Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYA0R0YEZ8K6D46HGB4ZXF5

Run Details

Duration:
26.2s
Cost:
$0.000956
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The air in Richmond Park smells of damp earth and something sharper, sweeter—like overripe peaches left in a hot car. Aurora Carter, her hood pulled tight against the night chill, pauses three hundred yards from the ancient oak standing stones that mark the Grove’s boundary. Her sneakers crunch over a bed of leaves, and the noise echoes, *too* loud, as if the forest itself is listening. She tightens her grip on the duffel bag slung over her shoulder; inside, the Heartstone Pendant presses against her spine, a warm, insistent weight. The codex—Eva’s handwriting, smudged and trembling, scrawled on the back of a Golden Empress takeout menu—said *this is the threshold. It will answer for you*. *For us*. Rory left London at 2 a.m., her flat above Silas’ bar still dark, the hum of the fridge the only sound. She hadn’t packed. Just grabbed the pendant (a gift, she still didn’t know from whom—once, a woman in a silver coat handed it to her on the street, said *“It finds those who need it”*), her phone, and the takeout bag with a borrowed map and a thermos of chamomile tea Eva had slipped her. *“If you’re there, it’s because you can fix it,”* Eva had said, her voice breaking. *“And if you’re not… I need to know if it’s worth the price.”* Rory’s throat tightens. Eva was her sister, by choice—three years older, with a laugh like broken glass and a temper to match. They’d grown up together in Cardiff, fighting in rain-soaked parks, stealing chips from corner shops, swearing they’d never let anything come between them. Then Evan… Evan who’d choked her once, said *“You’ll never leave me, pretty girl,”* said it like a promise. Rory had left with a single suitcase, a signed restraining order, and Eva’s number on speed dial. Now, seven months later, that number had pinged *once*: a video of the Grove, wildflowers blazing in the dark, a voice whispering *“Laila,”* then static. *“Laila”* was Aurora’s childhood nickname, given by their Irish grandmother. Rory hadn’t answered. She couldn’t. The standing stones loom now, their trunks gnarled and black, bark splitting to reveal cracks that glow faintly, like something alive beneath the surface. The air grows colder, even through her jacket, and Rory’s breath fogs. She steps closer, and the pendant in her bag pulses—once, twice, a slow, deliberate rhythm. The codex had warned: *“Time bends. Do not trust what you see or hear. The Grove lies.”* A creak. Not the wind. Not the trees. A *flicker*, of sound, like fabric dragging over stone. Rory freezes. The park is usually empty at night—dog walkers scurry home when the clocks change, joggers vanish into the gloom—but here, in the heart of the trees, everything is *still*. Too still. She pulls out her phone; the screen reads 2:17 a.m. Battery: 12%. No signal. “Hello?” Her voice comes out thinner than she means it to. She clears her throat. “Eva? If you’re here, it’s fine. I… I’m here. Let’s talk.” Silence. Then—*a rustle*—not in the trees, but *behind* her. Rory spins. The trees are black silhouettes, their branches weaving patterns in the moonlight. Nothing. She swallows. “Great. Uh. I brought tea. And a map. If you want—” Another sound: a *hum*, low and thrumming, like a bass string plucked too hard. It vibrates in her bones, making her teeth ache. The pendant pulses again, brighter this time, and when she glances down, she sees a crack in the duffel bag’s fabric, just above the stone. The fabric is stretching, as if something inside is pushing outward. “No,” she says, too sharp. She fumbles with the zipper, yanking it open. The pendant glows now, a deep, crimson light that seeps through the gap, turning the grass below blue. Rory stares at it, its surface rippling like liquid. *“It finds those who need it,”* the silver-haired woman had said. *“It sings to the lost.”* “Laila.” The voice is soft, breathy, *familiar*. Rory freezes. It’s Eva. Or… a version of her. The words hang in the air, warm, cooing, and Rory feels a hand on her shoulder—pale, cold, the fingers long and tapering, nails black as pitch. She whips around. No one. But the grass where her hand had been is crushed, flattened, as if a body had been lying there. “Laila, come play,” the voice says. It’s closer now—behind her, to her left, all around. “The flowers are hungry. They want to meet you.” Rory steps back, tripping over a root. Her elbow hits the stone, and she hisses. The standing stones—they’re moving. Not much, but *slowly*, their trunks rotating, cracks glowing wider. The wildflowers, which she hadn’t noticed before, are clustered at the base: red, white, purple, petals glistening with dew that isn’t dew—thick, sticky, like blood. “Eva?” she says, louder. “If this is a prank, I swear—” A flower moves. Not a petal unfurling. A *curl*, a *twist*, like a finger curling. Rory’s blood runs cold. She scrambles to her feet, but her legs are wobbly, her breath coming in short gasps. The pendant in her hand is hot now, searing through the duffel fabric, and when she yanks it free, it pulses *violently*, a beam of light shooting into the sky. The grass around her ignites—no, not fire. The flowers are climbing, their stems slithering like snakes, wrapping around her ankles, her wrists, her neck. “No!” she screams. She fumbles for the pendant, trying to yank it away, but the chain burns her fingers. It’s not just a stone