Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY8BBFTVMV9D6FKA6MF8GNP

Run Details

Duration:
31.7s
Cost:
$0.001223
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The neon green of The Raven's Nest sign bled through the rain-streaked window, casting a sickly glow over the bar’s worn Formica tables. Rory Carter wiped the condensation from a pint glass with a rag that reeked of lemon polish, her movements precise as she’d learned to be. At 25, she’d shed the softness of her Cardiff years—no more clutching her books like a shield, no more blushing when a barista asked her name. Now, her left hand moved easily, the small crescent scar on her wrist a constant reminder of the kitchen knife she’d dodged at 12, when her mother had taught her to cut carrots. *Steady*, Jennifer Carter had called it. *Steady and sharp*. Rory had taken that to heart. The bell over the door jangled. She glanced up, ready to greet a regular, but stopped short. A man stood in the doorway, water dripping from his leather coat, which clung to his shoulders like a second skin. He was taller than she remembered, broad-shouldered, his auburn hair streaked with grey that caught the neon light. The scar on his left knee—a thin white line that ran from his thigh to his calf—was visible beneath the rolled-up cuff of his jeans. Of course he was limping. *Silas*. “Rory?” He said her name like a question, like he wasn’t sure she’d recognize it. She set the glass down too hard, the rag skidding across the counter. “Silas.” It came out shorter than she meant. *Don’t gape*, she chided herself. *He’s changed*. No more tailored suits, no more the sharp, confident stride that had made him the bane of Cardiff University’s debating society. Now, his dark blue shirt was unbuttoned at the collar, and his beard—neatly trimmed, as always—framed a face that looked like it had been carved from weathered oak. “Took you long enough to recognize me.” He managed a half-smile, but his eyes stayed sharp, measuring. “Busy.” She turned to straighten a rack of shot glasses, her fingers hovering over a row of dark bottles. *Evan*. The name still tasted like ash. *Don’t let him see you flinch*. Silas moved to the bar, his limp more pronounced now, a shift in his weight as he sat. “Yu-Fei’s delivery this week? Broke your record by ten minutes. She’s going to start giving you extra tips.” “Good.” She poured him a whiskey, the amber liquid sloshing into the glass. “Can I get you one, or are you here for the details on the next batch of dumplings?” “Just the whiskey.” He nodded at the glass. “Unless you’re here to tell me why you haven’t answered my letters.” The scar on her wrist itched. *Letters*. She’d gotten three, postmarked from Prague, then Berlin, then Paris. *We need to talk*, each had said. *I can help*, the second. *Don’t go back*, the third. She’d torn them up in the bathroom of the hostel in Bristol, the toilet paper clogging the bowl with paper and guilt. “Didn’t get them.” He blinked. “Three letters. Posted within six months. I tracked your delivery routes—” “I moved.” Her voice was colder than she intended. “A week after the third one. Changed my name. Left Cardiff.” Silas set the whiskey glass down so gently it made no sound. “Evan.” The word hung in the air, heavy with all the things they’d left unsaid. Rory had come to London with one suitcase and a bus ticket, Eva at the wheel of her ancient Ford Fiesta, laughter in her voice. *He can’t hurt you here*. *We’ll start over*. No one had mentioned Evan since—Rory had buried it, along with her old name, along with the girl who’d worn her heart on her sleeve, who’d believed in love until it had bitten her. “Why?” Silas asked. “Why run from *him*? Scared? I could’ve—” “I didn’t need you to fix it.” She slammed a napkin down on the counter. “We were kids, Silas. You were off saving the world, me off chasing some stupid law degree my dad thought would make him proud. Evan—he didn’t *matter* except to me. And I fixed it. I’m fixed.” He tilted his glass, swirling the whiskey. “Cardiff thought you’d won a scholarship to Cambridge. Eva’s still there, you know. Talks about you every time I see her. Did you know she got engaged last year?” Rory’s throat tightened. *Eva*. The only friend who’d stayed when Evan got too loud, who’d cried with her in the shower when he’d broken her phone. “I heard.” “Died in January. Car crash.” The world went quiet. The bar’s jukebox stopped mid-note. Rory stared at Silas, her hands shaking. “What?” “Hydroplaned on the M4. No survivors.” He paused. “Eva called you every Sunday. Said you’d promised to come to her wedding. Said you’d never miss it.” Rory closed her eyes. The memory of Eva’s voice, bright and warm, hit her like a fist. *“We’re going to have a toast with that terrible champagne your uncle sends every Christmas,”* she’d said. *“And you’re going to say you’ve found someone who deserves you.”* *“I have,”* Rory had lied. *“He’s in Dublin. Busy.”