Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY8GS9GENY3ME5D5NNQGV9P

Run Details

Model:
Grok 4
Duration:
1m 20s
Cost:
$0.038643
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Aurora Carter stepped through the ring of ancient oak standing stones, the night air thickening around her like a shroud. The stones loomed tall and weathered, their bark etched with runes that seemed to shift when she wasn't looking directly at them. Richmond Park lay silent beyond, but here in the Fae Grove, the world tilted. She'd come because of the pendant—the Heartstone, that thumbnail-sized crimson gem on its silver chain, given to her by some shadowy figure she couldn't recall. It had pulsed warmly against her skin all day, growing insistent, pulling her toward this hidden clearing like a lodestone. Rory needed answers. The pendant had saved her once, glowing faintly when she'd fled Evan, lighting her path through London's fog-shrouded streets. Now, it whispered of secrets, of portals and realms bleeding into her own. She couldn't ignore it anymore. The grass underfoot crunched softly, though it shouldn't have—wildflowers bloomed year-round here, their petals unfurled in defiant colors even under the moonless sky. Rory paused, her bright blue eyes scanning the dimness. At 5'6", she felt small in this place, her straight black hair brushing her shoulders as she tilted her head, listening. The Grove existed in a pocket between Earth and somewhere else, or so the old tales Eva had shared claimed. Time moved differently; an hour inside could stretch or shrink outside. That's what felt off first—the silence wasn't right. No distant hum of traffic from the city, no rustle of deer in the park. Just her own breathing, steady but quickening. She fingered the small crescent scar on her left wrist, a habit from childhood accidents and later, harder escapes. Cool-headed, that's what her friends called her. Intelligent, quick with out-of-the-box thinking. But tonight, logic frayed at the edges. She'd parked her delivery bike near the park entrance, slipped past the gates after dark, following the pendant's warmth. It had led her straight to the standing stones, pulsing faint and steady like a heartbeat. Now, inside the boundary, the gem lay cool against her collarbone. Too cool. She shook off the unease, stepping deeper into the clearing. The air smelled of blooming jasmine and something metallic, like ozone after a storm. No storm tonight, though. The sky above was a void, stars hidden behind an unnatural haze. Rory's boots sank into the soft earth, each step deliberate. She needed to find the center, where the tales said the veil thinned. Maybe there she'd understand the pendant's glow, its connection to whatever "Hel portal" the cryptic note from her unknown benefactor had mentioned. The note had arrived with the artifact, tucked into her flat above Silas' bar: "For when the shadows call. Near Hel, it awakens." Cryptic nonsense, but the pendant had proven real enough, its inner light guiding her through London's underbelly more than once. She wasn't one for fairy tales—her Welsh mother's stories of fae and groves had always seemed quaint, relics of Cardiff evenings—but this place felt alive in a way that defied her pre-law skepticism. A soft crackle broke the quiet, like dry leaves underfoot, but the ground here was carpeted in vibrant petals, not autumn debris. Rory froze, her pulse ticking up. She turned slowly, eyes straining into the gloom. Nothing. Just the standing stones, sentinel-silent at the perimeter. The wildflowers swayed gently, though no breeze stirred. She exhaled, chiding herself. Nerves, that's all. She'd fled an abusive ex, dodged London's rough edges as a part-time delivery girl for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress, and now this—chasing myths in the dark. But the pendant had warmed near certain spots in the city, alleyways that felt wrong, like the air shimmered. This Grove was the epicenter, or so her research suggested. Isolde's Grove, some called it, a fae-touched scar on Earth's skin. She pressed on, the clearing unfolding broader than it should. Time's trickery, perhaps. Her watch said she'd been inside five minutes, but the weight in her limbs suggested longer. The flowers brushed her calves, their petals cool and damp, leaving faint trails on her jeans. Another sound—a whisper, like silk tearing, faint and directionless. Rory's hand went to the pendant instinctively, fingers closing around the crimson stone. It remained inert, no warmth, no pulse. Disappointing. She needed it to react, to confirm she wasn't mad for coming here alone. The wrongness deepened. At the edge of her vision, something flickered—a shadow detaching from a standing stone, gone when she whipped her head around. Her heart stuttered. Not alone. The thought crept in, unbidden. She was alone; she'd checked the park paths, seen no one. But the Grove played tricks. Eva would laugh if she knew—her childhood friend had dragged her from Cardiff to London after Evan, promising safety in the city's chaos. Rory swallowed, throat dry. Focus. She reached the center, a slight dip in the earth where the flowers grew thickest, a riot of blues and yellows unnatural in the night. Kneeling, she traced the ground with her fingers, feeling for... what? A seam in reality? The pendant dangled forward, its silver chain catching a sliver of nonexistent light. Still cool. She sat back on her heels, frustration mounting. This was a mistake. The air grew heavier, pressing down like an impending