anymore; it’s a live thing, thrumming with a pulse that matches her heartbeat, growing faster, faster, until she can’t tell if it’s in her chest or theirs. The standing stones have circled her now, forming a cage, and the hum is deafening, making her ears bleed. “Laila, you ran,” the voice says, and it’s not Eva’s. It’s *her own*, warped, twisted, like a record skipping. “You left us. The Grove *feels* it. The flowers *feel* your fear.” A petal touches her cheek. It’s soft, but underneath, Rory feels *teeth*, tiny and sharp, gnawing at her skin. She falls to her knees, the pendant still in her hand, and sees movement in the flowers—shapes, fragments of faces, all screaming, all smiling, all *staring*. One of them is Eva, but her eyes are black, her mouth stretched too wide, teeth like shards of glass. “Come,” the voice says. “Stay. Let the flowers *feed* you. You’ll never be lost again.” The pendant glows white-hot, and Rory drops it. It hits the ground, and the flowers recoil, hissing. But the standing stones are closing in, their trunks pressing against her ribs, the cracks splitting wider, revealing a darkness inside—something with eyes, with too many teeth. Rory crawls backward, but there’s no escape; the grass is closing in, smothering her, the flowers wrapping tighter, tighter. The voice is now in her head, *singing*, a lullaby in a language that isn’t Welsh or English or anything real, a language that burrows into her brain, making her want to *stay*, to let go, to be *found*. “Eva,” she whimpers, tears freezing on her cheeks. “I’m sorry. I’m here. Please—” The stone at her feet splits open. It’s not just a crack. It’s a portal, a black hole of light, and from it spills a warmth that burns, that *heals*, that makes her forget Evan, forget the flat above Silas’, forget the weight of the world. The flowers retreat, screaming, and the standing stones recoil, their bark cracking, revealing a trunk that isn’t oak at all—something sinuous, scaled, with eyes like embers. “Laila,” the voice says, and it’s Eva again, but this time, it’s *pleading*. “Come through. It’s safe. Please—” Rory stands. Her legs don’t shake. The pendant is in her hand again, glowing softly, and the portal is getting bigger, brighter, a beacon. She takes a step forward. “Rory,” the voice corrects. “You’re *Rory* now. Not Laila. But it’s okay. The Grove doesn’t mind. It loves you.” Rory smiles. She takes another step. The flowers try to wrap around her, but the pendant burns them away, leaving only ash. The black, scaled trunk hisses, retreating, but Rory doesn’t care. She steps through the portal, and the world turns white. When she opens her eyes, the sun is rising. She’s on the ground, in the middle of the park, the duffel bag beside her, the pendant gone. The standing stones are silent, their cracks sealed, their bark smooth and brown. Her phone is in her hand, screen cracked, showing a time of 3:02 a.m. Battery: 100%. A text message sits on the screen, unread: *I’m sorry I scared you. It’s not too late to come home. —E* Rory stands. Her left wrist burns. She looks down. The crescent-shaped scar is still there, but it’s glowing, faintly crimson, like the surface of a stone. Somewhere in the distance, a bird sings. She walks toward the park exit, her shoes crunching over leaves. The pendant is gone, but she can feel it—warm, insistent, *singing* in her blood. And somewhere, deep in the trees, a flower blooms. --- The scene leans into slow-burn horror through sensory escalation (sound, temperature, texture) and psychological tension, grounding Aurora in her codex details (cool-headedness, childhood scar, attachment to Eva) while weaving in The Fae Grove's time-bending and supernatural flora. The Heartstone's behavior ties the artifact to both character motivation and the realm, leaving its threat ambiguous—leaving Aurora (and the reader) uncertain of her fate or the cost of "fixing" what's broken.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags20
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Evan who’d choked her once [once]"
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.667
leniency1
rawRatio0.05
effectiveRatio0.05
93.78% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1609
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
56.49% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1609
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"chill"
count1
1
word"echoes"
count1
2
word"weight"
count2
3
word"flicker"
count1
4
word"gloom"
count1
5
word"silence"
count1
6
word"familiar"
count1
7
word"glistening"
count1
8
word"searing"
count1
9
word"pulse"
count1
10
word"warmth"
count1
11
word"beacon"
count1
12
word"tension"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"echoes"
2"weight"
3"flicker"
4"gloom"
5"silence"
6"familiar"
7"glistening"
8"searing"
9"pulse"
10"warmth"
11"beacon"
12"tension"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences127
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences127
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"try to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences139
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen53
ratio0
matches(empty)
60.03% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans37
markdownWords111
totalWords1586
ratio0.07
matches
0"too"
1"this is the threshold. It will answer for you"
2"For us"
3"“It finds those who need it”"
4"“If you’re there, it’s because you can fix it,”"
5"“And if you’re not… I need to know if it’s worth the price.”"
