Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYA2YRAM74TTTC54P62NGD1

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Duration:
29.3s
Cost:
$0.001249
Provider:
Seed

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The air in Richmond Park bit at Aurora’s cheeks as she adjusted her jacket, the hem of her delivery uniform flapping in the wind. It was 2:17 a.m., according to the crumpled receipt in her pocket—a timestamp from the last note her benefactor had slipped under her door, scrawled in shaky ink: *"Roots. Three oaks. Stop before four. The stone breathes."* She’d recognized "Roots" as the old oak clearing in the northern section of the park, a place she’d only ever visited briefly, once, with Eva when they were teens, hunting for fairies in the dusk. Now, Eva was in Dublin, and the note was the first she’d heard from the unknown person who’d given her the Heartstone pendant six months prior, a crimson gem set in silver that pulsed faintly against her collarbone even now, a low, steady thrum like a distant heartbeat. Her boots crunched over frost-kissed leaves, the park empty but for the rustle of squirrels and the creak of branches. The moon was a sliver, but through the trees, she could make out the shape of the standing stones: three gnarled oaks, their trunks scarred with carvings that blurred at the edges, like the forest itself had tried to erase them. The receipt’s instructions had been precise. *"Breathe with the stones until they answer."* So she slowed, pressed her lips together, and exhaled. In. In. Out. The pendant pulsed faster, a warm tingle that spread down her spine. When she opened her eyes, the sky had dimmed, as if the stars had been snuffed. That was odd—she’d left the city with a full moon, but the clearing loomed in semi-darkness, the air thick with a scent like wet earth and something sweeter, cloying, like overripe berries. The trees seemed closer than she remembered, their branches stretching outward, almost as if to block her path. She reached for her purse, her hand closing around the utility knife Eva had once forced her to carry, "for the subway," she’d said, rolling her eyes. Aurora hadn’t needed it since Evan, but tonight, the blade felt heavy in her palm. *Cool-headed*, she reminded herself. *Rationalize.* The stone breathes. Maybe it’s just the wind. Even so, she took a step closer to the nearest oak, and as her fingers brushed the rough bark, the pendant *lit up*. Not a flash—faint, a soft glow that seeped into the gem, making the crimson color bleed like blood. A sound echoed through the trees: a low, guttural hum, like a cello string plucked too hard. She turned. The forest behind her was now a wall of blackness, no path visible. The stones had shifted, their carvings clearer now, looping patterns that looked like veins or tentacles. *This isn’t right*, she thought. The time behavior—the Grove. The note had mentioned time moving differently, but she’d dismissed it as old wives’ tales. Now, her watch, a cheap thing she’d stolen from a customer, read 2:23. She’d only taken three minutes to walk from the park gates. The grass beneath her feet was unexpectedly warm, as if the earth itself was alive. A twig snapped. She froze. The hum had stopped. The air felt... *charged*, like a storm was coming. She scanned the trees, her eyes narrowing. There—something. A flicker of movement in the corner of her vision, a shadow that wasn’t cast by the moon. She turned, and it was gone. *Paranoia*, she told herself. *You’re tired. You left at 11 p.m. to make a 1 a.m. delivery.* But the pendant’s pulse had quickened, a faint *thump-thump-thump* that matched the rhythm of her heart. She fumbled with the clasp, unbuttoned her jacket, and pulled the chain free. The gem was hot to the touch, nearly burning through her shirt. The clearing opened up suddenly, as if the trees had partedspeeding her way. The Grove. The grass here was green, too green, and wildflowers bloomed everywhere—purple, yellow, white, petals glistening with dew even though the night was freezing. The sky had lightened, though not by much; it was a strange, sickly gray, like a storm cloud smothering the stars. The pendant burned now, the glow so bright she had to squint. There, in the center of the clearing, was a stone: not an oak, but a monolith, smooth and black, etched with runes that glowed when she focused on them. *Hel*, the runes said, blurred but legible. *Hel. Hel. Hel.* That was it—the reason she’d come. The benefactor, who’d hidden their voice when she’d called, had told her the Heartstone led to Hel, a realm on the other side of the Veil, where a soul trapped there could be freed. But Hel was a place of tricks, of illusions. *Don’t trust the shadows*, the benefactor had whispered. *They wear faces.