"The air inside hit her first—thick with the scent of aged whiskey, polished wood, and the faint metallic tang of rain-soaked coats piled on hooks by the entrance."
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"But that was it—no questions, no welcome drink."
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"Eight, to be precise, since Prague—or what she'd pieced together of it from whispers and a teenage girl's half-formed intuitions."
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"Her straight black hair clung to her neck, and she tugged at the frayed cuff of her jacket, exposing the small crescent scar on her left wrist—a relic from tumbling off her bike at twelve, chasing Brendan across the Cardiff docks."
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"The bar was half-empty: a cluster of suits nursing pints in a booth, murmuring about City deals; a lone woman in a red scarf scribbling in a notebook by the window."
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"But the limp—god, the limp was worse."
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"\"Haven't heard Rory in years. Thought it stuck after Cardiff.\" He poured her a gin without asking—Tanqueray, two olives— and slid it across."
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"The slight shift masked the limp, but she saw it—the hitch, the compensation."
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"\"Stubborn bastard. Always was.\" He sipped, eyes distant, drifting to a black-and-white photo behind the spirits shelf: him, younger, arm slung around a man with Rory's father's jawline—Brendan, mid-'90s, before the barrister polish."
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"Cool-headed Rory, always the quick thinker—except then."
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"Rory felt it in her chest—the pull of who they'd been."
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"She, the prodigy daughter Brendan boasted about; he, the mentor figure who'd slipped her dossiers to read under torchlight, fueling her out-of-the-box schemes."
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"Rory's mind flashed: her, post-Evan, cardboard fortresses in Eva's spare room; him, nursing grudges in the Nest's secret room behind the bookshelf, maps plotting ghosts."
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"Time's weight pressed down—the divergence."
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"She could've been barrister Rory, arguing precedents; he, perhaps, pulled her into the shadows instead of pushing away."
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"It was the kind of place that swallowed secrets whole, and tonight, after sixteen hours zigzagging London on her battered scooter for Yu-Fei's Golden Empress, R…"
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"Her straight black hair clung to her neck, and she tugged at the frayed cuff of her jacket, exposing the small crescent scar on her left wrist—a relic from tumb…"
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"The neatly trimmed beard framed a jaw that had hardened since she'd last seen him up close, and that silver signet ring glinted on his right hand as he polished…"
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"The quiet authority still clung to him, but the broad shoulders stooped slightly, as if carrying invisible ledgers of the dead."
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"The man who'd once vanished operatives from Eastern Bloc prisons now poured pints for tourists."
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"She, the prodigy daughter Brendan boasted about; he, the mentor figure who'd slipped her dossiers to read under torchlight, fueling her out-of-the-box schemes."
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"For seeing him reduced to this limping barkeep, his network fraying like the photos on the walls."