rain. Then, a rustle—distinct this time, from the left, behind a cluster of blooming thistles. Rory stood, pivoting smoothly, her delivery-honed reflexes kicking in. Nothing there. But the flowers trembled, as if something had brushed past. Her mind raced. Out-of-the-box thinking: maybe an animal, a fox or badger straying into the Grove. But animals avoided this place, according to the lore. The standing stones seemed closer now, the clearing contracting like a living thing. Time dilation? Or paranoia? She backed up a step, eyes darting. A low hum started, not in her ears but in her bones, vibrating up from the earth. The pendant twitched against her skin—finally, a faint warmth, a pulse like a distant drum. Excitement flared, then curdled into dread. The hum wasn't mechanical; it carried inflection, like murmured words in a language she almost knew. Welsh? No, older, guttural. Rory's mother had taught her bits of the old tongue, but this slithered past comprehension. She strained to listen, the scar on her wrist itching as if in warning. Shadows elongated between the stones, stretching toward her like fingers. One detached, or seemed to—a silhouette, humanoid but wrong, limbs too long, melting back into darkness when she blinked. Not alone. The certainty hit her gut-first. Something watched. She could feel eyes on her, not hostile yet, but curious, probing. Rory's breath came shallow, controlled. Cool-headed, remember? She slipped a hand into her pocket, fingers brushing the keys to her bike—useless here. The whisper returned, closer, wrapping around her like mist. Words? Names? Her aliases flickered through her mind—Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, even Malphora, that strange moniker from a dream. The pendant glowed now, a faint crimson inner light, pulsing in time with the hum. She turned in a slow circle, the Grove's flora closing in, petals brushing her like insistent hands. A shape flickered again, at the periphery—tall, slender, gone. Then another, opposite side. Circling. Her mind whirred: fae? Portals to Hel? The note had warned of shadows calling. The air chilled, despite the year-round bloom, frost limning the wildflowers' edges. Time stretched; her watch hands crawled. How long had she been here? Minutes? Hours? Outside, dawn might break, or midnight linger. The sounds layered now—rustles multiplying, whispers overlapping into a chorus. Not words, but intent: stay, listen, join. Rory's scar throbbed, a reminder of real pain, grounding her. She edged toward the standing stones, aiming for escape. But the boundary felt distant, the clearing vast yet claustrophobic. A shadow solidified briefly—eyes? Glowing faintly, like the pendant's crimson, then vanishing. Breath on her neck, or imagination? She whirled, arms raised, but empty air met her. Panic clawed, but she shoved it down. Think. The pendant—near a Hel portal, it pulsed. This must be it, the Grove a gateway. But to what? The wrongness peaked: she wasn't just watched; she was hunted, toyed with. Footsteps now, soft pads on earth, circling tighter. Rory bolted, legs pumping toward the stones. Flowers snagged her ankles, vines twisting unnaturally. The whispers laughed, a sibilant echo. She burst through the ring, stumbling onto Richmond Park's familiar grass. The city hummed distant, stars visible again. Her watch showed only ten minutes passed. The pendant cooled instantly. But as she gasped for breath, a final whisper chased her: her name, Aurora, stretched into something alien. She didn't look back, fleeing toward her bike, the scar on her wrist burning like a brand. The Grove watched, waiting for her return. (Word count: 1247)
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags2
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences3
tagDensity0.667
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
86.48% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1479
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"warmly"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
3
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"warmly"
1"softly"
2"slowly"
3"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1479
totalAiIsms35
found
0
word"loomed"
count1
1
word"etched"
count1
2
word"pulsed"
count2
3
word"scanning"
count1
4
word"silence"
count1
5
word"warmth"
count3
6
word"pulse"
count3
7
word"gloom"
count1
8
word"sentinel"
count1
9
word"shimmered"
count1
10
word"weight"
count1
11
word"whisper"
count3
12
word"silk"
count1
13
word"flickered"
count3
14
word"traced"
count1
15
word"trembled"
count1
16
word"raced"
count1
17
word"mechanical"
count1
18
word"could feel"
count1
19
word"chilled"
count1
20
word"throbbed"
count1
21
word"reminder"
count1
22
word"footsteps"
count1
23
word"pumping"
count1
24
word"echo"
count1
25
word"familiar"
count1
highlights
0"loomed"
1"etched"
2"pulsed"
3"scanning"
4"silence"
5"warmth"
6"pulse"
7"gloom"
8"sentinel"
9"shimmered"
10"weight"
11"whisper"
12"silk"
13"flickered"
14"traced"
15"trembled"
16"raced"
17"mechanical"
18"could feel"
19"chilled"
20"throbbed"
21"reminder"
22"footsteps"
23"pumping"
24"echo"
25"familiar"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences27
matches(empty)
0.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences27
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences27
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen131
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1449
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Now, it whispered of secrets, of portals and realms bleeding into her own."
