Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY99AYFRANHHDZDG2HX40D2

Run Details

Duration:
30.4s
Cost:
$0.001133
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The headlights of Aurora’s beat-up beat-up Ford Fiesta cut through the dark, the engine sputtering like a sick animal. She’d turned off the main road an hour ago, following a crumpled map—*Eva’s* map, scrawled in her messy handwriting, tucked in Aurora’s jacket pocket since dawn. “It’s the only way,” she’d said, before the call had cut out, static hissing like a serpent. “He knows. They all know. But you—you can help. The pendant… it led you. To me.” Eva had been her anchor, once. The only one who’d seen Evan’s jaw clench when Aurora forgot to answer his texts, the way his hand lingered too long on her waist in public. When he’d thrown her phone into the Thames, laughing, Aurora had run to Eva’s flat, packed a suitcase, and taken the 6:17 to London. Now, four years later, Aurora pulled into a dirt turnout at the edge of Richmond Park, the engine dying with a final wheeze. The air smelled of damp earth and something sharper—pine? Or rot? She couldn’t be sure. She unbuckled her seatbelt, her left wrist brushing the Heartstone Pendant through her thick winter coat. It pulsed faintly, a warmth like a hand pressed to her skin. Not cold, not hot—*alive*. The codex said it glowed near Hel portals, but she’d worn it for months without incident. Maybe it was just a faulty gemstone. Maybe Eva was delirious. Either way, she’d come. She grabbed her duffel—snACKs, a flashlight, a utility knife—and stepped out into the dark. The park was silent, too silent. No wind, no birds, not even the distant hoot of an owl. Her breath fogged in front of her, visible as a gray ghost. She checked her phone—no service, as expected—but the screen flickered when she pressed the power button, a faint red glow bleeding from the edge of the display. *Interesting*. The map said to follow the oak trees. She started walking, her boots crunching on frost. The trees loomed, their branches twisted like gnarled fingers. The path was narrow, overgrown with brambles that snagged her coat. After twenty minutes, she stopped. The trees had thinned, and up ahead, a circle of stones jutted from the ground. Ancient oaks, their trunks scarred with carvings—she squinted, saw what looked like runes, not the usual bark patterns. The map had called them standing stones. *Boundary*, it said. *No turning back.* Aurora took a step forward. The pendant flared, a sharp throb that made her gasp. She pressed a hand over it, feeling the gemstone warm through her glove. *Just a portal*, she told herself. *Eva’s talking about a portal.* But why would she be near a Hel portal? Hel was their term for the Fae realm, the one that didn’t play by human rules. Evan’s family had been into that kind of thing—he’d once dragged her to a seance, laughing when she’d left after an hour,心悸得厉害. *Don’t think about him*, she told herself, but the memory seeped in, cold and sharp. She entered the circle. The stones were rough, their surfaces slick with dew. As she stepped between two of them, the world *hummed*. A low, vibrational hum that made her teeth ache. The air shifted—thinner, like someone had taken a layer off the atmosphere. She looked down. The wildflowers, usually dormant this time of year, bloomed around her: daisies, poppies, lavender, all in full, vibrant bloom. *They shouldn’t be here*, she thought. *Not now.* The map said the clearing was beyond the stones. She pushed through the underbrush, her boots sinking into soft, mossy ground. The hum grew louder, until it filled her ears, a white noise that drowned out her own heartbeat. Then—*silence*. The clearing was circular, ringed by trees that seemed to lean in, their leaves rustling. At its center, a depression in the earth, about the size of a table. And over that depression, a mist—pale, shifting, not the kind that rose from the ground. It rolled outward, as if alive, and Aurora saw something in it: a flicker of movement, a shape that wasn’t a tree, wasn’t a rock. She froze. The mist parted, and a door appeared. It was made of wood, carved with the same runes as the stones. It stood ten feet tall, its planks warped, as if by time or magic. *Hel portal*, she thought. *Eva is here.* She took a step forward, then another. The pendant burned now, a hot weight against her chest. She unzipped her coat, pulled it out—crimson stone, silver chain, pulsing fiercely. The gemstone glowed, a deep, almost angry red, casting an odd light over the clearing. The mist around the door thickened, and the runes blazed, a bright blue fire that seared her retinas. A sound made her jump. A *sigh*. Not the wind through leaves, not the creak of wood. A human sigh, warm and wet, like breath exhaled through lips pressed together. Aurora spun. The trees were closer, their branches stretching toward her. The wildflowers had stopped blooming, their petals wilting, black veins snaking across them. The mist from the door had spread, covering the ground now, a gray blanket that oozed upward, like molasses. “Eva?” she called. Her voice shook. *Stupid*, she thought. *Stupid to come here alone.