Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY8KC5AVS1EAZK8TRS7RQQB

Run Details

Duration:
21.7s
Cost:
$0.001331
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Aurora Carter pushed through the underbrush at the edge of Richmond Park, the beam of her torch slicing erratic paths through the midnight gloom. The air hung heavy with the scent of damp earth and something sweeter, like overripe fruit left to ferment under a relentless sun. She shouldn't be here, not at this hour, but the pendant around her neck had tugged at her all evening, its faint warmth blooming into a insistent pulse that synced with her heartbeat. It had started as a curiosity—a gift from some anonymous sender slipped under the door of her flat above Silas's bar—but now it felt like a summons. Hel portals, the note had whispered in hurried scrawl. Places where the worlds thinned. And this grove, Isolde's hidden corner, was one of them. Rory needed answers, about the dreams that clawed at her sleep, about the shadows that lingered too long in her periphery since she'd fled Cardiff. Quick thinking had gotten her this far; now it dragged her into the dark. The ancient oaks loomed ahead, their trunks twisted into shapes that suggested faces frozen mid-scream. She paused at the boundary, the standing stones marking the threshold like silent sentinels. They weren't stone at all, she realized as her light played over them—bark-fused monoliths, roots coiling upward in defiance of gravity. The park's distant hum of traffic faded abruptly, swallowed by an unnatural quiet. No crickets, no rustle of leaves in the breeze that had nipped at her heels on the path. Just the crunch of her boots on frost-kissed grass as she stepped across. Inside the grove, the world tilted. Wildflowers carpeted the clearing, petals unfurling in defiant color against the night—crimson poppies nodding like blood drops, luminous blues that glowed faintly under moonlight. It was November, for God's sake; nothing should bloom here. Rory's breath fogged the air, but the cold felt distant, muffled, as if she'd crossed into a greenhouse sealed against winter. She swept the torch around the perimeter, the light bouncing off dew-slick petals that shimmered unnaturally, like eyes reflecting from afar. The pendant warmed against her collarbone, a steady thrum now, not quite painful but insistent, urging her deeper. She'd come for clarity, or so she told herself. The dreams had intensified since London: Evan’s face twisting into something feral, his hands not bruising but dissolving into smoke that seeped into her skin. And the note—delivered with the pendant—had mentioned Hel, not the goddess but the rifts, places where the Fae-touched bled into the mortal coil. Rory wasn't one for fairy tales; her life had been barrister fathers and pre-law lectures, not enchanted woods. But the scar on her left wrist itched tonight, the crescent from that childhood fall suddenly alive with phantom pricks, as if the old wound remembered something she didn't. The clearing spanned maybe fifty feet, a perfect circle hemmed by those oak guardians. At its center stood a low slab of weathered granite, etched with runes that her light couldn't quite decipher—swirls that might have been thorns or veins. Rory approached it cautiously, her pulse matching the pendant's rhythm. The air thickened, pressing against her eardrums like water. She knelt, fingers brushing the stone's edge. Cold. Real. But the flowers around it... they quivered, not from wind, but as if breathing in tandem with her. A sound broke the hush—a soft snap, like a twig underfoot, but from the treeline behind her. Rory froze, torch beam whipping around. Nothing. Just shadows pooling between the oaks, deeper than they should be. Her mind raced: deer, maybe, or a fox scavenging the park. Richmond was wild enough for that. But the snap came again, closer this time, from the left. She stood slowly, heart kicking up a notch, scanning the gloom. The flowers nearest the sound swayed, petals curling inward as if shrinking from an unseen touch. "It's just the park," she muttered to herself, voice swallowed by the stillness. Cool-headed, that's what Eva always said. Think it through. But her thoughts snagged on the unnatural bloom, the way time seemed to stretch—the glance at her watch showed only minutes passed since entry, yet her legs ached as if she'd hiked for hours. The pendant pulsed hotter, a warning or a lure; she couldn't tell. She circled the slab, torch held high. The runes caught the light differently now, almost pulsing in echo of the gem at her throat. Deep crimson, thumbnail-sized, it had seemed innocuous at first, a cheap bauble on silver chain. Now it glowed faintly from beneath her jacket, casting ruddy shadows across her knuckles. Rory touched it, wincing at the heat. That's when the whispers started. Faint at first, like wind through dry grass, but words slithered into them—fragments, not English. Her name? Rory? No, something older, Laila maybe, an alias she'd toyed with in London to shake Evan's ghost. She shook her head, blue eyes narrowing against the dark. Imagination. Stress from deliveries dodging late-night drunks, from the flat's creaking floors that sounded like footsteps. But the whispers layered, overlapping, a chorus from the oaks themselves. Branches creaked, not