Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYA15EW7E72MDWJNJQ13SAG

Run Details

Model:
Grok 4
Duration:
1m 33s
Cost:
$0.040158
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Aurora stepped through the ring of ancient oak standing stones, the night air thick with the scent of blooming wildflowers that had no business unfurling in the chill of a London autumn. The stones loomed like silent sentinels, their bark twisted into shapes that might have been faces if she stared too long—eyes hollowed by centuries, mouths gaping in perpetual warning. She paused just inside the boundary, her breath misting in the faint moonlight that filtered through the canopy overhead. Richmond Park lay behind her, its vast expanse of deer-haunted grassland now distant, muffled, as if the world had drawn a veil across itself. She'd come here for answers. The Heartstone Pendant hung heavy against her chest, its deep crimson gem pulsing with a warmth that had grown insistent over the past week, like a heartbeat not her own. It had arrived in an unmarked envelope at the flat above Silas' bar, no note, no explanation—just the silver chain and the thumbnail-sized stone with its faint inner glow. Yu-Fei at the Golden Empress had joked it was a secret admirer's gift, but Rory knew better. This wasn't romance; it was a pull, a summons. And tonight, after another shift dodging traffic on her delivery scooter, the pendant had led her here, its warmth flaring as she neared the park's hidden grove. A place she'd only heard whispers of in Eva's old stories—Isolde's grove, a pocket between worlds where time bent like a reed in the wind. The ground under her boots felt soft, unnaturally springy, carpeted with petals that glowed faintly underfoot. Wildflowers dotted the clearing: foxgloves nodding in a breeze she couldn't feel, bluebells clustering like forgotten secrets. It was beautiful, in a way that made her skin prickle. Too beautiful for midnight, when the rest of the city shivered under frost. Rory adjusted the strap of her backpack, the weight of a flashlight and a half-eaten takeaway container from the restaurant a small anchor to the ordinary. She was alone, or so she'd thought. The park gates had locked hours ago; she'd scaled the fence, heart pounding from the thrill of trespass more than fear. Now, standing in the grove's heart, that thrill curdled into something else. A faint rustle stirred the leaves to her left. She froze, bright blue eyes scanning the shadows. Just wind, she told herself. But the air hung still, heavy as a held breath. No owls hooted, no distant traffic hummed from the A roads beyond the park. The silence pressed in, absolute, like the grove had swallowed sound itself. Rory reached for the pendant, fingers brushing the warm gem. It throbbed once, gently, as if reassuring her. Or warning her. She moved deeper into the clearing, her straight black hair swaying against her shoulders with each careful step. The scar on her left wrist itched—a small crescent from a childhood fall off her bike in Cardiff, a reminder that accidents happened when you weren't paying attention. She was paying attention now, every sense sharpened by the cool-headed focus that had gotten her through law lectures she hated and out of Evan's grip in one piece. Out-of-the-box thinking, her father called it. Survival, she knew. The standing stones encircled a central glade, perhaps thirty paces across, with a single ancient oak at its core, its branches sprawling like arthritic fingers. Rory approached it, drawn by an instinct she couldn't name. The pendant warmed again, its glow seeping through her shirt, casting a faint crimson tint on the bark. She traced a hand over the tree's rough surface, feeling for carvings or clues—anything to explain why this trinket had chosen her. Her mind raced: the unknown benefactor, the way it pulsed near certain alleyways in London, as if sniffing out hidden doors. Fae-touched, Eva would say with a laugh, but Rory didn't believe in fairy tales. Not until tonight. Another rustle, this time behind her. She whirled, heart kicking against her ribs. Nothing. Just the wildflowers, their petals stirring as if brushed by invisible hands. She exhaled slowly, forcing calm. "Get a grip, Rory," she muttered, her Welsh lilt soft in the quiet. Dialogue with herself—Evan had hated that habit, called it crazy. But it grounded her, made the world feel less empty. She knelt by the oak's roots, digging out her flashlight from the backpack. The beam cut through the dark, illuminating clusters of blooms that seemed to lean toward the light, petals unfurling like they were waking. Odd, but not impossible. Flowers reacted to stimuli; she'd read that in some botany elective back at uni. Still, the wrongness nagged at her, a whisper at the edge of thought. Time moved differently here, the old tales said—an hour inside could stretch or shrink outside. She checked her watch: 11:47 PM. Fine. She'd give it fifteen minutes, poke around, then head back to the flat before Silas locked up downstairs. As she stood, a sound slithered through the silence: a low, murmuring hum, like voices overlapping in a language she almost understood. It came from the stones, or beyond them—impossible to pinpoint. Rory clicked off the flashlight, plunging the grove into moonlit gloom. Listening. The hum faded, then returned, softer, weaving through the air like smoke. Words? No, not quite. More like echoes of words, remnants of conversations long ended. She strained to catch them, but they dissolved just as she focused, leaving her with the certainty that someone—something—had been speaking. Her pulse quickened. She wasn't alone. The thought hit her not as panic, but as cold fact, intelligence piecing together the clues: the rustles, the humming, the way the shadows at the grove's edge seemed denser now, clotting like ink. She backed toward the central oak, eyes darting. There—a flicker at the