* No answer. But the sigh came again, and this time, she heard it more clearly: it was *behind* her. She turned. Nothing. Just the trees, their trunks blackening at the base, bark peeling away to reveal something else—something white, like bone, but smooth, unbreakable. The gemstone burned hotter. She fumbled with the chain, unclasping it, holding the pendant out in front of her. The runes on the door blazed brighter, and the mist rushed toward her, a cold wave that made her skin prickle. A hand appeared. Not a human hand—too long, fingers too many, nails black and curved. It emerged from the mist, palm up, as if offering something. Aurora stepped back, tripping over a root. The hand reached for her, and suddenly, she was aware of the weight in her pocket: the utility knife. She fumbled it out, her fingers slipping on the handle. “Stay back,” she said, her voice higher than she intended. The hand closed around nothing—*nothing*—as if the air was solid. The sigh came again, closer now, and she smelled it: rot, sweet and cloying, like overripe fruit left in the sun. The pendant exploded in light. Red, then white, then red again, a flash that blindsided her. When she blinked, the mist was gone. The runes on the door flickered, then went dark. The flowers had collapsed, their stems black. And in the center of the clearing, where there had been a depression, there was now a body. A woman. Late teens, early twenties. Black hair, straight and shoulder-length, just like Aurora’s. Bright blue eyes, wide and unseeing. A small crescent scar on her left wrist. Aurora froze. The girl’s dress—torn, stained with dirt and blood—was familiar. *Eva’s* dress. The one she’d worn to their high school graduation, the one she’d said she’d never throw away. “Eva?” Aurora whispered. She stood, the knife shaking in her hand, and took a step toward the girl. The girl’s eyes fluttered open. They were *black*. No white, no iris—just empty, bottomless pits. Aurora stopped. The girl smiled, a slow, wide smile that split her face, revealing teeth that were too many, too sharp. The pendant burned through her palm. She dropped it, watching as it rolled across the ground, its glow dimming. The girl stood, slow, her joints creaking like rusted hinges. Her dress unraveled, the fabric turning to ash, revealing skin that was gray, veined with black. “*Laila*,” the girl said. The voice wasn’t hers. It was low, guttural, but it carried Aurora’s name—*Laila*—with a familiarity that made her blood run cold. “*Carter*.” Aurora backed away. The trees creaked, their branches twisting into arms, fingers reaching. The gemstone at her wrist pulsed, a memory flooding her: a voice, soft and urgent, saying *Don’t let them take you. Use the stone. Find the Grove.* She’d thought it was a nightmare, at first. The man in the black coat, the one with no face, who’d stood outside her flat door that night, three months ago, just after she’d closed the Golden Empress. *“You carry a piece of us,”* he’d said. *“Your blood, it binds you. Find the Grove, or they will take you.”* She’d forgotten about it. Until Eva’s call. Until the pendant started glowing. “Who are you?” Aurora asked, her voice steady now, the fear giving way to anger, to *focus*. She was a delivery person—she could think on her feet. She could *run*. The girl—*thing*—stepped closer. The trees surrounded them, their branches closing in, blocking her escape. The air thickened, heavy, making it hard to breathe. “We are *many*,” the thing said, its voice splitting into a chorus of voices, all overlapping, all whispering *Laila, Laila, Laila*. “We are the ones you left behind. The ones Evan tried to bury.” Evan. Her ex. The man who’d hurt her. The man she’d fled from. Aurora’s chest tightened. *He’s here*, she realized. Not Evan, exactly, but Evan’s *something*. *Evan’s family*. The Fae, maybe. The ones who’d marked her, back when she’d been naive enough to trust him. The thing raised a hand. Its fingers elongated, nails slashing the air. Aurora turned, running, her boots slipping on the moss. The pendant glowed at her wrist, a beacon, and she saw it—the door, its runes flickering back to life. She dove through it, scrambling onto the other side, the mist slamming into her back. The Grove vanished. She was back in the park, the standing stones behind her, the trees now just trees, their branches silent. The pendant burned, a bright red light that radiated from her wrist. Her phone buzzed in her pocket. She fumbled it out, the screen showing a single text: *They knew you’d run. They’re coming.* Aurora looked up. The sky was lighter now, the first hints of dawn peeking over the horizon. But somewhere, deep in the park, she heard a laugh. A man’s laugh, low and cruel, and it made her skin crawl. She stood, her hand on her wrist, the pendant pulsing, and started walking. The trees lined the path, their leaves rustling, and she was sure she saw faces in them—Evan’s, his mother’s, his sister’s—all watching, all waiting. They were coming for her. And she was ready. Her boots crunched on the frost, and the heartstone glowed brighter, a promise, a warning. *Run*, it seemed to say. *Fight*. Aurora kept walking.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags8
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences12
tagDensity0.667
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
97.19% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1781
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
60.70% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1781
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"pulsed"
count2
1
word"warmth"
count1
2
word"flickered"
count2
3
word"loomed"
count1
4
word"throb"
count1
5
word"silence"
count1
6
word"flicker"
count1
7
word"weight"
count2
8
word"familiar"
count1
9
word"fluttered"
count1
10
word"beacon"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"warmth"
2"flickered"
3"loomed"
4"throb"
5"silence"
6"flicker"
7"weight"
8"familiar"
9"fluttered"
10"beacon"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences178
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences178
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
99.66% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences182
gibberishSentences1
adjustedGibberishSentences1
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen29
ratio0.005
matches
0"Evan’s family had been into that kind of thing—he’d once dragged her to a seance, laughing when she’d left after an hour,心悸得厉害."
