Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY8R33FCM5372SJE4DYS6EN

Run Details

Duration:
30.1s
Cost:
$0.001257
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The bell above the door jingles, a high, tinny sound that cuts through the hum of conversation at The Raven's Nest. Rory Carter pauses mid-sip, her thumb brushing the condensation beading on the cheap wine glass she’s claiming as her own. It’s her day off—a rare thing, with deliveries from Yu-Fei Cheung’s Golden Empress starting at dawn—but Silas had insisted she “loosen up” after a week of breaking into doors to deliver birthday cakes to warehouses in East London. “You look like you’re about to calculate the volume of that cake in metric tons,” he’d said, flicking a washcloth at her. Now, she’s propped against the bar, one socked foot tapping a nervous rhythm against the scuffed wood, and she’s pretty sure said foot is about to wear a hole in the floor. The light from the green neon sign—the *Nest* script bleeding green onto the brick wall—slants across the room, painting the old maps and black-and-white photos that line the walls in strange, shifting hues. A saxophone player in the corner whines through a cover of “At Last,” and Rory’s gaze drifts to the door again. It’s too late for the dinner rush; the crowd is sparse, a group of traders in ill-fitting suits at the far end, a librarian-looking woman nursing a whiskey, a man in a trench coat poring over a leather-bound book that’s definitely not a textbook. *No one* that looks like *Eva*. The name hits her like a fist to the ribs. Eva. *Eve*. They’d been inseparable until Rory was 18, when Evan—blond, loud, a boxer with a temper—had started showing up outside their school, then outside her house, then inside her bed. “He’s just jealous, Ror,” Eva had said, pressing a cold compress to her cheek after one of his slapmarks bloomed. “He’ll stop.” But he hadn’t. Not until Rory had woken up one morning, Evan’s hands around her throat, and she’d driven to the garage, started the car, and floor it, tire screeching, until she was gasping on the M4, tears mixing with rain on her face. Eva had chased her. They’d collided in London Victoria, Eva’s suitcase still packed, her eyes wild. “You can’t disappear,” she’d said. “I need to fix this with you.” But Rory had been too broken, too afraid. Evan’s voice had echoed in her head—*You think I won’t find you?*—and she’d taken the first train to Cardiff, where her father was a barrister, too busy with his cases to notice she’d moved into the spare room. But Cardiff hadn’t held her either. Evan had tracked her down there, too, and that’s when Eva had called, breathless, from a payphone in a Cardiff alley: *Run. Now. I’ll cover. Just… go.* Rory had run. To London. To a flat above a bar in Soho, because Eva had said, “There’s a man there—Silas—he’ll keep you safe.” And he had. Not by magic, but by making her wait tables at first, then begging Yu-Fei to let her deliver orders, then letting her sleep on a cot above the bar when the deliveries ran late. He’d never asked questions, but he’d left mugs of tea on her doorstep when she came home at 3 a.m., and he’d fixed her bike when it got a flat, and he’d said, once, when she’d flinched at a truck backfiring, “Trauma doesn’t care if you’re *supposed* to be over it.” The bell jingles again. Rory’s eyes snap up. The woman standing in the doorway is smaller than she remembers, her shoulders hunched like she’s waiting for a blow. Her hair, once a wild halo of chestnut curls, is now a sleek bob, dyed a faded blonde that doesn’t quite reach her roots. She’s wearing a tailored blazer—navy, charcoal pinstripes—over a silk blouse that’s probably expensive, and black heels that click too loud against the floor. Her face is the same, but shifted: the high cheekbones, the cupid’s bow mouth, the mole above her lip. Only it’s heavier now, the smile tentative, the eyes—once so bright, like she had the whole world in a jar—hazy, like she’s been squinting into the sun too long. Rory’s throat tightens. Eva would never wear heels. Eva would never look like she’s afraid to breathe. “You’re… here,” the woman says, her voice a question. It’s lower than Rory remembers, rougher, like she’s smoked a pack a day for a decade. Rory nods, her tongue heavy. “Yeah. Me.” She sets the wine glass down, too hard; it rattles. “You—” She clears her throat. “You look… well.” Eva manages a smile. It doesn’t reach her eyes. “You too. Like you’re not going to bolt if I breathe too loud.” The words hang between them, sharp as broken glass. Rory touches her left wrist, the small crescent scar there, from when she’d fallen out of a tree at 12, Eva holding her hand while the paramedics stitched her up. *We’ll be together forever*, they’d whispered, covered in dirt and tears. *No one will ever take you away.