periphery, a shape darting between two standing stones. Too quick to identify, but tall, elongated, gone before she could blink. Deer? The park was full of them, but this felt wrong. Deer didn't whisper. The pendant burned hot against her skin now, its pulse erratic, like a frantic signal. Rory gripped it through her shirt, willing it to quiet. Instead, the glow intensified, bathing her hand in crimson light. And in that light, she saw them: footprints in the petal-strewn earth, not hers. They circled the glade, faint impressions that hadn't been there when she arrived. Small, like a child's, but elongated, toes splayed unnaturally. Her mind flashed to Eva's stories—fae folk, tricksters who lured the unwary into their realms. Ridiculous. She was twenty-five, not some wide-eyed girl from Cardiff fairy tales. Yet the footprints led toward the stones, vanishing into shadow. The humming grew louder, resolving into fragments: a laugh, high and tinkling, cut off abruptly. Then a sigh, drawn out and sorrowful. Rory's breath caught. Not alone. The certainty bloomed in her chest, spreading like frost. She turned slowly, scanning the grove. Movement again—at the edge of vision, a pale hand withdrawing behind a stone. Or was it a branch? She blinked, and it was gone, but the afterimage lingered, fingers too long, skin like moonlight on water. She should leave. The thought pounded in her skull, urgent. But the pendant tugged her forward, its warmth a compulsion. Just a bit more, it seemed to say. Answers waited here, in this fae-touched pocket where Earth bled into something else. Rory took a step, then another, toward the stones. The wildflowers brushed her ankles, petals clinging like insistent fingers. The air thickened, carrying scents that didn't belong: honeyed sweetness undercut by decay, like fruit rotting in summer heat. It was autumn, she reminded herself. Night. Cold. A whisper brushed her ear, close enough to feel breath—though there was no one. "Stay," it murmured, the word slithering into her mind. Rory spun, arms raised defensively, her quick thinking kicking in. No one there. Just the empty glade, the humming voices swelling now into a chorus, overlapping, insistent. Laughter mingled with sobs, pleas with giggles. They pulled at her, these sounds, drawing her attention to the shadows where shapes flitted—just out of sight, always just out of sight. Her watch beeped softly: midnight. But when she glanced down, the hands spun wildly, forward then back, as if time itself unraveled. Panic edged in, but she shoved it down. Cool-headed, remember? She backed away from the stones, toward the grove's exit—the ring she'd entered through. But the stones seemed farther now, the glade stretched, wildflowers blooming thicker, choking the path. Another flicker: a face peering from behind the central oak, eyes gleaming like polished stones, mouth curved in a smile that stretched too wide. Not alone. The realization sank roots, deep and unshakable. Whatever lurked here had been waiting— for her, perhaps, drawn by the pendant's glow. The humming voices crested, words forming now: "Aurora... stay... ours..." Her name, twisted into melody. She bolted then, legs pumping, but the ground tilted, petals rising like a tide to snag her boots. A hand—cold, insubstantial—brushed her wrist, right over the scar, sending ice through her veins. She burst through the standing stones, tumbling onto the frost-kissed grass of Richmond Park. The night air slapped her face, ordinary, chilled. Behind her, the grove's boundary shimmered once, then steadied. Rory scrambled to her feet, chest heaving. Her watch read 11:52 PM—five minutes since she'd entered, though it felt like hours. The pendant cooled against her skin, its pulse steadying to nothing. But as she hurried toward the park's edge, the whispering followed, faint on the wind: "Come back... Aurora..." She didn't look back. Not yet. But she knew, with bone-deep certainty, that whatever dwelled in the grove wasn't finished with her. The night stretched long ahead, and the shadows seemed to watch her go.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags5
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences4
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
87.87% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1649
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"gently"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count2
2
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"gently"
1"slowly"
2"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1649
totalAiIsms34
found
0
word"chill"
count1
1
word"loomed"
count1
2
word"sentinels"
count1
3
word"warmth"
count3
4
word"weight"
count1
5
word"pounding"
count1
6
word"scanning"
count2
7
word"silence"
count2
8
word"throbbed"
count1
9
word"reminder"
count1
10
word"traced"
count1
11
word"raced"
count1
12
word"pulsed"
count1
13
word"lilt"
count1
14
word"whisper"
count3
15
word"gloom"
count1
16
word"echoes"
count1
17
word"pulse"
count3
18
word"quickened"
count1
19
word"flicker"
count2
20
word"resolving"
count1
21
word"gleaming"
count1
22
word"pumping"
count1
23
word"chilled"
count1
24
word"shimmered"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"loomed"
2"sentinels"
3"warmth"
4"weight"
5"pounding"
6"scanning"
7"silence"
8"throbbed"
9"reminder"
10"traced"
11"raced"
12"pulsed"
13"lilt"
14"whisper"
15"gloom"
16"echoes"
17"pulse"
18"quickened"
19"flicker"
20"resolving"
21"gleaming"
22"pumping"
23"chilled"
24"shimmered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences135
matches(empty)
68.78% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences135
filterMatches
0"feel"
1"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences135
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1617
ratio0
matches(empty)
93.75% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions8
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Just wind, she told herself."