90.91% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans38
markdownWords96
totalWords1760
ratio0.055
matches
0"Eva’s"
1"alive"
2"Interesting"
3"Boundary"
4"No turning back."
5"Just a portal"
6"Eva’s talking about a portal."
7"Don’t think about him"
8"hummed"
9"They shouldn’t be here"
10"Not now."
11"silence"
12"Hel portal"
13"Eva is here."
14"sigh"
15"Stupid"
16"Stupid to come here alone."
17"behind"
18"nothing"
19"Eva’s"
20"black"
21"Laila"
22"Laila"
23"Carter"
24"Don’t let them take you. Use the stone. Find the Grove."
25"“You carry a piece of us,”"
26"“Your blood, it binds you. Find the Grove, or they will take you.”"
27"focus"
28"run"
29"thing"
30"many"
31"Laila, Laila, Laila"
32"He’s here"
33"something"
34"Evan’s family"
35"They knew you’d run. They’re coming."
36"Run"
37"Fight"
91.67% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions2
matches
0"*Boundary*, it said."
1"*Just a portal*, she told herself."
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions57
wordCount1696
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity1.18
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora20
Ford1
Fiesta1
Eva8
Evan7
Thames1
London1
Richmond1
Park1
Heartstone1
Pendant1
Hel4
Fae2
Golden1
Empress1
Laila4
Grove2
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Eva"
2"Evan"
3"Heartstone"
4"Pendant"
5"Laila"
places
0"Thames"
1"London"
2"Richmond"
3"Park"
4"Hel"
5"Grove"
globalScore0.91
windowScore0.667
83.04% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences112
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"looked like runes, not the usual bark pat"
1"trees that seemed to lean in, their leaves rustling"
2"as if offering something"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.568
wordCount1760
matches
0"Not Evan, exactly, but Evan’s *something*"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences182
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs41
mean42.93
std25.35
cv0.591
sampleLengths
078
195
263
372
487
5101
674
740
878
934
1062
1130
1243
1314
1419
1565
1662
1741
1857
1928
2030
2118
225
2331
2445
2526
2640
2758
2812
2930
3057
3113
3232
3355
343
3553
3639
3737
389
3921
403
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences178
matches
0"was made"
1"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs318
matches
0"were coming"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount28
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences21
totalSentences182
ratio0.115
matches
0"She’d turned off the main road an hour ago, following a crumpled map—*Eva’s* map, scrawled in her messy handwriting, tucked in Aurora’s jacket pocket since dawn."
1"The air smelled of damp earth and something sharper—pine?"
2"Not cold, not hot—*alive*."
3"She grabbed her duffel—snACKs, a flashlight, a utility knife—and stepped out into the dark."
4"She checked her phone—no service, as expected—but the screen flickered when she pressed the power button, a faint red glow bleeding from the edge of the display."
5"Ancient oaks, their trunks scarred with carvings—she squinted, saw what looked like runes, not the usual bark patterns."
6"Evan’s family had been into that kind of thing—he’d once dragged her to a seance, laughing when she’d left after an hour,心悸得厉害."
7"The air shifted—thinner, like someone had taken a layer off the atmosphere."
8"Then—*silence*."
9"And over that depression, a mist—pale, shifting, not the kind that rose from the ground."
