Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY8Y5P1XAR6FYK0H4XDH86J

Run Details

Duration:
41.9s
Cost:
$0.001821
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rory pushed through the heavy oak door of The Raven's Nest, the green neon sign above buzzing faintly like a trapped hornet against the Soho drizzle. The air inside hit her first—thick with the scent of aged whiskey, polished wood, and the faint metallic tang of rain-soaked coats piled on hooks by the entrance. Dim light pooled from brass lamps hung low over scarred tabletops, casting long shadows across walls papered in faded maps of forgotten empires and sepia-toned photographs of stern-faced men in trench coats. It was the kind of place that swallowed secrets whole, and tonight, after sixteen hours zigzagging London on her battered scooter for Yu-Fei's Golden Empress, Rory needed it to swallow hers. She hadn't set foot in here since the night she'd hauled her duffel up the back stairs three months ago, courtesy of Eva's frantic call: "Get out of Cardiff, Rory. Now." Silas had grunted assent from behind his bar then, sliding her a key without a word, his hazel eyes appraising her like a smuggled artifact. But that was it—no questions, no welcome drink. She'd glimpsed him since, limping between kegs in the alley or silhouetted in his window above the storeroom, but they'd danced around each other like ghosts in the same haunted house. Years had piled up before that, though. Eight, to be precise, since Prague—or what she'd pieced together of it from whispers and a teenage girl's half-formed intuitions. Time had a way of calcifying distance, turning acquaintances into strangers. She slid onto a stool at the far end of the bar, the leather creaking under her damp jeans. Her straight black hair clung to her neck, and she tugged at the frayed cuff of her jacket, exposing the small crescent scar on her left wrist—a relic from tumbling off her bike at twelve, chasing Brendan across the Cardiff docks. The bar was half-empty: a cluster of suits nursing pints in a booth, murmuring about City deals; a lone woman in a red scarf scribbling in a notebook by the window. Rory traced the grain of the bar top with her thumb, debating gin or just water, when a shadow loomed. "Evening, Laila." The voice was gravel wrapped in velvet, unchanged. Rory's head snapped up. Silas Blackwood stood there, towel slung over one shoulder, his grey-streaked auburn hair swept back from a forehead etched with new lines. The neatly trimmed beard framed a jaw that had hardened since she'd last seen him up close, and that silver signet ring glinted on his right hand as he polished a glass with mechanical precision. His hazel eyes locked on hers, steady as a sniper's scope. But the limp—god, the limp was worse. He favored his left leg openly now, the knee injury from that botched op in '15 claiming its toll. She blinked, the old alias jarring her like a skipped heartbeat. Laila. The name he'd given her back when she was seventeen, shadowing her father on a barrister's trip to London, and Silas had been the shadowy uncle type Brendan trusted with "discreet inquiries." "Not Rory tonight?" she said, forcing a half-smile to mask the jolt. Her bright blue eyes met his, unflinching, but inside, her mind raced: calculate, adapt. He looked... diminished. The quiet authority still clung to him, but the broad shoulders stooped slightly, as if carrying invisible ledgers of the dead. Silas set the glass down with a soft clink, his gaze flicking to her scar, then back. "Haven't heard Rory in years. Thought it stuck after Cardiff." He poured her a gin without asking—Tanqueray, two olives— and slid it across. His own tumbler appeared from nowhere, amber liquid swirling. "Yu-Fei working you ragged?" She wrapped her fingers around the cool glass, the condensation slick against her palm. "Pays the rent. And the stairs don't creak as much as my old flat." A sip burned clean down her throat, loosening the knot there. Up close, the years carved him raw: crow's feet deepening around those eyes, the auburn threads in his beard more silver than before. The man who'd once vanished operatives from Eastern Bloc prisons now poured pints for tourists. Changed. Profoundly. He leaned on the bar, right elbow planted, ring catching the light. The slight shift masked the limp, but she saw it—the hitch, the compensation. "Heard from Brendan lately?" His tone was casual, but the maps on the wall seemed to lean in. Rory's laugh came out sharp, unintended. "Last Easter. Sent a tie. Told me to finish Pre-Law." She rolled the glass between her palms, watching the olives bob. The bar's hush amplified the rain pattering the windowpanes. "As if." Silas nodded once, slow. "Stubborn bastard. Always was." He sipped, eyes distant, drifting to a black-and-white photo behind the spirits shelf: him, younger, arm slung around a man with Rory's father's jawline—Brendan, mid-'90s, before the barrister polish. "You look like your mum. The eyes." The compliment landed like a stone in still water. Jennifer's eyes, bright blue and unyielding. Rory traced her scar again, the raised moon a tactile anchor. "Flattery from the