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions34
wordCount1588
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity0.69
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
London2
Park2
Heartstone1
Pendant1
Yu-Fei1
Golden1
Empress1
Rory11
Eva3
Isolde1
Cardiff2
Evan2
Welsh1
Dialogue1
Silas1
Earth1
Richmond2
persons
0"Pendant"
1"Empress"
2"Rory"
3"Eva"
4"Isolde"
5"Evan"
6"Silas"
7"Earth"
places
0"London"
1"Park"
2"Golden"
3"Cardiff"
4"Richmond"
globalScore1
windowScore1
9.81% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences107
glossingSentenceCount6
matches
0"as if reassuring her"
1"as if sniffing out hidden doors"
2"blooms that seemed to lean toward the light, petals unfurling like they were waking"
3"seemed denser now, clotting like ink"
4"seemed farther now, the glade stretched, wildflowers blooming thicker, choking the path"
5"felt like hours"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.618
wordCount1617
matches
0"not as panic, but as cold fact, intelligence piecing together the clues: the r"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences135
matches
0"hated that habit"
27.29% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs18
mean89.83
std22.06
cv0.246
sampleLengths
0104
1142
2123
379
484
5113
664
7107
891
986
10108
1178
1287
1380
1485
1570
1663
1753
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences135
matches
0"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs287
matches
0"were waking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount19
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences20
totalSentences135
ratio0.148
matches
0"The stones loomed like silent sentinels, their bark twisted into shapes that might have been faces if she stared too long—eyes hollowed by centuries, mouths gaping in perpetual warning."
1"This wasn't romance; it was a pull, a summons."
2"A place she'd only heard whispers of in Eva's old stories—Isolde's grove, a pocket between worlds where time bent like a reed in the wind."
3"The park gates had locked hours ago; she'd scaled the fence, heart pounding from the thrill of trespass more than fear."
4"The scar on her left wrist itched—a small crescent from a childhood fall off her bike in Cardiff, a reminder that accidents happened when you weren't paying attention."
5"She traced a hand over the tree's rough surface, feeling for carvings or clues—anything to explain why this trinket had chosen her."
6"Dialogue with herself—Evan had hated that habit, called it crazy."
7"Flowers reacted to stimuli; she'd read that in some botany elective back at uni."
8"Time moved differently here, the old tales said—an hour inside could stretch or shrink outside."
9"It came from the stones, or beyond them—impossible to pinpoint."
10"She strained to catch them, but they dissolved just as she focused, leaving her with the certainty that someone—something—had been speaking."
11"There—a flicker at the periphery, a shape darting between two standing stones."
12"Her mind flashed to Eva's stories—fae folk, tricksters who lured the unwary into their realms."
13"Movement again—at the edge of vision, a pale hand withdrawing behind a stone."
14"A whisper brushed her ear, close enough to feel breath—though there was no one."
15"They pulled at her, these sounds, drawing her attention to the shadows where shapes flitted—just out of sight, always just out of sight."
16"She backed away from the stones, toward the grove's exit—the ring she'd entered through."
17"Whatever lurked here had been waiting— for her, perhaps, drawn by the pendant's glow."
18"A hand—cold, insubstantial—brushed her wrist, right over the scar, sending ice through her veins."