in breeze, but shifting, as if the trees leaned in to listen. At the edge of vision, movement flickered—a shadow darting between trunks, too tall for an animal, too fluid. Rory spun, torch beam lancing the spot. Empty. Just bark and bramble. Her scar burned now, a line of fire up her arm. She rubbed it absently, breath shallow. Keep moving. Find the portal, whatever that meant. The note had said the pendant would guide her; perhaps this slab was it. She knelt again, tracing the runes with trembling fingers. They felt tacky, like sap, but warmer, alive. Another sound: a low hum, rising from the ground. Not mechanical, but organic, like roots grinding beneath soil. The flowers trembled en masse, petals unfurling to release a pollen that hung in the air, sparkling faintly. Rory coughed, waving it away, but it clung, sweet and cloying, seeping into her lungs. The whispers sharpened—Malphora, a voice hissed, close enough to brush her ear. She whirled, stumbling back. No one. But the certainty settled in her gut like lead: she wasn't alone. The oaks loomed taller now, their crowns blending into a canopy that blotted the stars. Time warped further; her watch hands spun lazily, minutes bleeding into nothing. How long had she been here? The park's distant lights should pierce the gloom, but the grove sealed itself, a pocket unto itself. Rory backed toward the boundary stones, torch shaking in her grip. At the corner of her eye, shapes stirred—elongated forms slinking along the treeline, not quite humanoid, limbs too many, too sinuous. They vanished when she looked full, but the impression lingered, a pressure on her skin like fingers trailing just out of reach. The pendant scalded now, forcing a gasp from her lips. She yanked at the chain, but it held fast, the silver biting into her neck. Heat radiated down her chest, syncing with the hum from the slab. The whispers coalesced: Come closer, Aurora. See what waits. Her full name, spoken with a lilt that echoed her mother's Welsh cadence, but twisted, hungry. She bolted for the stones, boots pounding the flower-strewn earth. Petals crushed beneath her, releasing that pollen in puffs that stung her eyes. The sounds pursued—snaps multiplying into a rustle, like a dozen footfalls shadowing her own. A branch whipped her cheek, unbidden by wind; she tasted blood, metallic and sharp. The oaks seemed to bend, bark splitting to reveal hollows that exhaled cold breath, fogging her vision. At the boundary, she hesitated. The stones pulsed with the same crimson glow as the pendant, their bark-veins throbbing. Beyond them, the park should reappear—the familiar paths, the sodium glow of lamps. But as she crossed, the world didn't snap back. Instead, the underbrush thickened, vines snaking across her path like awakened serpents. The whispers followed, no longer confined: Rory, stay. Laila, join us. She ran, torch beam flailing, illuminating glimpses— a hand? Pale and elongated, retreating into shadow. Eyes, multitude, winking from the flowers' depths. The grove expanded, or perhaps she shrank; distance stretched, her breaths coming in ragged bursts that echoed too loudly, as if amplified by unseen walls. Panic clawed at her cool-headed facade. Think, damn it. The pendant— it had brought her here. She clutched it, willing it to cool, to guide her out. But it burned brighter, the glow illuminating her scar, which wept a thin line of something darker than blood. The movements closed in, peripheral now constant: silhouettes pacing her, matching her stride, their forms flickering like faulty projections. Not aggressive, not yet—just there, a presence multiplying, breathing the same tainted air. Rory slammed into a tree, bark rough under her palms. It vibrated, humming the whispers directly into her bones: Carter, Malphora, come home. Her father's name, her mother's maiden—tied to this? The grove knew her, or something wearing her history like a skin. She pushed off, veering toward what she prayed was the exit. The flowers parted reluctantly, stems whipping at her ankles, slowing her. Sounds layered into a symphony of wrongness: laughter like breaking glass, sighs that mimicked her own exhales. Finally, a gap in the oaks— the park's edge, real this time, traffic murmuring faintly. She tumbled through, collapsing onto the path, torch rolling away to gutter in the dirt. The pendant cooled instantly, glow fading to dormancy. She lay there, chest heaving, staring at the stars wheeling overhead. Minutes? Hours? Her watch read 12:17, same as entry. But the scar throbbed, and in the quiet of her mind, the whispers lingered, a promise of return. Rory staggered to her feet, glancing back. The grove's boundary shimmered, then sealed, innocent oaks in moonlight. But she felt it—the pull, the eyes watching from within. Whatever waited in that pocket between worlds hadn't finished with her. Not by a long shot.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags2
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences1
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
85.15% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1683
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"cautiously"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
3
adverb"lazily"
count1
4
adverb"reluctantly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"cautiously"