* “I’m sorry,” Silas said, his voice rough. “I should’ve told you. I… I tried. But you’d already cut me out.” She turned away, wiping the counter again, harder this time. “You should’ve kept trying.” “I was busy.” He stood, his chair scraping the floor. “Fixing my own mess. The one in Prague. The knee injury. The botched operation.” Rory’s hand froze. *Prague*. She’d heard whispers at the university—a covert op gone wrong, a team abandoned, a man left for dead. Silas had been the man, then. “You never told me,” she said. “None of my friends did.” He paused, shifting his weight. “But you… you were the one who asked the hardest questions. The ones no one else would. Remember? After the Prague briefing, you stayed behind. Asked why we were trying to take down a man who’d helped us track a terrorist network. Why we were willing to let him die.” She did. She remembered. Silas had looked at her then, his hazel eyes so soft she’d thought he might break. *“Because he knows things,”* he’d said. *“Secrets. That could hurt people.”* *“No more than we’ll hurt him,”* she’d replied. *“No more than we’ve already hurt.”* “I was wrong,” he said now. “About Prague. About a lot of things.” “You should’ve come to London.” He laughed, bitter. “And do what? Beg for a place to stay? Be your charity case? You were the one running from *him*, Rory. Not me. I had a bar. A safe house. A reason to get up in the morning.” “You were my reason,” she blurted. The words hung, raw and unvarnished. “When Evan started… when he started hitting me, I called you. At 3 a.m., sobbing, and you… you said you’d come. You *promised*. And I waited. For three hours. And then your car didn’t come. And I thought… I thought you’d forgotten. That you didn’t care.” Silas stepped closer, his stance deliberate, like he was afraid to startle her. “I *did* care. I had to. The Prague thing—” “Was more important?” “Yes.” He sounded tired. “But that’s not the full story. My team was compromised. A mole. We thought if I… if I took the fall, they’d come after me less. That they’d let the others live. But the mole was still there. Still moving. And I wasn’t just a failure. I was a liability. So I stayed in Prague. Fixed things. Slowly. For two years. I didn’t have a phone. No way to send messages. No way to tell you I was alive, or that I was sorry.” Rory’s chest ached. *He’s been running, too*. “Why didn’t you tell me?” “Because when you left Cardiff, you didn’t want to be found. You changed your name. Worked odd jobs. Delivered dumplings. And I… I respected that. I thought if I let you be, you’d heal. But Eva called me. Every month. Asked if I’d heard from you. And I lied. Said no. Because I was scared you’d hate me. That you’d look at me and see the man who’d left you in the lurch.” She stared at his signet ring—silver, carved with a raven, warm from being worn. “You were my man in the lurch.” He reached out, hesitated, then touched her wrist. The scar was cool beneath his thumb. “I’m sorry I didn’t fix that.” “You did,” she said. “You sent me letters. You *tried*. That’s more than Evan ever did.” Silas pulled his hand back, but his eyes stayed on hers. “You’re different, Rory. Sharper. Like a knife honed by something sharp.” “I learned.” She pushed the whiskey glass toward him. “Drink. Before it goes cold. You’ll hate me for that.” He picked it up, took a sip. “Not yet.” The bar fell quiet again, but the tension that had coiled in Rory’s chest was starting to unspool. She thought of Eva, of the champagne she’d never drunk, of the toasts still unmade. Of Silas, of the man he was now, of the boy he’d been, who’d once given her a friend’s card and said, *“If you ever need me, I’ll be here.”* “You know what I regret?” she said, after a while. He shook his head. “Not telling you I loved you.” Silas’s eyes widened. “What?” “I did. A little. A long time ago. When you were always there, fixing our辩论 society debates, when you’d buy me coffee at 2 a.m. after I’d pull all-nighters, when you looked at me like you saw something no one else did.” She laughed, bitter. “Don’t worry. I got over it. Eventually.” He set the glass down, slower this time. “I loved you, too.” The words hung, weightless, but real. Rory felt it in the way her breath hitched, in the way her chest ached in a good way, the way it had when Evan had first kissed her, before he’d turned it cruel. “You should’ve said something.” “Age,” he joked, but it was thin. “I was too much of a coward. Thought you’d never want a man who was broken. Who’d never be whole again.” She reached out, touched his face. His skin was warm, creased with lines she hadn’t noticed before, but his eyes were the same—hazel, and full of a million unspoken things. “You’re whole now. Just… a different kind of whole.” Silas leaned into her hand, his beard rough against her palm. “Can I kiss you?” She didn’t answer. She just closed the distance. The kiss was slow, tentative, like they were afraid the moment would shatter. His hands were on her waist, steady, and hers tangled in his hair, the grey threads soft beneath her fingers. It wasn’t the electric jolt of first love, or the hot passion of a casual fling. It was something quieter, something older—two people who’d lost so much, finding a piece of themselves in each other, in the middle of a rainy night in Soho, in a bar that smelled of whiskey and memory. When they pulled apart, Rory rested her forehead against his. “We have a lot to talk about.” He smiled. “We have a lifetime.” The bell