heard you sometimes, late nights. Limping around." "Figured you needed space." His hazel gaze held hers, unflinching. "Spymaster's habit: watch from afar. But yeah. Regret that too." The jazz swelled, trumpet crying loss. Rory drained her glass, the burn familiar now. "Time's a thief, Si. Locks us out of our own lives." He poured refills, hands steady. "Not irreversible. Pick's still there." He slid hers over, ring glinting promise. "Stay. Talk. No ghosts tonight." She nodded, the tension easing—not snapped, but loosened. Outside, rain drummed on, but here, in the Nest's amber heart, two old friends bridged the chasm. Changed, scarred, regretting—but reaching. The suits left, coats flapping. Red-coat lingered, eyes on Silas. He nodded her way, subtle authority rekindling. Rory watched, seeing the Spymaster flicker beneath the barman. Her own fire stirred, blue eyes sharpening. "Tell me about Prague," she said, leaning closer. "Proper story. No veils." His smile returned, crooked and real. "Alright, Rory. But tension first." He twisted his ring, and for the first time in years, the lock between them clicked open. They talked till the jazz looped back, whiskey warming regrets into resolve. Maps on the walls whispered of paths untaken, but tonight, time bent. Rory traced her scar, Silas rubbed his knee, and Soho slept on, oblivious to the quiet mending below its neon skin. Hours blurred. He spoke of Prague's cobbles slick with betrayal, the alley's ambush, the shatter of bone. She confessed Evan's grip tightening like a vice, the uni dropout note crumpled in her fist. Laughter punctuated—her outfoxing Yu-Fei with a shortcut through back alleys, his bar brawls diffused with a stare. Regrets surfaced raw: his for vanishing into shadows, leaving Brendan to fade alone; hers for silence, letting the flat's floorboards be their only dialogue. Dawn crept, grey light filtering through grimed windows. Rory stood, steadier now. "Won't ghost anymore." Silas clasped her hand, ring cool against her scar. "Nor I. Locks, Rory. We crack 'em together." She stepped into the dying rain, flat waiting warm above. Changed? Yes. But the weight lifted, time's theft paused. In The Raven's Nest, old friends reclaimed their keys. (Word count: 1428)
created_at"2026-02-20T19:27:23.34Z" 2/20/2026, 7:27:23 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
84.62% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags26
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"the bruises blooming like [like]"
1"His signet ring tapped rhythmically [rhythmically]"
2"she said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences48
tagDensity0.542
leniency1
rawRatio0.115
effectiveRatio0.115
92.03% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1881
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"gently"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"gently"
1"really"
2"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
12.28% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1881
totalAiIsms33
found
0
word"shattered"
count3
1
word"chill"
count1
2
word"echoing"
count2
3
word"footsteps"
count1
4
word"flickered"
count1
5
word"silence"
count2
6
word"pulsed"
count1
7
word"magnetic"
count1
8
word"scanned"
count2
9
word"traced"
count3
10
word"etched"
count1
11
word"warmth"
count1
12
word"measured"
count1
13
word"tension"
count4
14
word"unspoken"
count2
15
word"weight"
count2
16
word"reminder"
count1
17
word"familiar"
count1
18
word"glinting"
count1
19
word"flicker"
count1
20
word"resolve"
count1
highlights
0"shattered"
1"chill"
2"echoing"
3"footsteps"
4"flickered"
5"silence"
6"pulsed"
7"magnetic"
8"scanned"
9"traced"
10"etched"
11"warmth"
12"measured"
13"tension"
14"unspoken"
15"weight"
16"reminder"
17"familiar"
18"glinting"
19"flicker"
20"resolve"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences119
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences119
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences142
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen62
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1853
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions57
wordCount1359
uniqueNames31
maxNameDensity0.81
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Soho2
Rory11
Golden1
Empress1
London1
Raven2
Nest4
Eva1
Miles1
Davis1
Jameson1
Blackwood1
Thames1
Welsh1
Laila1
Carter1
Spymaster2
Heat1
Mermaid1
Inn1
Tumble1
Regret1
Pre-Law1
Cardiff1
Evan3
Yu-Fei2
Silas8
Pause1
Unspoken1
Prague1
Brendan1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Raven"
2"Nest"
3"Eva"
4"Davis"
5"Jameson"
6"Blackwood"
7"Laila"
8"Carter"
9"Heat"
10"Inn"
11"Regret"
12"Evan"
13"Silas"
14"Brendan"
places
0"Soho"
1"London"
2"Thames"
3"Mermaid"
4"Cardiff"
5"Yu-Fei"
6"Prague"
globalScore1
windowScore1
71.05% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences95
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"felt like a conspiracy against the livi"
1"quite place"
2"felt like a lie by omission"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.54
wordCount1853
matches
0"not snapped, but loosened"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences142
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs39
mean47.51
std25.16
cv0.53
sampleLengths
093
194
245
391
464
588
653
754
869
989
1032
1177
1263
1316
1445
1547
1651
1757
1848
1935
2059
2134
2240
2382
2459
2517
2620
2725
2822
2929
3033
3112
3228
3345
3474
3515
3617
3728
383
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences119
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs251
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount15
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences15
totalSentences142
ratio0.106
matches
0"Her shoulder-length black hair clung to her neck like wet ink, and her jacket—cheap nylon from a market stall—did little to fend off the chill seeping into her bones."