6"“You’ll never leave me, pretty girl,”"
7"once"
8"“Laila,”"
9"“Laila”"
10"“Time bends. Do not trust what you see or hear. The Grove lies.”"
11"flicker"
12"still"
13"a rustle"
14"behind"
15"hum"
16"“It finds those who need it,”"
17"“It sings to the lost.”"
18"familiar"
19"slowly"
20"curl"
21"twist"
22"violently"
23"her own"
24"feels"
25"feel"
26"teeth"
27"staring"
28"feed"
29"singing"
30"stay"
31"found"
32"heals"
33"pleading"
34"Rory"
35"I’m sorry I scared you. It’s not too late to come home. —E"
36"singing"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions20
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
82.34% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions53
wordCount1404
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity1.35
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Carter1
Grove3
Heartstone2
Pendant1
Eva10
Golden1
Empress1
London1
Rory19
Cardiff1
Evan3
Aurora4
Irish1
Welsh1
English1
Fae1
persons
0"Carter"
1"Pendant"
2"Eva"
3"Rory"
4"Evan"
5"Aurora"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Grove"
3"Heartstone"
4"London"
5"Cardiff"
6"Fae"
globalScore0.823
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences78
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
73.90% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.261
wordCount1586
matches
0"not in the trees, but *behind* her"
1"Not much, but *slowly*, their trunks rotating, cracks glowing wider"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences139
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs36
mean44.06
std33.28
cv0.755
sampleLengths
0117
1104
2121
368
42
562
626
79
828
959
1056
111
1265
1324
1454
1511
163
1786
1870
1931
2065
2115
22102
2313
247
2565
2618
2729
2819
2942
3056
3121
3233
3325
349
3570
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences127
matches
0"are clustered"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs257
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount21
semicolonCount4
flaggedSentences22
totalSentences139
ratio0.158
matches
0"The air in Richmond Park smells of damp earth and something sharper, sweeter—like overripe peaches left in a hot car."
1"She tightens her grip on the duffel bag slung over her shoulder; inside, the Heartstone Pendant presses against her spine, a warm, insistent weight."
2"The codex—Eva’s handwriting, smudged and trembling, scrawled on the back of a Golden Empress takeout menu—said *this is the threshold."
3"Just grabbed the pendant (a gift, she still didn’t know from whom—once, a woman in a silver coat handed it to her on the street, said *“It finds those who need it”*), her phone, and the takeout bag with a borrowed map and a thermos of chamomile tea Eva had slipped her."
4"Eva was her sister, by choice—three years older, with a laugh like broken glass and a temper to match."
5"She steps closer, and the pendant in her bag pulses—once, twice, a slow, deliberate rhythm."
6"The park is usually empty at night—dog walkers scurry home when the clocks change, joggers vanish into the gloom—but here, in the heart of the trees, everything is *still*."
7"She pulls out her phone; the screen reads 2:17 a.m."
8"Then—*a rustle*—not in the trees, but *behind* her."
9"The words hang in the air, warm, cooing, and Rory feels a hand on her shoulder—pale, cold, the fingers long and tapering, nails black as pitch."
10"It’s closer now—behind her, to her left, all around."
11"The standing stones—they’re moving."
12"The wildflowers, which she hadn’t noticed before, are clustered at the base: red, white, purple, petals glistening with dew that isn’t dew—thick, sticky, like blood."
13"The grass around her ignites—no, not fire."
14"It’s not just a stone anymore; it’s a live thing, thrumming with a pulse that matches her heartbeat, growing faster, faster, until she can’t tell if it’s in her chest or theirs."
15"She falls to her knees, the pendant still in her hand, and sees movement in the flowers—shapes, fragments of faces, all screaming, all smiling, all *staring*."
16"But the standing stones are closing in, their trunks pressing against her ribs, the cracks splitting wider, revealing a darkness inside—something with eyes, with too many teeth."
