"The green neon of The Raven’s Nest bleeds through London’s rain-slicked Soho streets, painting Rory’s delivery bag—emblazoned with the Golden Empress’ red dragon, its strap frayed from a mugger’s tug last week—an unsteady lime."
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"Tonight, though, her left wrist throbs—its crescent scar pulsing with the memory of a childhood bike crash and the eight hours she’s spent hefting steamer trays of dim sum—and her rain-soaked socks squelch in her boots, and she can’t bear the thought of climbing the stairs to her empty flat where the only heat comes from a broken space heater that smells like burnt wiring."
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"Walls lined with old maps—one of Prague’s winding alleyways faded at the edges, its cobblestones marked with a tiny X she can’t place, another of Cardiff’s bay creased where a thumb has rubbed it a hundred times—stare down at her, and black-and-white photographs of stoic men and women with unreadable eyes cling to the gaps between frames."
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"She doesn’t have time to linger—her chapped, nail-broken hands are already reaching for the bar’s wooden edge."
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"His hazel eyes lock onto hers, and for a beat, Rory’s chest tightens—like she’s seen those eyes before, in a Cardiff office where sunlight filtered through floor-to-ceiling bookshelves and her father’s law books lined the walls."
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"“Sewed up in Cardiff Royal, my mom reading me *Harry Potter* while the doctor stitched it.” She leans forward, her bright blue eyes searching his face—for the auburn hair without the grey streaks, for the straight leg without the limp, for the agent who’d made her laugh with stories of secret missions in Paris."
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"She’d only known him by his first name back then—he’d refused to give his last, saying it was “bad for business” and winking like he was sharing a joke only they understood."
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"The Prague map on the wall catches his eye, and his jaw tightens—she’ll later learn the X marks the alley where his knee was shattered during the botched op."
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"She’d spent the next nine years chasing her father’s dream of pre-law, her straight black hair pulled into a tight bun for lectures, her intelligence sharpened by case studies of corporate fraud and criminal defense—until Evan had grabbed her left wrist during a fight, his fingers digging into her scar until she cried out, and told her she was “too smart for her own good” and “needed to be put in her place.” She’d fled Cardiff three months ago, Eva’s text (“Come to London— I’ve got a place for you and a delivery job at Golden Empress”) burning in her pocket, and had stumbled into the flat above The Raven’s Nest because it was the only one she could afford with her $12-an-hour delivery wages."
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"He doesn’t drink it—he hasn’t had a full shot since Prague, he’ll later say—just twists the signet ring on his finger until his knuckles turn white."
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"The rain taps harder against the window, and the bar’s only other patron—a man in a trench coat who’d been staring at the Paris café photo—leaves, his boots squelching against the floor."
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"The weight of time presses down on her, thick as the bar’s whiskey fumes, and she can feel the regret hanging between them, unspoken but heavy—his regret for leaving, her regret for not reaching out, both of them regretful for the years they lost."
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"Silas reaches into his pocket and pulls out a mint—just like the one he gave her in her father’s office—and hands it to her."
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"The weight of time is still there, but now, it’s balanced by the hope of what’s to come—by the secret room behind the bookshelf, by the man who’s finally come back, by the chance to stop running and start fighting."
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"She glances at the Prague map, at the tiny X marking the alley where Silas’s knee broke, and understands: scars are not just stories they carry on their skin—they’re bridges back to the parts of themselves they thought they’d lost."
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"Tonight, though, her left wrist throbs—its crescent scar pulsing with the memory of a childhood bike crash and the eight hours she’s spent hefting steamer trays…"
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"A man stands behind the bar, wiping a crystal tumbler with a rag that’s seen better days, his grey-streaked auburn beard neat as a pressed suit save for a crumb…"
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"Rory stares at her hot cocoa, the marshmallows melting into a sweet sludge that sticks to the mug’s bottom."
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"The rain taps harder against the window, and the bar’s only other patron—a man in a trench coat who’d been staring at the Paris café photo—leaves, his boots squ…"
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"She thinks of her 16-year-old self, sitting in her father’s office, asking Silas about his secret missions, dreaming of a life where she could solve crimes inst…"
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"The weight of time is still there, but now, it’s balanced by the hope of what’s to come—by the secret room behind the bookshelf, by the man who’s finally come b…"