over the door jangled again. Rory pulled back, wiping her lips with the back of her hand. A delivery van was parked outside, the driver leaning against it, smoking a cigarette. She glanced at her watch. “Dumplings.” She grabbed her coat. “I’ll be back in an hour. Fix the lights. The one by the pool table’s been flickering for months.” Silas laughed. “You’re bossy.” “Only with you,” she said, and then she was gone, the bell jangling behind her. He watched her go, the whiskey glass still in his hand. The neon green light flickered, casting shadows on the old maps and black-and-white photographs that lined the walls—pictures of Silas, young and sharp, in a Prague alleyway; of a girl with straight black hair and bright blue eyes, laughing in a Cardiff park; of a woman with a scar on her wrist, stepping into the rain, her future wide open. He took another sip of whiskey. *A lifetime*, he thought. *We have a lifetime*. And for the first time in years, he didn’t feel like a man running. He felt like a man home.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags29
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences76
tagDensity0.382
leniency0.763
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.17% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2070
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"gently"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"gently"
1"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
78.26% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2070
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"reminder"
count1
1
word"weight"
count2
2
word"lurch"
count2
3
word"tension"
count1
4
word"unspoken"
count1
5
word"electric"
count1
6
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"reminder"
1"weight"
2"lurch"
3"tension"
4"unspoken"
5"electric"
6"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
1"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences123
matches
0"d in love"
1"was afraid"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences123
filterMatches
0"see"
1"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
99.39% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences170
gibberishSentences1
adjustedGibberishSentences1
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen84
ratio0.006
matches
0"“I did. A little. A long time ago. When you were always there, fixing our辩论 society debates, when you’d buy me coffee at 2 a.m. after I’d pull all-nighters, when you looked at me l…"
88.78% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans33
markdownWords114
totalWords2050
ratio0.056
matches
0"Steady"
1"Steady and sharp"
2"Silas"
3"Don’t gape"
4"He’s changed"
5"Evan"
6"Don’t let him see you flinch"
7"Letters"
8"We need to talk"
9"I can help"
10"Don’t go back"
11"He can’t hurt you here"
12"We’ll start over"
13"him"
14"matter"
15"Eva"
16"“We’re going to have a toast with that terrible champagne your uncle sends every Christmas,”"
17"“And you’re going to say you’ve found someone who deserves you.”"
18"“I have,”"
19"“He’s in Dublin. Busy.”"
20"Prague"
21"“Because he knows things,”"
22"“Secrets. That could hurt people.”"
23"“No more than we’ll hurt him,”"
24"“No more than we’ve already hurt.”"
25"him"
26"promised"
27"did"
28"He’s been running, too"
29"tried"
30"“If you ever need me, I’ll be here.”"
31"A lifetime"
32"We have a lifetime"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions30
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions57
wordCount1222
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity1.23
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Formica1
Carter2
Cardiff3
Jennifer1
University1
Prague3
Berlin1
Paris1
Bristol1
Silas15
London1
Eva4
Ford1
Fiesta1
Evan4
Rory14
Soho1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Carter"
2"Jennifer"
3"Silas"
4"Eva"
5"Evan"
6"Rory"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"University"
2"Prague"
3"Berlin"
4"Paris"
5"Bristol"
6"London"
7"Soho"
globalScore0.886
windowScore0.5
47.26% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences73
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"looked like it had been carved from weath"
1"tasted like ash"
2"felt like a man home"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2050
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences170
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs70
mean29.29
std25.88
cv0.884
sampleLengths
0122
187
215
377
417
532
636
731
820
956
103
1113
1220
1313
1481
1510
1651
1736
1828
195
2017
2126
2254
2320
2414
2524
2628
276
2860
2945
3013
315
3241
3358
3422
353
3688
377
385
3973
4021
4121
4216
4322
4419
459
4663
4710
484
496
99.56% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences123
matches
0"was unbuttoned"
1"been carved"
2"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs227
matches
0"was limping"
1"was starting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences170
ratio0.053
matches
0"At 25, she’d shed the softness of her Cardiff years—no more clutching her books like a shield, no more blushing when a barista asked her name."
1"The scar on his left knee—a thin white line that ran from his thigh to his calf—was visible beneath the rolled-up cuff of his jeans."