Spymaster. What's the angle?" She meant it light, but it hung heavy. Eight years since that rainy afternoon in his old MI6-adjacent flat off Baker Street, when he'd caught her eavesdropping on a call about Prague. "Go home, Laila," he'd said then, pressing a tenner into her hand for the Tube. "This world's not for little girls with big ideas." She'd bolted, heart pounding, only to find Brendan waiting with lectures about curiosity killing more than cats. No angle now. Silas straightened, wincing as his knee protested. "No angle. Just noting facts." He glanced at the empty stools between them, the bar's green glow flickering across his beard. "You vanished after uni started. Eva rang me last autumn—panicked. Said Evan was..." He trailed off, letting the name fester. Rory's grip tightened, knuckles whitening. Evan. The ex with fists like accusations, the one who'd turned Pre-Law dreams into nightmares of locked doors and whispered apologies. "A mistake," she said flatly, meeting his gaze. Cool-headed Rory, always the quick thinker—except then. "Fixed it. London swallows mistakes." He studied her, the way a handler sizes up an asset gone rogue. "Does it? You ride that scooter like you're fleeing ghosts. Live upstairs like a tenant in your own life." The words cut, precise as a scalpel. His signet ring tapped the bar once, rhythmic. "Prague changed me, Laila. Botched drop—team gone. Knee's a souvenir. This?" A gesture encompassed the Nest, the maps yellowing at edges. "Front for contacts. But it's no life." The tension coiled between them, electric in the dimness. Rory felt it in her chest—the pull of who they'd been. She, the prodigy daughter Brendan boasted about; he, the mentor figure who'd slipped her dossiers to read under torchlight, fueling her out-of-the-box schemes. Regret slithered in unbidden: for dropping uni, for Evan, for not calling Silas sooner when Eva suggested his flat. For seeing him reduced to this limping barkeep, his network fraying like the photos on the walls. "You could've called," she said quietly, the gin emboldening her. "After Prague. Brendan said you ghosted everyone." Silas's laugh was a low rumble, devoid of mirth. "Ghosting's what I do best. Saved your da a few times—discreet inquiries into bent judges. Thought you'd follow him into chambers." His eyes sharpened, hazel piercing. "Not deliveries and bruises." She flinched, the scar itching under her sleeve. "And you? MI6 legend slinging drinks? The limp's new. Or did you hide it before?" Petty, but the years demanded settling. He poured another finger into his glass, the whiskey glugging softly. "Hide everything. That's the job." A pause, heavy as the rain. "Saw you once, two years back. King's Cross, hauling boxes. Looked lost. Didn't stop." The admission hung, a noose of unspoken roads not taken. Rory's mind flashed: her, post-Evan, cardboard fortresses in Eva's spare room; him, nursing grudges in the Nest's secret room behind the bookshelf, maps plotting ghosts. Time's weight pressed down—the divergence. She could've been barrister Rory, arguing precedents; he, perhaps, pulled her into the shadows instead of pushing away. "Why not?" Her voice cracked, blue eyes fierce. Silas met it, unflinching. "You were Brendan's light. Didn't want to dim it." His hand flexed, ring glinting. "Regret's a bastard. Keeps you up, tracing what-ifs on ceilings." The suits in the booth laughed raucously, shattering the bubble. Rory slid cash across—exact change, always precise. "No what-ifs tonight." She stood, gin warm in her veins, but the regret lingered, a shadow twin. "Thanks for the drink, Si." He nodded, the old nickname unlocking something soft in his eyes. "Key still works. Door's always open, Rory." She paused at the threshold, rain sheeting the glass, the green neon humming farewell. Changed. Both of them—scars deepened, paths forked irreparably. The door swung shut behind her, sealing the Nest's secrets, but the weight clung, heavy as the Soho night. Upstairs, in the flat's cramped kitchen, Rory shrugged off her jacket, the scar stark under fluorescent light. Silas's words echoed: regret's a bastard. She poured water, stared at the ceiling cracks mapping like his bar walls. Eight years, and one drink cracked it open. Tomorrow, deliveries again—Yu-Fei's orders scorching her phone. But tonight, the unspoken pulsed: what if she'd stayed that curious girl? What if he'd pulled her in? Downstairs, Silas limped to the bookshelf, thumbed the hidden latch. The secret room yawned, lit by a single desk lamp, files whispering of old ops. He sank into the chair, knee throbbing, poured another. Rory Carter—Laila—no longer the girl, but carrying the same fire. Time hadn't erased; it had forged. Regret? Aye. But perhaps, in the Nest's dim heart, a bridge remained. She texted Eva: *Ran into Silas. Drink led to ghosts.* No reply yet. Rory curled on the sagging sofa, the city's hum vibrating through floorboards. Changed, yes. But not broken. Quick thinking—that was her edge. Tomorrow, she'd descend again. Test the waters. Time's weight lifted, fractionally, in the promise of words unsaid no longer. The rain drummed on, indifferent, as Soho slumbered.