* “Silas is back there,” Rory says, jerking her chin toward the bar. Silas is polishing a whiskey glass, his auburn hair catching the neon light, his beard a neat frame for his mouth. He’s got the left leg bent slightly, the knee swollen, the limp she’s grown used to—though she knows he’d deny it if she asked. “He… he’ll fix you up.” Eva laughs, a bitter sound. “Fix me? I don’t need fixing, Ror. I’m fine.” “Eva.” Rory uses her name, not “Eve.” It feels like a bridge, wobbly but there. “When was the last time you had a drink that wasn’t straight whiskey? With ice? Not… just to steady your hands.” Eva freezes. For a second, Rory sees the girl she used to know—the one who’d sneak into Rory’s window to share stolen chocolate, who’d scream at Rory’s dad for being too busy with his cases, who’d cried into her pillow when Rory left. But it’s gone as fast as it came, replaced by a weary shrug. “Ice melts. Straight’s easier.” Rory pushes off the bar, her shoes silent against the floor. “Sit. Please.” She pulls out a stool and slides it over. “I brought a glass. It’s cheap, but… it’s wine.” Eva hesitates, then sits. Her hands shake as she wraps them around the glass. “You never called,” she says, and the words are quiet, but not sad. They’re raw, like a scab picked at. Rory sits too, propping her elbow on the bar. “I didn’t know how,” she says. “I was scared. Evan—” She stops, swallows. “He’d look at my phone, check my texts. I was afraid every call he made would be to him. And then… I didn’t want to be that girl, you know? The one who gets hurt. So I just… kept moving.” Eva’s eyes shine. “You became a ghost, Ror. I’d see you in the papers—delivering cakes to the Royal Albert Hall, winning some stupid award for ‘Most Efficient Delivery Person’—and I’d think, *Is that her?* But she wasn’t. She was… someone else.” Rory’s scar prickles. “What did you want me to be?” Eva stares into her wine. “I wanted you to be *safe*. I wanted you to laugh like you used to, like the world was a puzzle you were going to solve. I wanted… I wanted you to need me.” The words hit Rory like a wave. She had no idea. For years, she’d thought Eva had gotten tired—tired of chasing her, tired of watching her break. But Eva needed her, too. *We’re just two people, broken in different ways*, her father had told her once, when she’d confessed she missed her. *You can’t fix each other, but you can hold each other.* Silas appears beside them, his limp not quite so pronounced when he’s focused, his hazel eyes softening when he sees Eva. “Rory says you’re in need of a fix,” he says, setting a small crystal decanter down between them. “Red wine. A bottle, actually. I was saving it for a rainy day, but… rainy days are for friends.” Rory’s throat burns. “Silas—” “Shut up, Rory,” Eva says, and it’s warm, like the old days. Silas winks, then moves to the other side of the bar, calling out to a regular. Rory watches her friend pour three glasses, the wine a deep ruby in the green light. “You know,” Eva says, taking a sip, “I tried to find you. After you left. I went to Cardiff, to your dad, but he just… said you were fine. That you’d come back when you were ready.” Rory nods. “He was right. I wasn’t ready. But… I’m trying now.” Eva meets her eyes. “What about Evan? Is he…?” “Gone,” Rory says, and it’s the first time she’s said it out loud, not because it’s true, but because it *should* be. “I don’t know where. I haven’t heard from him in three years. I think… I think he finally got bored.” Eva smiles, a real smile this time, and Rory’s chest aches. “Good. He never deserved you.” “Neither did I,” Rory says, before she can stop herself. Eva’s smile fades. “You were 18. He manipulated you. Everyone saw it but you.” Rory touches the scar on her wrist. “I saw it. Eventually. But it took a long time to learn how to love myself again, Evie. Long enough that I didn’t have time to call you. Long enough that I built a life where I don’t need to ask for help.” Eva’s voice cracks. “But love isn’t about not needing help. It’s about letting someone hold you when you fall.” Rory closes her eyes. For a second, she’s 12 again, falling out of that tree, Eva’s hand tight around hers. *We’ll be together forever*, they’d said. But forever is a lie. People grow. People change. People hurt each other. “I’m sorry,” she says, when she opens her eyes. “I’m so sorry I didn’t call. I’m sorry I let you think I didn’t need you.” Eva reaches across the bar, lacing their fingers together. Her hands are calloused, like she types too much, or cooks, or hits something hard often. But they’re warm, too—warmer than Rory remembers. “I’m sorry I didn’t fight harder,” she says. “I was scared you’d leave again. Scared I’d lose you.” Rory squeezes her hand. “I’m not going anywhere. Not unless you want me to.” Eva laughs. “I don’t want you to go anywhere. I want… I want us to find our way back. Slowly. No pressure. Just… coffee. Or wine. Or… whatever you want.” Rory nods. “Whatever I want.” She pauses. “I’d like that. Coffee. Tomorrow. At 10 a.m. My treat.” Eva grins. “10 a.m. It’s a date.” Silas appears again, refilling their glasses. “About time,” he says, but his eyes are soft. “I’ve been waiting to kick both your arses for leaving each other in the first place.” Rory laughs, a sound she hasn’t made in a long time—bright, unguarded, *hers*. “We’ll start with 10 a.m. tomorrow,” she says. “But first… this wine is amazing.” Eva clinks her glass against Rory’s. “To the past,” she says. “And the future.” “To the future,” Rory says. The saxophone player starts up again, but Rory doesn’t notice. She’s too busy looking at her friend, at the way the neon light catches her face, at the way Eva’s hand is still in hers. Time has passed, sure, but it’s also made space—space for healing, for regret, for the kind of connection that doesn’t need words, just a hand to hold. Rory Carter has a scar on her wrist. Eva has calluses on her hands. Some things never change. Some things, finally, do.