19"Her watch read 11:52 PM—five minutes since she'd entered, though it felt like hours."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount156
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount4
adverbRatio0.02564102564102564
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences135
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences135
mean11.98
std7.56
cv0.631
sampleLengths
032
129
219
324
45
530
629
717
89
927
1025
1116
1217
1311
1413
1526
167
1721
1812
199
208
215
2210
2314
2412
2510
268
273
2818
2928
3029
316
323
3325
3410
3518
3622
3721
3814
393
406
417
421
4312
445
4513
4610
4710
4813
4923
63.95% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.3925925925925926
totalSentences135
uniqueOpeners53
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount9
totalSentences123
matches
0"Too beautiful for midnight, when"
1"Just wind, she told herself."
2"Just the wildflowers, their petals"
3"More like echoes of words,"
4"Too quick to identify, but"
5"Instead, the glow intensified, bathing"
6"Then a sigh, drawn out"
7"Just a bit more, it"
8"Just the empty glade, the"
ratio0.073
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount36
totalSentences123
matches
0"She paused just inside the"
1"She'd come here for answers."
2"It had arrived in an"
3"It was beautiful, in a"
4"She was alone, or so"
5"She froze, bright blue eyes"
6"It throbbed once, gently, as"
7"She moved deeper into the"
8"She was paying attention now,"
9"She traced a hand over"
10"Her mind raced: the unknown"
11"She whirled, heart kicking against"
12"She exhaled slowly, forcing calm."
13"she muttered, her Welsh lilt"
14"She knelt by the oak's"
15"She checked her watch: 11:47"
16"She'd give it fifteen minutes,"
17"It came from the stones,"
18"She strained to catch them,"
19"Her pulse quickened."
ratio0.293
90.08% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount91
totalSentences123
matches
0"Aurora stepped through the ring"
1"The stones loomed like silent"
2"She paused just inside the"
3"Richmond Park lay behind her,"
4"She'd come here for answers."
5"The Heartstone Pendant hung heavy"
6"It had arrived in an"
7"Yu-Fei at the Golden Empress"
8"This wasn't romance; it was"
9"A place she'd only heard"
10"The ground under her boots"
11"Wildflowers dotted the clearing: foxgloves"
12"It was beautiful, in a"
13"Rory adjusted the strap of"
14"She was alone, or so"
15"The park gates had locked"
16"A faint rustle stirred the"
17"She froze, bright blue eyes"
18"The silence pressed in, absolute,"
19"Rory reached for the pendant,"
ratio0.74
40.65% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences123
matches
0"Now, standing in the grove's"
ratio0.008
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences79
technicalSentenceCount17
matches
0"Aurora stepped through the ring of ancient oak standing stones, the night air thick with the scent of blooming wildflowers that had no business unfurling in the…"
1"The stones loomed like silent sentinels, their bark twisted into shapes that might have been faces if she stared too long—eyes hollowed by centuries, mouths gap…"
2"She paused just inside the boundary, her breath misting in the faint moonlight that filtered through the canopy overhead."
3"Richmond Park lay behind her, its vast expanse of deer-haunted grassland now distant, muffled, as if the world had drawn a veil across itself."
4"The Heartstone Pendant hung heavy against her chest, its deep crimson gem pulsing with a warmth that had grown insistent over the past week, like a heartbeat no…"
5"And tonight, after another shift dodging traffic on her delivery scooter, the pendant had led her here, its warmth flaring as she neared the park's hidden grove…"
6"The ground under her boots felt soft, unnaturally springy, carpeted with petals that glowed faintly underfoot."
7"It was beautiful, in a way that made her skin prickle."
8"The scar on her left wrist itched—a small crescent from a childhood fall off her bike in Cardiff, a reminder that accidents happened when you weren't paying att…"
9"She was paying attention now, every sense sharpened by the cool-headed focus that had gotten her through law lectures she hated and out of Evan's grip in one pi…"
10"The pendant warmed again, its glow seeping through her shirt, casting a faint crimson tint on the bark."
11"Her mind raced: the unknown benefactor, the way it pulsed near certain alleyways in London, as if sniffing out hidden doors."
12"Just the wildflowers, their petals stirring as if brushed by invisible hands."
13"The beam cut through the dark, illuminating clusters of blooms that seemed to lean toward the light, petals unfurling like they were waking."
14"Her mind flashed to Eva's stories—fae folk, tricksters who lured the unwary into their realms."
15"The air thickened, carrying scents that didn't belong: honeyed sweetness undercut by decay, like fruit rotting in summer heat."
16"Another flicker: a face peering from behind the central oak, eyes gleaming like polished stones, mouth curved in a smile that stretched too wide."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags5
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"she muttered, her Welsh lilt soft in the quiet"
1"it murmured, the word slithering into her mind"
2"The humming voices crested, words forming now:"
3"she hurried, the whispering followed, faint on the wind:"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"it murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences4
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio1
72.7397%