created_at"2026-02-20T19:37:58.223Z" 2/20/2026, 7:37:58 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags22
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"she said flatly [flatly]"
1"she said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.647
leniency1
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.091
94.18% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1719
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
36.01% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1719
totalAiIsms22
found
0
word"traced"
count2
1
word"loomed"
count1
2
word"velvet"
count1
3
word"etched"
count1
4
word"mechanical"
count1
5
word"raced"
count1
6
word"calculate"
count1
7
word"pounding"
count1
8
word"rhythmic"
count1
9
word"tension"
count1
10
word"electric"
count1
11
word"unspoken"
count2
12
word"weight"
count3
13
word"glinting"
count1
14
word"tracing"
count1
15
word"stark"
count1
16
word"echoed"
count1
17
word"pulsed"
count1
highlights
0"traced"
1"loomed"
2"velvet"
3"etched"
4"mechanical"
5"raced"
6"calculate"
7"pounding"
8"rhythmic"
9"tension"
10"electric"
11"unspoken"
12"weight"
13"glinting"
14"tracing"
15"stark"
16"echoed"
17"pulsed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences117
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences117
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences129
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen56
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords7
totalWords1683
ratio0.004
matches
0"Ran into Silas. Drink led to ghosts."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
93.86% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions84
wordCount1425
uniqueNames31
maxNameDensity1.12
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest5
Soho3
London2
Yu-Fei1
Golden1
Empress1
Rory16
Eva4
Silas12
Prague2
Brendan5
Cardiff1
City1
Blackwood1
Tanqueray1
Eastern1
Bloc1
Eight3
Baker1
Street1
Tube1
Pre-Law1
Cool-headed1
Evan3
Yu2
Fei2
Carter1
Laila2
Time4
Changed3
persons
0"Raven"
1"Yu-Fei"
2"Rory"
3"Eva"
4"Silas"
5"Brendan"
6"City"
7"Blackwood"
8"Evan"
9"Fei"
10"Carter"
11"Laila"
12"Time"
places
0"Soho"
1"London"
2"Prague"
3"Cardiff"
4"Eastern"
5"Baker"
6"Street"
globalScore0.939
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences95
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"as if carrying invisible ledgers of the dead"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1683
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences129
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs30
mean56.1
std34.02
cv0.606
sampleLengths
0117
1133
2111
32
4106
594
653
779
843
938
1044
11106
1251
1346
1475
1579
1617
1739
1829
1936
2058
218
2228
2339
2418
2541
2669
2762
2854
298
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences117
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs248
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount19
semicolonCount5
flaggedSentences21
totalSentences129
ratio0.163
matches
0"The air inside hit her first—thick with the scent of aged whiskey, polished wood, and the faint metallic tang of rain-soaked coats piled on hooks by the entrance."
1"But that was it—no questions, no welcome drink."
2"Eight, to be precise, since Prague—or what she'd pieced together of it from whispers and a teenage girl's half-formed intuitions."
3"Her straight black hair clung to her neck, and she tugged at the frayed cuff of her jacket, exposing the small crescent scar on her left wrist—a relic from tumbling off her bike at twelve, chasing Brendan across the Cardiff docks."
4"The bar was half-empty: a cluster of suits nursing pints in a booth, murmuring about City deals; a lone woman in a red scarf scribbling in a notebook by the window."
5"But the limp—god, the limp was worse."
6"\"Haven't heard Rory in years. Thought it stuck after Cardiff.\" He poured her a gin without asking—Tanqueray, two olives— and slid it across."
7"The slight shift masked the limp, but she saw it—the hitch, the compensation."