2"Now, his dark blue shirt was unbuttoned at the collar, and his beard—neatly trimmed, as always—framed a face that looked like it had been carved from weathered oak."
3"No one had mentioned Evan since—Rory had buried it, along with her old name, along with the girl who’d worn her heart on her sleeve, who’d believed in love until it had bitten her."
4"She’d heard whispers at the university—a covert op gone wrong, a team abandoned, a man left for dead."
5"She stared at his signet ring—silver, carved with a raven, warm from being worn."
6"His skin was warm, creased with lines she hadn’t noticed before, but his eyes were the same—hazel, and full of a million unspoken things."
7"It was something quieter, something older—two people who’d lost so much, finding a piece of themselves in each other, in the middle of a rainy night in Soho, in a bar that smelled of whiskey and memory."
8"The neon green light flickered, casting shadows on the old maps and black-and-white photographs that lined the walls—pictures of Silas, young and sharp, in a Prague alleyway; of a girl with straight black hair and bright blue eyes, laughing in a Cardiff park; of a woman with a scar on her wrist, stepping into the rain, her future wide open."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1240
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount36
adverbRatio0.02903225806451613
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.004032258064516129
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences170
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences170
mean12.06
std12.47
cv1.034
sampleLengths
023
125
226
333
46
53
66
76
811
921
1018
1125
125
131
1415
1513
168
175
182
1921
2028
2117
2219
231
246
256
2618
2718
2813
2918
308
3112
326
331
3410
357
365
375
3822
393
402
4111
429
4311
4412
451
4614
4725
485
493
45.29% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.29411764705882354
totalSentences170
uniqueOpeners50
32.05% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences104
matches
0"Of course he was limping."
ratio0.01
27.69% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount50
totalSentences104
matches
0"She glanced up, ready to"
1"He was taller than she"
2"He said her name like"
3"She set the glass down"
4"It came out shorter than"
5"He managed a half-smile, but"
6"She turned to straighten a"
7"She poured him a whiskey,"
8"He nodded at the glass"
9"She’d gotten three, postmarked from"
10"*We need to talk*, each"
11"*I can help*, the second."
12"She’d torn them up in"
13"Her voice was colder than"
14"*He can’t hurt you here*."
15"*We’ll start over*."
16"She slammed a napkin down"
17"He tilted his glass, swirling"
18"She turned away, wiping the"
19"He stood, his chair scraping"
ratio0.481
27.31% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount90
totalSentences104
matches
0"The neon green of The"
1"Rory Carter wiped the condensation"
2"Rory had taken that to"
3"The bell over the door"
4"She glanced up, ready to"
5"A man stood in the"
6"He was taller than she"
7"The scar on his left"
8"He said her name like"
9"She set the glass down"
10"It came out shorter than"
11"He managed a half-smile, but"
12"She turned to straighten a"
13"The name still tasted like"
14"Silas moved to the bar,"
15"She poured him a whiskey,"
16"He nodded at the glass"
17"The scar on her wrist"
18"She’d gotten three, postmarked from"
19"*We need to talk*, each"
ratio0.865
96.15% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences104
matches
0"Now, her left hand moved"
1"Now, his dark blue shirt"
ratio0.019
20.91% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences41
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"Rory Carter wiped the condensation from a pint glass with a rag that reeked of lemon polish, her movements precise as she’d learned to be."
1"A man stood in the doorway, water dripping from his leather coat, which clung to his shoulders like a second skin."
2"The scar on his left knee—a thin white line that ran from his thigh to his calf—was visible beneath the rolled-up cuff of his jeans."
3"No more tailored suits, no more the sharp, confident stride that had made him the bane of Cardiff University’s debating society."
4"Now, his dark blue shirt was unbuttoned at the collar, and his beard—neatly trimmed, as always—framed a face that looked like it had been carved from weathered …"
5"It was something quieter, something older—two people who’d lost so much, finding a piece of themselves in each other, in the middle of a rainy night in Soho, in…"
6"The neon green light flickered, casting shadows on the old maps and black-and-white photographs that lined the walls—pictures of Silas, young and sharp, in a Pr…"
21.55% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags29
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"He managed, but his eyes stayed sharp, measuring"
1"She turned, her fingers hovering over a row of dark bottles"
2"She poured, the amber liquid sloshing into the glass"
3"Silas said, his voice rough"
4"He stood, his chair scraping the floor"
5"She laughed, bitter"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"she blurted (blurt)"
1"She laughed (laugh)"
2"he joked (joke)"
dialogueSentences76
tagDensity0.145
leniency0.289
rawRatio0.273
effectiveRatio0.079
77.6459%