* A sound—something wet, dragging through the grass. Aurora spun. No one was there. But the flowers around her were moving, not in the wind—*against* it, their petals flipping upward as if watching her, revealing undersides that were gray, like rotting flesh. The pendant’s glow intensified, so bright she could see the gem’s facets, sharp as shards of glass. *It’s working*, she thought. *I’m close.* A voice. Soft, breathy, right behind her. "Rory." She whirled. Nothing. The monolith loomed, its runes burning. The hum was back, louder now, a vibration that made her teeth ache. She reached for the knife, her hand slipping—*why is the ground wet?*—and looked down. The grass was oozing, a thick, black substance that smelled of iron and something sweet, cloying. It was spreading, crawling up her boots, as if alive. "Rory," the voice said again, this time closer, in her ear. Aurora flinched, but when she turned, the trees were empty. Her watch read 2:31. She’d been in the Grove for eight minutes. *Eight minutes*. The pendant’s thump-thump-thump was now a roar, a sound that filled her skull. The flowers were closing in, their stems coiling like ropes, thorns emerging from their centers. She backed away, tripping over a root. The monolith was now a wall, its runes so bright she could feel their heat. The wetness had reached her ankles, sticky and cold, like liquid mud. "Malphora," the voice said, and she *knew* it was a name. Her own. A version of her, twisted. "You shouldn’t have come. The Veil is thin here. Too thin." Aurora scrambled up, the knife in her hand. The flowers hissed, retreating. The hum was deafening now, and the sky had turned a sickly purple, as if the world was bleeding. The monolith’s runes flared, and suddenly, she was seeing things: memories not her own. A woman with her blue eyes, her black hair, standing in a room with the Heartstone, a man with a beard and a crown behind her, whispering, "It keeps the door open. Keep it safe. Keep *her* safe." Then, pain—sharp, searing—behind her eyes, and a face: Evan, her ex, his mouth stretched in a grin, his eyes black, "You can’t run from it, Rory. It *knows* you." The pendant slipped from her neck. She lunged for it, but the wetness had reached her knees, and when she touched the grass, it *screamed*. A high, wordless sound that made her ears bleed. The gem was on the ground, glowing so brightly she could see through it, into a realm beyond—pale, flickering figures, shapes that could have been human or not, reaching toward her, their voices a chorus of "Rory," "Laila," "Aurora." "She’s *here*," the voice said. "The key. The stone. The door." Aurora stood, the pendant in her hand, its heat now a burn, searing through her palm. The trees were moving, their trunks bending toward her, branches snapping and reforming into limbs, fingers, faces—Evan’s, her mother’s, a stranger’s, all with the same black eyes. The flowers had become a tide, rolling toward her, thorns sharpening, petals falling away to reveal hollow, empty centers. "Run," the voice said, now in front of her, blocking her path. It was her, but older, her eyes sunken, her hair white, her lips pulled back in a snarl. "Run and never come back. They’ll eat you alive." Aurora didn’t run. She held the pendant higher, and the gem flared, a burst of light that lit the Grove like day. The figures staggered, their faces melting. The hum died. The wetness receded, hissing. The flowers wilted, turning to ash. The monolith cracked. Aurora stepped back, the knife shaking in her hand. The ash swirled upward, forming a shape: a woman, tall, with silver hair and skin like marble, her eyes glowing like embers. She wore a dress that rippled like water, and in her hand, she held a sword, its blade a combination of fire and ice. "The Veil," the woman said, her voice like wind chimes and thunder, "is thin because you’ve been here before, in memory, in shadow. The Heartstone binds you to it, Rory Carter. To *me*." Aurora felt the pendant’s heat ease, a slow, steady pulse now. She remembered the memories the gem had shown her: the woman in the room, the man with the crown, the pain of being torn between two worlds, the decision to flee, to bury herself in delivery work, in a flat above a bar, in silence. *You’re more than you think*, the benefactor had told her. *Don’t hide.* "The Hel portal," she said, her voice steady. "It’s behind you, isn’t it? The monolith was a door, but it’s closing." The woman nodded. "It closes when the river runs dry. When the stone stops breathing." She gestured to the pendant. "You’ve kept it safe. For six months, you’ve carried it like a secret, and in that secrecy, it’s stayed hidden. But now, you’ve come for the truth. And truth cannot be hidden." A sound—distant, but growing—like hooves, like wind through bones. The sky flickered, and Aurora saw it: a river, black and liquid, flowing through the Grove, its waters reflecting the figures from the other realm. The water was rising, creeping up the grass. "The river is Hel’s way to us," the woman said. "It comes when the Veil weakens. And you, Rory, are the reason it’s here." She took a step closer, and Aurora saw the sword’s