Run: 2026-02-20-01KHY9ESQXEGPQ6CV2X5X32QBV

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Duration:
12.4s
Cost:
$0.001194
Provider:
Mistral

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
--- The neon glow of a flickering streetlamp splashed across the pavement in jagged streaks as Detective Harlow Quinn skidded around the corner, her boots splashing through puddles that reeked of diesel and something older, something metallic. The suspect’s silhouette darted between lampposts, his coat flapping like a crow’s wings. She didn’t need to see his face to know he was running scared—his breath came in ragged bursts, audible even over the distant wail of a siren. Quinn’s fingers tightened around the grip of her service pistol. *Three years.* Three years since Morris had vanished in this same city, his last case tied to a string of disappearances that had never been solved. And now, here she was, chasing a man who’d just stolen a file from her desk—one that matched the pattern of those old cases. Coincidence? She didn’t believe in coincidences. The suspect veered left, cutting through a narrow alley where the stench of rotting fish and damp concrete clawed at her throat. Quinn followed, her pulse hammering in her ears. The alley dead-ended at a rusted fire escape, but the man didn’t climb—he ducked behind a stack of crates instead, his movements jerky, desperate. She pressed her back against the brick wall, listening. A whisper of fabric. A muttered curse. Then—nothing. Quinn exhaled sharply. *Too easy.* She stepped forward, her boot crushing a half-empty bottle of something dark and viscous. The crates shifted. A trap. She lunged, but the man was already gone, slipping through a gap in the bricks that hadn’t been there a second ago. A hidden door. A passage. Her instincts screamed at her to turn back. The Met’s rules, the protocols, the *safety briefings*—none of them applied down here. But the file in her pocket burned like a brand. *Morris’s file.* The one that had gone missing the same night he’d disappeared. Quinn crouched, pressing her palm to the cold stone. The passage yawned before her, dark and reeking of damp earth and something older, something *wrong*. A flicker of movement caught her eye—a bone token, half-buried in the dirt. She plucked it out, turning it over in her fingers. The symbol carved into its surface sent a chill down her spine. She’d seen it before, in the margins of an old case file, scrawled in the handwriting of a detective who’d gone missing years ago. A voice hissed from the darkness. *"You shouldn’t have followed."* Quinn spun, her hand flying to her weapon. The figure emerged from the shadows—a man, his face half-hidden beneath a hood, his eyes gleaming with something that wasn’t quite human. *"The Veil Market doesn’t welcome outsiders,"* he said, his voice like gravel. *"Especially not cops."* She didn’t lower her gun. *"I’m not here for the market. I’m here for answers."* The man’s lips curled. *"Answers cost more than you can afford, detective."* Behind him, the passage stretched deeper into the earth, lit by flickering torches that cast long, dancing shadows. The air hummed with a low, unnatural energy, like the city itself was holding its breath. Quinn’s fingers twitched. She’d spent her career chasing ghosts, but this—this was different. This was a door she wasn’t sure she wanted to walk through. But the file in her pocket was heavier than ever. *"Last chance,"* the man said. *"Turn back. Or stay. But know this—once you step inside, the rules change."* Quinn holstered her weapon. She’d spent too many nights staring at missing persons photos, too many years chasing leads that led nowhere. If this was her shot at finally finding out what had happened to Morris, she wasn’t walking away. She took a step forward. The moment her boot crossed the threshold, the world seemed to shift. The torches flared brighter, the shadows sharpened, and the air thickened with the scent of ozone and something sweet, like rotting fruit. The man’s smile widened. *"Welcome to the Veil, Detective Quinn."* She didn’t answer. She was too busy noticing the way the symbols on the walls pulsed faintly, like a heartbeat. Too busy hearing the distant murmur of voices, speaking in languages she didn’t recognize. Too busy realizing she was already in too deep. A hand clamped onto her shoulder. Quinn whirled, her instincts kicking in, but it was only Tomás Herrera, his dark eyes wide with alarm. *"What the hell are you doing here?"* he hissed. She didn’t have time to answer. The market was alive now, the stalls materializing around them like mirages—sellers hawking jars of black liquid, bundles of herbs that smoked in the air, and trinkets that seemed to writhe in their own hands. A woman with too many fingers beckoned her forward, her voice a singsong whisper. *"Lost, little bird? I can help you find your way."* Quinn ignored her. *"Where is he?"* she demanded, scanning the crowd. Tomás’s grip tightened. *"You don’t understand what this place is. It’s not like the surface. The rules—"* *"I don’t care about the rules."* She shoved past him, her gaze locked on the flicker of movement near the back of the market. The suspect. He was heading toward a curtain of thick, black fabric that shimmered like oil on water. Tomás cursed under his breath. *"That’s the back exit. If you go through there—"* *"I know."