8"\"Stubborn bastard. Always was.\" He sipped, eyes distant, drifting to a black-and-white photo behind the spirits shelf: him, younger, arm slung around a man with Rory's father's jawline—Brendan, mid-'90s, before the barrister polish."
9"Cool-headed Rory, always the quick thinker—except then."
10"Rory felt it in her chest—the pull of who they'd been."
11"She, the prodigy daughter Brendan boasted about; he, the mentor figure who'd slipped her dossiers to read under torchlight, fueling her out-of-the-box schemes."
12"Rory's mind flashed: her, post-Evan, cardboard fortresses in Eva's spare room; him, nursing grudges in the Nest's secret room behind the bookshelf, maps plotting ghosts."
13"Time's weight pressed down—the divergence."
14"She could've been barrister Rory, arguing precedents; he, perhaps, pulled her into the shadows instead of pushing away."
15"Rory slid cash across—exact change, always precise."
16"Both of them—scars deepened, paths forked irreparably."
17"Tomorrow, deliveries again—Yu-Fei's orders scorching her phone."
18"Rory Carter—Laila—no longer the girl, but carrying the same fire."
19"Time hadn't erased; it had forged."
20"Quick thinking—that was her edge."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount656
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount13
adverbRatio0.019817073170731708
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.004573170731707317
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences129
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences129
mean13.05
std9.71
cv0.744
sampleLengths
026
128
232
331
456
58
631
77
820
911
1019
1141
1231
1320
142
158
164
1722
1835
1911
207
2119
2211
231
2444
2514
262
271
2821
2917
3023
319
324
3314
3425
3523
3615
371
381
3912
4013
4118
426
4321
449
452
464
4733
487
499
76.23% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.4573643410852713
totalSentences129
uniqueOpeners59
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences107
matches(empty)
ratio0
77.94% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount38
totalSentences107
matches
0"It was the kind of"
1"She hadn't set foot in"
2"She'd glimpsed him since, limping"
3"She slid onto a stool"
4"Her straight black hair clung"
5"His hazel eyes locked on"
6"He favored his left leg"
7"She blinked, the old alias"
8"Her bright blue eyes met"
9"He poured her a gin"
10"His own tumbler appeared from"
11"She wrapped her fingers around"
12"He leaned on the bar,"
13"His tone was casual, but"
14"She rolled the glass between"
15"He sipped, eyes distant, drifting"
16"She meant it light, but"
17"he'd said then, pressing a"
18"She'd bolted, heart pounding, only"
19"He glanced at the empty"
ratio0.355
53.46% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount87
totalSentences107
matches
0"Rory pushed through the heavy"
1"The air inside hit her"
2"It was the kind of"
3"She hadn't set foot in"
4"She'd glimpsed him since, limping"
5"Years had piled up before"
6"Time had a way of"
7"She slid onto a stool"
8"Her straight black hair clung"
9"The bar was half-empty: a"
10"Rory traced the grain of"
11"The voice was gravel wrapped"
12"Rory's head snapped up."
13"Silas Blackwood stood there, towel"
14"The neatly trimmed beard framed"
15"His hazel eyes locked on"
16"He favored his left leg"
17"She blinked, the old alias"
18"The name he'd given her"
19"Her bright blue eyes met"
ratio0.813
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences107
matches(empty)
ratio0
38.69% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences48
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"It was the kind of place that swallowed secrets whole, and tonight, after sixteen hours zigzagging London on her battered scooter for Yu-Fei's Golden Empress, R…"
1"Her straight black hair clung to her neck, and she tugged at the frayed cuff of her jacket, exposing the small crescent scar on her left wrist—a relic from tumb…"
2"The neatly trimmed beard framed a jaw that had hardened since she'd last seen him up close, and that silver signet ring glinted on his right hand as he polished…"
3"The quiet authority still clung to him, but the broad shoulders stooped slightly, as if carrying invisible ledgers of the dead."
4"The man who'd once vanished operatives from Eastern Bloc prisons now poured pints for tourists."
5"She, the prodigy daughter Brendan boasted about; he, the mentor figure who'd slipped her dossiers to read under torchlight, fueling her out-of-the-box schemes."
6"For seeing him reduced to this limping barkeep, his network fraying like the photos on the walls."
79.55% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags22
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"A gesture encompassed, the maps yellowing at edges"
1"she said quietly, the gin emboldening her"
91.18% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"he'd (would)"
1"the years demanded (demand)"
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.118
leniency0.235
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.118
81.3698%