blade: it contained a face, a version of herself, smiling sadly. "You ran from your past, from your power. But power is not a curse—it’s a door. And you’ve finally decided to open it." The river reached her ankles. Aurora looked down, and in the water, she saw Evan’s face, her mother’s, Eva’s, all laughing at her, then screaming as the water dragged them under. She saw the benefactor, their face blurred, whispering, "It’s time." The scar on her left wrist, once a crescent of white, now glowed faintly, the color of the pendant. "Do you feel it?" the woman said. "The stone in your chest. The light in your veins. You are a bridge, Aurora. Between two worlds. Between life and—" "Stop," Aurora said, but her voice was breathless, awestruck. She closed her eyes, and for a moment, she was no longer in the Grove. She was in her flat, late at night, the pendant in her hand, the note from the benefactor in her pocket. *"You can heal,"* the note had said. *"But to heal, you must remember."* She opened her eyes. The river was at her waist. The figures from Hel were now visible, their faces twisted, reaching for her. The woman with the sword was gone. The monolith was gone. In their place was the stone she’d touched earlier, now cracked, its runes glowing with a dim light. The pendant burned, not in pain, but in recognition. Aurora took a deep breath, let it out, and pulled the knife from her purse. She raised it, and the gem flared, a beam of crimson light that shot into the river. The water boiled, hissing, and the figures screamed, their forms dissolving. The sky cleared, the moon rising full, casting light on the grass, now dry, now withered, now green again. The stone behind her pulsed, and Aurora heard a voice—her own, clear and strong—whispering, *"Remember."* She turned. The Grove was gone. She was in Richmond Park, the standing stones before her, the moon high in the sky. Her watch read 2:45. She’d been there for 18 minutes. The pendant was still warm against her chest, the gem dimmer now, but still glowing. A hand touched her shoulder. She spun. It was a man, tall, with a beard, wearing a black coat, his eyes warm and brown. He held a envelope, sealed. "Eva sent this," he said. "She said you’d need it." Aurora took the envelope. The seal was Eva’s, and on the front, in her handwriting: *For Rory, when she’s ready to stop hiding.* She looked up. The man was gone. The park was empty. The stars were out, bright and clear. In her hand, the pendant pulsed once, twice, then stilled. Aurora walked toward the gate, the envelope tucked into her coat. The river was gone, the Grove forgotten. But the scar on her wrist burned, and the memory of a name—*Malphora*—lingered at the edge of her mind. She smiled, a small, secret smile. It was time to remember. The night wind picked up, carrying the scent of damp earth and something sweeter, cloying, like overripe berries. Somewhere in the distance, a bird sang. Aurora glanced back at the trees, at the stones, at the empty clearing. And she walked on.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags21
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"the voice said again [again]"
1"the ground glowing so [so]"
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.7
leniency1
rawRatio0.095
effectiveRatio0.095
93.37% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2264
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count2
1
adverb"sadly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"sadly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
51.41% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2264
totalAiIsms22
found
0
word"pulsed"
count4
1
word"down her spine"
count1
2
word"loomed"
count2
3
word"echoed"
count1
4
word"charged"
count1
5
word"scanned"
count1
6
word"flicker"
count1
7
word"pulse"
count2
8
word"quickened"
count1
9
word"glistening"
count1
10
word"etched"
count1
11
word"could feel"
count1
12
word"searing"
count2
13
word"marble"
count1
14
word"silence"
count1
15
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"down her spine"
2"loomed"
3"echoed"
4"charged"
5"scanned"
6"flicker"
7"pulse"
8"quickened"
9"glistening"
10"etched"
11"could feel"
12"searing"
13"marble"
14"silence"
15"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences176
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences176
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"think"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences186
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen73
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans32
markdownWords94
totalWords2244
ratio0.042
matches
0"\"Roots. Three oaks. Stop before four. The stone breathes.\""
1"\"Breathe with the stones until they answer.\""
2"Cool-headed"
3"Rationalize."
4"lit up"
5"This isn’t right"
6"charged"
7"Paranoia"
8"You’re tired. You left at 11 p.m. to make a 1 a.m. delivery."
9"thump-thump-thump"
10"Hel"
11"Hel. Hel. Hel."
12"Don’t trust the shadows"
13"They wear faces."