* Quinn didn’t look back. She was already moving, her boots splashing through puddles that weren’t water. The fabric parted like a veil, and beyond it lay a narrow corridor, lit by the same eerie torches. The air here was thicker, heavier, pressing against her skin like a second layer of clothing. She could still turn back. She could still walk away. But the file in her pocket was burning a hole through her jacket, and the ghost of Morris’s last case was waiting just ahead. Quinn stepped through the veil. The moment she crossed the threshold, the world *shifted*. The corridor twisted around her, the walls pulsing with veins of dark energy. The torches flared, casting long, writhing shadows that seemed to move on their own. A voice, neither male nor female, echoed from the darkness. *"You are not welcome here, Detective Quinn."* She didn’t answer. She was too busy noticing the symbols carved into the stone—symbols that matched the ones from the file. The ones that had led Morris to his disappearance. Ahead, the corridor opened into a chamber, and there, standing beneath a flickering torch, was the suspect. But he wasn’t alone. A figure stood behind him, cloaked in shadow, its form shifting like smoke. The suspect’s face was pale, his breath coming in short, panicked gasps. *"You shouldn’t have come,"* the shadowed figure said, its voice a chorus of whispers. *"This isn’t your fight."* Quinn’s hand hovered over her weapon. *"Where’s Morris?"* she demanded. The suspect’s eyes darted to the figure behind him. *"He’s gone. Like the others."* The shadowed figure stepped forward, and the torchlight flickered, revealing a face that wasn’t a face at all—just a shifting mass of darkness, like a void given form. *"You don’t understand what you’re dealing with,"* it said. *"This place doesn’t forgive trespassers."* Quinn’s fingers tightened around her gun. She’d spent her life chasing monsters, but this—this was something else entirely. This was the kind of darkness that didn’t just take lives. It *unmade* them. She took a step forward. The shadow lunged.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences22
tagDensity0.409
leniency0.818
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.96% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1237
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count1
highlights
0"sharply"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
43.41% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1237
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"pulse"
count1
1
word"whisper"
count2
2
word"flicker"
count2
3
word"chill"
count1
4
word"down her spine"
count1
5
word"gleaming"
count1
6
word"dancing"
count1
7
word"pulsed"
count1
8
word"scanning"
count1
9
word"shimmered"
count1
10
word"echoed"
count1
11
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"whisper"
2"flicker"
3"chill"
4"down her spine"
5"gleaming"
6"dancing"
7"pulsed"
8"scanning"
9"shimmered"
10"echoed"
11"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"sent a shiver through"
count1
highlights
0"sent a chill down"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences100
matches(empty)
85.71% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences100
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"happened to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences113
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen36
ratio0
matches(empty)
0.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans29
markdownWords148
totalWords1221
ratio0.121
matches
0"Three years."
1"Too easy."
2"safety briefings"
3"Morris’s file."
4"wrong"
5"\"You shouldn’t have followed.\""
6"\"The Veil Market doesn’t welcome outsiders,\""
7"\"Especially not cops.\""
8"\"I’m not here for the market. I’m here for answers.\""
9"\"Answers cost more than you can afford, detective.\""
10"\"Last chance,\""
11"\"Turn back. Or stay. But know this—once you step inside, the rules change.\""
12"\"Welcome to the Veil, Detective Quinn.\""
13"\"What the hell are you doing here?\""
14"\"Lost, little bird? I can help you find your way.\""
15"\"Where is he?\""
16"\"You don’t understand what this place is. It’s not like the surface. The rules—\""
17"\"I don’t care about the rules.\""
18"\"That’s the back exit. If you go through there—\""
19"\"I know.\""
20"shifted"
21"\"You are not welcome here, Detective Quinn.\""
22"\"You shouldn’t have come,\""
23"\"This isn’t your fight.\""
24"\"Where’s Morris?\""
25"\"He’s gone. Like the others.\""
26"\"You don’t understand what you’re dealing with,\""
27"\"This place doesn’t forgive trespassers.\""
28"unmade"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
85.36% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions28
wordCount1083
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.29
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Detective1
Harlow1
Quinn14
Three2
Morris5
Met1
Tomás3
Herrera1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Morris"
3"Met"
4"Tomás"
5"Herrera"
places(empty)
globalScore0.854
windowScore1
34.62% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences65
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"quite human"
1"trinkets that seemed to writhe in their own hands"
2"shadows that seemed to move on their own"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.819
wordCount1221
matches
0"neither male nor"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences113
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs39
mean31.31
std23.02
cv0.735
sampleLengths
01
176
266
370
41
551
644
784
810
945
1015
1112
1259
1310
1418
1540
165
1744
1843
1933
2065
2111
2217
2342
2414
2553
2610
2724
285
2953
3030
3146
3218
3310
3414
3542
3632
375
383
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences100
matches
0"been solved"
0.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount7
totalVerbs196
matches
0"was running"
1"was, chasing"
2"was holding"
3"wasn’t walking"
4"was heading"
5"was burning was waiting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences113
ratio0.106
matches
0"She didn’t need to see his face to know he was running scared—his breath came in ragged bursts, audible even over the distant wail of a siren."