2"slowly"
3"lazily"
4"reluctantly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1683
totalAiIsms34
found
0
word"gloom"
count3
1
word"warmth"
count1
2
word"pulse"
count2
3
word"loomed"
count2
4
word"sentinels"
count1
5
word"shimmered"
count2
6
word"perfect"
count1
7
word"etched"
count1
8
word"quivered"
count1
9
word"raced"
count1
10
word"scanning"
count1
11
word"pulsed"
count2
12
word"echo"
count1
13
word"footsteps"
count1
14
word"flickered"
count1
15
word"tracing"
count1
16
word"mechanical"
count1
17
word"trembled"
count1
18
word"lilt"
count1
19
word"echoed"
count2
20
word"pounding"
count1
21
word"familiar"
count1
22
word"depths"
count1
23
word"facade"
count1
24
word"vibrated"
count1
25
word"symphony"
count1
26
word"throbbed"
count1
highlights
0"gloom"
1"warmth"
2"pulse"
3"loomed"
4"sentinels"
5"shimmered"
6"perfect"
7"etched"
8"quivered"
9"raced"
10"scanning"
11"pulsed"
12"echo"
13"footsteps"
14"flickered"
15"tracing"
16"mechanical"
17"trembled"
18"lilt"
19"echoed"
20"pounding"
21"familiar"
22"depths"
23"facade"
24"vibrated"
25"symphony"
26"throbbed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences139
matches(empty)
91.47% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences139
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences139
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1654
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions41
wordCount1648
uniqueNames21
maxNameDensity0.79
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Carter2
Richmond2
Park1
Silas1
Isolde1
Cardiff1
November1
God1
London2
Evan2
Hel2
Fae-touched1
Cool-headed1
Eva1
English1
Laila2
Malphora2
Come1
Aurora2
Welsh1
Rory13
persons
0"Carter"
1"Silas"
2"Isolde"
3"God"
4"Evan"
5"Fae-touched"
6"Eva"
7"Laila"
8"Malphora"
9"Aurora"
10"Rory"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Cardiff"
3"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences116
glossingSentenceCount8
matches
0"felt like a summons"
1"not quite painful but insistent, urging her deeper"
2"quite decipher—swirls that might have been thorns or veins"
3"as if breathing in tandem with her"
4"as if shrinking from an unseen touch"
5"seemed innocuous at first, a cheap bauble on silver chain"
6"sounded like footsteps"
7"not quite humanoid, limbs too many, too sinuous"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches7
per1kWords4.232
wordCount1654
matches
0"not at this hour, but the pendant around her neck had tugged at her all evening, i"
1"not quite painful but insistent, urging her deeper"
2"not bruising but dissolving into smoke"
3"not the goddess but the rifts, places"
4"not from wind, but as if breathing in tandem with her"
5"not in breeze, but shifting, as if the trees leaned in to listen"
6"Not mechanical, but organic, like roots grinding beneath soil"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences139
matches
0"releasing that pollen"
46.86% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs20
mean82.7
std25.97
cv0.314
sampleLengths
0170
194
2100
3104
486
590
668
765
886
986
1081
11104
1262
1368
1464
1547
1678
1782
1876
1943
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences139
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs304
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount22
semicolonCount8
flaggedSentences27
totalSentences139
ratio0.194
matches
0"It had started as a curiosity—a gift from some anonymous sender slipped under the door of her flat above Silas's bar—but now it felt like a summons."
1"Quick thinking had gotten her this far; now it dragged her into the dark."
2"They weren't stone at all, she realized as her light played over them—bark-fused monoliths, roots coiling upward in defiance of gravity."
3"Wildflowers carpeted the clearing, petals unfurling in defiant color against the night—crimson poppies nodding like blood drops, luminous blues that glowed faintly under moonlight."
4"It was November, for God's sake; nothing should bloom here."
5"And the note—delivered with the pendant—had mentioned Hel, not the goddess but the rifts, places where the Fae-touched bled into the mortal coil."
6"Rory wasn't one for fairy tales; her life had been barrister fathers and pre-law lectures, not enchanted woods."
7"At its center stood a low slab of weathered granite, etched with runes that her light couldn't quite decipher—swirls that might have been thorns or veins."
8"A sound broke the hush—a soft snap, like a twig underfoot, but from the treeline behind her."
9"But her thoughts snagged on the unnatural bloom, the way time seemed to stretch—the glance at her watch showed only minutes passed since entry, yet her legs ached as if she'd hiked for hours."
10"The pendant pulsed hotter, a warning or a lure; she couldn't tell."
11"Faint at first, like wind through dry grass, but words slithered into them—fragments, not English."
12"At the edge of vision, movement flickered—a shadow darting between trunks, too tall for an animal, too fluid."
13"The note had said the pendant would guide her; perhaps this slab was it."
14"The whispers sharpened—Malphora, a voice hissed, close enough to brush her ear."
15"Time warped further; her watch hands spun lazily, minutes bleeding into nothing."
16"At the corner of her eye, shapes stirred—elongated forms slinking along the treeline, not quite humanoid, limbs too many, too sinuous."