14"against"
15"It’s working"
16"I’m close."
17"why is the ground wet?"
18"Eight minutes"
19"knew"
20"her"
21"knows"
22"screamed"
23"here"
24"me"
25"You’re more than you think"
26"Don’t hide."
27"\"You can heal,\""
28"\"But to heal, you must remember.\""
29"\"Remember.\""
30"For Rory, when she’s ready to stop hiding."
31"Malphora"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions24
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"*Paranoia*, she told herself."
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions52
wordCount1994
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity0.9
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Hel"
discoveredNames
Richmond2
Park2
Aurora18
Eva5
Dublin1
Heartstone3
Evan4
Grove8
Hel7
Veil1
Rory1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Eva"
2"Heartstone"
3"Evan"
4"Rory"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Dublin"
3"Grove"
4"Hel"
globalScore1
windowScore0.667
83.04% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences112
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"seemed closer than she remembered, their branches stretching outward, almost as if to block her path"
1"looked like veins or tentacles"
2"as if watching her, revealing undersides that were gray, like rotting flesh"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.891
wordCount2244
matches
0"not an oak, but a monolith, smooth"
1"not in pain, but in recognition"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences186
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs47
mean47.74
std37.85
cv0.793
sampleLengths
0144
1146
2131
394
43
5105
6110
760
864
97
101
1162
1235
1362
1429
15112
1673
1711
1862
1939
2041
213
2255
2333
2468
2521
2652
2742
2868
2960
3028
3158
3252
3371
3415
3547
365
3724
3810
3923
4018
4110
4237
436
445
4538
464
89.31% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount8
totalSentences176
matches
0"been snuffed"
1"was gone"
2"being torn"
3"was gone"
4"was gone"
5"was gone"
6"was gone"
7"was gone"
7.32% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount10
totalVerbs346
matches
0"was coming"
1"were moving"
2"was oozing"
3"was spreading"
4"were closing"
5"was deafening was bleeding"
6"was seeing"
7"were moving"
8"was rising"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount21
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences17
totalSentences186
ratio0.091
matches
0"It was 2:17 a.m., according to the crumpled receipt in her pocket—a timestamp from the last note her benefactor had slipped under her door, scrawled in shaky ink: *\"Roots. Three oaks. Stop before four. The stone breathes.\"* She’d recognized \"Roots\" as the old oak clearing in the northern section of the park, a place she’d only ever visited briefly, once, with Eva when they were teens, hunting for fairies in the dusk."
1"That was odd—she’d left the city with a full moon, but the clearing loomed in semi-darkness, the air thick with a scent like wet earth and something sweeter, cloying, like overripe berries."
2"Not a flash—faint, a soft glow that seeped into the gem, making the crimson color bleed like blood."
3"The time behavior—the Grove."
4"There—something."
5"The grass here was green, too green, and wildflowers bloomed everywhere—purple, yellow, white, petals glistening with dew even though the night was freezing."
6"The sky had lightened, though not by much; it was a strange, sickly gray, like a storm cloud smothering the stars."
7"That was it—the reason she’d come."
8"A sound—something wet, dragging through the grass."
9"But the flowers around her were moving, not in the wind—*against* it, their petals flipping upward as if watching her, revealing undersides that were gray, like rotting flesh."
10"She reached for the knife, her hand slipping—*why is the ground wet?*—and looked down."
11"A woman with her blue eyes, her black hair, standing in a room with the Heartstone, a man with a beard and a crown behind her, whispering, \"It keeps the door open. Keep it safe. Keep *her* safe.\" Then, pain—sharp, searing—behind her eyes, and a face: Evan, her ex, his mouth stretched in a grin, his eyes black, \"You can’t run from it, Rory. It *knows* you.\""
12"The gem was on the ground, glowing so brightly she could see through it, into a realm beyond—pale, flickering figures, shapes that could have been human or not, reaching toward her, their voices a chorus of \"Rory,\" \"Laila,\" \"Aurora.\""
13"The trees were moving, their trunks bending toward her, branches snapping and reforming into limbs, fingers, faces—Evan’s, her mother’s, a stranger’s, all with the same black eyes."
14"A sound—distant, but growing—like hooves, like wind through bones."