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions47
wordCount1286
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity0.93
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Grove"
discoveredNames
Carter2
Park2
Fae1
Grove8
Heartstone1
Evan2
London3
Hel3
Yu-Fei1
Cheung1
Golden1
Empress1
Earth1
Cardiff1
Rory12
Laila1
Aurora3
Malphora1
Richmond2
persons
0"Carter"
1"Evan"
2"Yu-Fei"
3"Cheung"
4"Rory"
5"Laila"
6"Aurora"
places
0"Park"
1"Fae"
2"Grove"
3"London"
4"Hel"
5"Earth"
6"Cardiff"
7"Richmond"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences22
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"runes that seemed to shift when she wasn't looking directly at them"
1"seemed closer now, the clearing contracting like a living thing"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords2.07
wordCount1449
matches
0"not in her ears but in her bones, vibrating up from the earth"
1"not hostile yet, but curious, probing"
2"Not words, but intent: stay, listen, join"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences27
matches(empty)
56.83% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs16
mean90.56
std31.6
cv0.349
sampleLengths
0141
1114
2126
3121
4126
589
6103
787
881
984
1086
1178
1273
1366
1471
153
79.27% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences27
matches
0"was carpeted"
1"was hunted"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs229
matches
0"wasn't looking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount15
semicolonCount5
flaggedSentences13
totalSentences27
ratio0.481
matches
0"She'd come because of the pendant—the Heartstone, that thumbnail-sized crimson gem on its silver chain, given to her by some shadowy figure she couldn't recall."
1"The grass underfoot crunched softly, though it shouldn't have—wildflowers bloomed year-round here, their petals unfurled in defiant colors even under the moonless sky."
2"At 5'6\", she felt small in this place, her straight black hair brushing her shoulders as she tilted her head, listening. The Grove existed in a pocket between Earth and somewhere else, or so the old tales Eva had shared claimed. Time moved differently; an hour inside could stretch or shrink outside. That's what felt off first—the silence wasn't right. No distant hum of traffic from the city, no rustle of deer in the park. Just her own breathing, steady but quickening."
3"A soft crackle broke the quiet, like dry leaves underfoot, but the ground here was carpeted in vibrant petals, not autumn debris. Rory froze, her pulse ticking up. She turned slowly, eyes straining into the gloom. Nothing. Just the standing stones, sentinel-silent at the perimeter. The wildflowers swayed gently, though no breeze stirred. She exhaled, chiding herself. Nerves, that's all. She'd fled an abusive ex, dodged London's rough edges as a part-time delivery girl for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress, and now this—chasing myths in the dark. But the pendant had warmed near certain spots in the city, alleyways that felt wrong, like the air shimmered. This Grove was the epicenter, or so her research suggested. Isolde's Grove, some called it, a fae-touched scar on Earth's skin."
4"She pressed on, the clearing unfolding broader than it should. Time's trickery, perhaps. Her watch said she'd been inside five minutes, but the weight in her limbs suggested longer. The flowers brushed her calves, their petals cool and damp, leaving faint trails on her jeans. Another sound—a whisper, like silk tearing, faint and directionless. Rory's hand went to the pendant instinctively, fingers closing around the crimson stone. It remained inert, no warmth, no pulse. Disappointing. She needed it to react, to confirm she wasn't mad for coming here alone."
5"The wrongness deepened. At the edge of her vision, something flickered—a shadow detaching from a standing stone, gone when she whipped her head around. Her heart stuttered. Not alone. The thought crept in, unbidden. She was alone; she'd checked the park paths, seen no one. But the Grove played tricks. Eva would laugh if she knew—her childhood friend had dragged her from Cardiff to London after Evan, promising safety in the city's chaos. Rory swallowed, throat dry. Focus. She reached the center, a slight dip in the earth where the flowers grew thickest, a riot of blues and yellows unnatural in the night."
6"Kneeling, she traced the ground with her fingers, feeling for... what? A seam in reality? The pendant dangled forward, its silver chain catching a sliver of nonexistent light. Still cool. She sat back on her heels, frustration mounting. This was a mistake. The air grew heavier, pressing down like an impending rain. Then, a rustle—distinct this time, from the left, behind a cluster of blooming thistles. Rory stood, pivoting smoothly, her delivery-honed reflexes kicking in. Nothing there. But the flowers trembled, as if something had brushed past."
7"Her mind raced. Out-of-the-box thinking: maybe an animal, a fox or badger straying into the Grove. But animals avoided this place, according to the lore. The standing stones seemed closer now, the clearing contracting like a living thing. Time dilation? Or paranoia? She backed up a step, eyes darting. A low hum started, not in her ears but in her bones, vibrating up from the earth. The pendant twitched against her skin—finally, a faint warmth, a pulse like a distant drum."