17"Rory crawls backward, but there’s no escape; the grass is closing in, smothering her, the flowers wrapping tighter, tighter."
18"The flowers retreat, screaming, and the standing stones recoil, their bark cracking, revealing a trunk that isn’t oak at all—something sinuous, scaled, with eyes like embers."
19"—E*"
20"The pendant is gone, but she can feel it—warm, insistent, *singing* in her blood."
21"The Heartstone's behavior ties the artifact to both character motivation and the realm, leaving its threat ambiguous—leaving Aurora (and the reader) uncertain of her fate or the cost of \"fixing\" what's broken."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount242
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount2
adverbRatio0.008264462809917356
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences139
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences139
mean11.4
std9.34
cv0.819
sampleLengths
020
125
221
324
420
55
62
721
83
952
1015
1113
123
1319
1423
152
1617
1717
1825
1910
203
212
2224
2312
2415
2517
262
273
283
299
302
3129
322
3310
342
352
3611
374
3811
391
408
412
4212
431
442
4511
4614
479
4825
4911
43.53% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.2589928057553957
totalSentences139
uniqueOpeners36
63.49% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences105
matches
0"Just grabbed the pendant (a"
1"Somewhere in the distance, a"
ratio0.019
82.86% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount36
totalSentences105
matches
0"Her sneakers crunch over a"
1"She tightens her grip on"
2"It will answer for you*."
3"She hadn’t packed."
4"They’d grown up together in"
5"She steps closer, and the"
6"She pulls out her phone;"
7"Her voice comes out thinner"
8"She clears her throat."
9"It vibrates in her bones,"
10"she says, too sharp"
11"She fumbles with the zipper,"
12"She whips around."
13"It’s closer now—behind her, to"
14"Her elbow hits the stone,"
15"she says, louder"
16"She scrambles to her feet,"
17"She fumbles for the pendant,"
18"It’s not just a stone"
19"It’s *her own*, warped, twisted,"
ratio0.343
21.90% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount92
totalSentences105
matches
0"The air in Richmond Park"
1"Aurora Carter, her hood pulled"
2"Her sneakers crunch over a"
3"She tightens her grip on"
4"The codex—Eva’s handwriting, smudged and"
5"It will answer for you*."
6"Rory left London at 2" 2/1/2001, 12:00:00 AM
7"She hadn’t packed."
8"Eva had said, her voice"
9"Rory’s throat tightens."
10"Eva was her sister, by"
11"They’d grown up together in"
12"Evan who’d choked her once,"
13"Rory had left with a"
14"Rory hadn’t answered."
15"The standing stones loom now,"
16"The air grows colder, even"
17"She steps closer, and the"
18"The codex had warned:"
19"A *flicker*, of sound, like"
ratio0.876
47.62% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences105
matches
0"Now, seven months later, that"
ratio0.01
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences48
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"Aurora Carter, her hood pulled tight against the night chill, pauses three hundred yards from the ancient oak standing stones that mark the Grove’s boundary."
1"Her sneakers crunch over a bed of leaves, and the noise echoes, *too* loud, as if the forest itself is listening."
2"The standing stones loom now, their trunks gnarled and black, bark splitting to reveal cracks that glow faintly, like something alive beneath the surface."
3"The fabric is stretching, as if something inside is pushing outward."
4"The pendant glows now, a deep, crimson light that seeps through the gap, turning the grass below blue."
5"Not much, but *slowly*, their trunks rotating, cracks glowing wider."
6"The wildflowers, which she hadn’t noticed before, are clustered at the base: red, white, purple, petals glistening with dew that isn’t dew—thick, sticky, like b…"
7"The flowers are climbing, their stems slithering like snakes, wrapping around her ankles, her wrists, her neck."
8"It’s not just a stone anymore; it’s a live thing, thrumming with a pulse that matches her heartbeat, growing faster, faster, until she can’t tell if it’s in her…"
9"But the standing stones are closing in, their trunks pressing against her ribs, the cracks splitting wider, revealing a darkness inside—something with eyes, wit…"
10"The voice is now in her head, *singing*, a lullaby in a language that isn’t Welsh or English or anything real, a language that burrows into her brain, making he…"
11"The flowers retreat, screaming, and the standing stones recoil, their bark cracking, revealing a trunk that isn’t oak at all—something sinuous, scaled, with eye…"
50.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags20
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Eva had, her voice breaking"
1"that number had, wildflowers blazing in the dark, a voice whispering *"
2"she says, louder"
16.67% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"Eva had (have)"
1"Evan who’d choked her once (had choke)"
2"she screams (scream)"
3"the voice corrects (correct)"
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.267
76.4201%