1"And now, here she was, chasing a man who’d just stolen a file from her desk—one that matched the pattern of those old cases."
2"The alley dead-ended at a rusted fire escape, but the man didn’t climb—he ducked behind a stack of crates instead, his movements jerky, desperate."
3"Then—nothing."
4"The Met’s rules, the protocols, the *safety briefings*—none of them applied down here."
5"A flicker of movement caught her eye—a bone token, half-buried in the dirt."
6"The figure emerged from the shadows—a man, his face half-hidden beneath a hood, his eyes gleaming with something that wasn’t quite human."
7"She’d spent her career chasing ghosts, but this—this was different."
8"The market was alive now, the stalls materializing around them like mirages—sellers hawking jars of black liquid, bundles of herbs that smoked in the air, and trinkets that seemed to writhe in their own hands."
9"She was too busy noticing the symbols carved into the stone—symbols that matched the ones from the file."
10"The shadowed figure stepped forward, and the torchlight flickered, revealing a face that wasn’t a face at all—just a shifting mass of darkness, like a void given form."
11"She’d spent her life chasing monsters, but this—this was something else entirely."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1099
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"thicker, heavier, pressing against her"
adverbCount38
adverbRatio0.034576888080072796
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.004549590536851683
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences113
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences113
mean10.8
std7.38
cv0.684
sampleLengths
036
113
227
310
426
524
61
75
822
98
1024
119
124
133
141
153
1616
173
182
1922
203
212
228
2313
2410
2513
269
2716
2813
2910
3012
3124
326
334
348
3522
3612
373
385
3910
404
418
4218
4316
443
4510
4612
4710
485
4913
38.50% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats13
diversityRatio0.26548672566371684
totalSentences113
uniqueOpeners30
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences92
matches
0"*Too easy.* She stepped forward,"
1"Too busy hearing the distant"
2"Too busy realizing she was"
ratio0.033
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences92
matches
0"She didn’t need to see"
1"She didn’t believe in coincidences."
2"She pressed her back against"
3"She lunged, but the man"
4"Her instincts screamed at her"
5"She plucked it out, turning"
6"She’d seen it before, in"
7"he said, his voice like"
8"She didn’t lower her gun."
9"She’d spent her career chasing"
10"She’d spent too many nights"
11"She took a step forward."
12"She didn’t answer."
13"She was too busy noticing"
14"She didn’t have time to"
15"she demanded, scanning the crowd"
16"She shoved past him, her"
17"He was heading toward a"
18"She was already moving, her"
19"She could still turn back."
ratio0.283
25.22% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount80
totalSentences92
matches
0"The neon glow of a"
1"The suspect’s silhouette darted between"
2"She didn’t need to see"
3"Quinn’s fingers tightened around the"
4"She didn’t believe in coincidences."
5"The suspect veered left, cutting"
6"Quinn followed, her pulse hammering"
7"The alley dead-ended at a"
8"She pressed her back against"
9"A whisper of fabric."
10"A muttered curse."
11"Quinn exhaled sharply."
12"The crates shifted."
13"She lunged, but the man"
14"A hidden door."
15"Her instincts screamed at her"
16"The Met’s rules, the protocols,"
17"*Morris’s file.* The one that"
18"Quinn crouched, pressing her palm"
19"The passage yawned before her,"
ratio0.87
54.35% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences92
matches
0"If this was her shot"
ratio0.011
8.93% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences48
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"The neon glow of a flickering streetlamp splashed across the pavement in jagged streaks as Detective Harlow Quinn skidded around the corner, her boots splashing…"
1"She’d seen it before, in the margins of an old case file, scrawled in the handwriting of a detective who’d gone missing years ago."
2"The figure emerged from the shadows—a man, his face half-hidden beneath a hood, his eyes gleaming with something that wasn’t quite human."
3"Behind him, the passage stretched deeper into the earth, lit by flickering torches that cast long, dancing shadows."
4"She’d spent too many nights staring at missing persons photos, too many years chasing leads that led nowhere."
5"The market was alive now, the stalls materializing around them like mirages—sellers hawking jars of black liquid, bundles of herbs that smoked in the air, and t…"
6"He was heading toward a curtain of thick, black fabric that shimmered like oil on water."
7"She was already moving, her boots splashing through puddles that weren’t water."
8"The shadowed figure stepped forward, and the torchlight flickered, revealing a face that wasn’t a face at all—just a shifting mass of darkness, like a void give…"
69.44% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"figure said, its voice a chorus of whispers"
13.64% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"he hissed (hiss)"
1"she demanded (demand)"
2"she demanded (demand)"
dialogueSentences22
tagDensity0.318
leniency0.636
rawRatio0.429
effectiveRatio0.273
71.6378%