created_at"2026-02-20T19:34:38.971Z" 2/20/2026, 7:34:38 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags30
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences59
tagDensity0.508
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
94.92% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1969
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
87.30% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1969
totalAiIsms5
found
0
word"calculate"
count1
1
word"echoed"
count1
2
word"silk"
count1
3
word"efficient"
count1
4
word"crystal"
count1
highlights
0"calculate"
1"echoed"
2"silk"
3"efficient"
4"crystal"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences125
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences125
filterMatches
0"think"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences154
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen51
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans16
markdownWords58
totalWords1942
ratio0.03
matches
0"Nest"
1"No one"
2"Eva"
3"Eve"
4"You think I won’t find you?"
5"Run. Now. I’ll cover. Just… go."
6"supposed"
7"We’ll be together forever"
8"No one will ever take you away."
9"Is that her?"
10"safe"
11"We’re just two people, broken in different ways"
12"You can’t fix each other, but you can hold each other."
13"should"
14"We’ll be together forever"
15"hers"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions34
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions100
wordCount1377
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity2.69
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity6.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest2
Carter2
Yu-Fei2
Cheung1
Golden1
Empress1
Silas5
East1
London3
Rory37
Evan4
Victoria1
Eva32
Cardiff3
Soho1
People3
persons
0"Carter"
1"Yu-Fei"
2"Cheung"
3"Empress"
4"Silas"
5"Rory"
6"Evan"
7"Eva"
8"People"
places
0"Raven"
1"East"
2"London"
3"Victoria"
4"Cardiff"
5"Soho"
globalScore0.156
windowScore0
82.43% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences74
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"quite reach her roots"
1"not quite so pronounced when he’s focused, his hazel eyes softening when he sees Eva"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.515
wordCount1942
matches
0"Not by magic, but by making her wait tables at first, then begging Yu-Fei to l"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences154
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs50
mean38.84
std32.51
cv0.837
sampleLengths
0133
1104
2107
3107
4112
54
64
7115
817
925
1025
1122
1257
1362
1414
1536
1660
1731
1834
1962
2041
2110
2239
2363
2458
254
2612
2732
2837
2912
309
3142
3216
3310
3414
3550
3619
3739
3825
3950
4014
4130
4217
437
4431
4527
4614
475
4862
4922
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences125
matches
0"are calloused"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs264
matches
0"was gasping"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount18
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences14
totalSentences154
ratio0.091
matches
0"It’s her day off—a rare thing, with deliveries from Yu-Fei Cheung’s Golden Empress starting at dawn—but Silas had insisted she “loosen up” after a week of breaking into doors to deliver birthday cakes to warehouses in East London."
1"The light from the green neon sign—the *Nest* script bleeding green onto the brick wall—slants across the room, painting the old maps and black-and-white photos that line the walls in strange, shifting hues."
2"It’s too late for the dinner rush; the crowd is sparse, a group of traders in ill-fitting suits at the far end, a librarian-looking woman nursing a whiskey, a man in a trench coat poring over a leather-bound book that’s definitely not a textbook."
3"They’d been inseparable until Rory was 18, when Evan—blond, loud, a boxer with a temper—had started showing up outside their school, then outside her house, then inside her bed."