10"She unzipped her coat, pulled it out—crimson stone, silver chain, pulsing fiercely."
11"Just the trees, their trunks blackening at the base, bark peeling away to reveal something else—something white, like bone, but smooth, unbreakable."
12"Not a human hand—too long, fingers too many, nails black and curved."
13"The hand closed around nothing—*nothing*—as if the air was solid."
14"The girl’s dress—torn, stained with dirt and blood—was familiar."
15"No white, no iris—just empty, bottomless pits."
16"It was low, guttural, but it carried Aurora’s name—*Laila*—with a familiarity that made her blood run cold."
17"She was a delivery person—she could think on her feet."
18"The girl—*thing*—stepped closer."
19"The pendant glowed at her wrist, a beacon, and she saw it—the door, its runes flickering back to life."
20"The trees lined the path, their leaves rustling, and she was sure she saw faces in them—Evan’s, his mother’s, his sister’s—all watching, all waiting."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1716
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount58
adverbRatio0.0337995337995338
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.005827505827505828
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences182
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences182
mean9.67
std6.57
cv0.679
sampleLengths
019
126
217
316
46
527
624
723
89
92
104
1116
1212
134
1416
157
164
174
1814
196
2012
2112
2227
231
248
258
269
2711
285
2915
3018
317
323
333
345
3510
3613
376
3814
3916
4022
4115
424
439
4410
459
4612
473
4819
496
37.91% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats22
diversityRatio0.26373626373626374
totalSentences182
uniqueOpeners48
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences156
matches
0"Maybe it was just a"
1"Maybe Eva was delirious."
2"*Just a portal*, she told"
3"Just the trees, their trunks"
4"Bright blue eyes, wide and"
ratio0.032
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount42
totalSentences156
matches
0"She’d turned off the main"
1"she’d said, before the call"
2"She couldn’t be sure."
3"She unbuckled her seatbelt, her"
4"It pulsed faintly, a warmth"
5"She grabbed her duffel—snACKs, a"
6"Her breath fogged in front"
7"She checked her phone—no service,"
8"She started walking, her boots"
9"She pressed a hand over"
10"She entered the circle."
11"She looked down."
12"*They shouldn’t be here*, she"
13"She pushed through the underbrush,"
14"It rolled outward, as if"
15"It was made of wood,"
16"It stood ten feet tall,"
17"She took a step forward,"
18"She unzipped her coat, pulled"
19"Her voice shook."
ratio0.269
75.38% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount120
totalSentences156
matches
0"The headlights of Aurora’s beat-up"
1"She’d turned off the main"
2"she’d said, before the call"
3"Eva had been her anchor,"
4"The only one who’d seen"
5"The air smelled of damp"
6"She couldn’t be sure."
7"She unbuckled her seatbelt, her"
8"It pulsed faintly, a warmth"
9"The codex said it glowed"
10"She grabbed her duffel—snACKs, a"
11"The park was silent, too"
12"Her breath fogged in front"
13"She checked her phone—no service,"
14"The map said to follow"
15"She started walking, her boots"
16"The trees loomed, their branches"
17"The path was narrow, overgrown"
18"The trees had thinned, and"
19"The map had called them"
ratio0.769
64.10% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences156
matches
0"Now, four years later, Aurora"
1"Either way, she’d come."
ratio0.013
42.12% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences78
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"The hum grew louder, until it filled her ears, a white noise that drowned out her own heartbeat."
1"It stood ten feet tall, its planks warped, as if by time or magic."
2"The wildflowers had stopped blooming, their petals wilting, black veins snaking across them."
3"Just the trees, their trunks blackening at the base, bark peeling away to reveal something else—something white, like bone, but smooth, unbreakable."
4"Red, then white, then red again, a flash that blindsided her."
5"The girl smiled, a slow, wide smile that split her face, revealing teeth that were too many, too sharp."
6"She dropped it, watching as it rolled across the ground, its glow dimming."
7"Her dress unraveled, the fabric turning to ash, revealing skin that was gray, veined with black."
8"It was low, guttural, but it carried Aurora’s name—*Laila*—with a familiarity that made her blood run cold."
9"The trees creaked, their branches twisting into arms, fingers reaching."
10"The trees surrounded them, their branches closing in, blocking her escape."
62.50% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags8
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she said, her voice higher than she intended"
7.14% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she’d (would)"
1"Aurora whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences12
tagDensity0.583
leniency1
rawRatio0.286
effectiveRatio0.286
82.6331%