17"The sounds pursued—snaps multiplying into a rustle, like a dozen footfalls shadowing her own."
18"A branch whipped her cheek, unbidden by wind; she tasted blood, metallic and sharp."
19"Beyond them, the park should reappear—the familiar paths, the sodium glow of lamps."
20"She ran, torch beam flailing, illuminating glimpses— a hand?"
21"The grove expanded, or perhaps she shrank; distance stretched, her breaths coming in ragged bursts that echoed too loudly, as if amplified by unseen walls."
22"The pendant— it had brought her here."
23"Not aggressive, not yet—just there, a presence multiplying, breathing the same tainted air."
24"Her father's name, her mother's maiden—tied to this?"
25"Finally, a gap in the oaks— the park's edge, real this time, traffic murmuring faintly."
26"But she felt it—the pull, the eyes watching from within."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1369
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount52
adverbRatio0.03798392987582177
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.008765522279035792
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences139
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences139
mean11.9
std6.8
cv0.571
sampleLengths
024
123
233
327
49
55
610
725
814
915
1014
1121
1213
1318
1413
156
1624
1710
1821
1921
2018
219
2225
2323
2418
2529
2614
2726
2810
299
307
311
321
335
3413
3517
366
371
3811
3911
406
4111
4211
4316
4413
456
463
4734
4812
497
62.35% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.37410071942446044
totalSentences139
uniqueOpeners52
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences128
matches
0"Just the crunch of her"
1"Just shadows pooling between the"
2"Just bark and bramble."
3"Instead, the underbrush thickened, vines"
4"Finally, a gap in the"
ratio0.039
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount31
totalSentences128
matches
0"She shouldn't be here, not"
1"It had started as a"
2"She paused at the boundary,"
3"They weren't stone at all,"
4"It was November, for God's"
5"She swept the torch around"
6"She'd come for clarity, or"
7"She knelt, fingers brushing the"
8"they quivered, not from wind,"
9"Her mind raced: deer, maybe,"
10"She stood slowly, heart kicking"
11"she muttered to herself, voice"
12"She circled the slab, torch"
13"She shook her head, blue"
14"Her scar burned now, a"
15"She rubbed it absently, breath"
16"She knelt again, tracing the"
17"They felt tacky, like sap,"
18"She whirled, stumbling back."
19"They vanished when she looked"
ratio0.242
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount86
totalSentences128
matches
0"Aurora Carter pushed through the"
1"The air hung heavy with"
2"She shouldn't be here, not"
3"It had started as a"
4"Hel portals, the note had"
5"Places where the worlds thinned."
6"Rory needed answers, about the"
7"The ancient oaks loomed ahead,"
8"She paused at the boundary,"
9"They weren't stone at all,"
10"The park's distant hum of"
11"Wildflowers carpeted the clearing, petals"
12"It was November, for God's"
13"Rory's breath fogged the air,"
14"She swept the torch around"
15"The pendant warmed against her"
16"She'd come for clarity, or"
17"The dreams had intensified since"
18"Rory wasn't one for fairy"
19"The clearing spanned maybe fifty"
ratio0.672
39.06% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences128
matches
0"Now it glowed faintly from"
ratio0.008
26.58% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences86
technicalSentenceCount14
matches
0"Wildflowers carpeted the clearing, petals unfurling in defiant color against the night—crimson poppies nodding like blood drops, luminous blues that glowed fain…"
1"Rory's breath fogged the air, but the cold felt distant, muffled, as if she'd crossed into a greenhouse sealed against winter."
2"She swept the torch around the perimeter, the light bouncing off dew-slick petals that shimmered unnaturally, like eyes reflecting from afar."
3"But the scar on her left wrist itched tonight, the crescent from that childhood fall suddenly alive with phantom pricks, as if the old wound remembered somethin…"
4"The flowers nearest the sound swayed, petals curling inward as if shrinking from an unseen touch."
5"The flowers trembled en masse, petals unfurling to release a pollen that hung in the air, sparkling faintly."
6"Her full name, spoken with a lilt that echoed her mother's Welsh cadence, but twisted, hungry."
7"Petals crushed beneath her, releasing that pollen in puffs that stung her eyes."
8"The oaks seemed to bend, bark splitting to reveal hollows that exhaled cold breath, fogging her vision."
9"The grove expanded, or perhaps she shrank; distance stretched, her breaths coming in ragged bursts that echoed too loudly, as if amplified by unseen walls."
10"But it burned brighter, the glow illuminating her scar, which wept a thin line of something darker than blood."
11"The movements closed in, peripheral now constant: silhouettes pacing her, matching her stride, their forms flickering like faulty projections."
12"The flowers parted reluctantly, stems whipping at her ankles, slowing her."
13"Sounds layered into a symphony of wrongness: laughter like breaking glass, sighs that mimicked her own exhales."
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