4"Evan’s voice had echoed in her head—*You think I won’t find you?*—and she’d taken the first train to Cardiff, where her father was a barrister, too busy with his cases to notice she’d moved into the spare room."
5"She’s wearing a tailored blazer—navy, charcoal pinstripes—over a silk blouse that’s probably expensive, and black heels that click too loud against the floor."
6"Only it’s heavier now, the smile tentative, the eyes—once so bright, like she had the whole world in a jar—hazy, like she’s been squinting into the sun too long."
7"“Yeah. Me.” She sets the wine glass down, too hard; it rattles."
8"He’s got the left leg bent slightly, the knee swollen, the limp she’s grown used to—though she knows he’d deny it if she asked."
9"For a second, Rory sees the girl she used to know—the one who’d sneak into Rory’s window to share stolen chocolate, who’d scream at Rory’s dad for being too busy with his cases, who’d cried into her pillow when Rory left."
10"For years, she’d thought Eva had gotten tired—tired of chasing her, tired of watching her break."
11"But they’re warm, too—warmer than Rory remembers."
12"Rory laughs, a sound she hasn’t made in a long time—bright, unguarded, *hers*."
13"Time has passed, sure, but it’s also made space—space for healing, for regret, for the kind of connection that doesn’t need words, just a hand to hold."
96.90% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1401
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount61
adverbRatio0.04354032833690221
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.004282655246252677
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences154
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences154
mean12.61
std10.93
cv0.867
sampleLengths
021
120
238
322
432
533
621
744
86
910
101
111
1229
1320
145
1541
164
1712
185
1915
2038
216
2222
231
242
251
261
273
282
2922
3034
3151
324
334
3420
3524
3623
3719
3829
393
405
419
429
4316
445
4512
465
473
484
495
42.21% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.2662337662337662
totalSentences154
uniqueOpeners41
32.05% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences104
matches
0"Only it’s heavier now, the"
ratio0.01
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences104
matches
0"It’s her day off—a rare"
1"he’d said, flicking a washcloth"
2"It’s too late for the"
3"They’d been inseparable until Rory"
4"They’d collided in London Victoria,"
5"He’d never asked questions, but"
6"Her hair, once a wild"
7"She’s wearing a tailored blazer—navy,"
8"Her face is the same,"
9"It’s lower than Rory remembers,"
10"She sets the wine glass"
11"She clears her throat"
12"It doesn’t reach her eyes."
13"*We’ll be together forever*, they’d"
14"He’s got the left leg"
15"She pulls out a stool"
16"Her hands shake as she"
17"she says, and the words"
18"They’re raw, like a scab"
19"She stops, swallows"
ratio0.279
41.73% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount87
totalSentences104
matches
0"The bell above the door"
1"Rory Carter pauses mid-sip, her"
2"It’s her day off—a rare"
3"he’d said, flicking a washcloth"
4"The light from the green"
5"A saxophone player in the"
6"It’s too late for the"
7"The name hits her like"
8"They’d been inseparable until Rory"
9"Eva had said, pressing a"
10"Eva had chased her."
11"They’d collided in London Victoria,"
12"Evan’s voice had echoed in"
13"Evan had tracked her down"
14"Rory had run."
15"He’d never asked questions, but"
16"The bell jingles again."
17"Rory’s eyes snap up."
18"The woman standing in the"
19"Her hair, once a wild"
ratio0.837
96.15% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences104
matches
0"Now, she’s propped against the"
1"To a flat above a"
ratio0.019
51.28% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences39
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"The bell above the door jingles, a high, tinny sound that cuts through the hum of conversation at The Raven's Nest."
1"Rory Carter pauses mid-sip, her thumb brushing the condensation beading on the cheap wine glass she’s claiming as her own."
2"The light from the green neon sign—the *Nest* script bleeding green onto the brick wall—slants across the room, painting the old maps and black-and-white photos…"
3"It’s too late for the dinner rush; the crowd is sparse, a group of traders in ill-fitting suits at the far end, a librarian-looking woman nursing a whiskey, a m…"
4"She’s wearing a tailored blazer—navy, charcoal pinstripes—over a silk blouse that’s probably expensive, and black heels that click too loud against the floor."
75.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags30
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"the woman says, her voice a question"
1"she says, and the words are quiet, but not sad"
2"he says, but his eyes are soft"
99.15% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags18
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"he’d (would)"
1"Eva had (have)"
2"He’d (would)"
dialogueSentences59
tagDensity0.305
leniency0.61
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.102
83.3046%