15"The stone behind her pulsed, and Aurora heard a voice—her own, clear and strong—whispering, *\"Remember.\"*"
16"But the scar on her wrist burned, and the memory of a name—*Malphora*—lingered at the edge of her mind."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount636
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"over frost-kissed leaves,"
adverbCount18
adverbRatio0.02830188679245283
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.007861635220125786
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences186
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences186
mean12.06
std10.91
cv0.905
sampleLengths
024
172
248
320
441
56
616
71
81
91
1012
1116
1232
1318
1427
1515
164
174
185
1923
2018
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2313
2416
255
264
2715
2813
2911
3015
313
322
334
343
356
367
371
3818
396
404
412
425
435
4417
4513
4612
4713
482
4923
31.72% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats34
diversityRatio0.22580645161290322
totalSentences186
uniqueOpeners42
64.94% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences154
matches
0"Maybe it’s just the wind."
1"Soft, breathy, right behind her."
2"Somewhere in the distance, a"
ratio0.019
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount37
totalSentences154
matches
0"It was 2:17 a.m., according"
1"Her boots crunched over frost-kissed"
2"She reached for her purse,"
3"She’d only taken three minutes"
4"She scanned the trees, her"
5"She turned, and it was"
6"You left at 11 p.m."
7"She fumbled with the clasp,"
8"*They wear faces.*"
9"*It’s working*, she thought."
10"She reached for the knife,"
11"It was spreading, crawling up"
12"Her watch read 2:31."
13"She’d been in the Grove"
14"She backed away, tripping over"
15"She lunged for it, but"
16"It was her, but older,"
17"She held the pendant higher,"
18"She wore a dress that"
19"She remembered the memories the"
ratio0.24
28.18% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount133
totalSentences154
matches
0"The air in Richmond Park"
1"It was 2:17 a.m., according"
2"Her boots crunched over frost-kissed"
3"The moon was a sliver,"
4"The receipt’s instructions had been"
5"The pendant pulsed faster, a"
6"That was odd—she’d left the"
7"The trees seemed closer than"
8"She reached for her purse,"
9"Aurora hadn’t needed it since"
10"A sound echoed through the"
11"The forest behind her was"
12"The stones had shifted, their"
13"*This isn’t right*, she thought."
14"The time behavior—the Grove."
15"The note had mentioned time"
16"She’d only taken three minutes"
17"The grass beneath her feet"
18"A twig snapped."
19"The hum had stopped."
ratio0.864
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount4
totalSentences154
matches
0"Now, Eva was in Dublin,"
1"Even so, she took a"
2"Now, her watch, a cheap"
3"to make a 1 a.m."
ratio0.026
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences71
technicalSentenceCount16
matches
0"Now, Eva was in Dublin, and the note was the first she’d heard from the unknown person who’d given her the Heartstone pendant six months prior, a crimson gem se…"
1"The trees seemed closer than she remembered, their branches stretching outward, almost as if to block her path."
2"The grass beneath her feet was unexpectedly warm, as if the earth itself was alive."
3"A flicker of movement in the corner of her vision, a shadow that wasn’t cast by the moon."
4"delivery.* But the pendant’s pulse had quickened, a faint *thump-thump-thump* that matched the rhythm of her heart."
5"But the flowers around her were moving, not in the wind—*against* it, their petals flipping upward as if watching her, revealing undersides that were gray, like…"
6"The grass was oozing, a thick, black substance that smelled of iron and something sweet, cloying."
7"It was spreading, crawling up her boots, as if alive."
8"The pendant’s thump-thump-thump was now a roar, a sound that filled her skull."
9"The flowers were closing in, their stems coiling like ropes, thorns emerging from their centers."
10"The hum was deafening now, and the sky had turned a sickly purple, as if the world was bleeding."
11"The trees were moving, their trunks bending toward her, branches snapping and reforming into limbs, fingers, faces—Evan’s, her mother’s, a stranger’s, all with …"
12"The flowers had become a tide, rolling toward her, thorns sharpening, petals falling away to reveal hollow, empty centers."
13"The ash swirled upward, forming a shape: a woman, tall, with silver hair and skin like marble, her eyes glowing like embers."
14"She wore a dress that rippled like water, and in her hand, she held a sword, its blade a combination of fire and ice."
15"The water boiled, hissing, and the figures screamed, their forms dissolving."
77.38% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags21
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"she said, her voice steady"
1"Aurora said, but her voice was breathless, awestruck"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"The note had (have)"
dialogueSentences30
tagDensity0.367
leniency0.733
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.067
79.5782%