1"Rory hadn't set foot inside in over two years, not since the day she'd hauled her duffel up the creaky stairs to the flat above, courtesy of Eva's frantic call: \"Si's got a place for you, Rory. Just go. Don't think.\" She'd nodded, signed the sublet papers with trembling hands, and then vanished into her routine—deliveries by day, silence by night."
2"A handful of patrons hunched at the scarred oak bar—two suits nursing pints, a woman in a red coat scrolling her phone—or clustered in booths, murmuring over half-empty glasses."
3"A shadow shifted, and then he was there—silas Blackwood, materializing like smoke."
4"The name hit like a slap—Rory, not Laila the delivery ghost, not Carter the runaway."
5"\"Stay sharp, Rory,\" he'd said, pressing a coin into her palm—a fake sovereign that later bought her first leather jacket."
6"He hadn't changed entirely—the authority lingered, in the way he scanned the room without seeming to, noting the suits' whispered deal, the red-coat woman's furtive glance at her watch."
7"No more field agent swagger; now it was measured pours and a ring that clinked against glass."
8"The question hung, heavy as the maps on the walls—uncharted territories of what-ifs."
9"Laughter bubbled up, surprising her—real, not the polite bark she faked at Yu-Fei's."
10"Rory felt it—the years stolen, regrets unspoken."
11"She nodded, the tension easing—not snapped, but loosened."
12"Changed, scarred, regretting—but reaching."
13"Laughter punctuated—her outfoxing Yu-Fei with a shortcut through back alleys, his bar brawls diffused with a stare."
14"Regrets surfaced raw: his for vanishing into shadows, leaving Brendan to fade alone; hers for silence, letting the flat's floorboards be their only dialogue."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1292
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"over half-empty glasses."
1"quiet mending below its"
adverbCount28
adverbRatio0.021671826625386997
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.008513931888544891
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences142
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences142
mean13.05
std8.74
cv0.669
sampleLengths
015
126
229
323
420
561
613
76
819
96
1014
1133
1217
1329
1412
1513
1617
1718
1816
1912
2020
2115
2222
2319
2416
2511
269
2715
282
297
3015
3118
3210
334
3417
3538
3614
3712
3823
3917
4013
4120
424
4312
4420
457
4615
4718
4826
4911
87.32% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.528169014084507
totalSentences142
uniqueOpeners75
59.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences113
matches
0"Then he slid it across,"
1"No longer the girl with"
ratio0.018
28.85% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount54
totalSentences113
matches
0"She hunched against the drizzle,"
1"Her shoulder-length black hair clung"
2"It was past midnight, the"
3"Her flat's boiler had sputtered"
4"She shoved the door open,"
5"Her bright blue eyes scanned"
6"She traced the small crescent"
7"she said to the empty"
8"His beard was neatly trimmed,"
9"He moved with a slight"
10"He poured the whiskey without"
11"he said, voice low and"
12"She froze, fingers midway to"
13"She looked up, really looked,"
14"It came out sharper than"
15"He leaned on the bar,"
16"He'd sketched maps on napkins,"
17"he'd said, pressing a coin"
18"She lifted the glass, the"
19"His laugh was dry, like"
ratio0.478
39.65% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount95
totalSentences113
matches
0"Rain slicked the Soho streets,"
1"She hunched against the drizzle,"
2"Her shoulder-length black hair clung"
3"It was past midnight, the"
4"The green neon sign of"
5"Rory hadn't set foot inside"
6"The bar below had pulsed"
7"Tonight, though, the pull was"
8"Her flat's boiler had sputtered"
9"She shoved the door open,"
10"The Nest enveloped her like"
11"The air hung thick with"
12"A handful of patrons hunched"
13"Jazz crackled from hidden speakers,"
14"Rory slid onto a stool"
15"Her bright blue eyes scanned"
16"She traced the small crescent"
17"she said to the empty"
18"A shadow shifted, and then"
19"His beard was neatly trimmed,"
ratio0.841
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences113
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences51
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"No more field agent swagger; now it was measured pours and a ring that clinked against glass."
48.08% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags26
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"she said, voice rough from the cold"
1"She shrugged, but her shoulders ached from the bike courier grind, parcels strapped tight against rain and rush-hour snarl"
2"He set, the thud echoing"
3"She leaned in, voice dropping"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"he'd (would)"
dialogueSentences48
tagDensity0.146
leniency0.292
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.042
80.3623%