8"Excitement flared, then curdled into dread. The hum wasn't mechanical; it carried inflection, like murmured words in a language she almost knew. Welsh? No, older, guttural. Rory's mother had taught her bits of the old tongue, but this slithered past comprehension. She strained to listen, the scar on her wrist itching as if in warning. Shadows elongated between the stones, stretching toward her like fingers. One detached, or seemed to—a silhouette, humanoid but wrong, limbs too long, melting back into darkness when she blinked."
9"Not alone. The certainty hit her gut-first. Something watched. She could feel eyes on her, not hostile yet, but curious, probing. Rory's breath came shallow, controlled. Cool-headed, remember? She slipped a hand into her pocket, fingers brushing the keys to her bike—useless here. The whisper returned, closer, wrapping around her like mist. Words? Names? Her aliases flickered through her mind—Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, even Malphora, that strange moniker from a dream. The pendant glowed now, a faint crimson inner light, pulsing in time with the hum."
10"She turned in a slow circle, the Grove's flora closing in, petals brushing her like insistent hands. A shape flickered again, at the periphery—tall, slender, gone. Then another, opposite side. Circling. Her mind whirred: fae? Portals to Hel? The note had warned of shadows calling. The air chilled, despite the year-round bloom, frost limning the wildflowers' edges. Time stretched; her watch hands crawled. How long had she been here? Minutes? Hours? Outside, dawn might break, or midnight linger."
11"The sounds layered now—rustles multiplying, whispers overlapping into a chorus. Not words, but intent: stay, listen, join. Rory's scar throbbed, a reminder of real pain, grounding her. She edged toward the standing stones, aiming for escape. But the boundary felt distant, the clearing vast yet claustrophobic. A shadow solidified briefly—eyes? Glowing faintly, like the pendant's crimson, then vanishing. Breath on her neck, or imagination? She whirled, arms raised, but empty air met her."
12"Panic clawed, but she shoved it down. Think. The pendant—near a Hel portal, it pulsed. This must be it, the Grove a gateway. But to what? The wrongness peaked: she wasn't just watched; she was hunted, toyed with. Footsteps now, soft pads on earth, circling tighter. Rory bolted, legs pumping toward the stones. Flowers snagged her ankles, vines twisting unnaturally. The whispers laughed, a sibilant echo."
91.41% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount186
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount9
adverbRatio0.04838709677419355
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.021505376344086023
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences27
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences27
mean53.67
std38.14
cv0.711
sampleLengths
020
122
214
325
420
53
619
713
85
923
109
1182
12126
1364
1457
15126
1689
17103
1887
1981
2084
2186
2278
2373
2466
2571
263
98.77% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.5925925925925926
totalSentences27
uniqueOpeners16
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences26
matches(empty)
ratio0
96.92% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount8
totalSentences26
matches
0"She'd come because of the"
1"It had pulsed warmly against"
2"She couldn't ignore it anymore."
3"She fingered the small crescent"
4"She pressed on, the clearing"
5"Her mind raced. Out-of-the-box thinking:"
6"She turned in a slow"
7"She burst through the ring,"
ratio0.308
36.92% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount22
totalSentences26
matches
0"Aurora Carter stepped through the"
1"The stones loomed tall and"
2"Richmond Park lay silent beyond,"
3"She'd come because of the"
4"It had pulsed warmly against"
5"Rory needed answers."
6"The pendant had saved her"
7"She couldn't ignore it anymore."
8"The grass underfoot crunched softly,"
9"Rory paused, her bright blue"
10"She fingered the small crescent"
11"Rory's boots sank into the"
12"A soft crackle broke the"
13"She pressed on, the clearing"
14"The wrongness deepened. At the"
15"Her mind raced. Out-of-the-box thinking:"
16"Excitement flared, then curdled into"
17"She turned in a slow"
18"The sounds layered now—rustles multiplying,"
19"Panic clawed, but she shoved"
ratio0.846
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences26
matches
0"Now, it whispered of secrets,"
ratio0.038
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences19
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"A soft crackle broke the quiet, like dry leaves underfoot, but the ground here was carpeted in vibrant petals, not autumn debris. Rory froze, her pulse ticking …"
1"Kneeling, she traced the ground with her fingers, feeling for... what? A seam in reality? The pendant dangled forward, its silver chain catching a sliver of non…"
2"Her mind raced. Out-of-the-box thinking: maybe an animal, a fox or badger straying into the Grove. But animals avoided this place, according to the lore. The st…"
3"Excitement flared, then curdled into dread. The hum wasn't mechanical; it carried inflection, like murmured words in a language she almost knew. Welsh? No, olde…"
4"She burst through the ring, stumbling onto Richmond Park's familiar grass. The city hummed distant, stars visible again. Her watch showed only ten minutes passe…"
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100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
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