Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYABHFC0H334VVR32PPHBGK

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Duration:
34.4s
Cost:
$0.002240
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Harlow's hand clamped Tomás Herrera's shoulder. Her fingers dug into damp denim. He shrugged her off with a paramedic's wiry strength, bolted across the cobbled street. Puddles exploded under his boots. She lunged after him, boots slipping on slick granite. Camden's shuttered market stalls loomed like silent witnesses, their awnings sagging under sheets of rain. "Stop! Police!" Her shout cut through the downpour, sharp as her jawline. He didn't glance back. Just darted left, into a snarl of alleys behind the lockups. She followed, coat flapping, worn leather watch sodden against her wrist. Salt-and-pepper hair plastered to her scalp. Eighteen years on the force, and this ghost from Seville still danced out of reach. Streetlights flickered overhead, casting oily halos on overflowing gutters. The stench of rotting veg from the day's market clung to the air, mixed with diesel exhaust. Tomás vaulted a low chain-link fence, chain rattling. Harlow gripped the top, hauled herself over. Metal bit her palm. She dropped into mud, knees jarring. He was thirty feet ahead now, olive skin gleaming under sodium glow. That Saint Christopher medallion swung wild at his neck as he ran. Scar on his left forearm flashed white – knife work from some NHS fallout, her files said. Off-books healer for Silas Blackwood's crew. The Raven's Nest regulars. Suspected in three disappearances. Tonight, he'd bolted from a Soho raid with a syringe full of God-knew-what. She sprinted harder, military bearing kicking in. Precise strides ate the gap. Rain stung her brown eyes. A delivery van swerved past, horn blaring. Tomás veered right, towards the derelict arches of the old Tube line. Abandoned since the Blitz, cordoned off. Perfect bolthole for his kind. " Herrera! You're nicked!" She drew her baton, thumbed it extended. Metal gleamed wet. He skidded at the mouth of a service tunnel, half-collapsed under graffiti-smeared brick. Paused. Looked back for the first time. Warm brown eyes narrowed. Then he plunged down the rusted stairs, vanishing into black. Harlow hit the chain barrier running. She shouldered through, links snapping. Torch beam from her belt swept the descent. Steps slick with algae, treacherous. Echoes of dripping water amplified her breaths. The air turned fetid, thick with mould and something sharper – ozone? Sulphur? Footsteps echoed below. She took the stairs three at a time, baton ready. Watch strap chafed her wrist, ticking steady. Partner's voice ghosted her mind: *Steady, Quinn. Don't chase shadows.* DS Morris, three years gone. Unexplained. Claws in the autopsy photos she wasn't meant to see. Tunnel levelled out. Dim bulbs strung like Christmas lights flickered ahead, jury-rigged power. Tomás's silhouette flickered against them. He shoved at a manhole cover, grated aside with a screech. Steam billowed up, carrying voices. Laughter. Low growls. She closed to twenty feet. "End of the road, Tommy. Hands up." He dropped through the hole. Gone. Harlow reached the edge. Peered down. A cavernous platform stretched below, lit by bioluminescent fungi clinging to vaulted ceilings. An abandoned Tube station, but alive. Stalls crammed every inch: rickety tables laden with glowing vials, shrivelled herbs, amulets pulsing faint blue. Figures haggled in shadows – not all human. A woman with scales bartered fangs for a stoppered jar. A man with horns hefted a crate of writhing eels. The Veil Market. Whispers from informants. Supernatural bazaar. Moves every full moon. Bone token entry. Her gut twisted. Morris died chasing something like this. Claws. Unexplained origins. She gripped the baton tighter. Tomás melted into the crowd. She spotted his curls bobbing near a potion stall, haggling quick with a hooded vendor. Backup? Radio crackled static. No signal down here. Lone wolf tonight. Her call. A brute guarded the ladder – seven feet of slabbed muscle, eyes milky like a shark's. Tusks protruded from slabbed lips. Bone token dangled from his belt: carved femur, etched runes. Harlow holstered the radio. Dropped through the manhole, landed light on cracked tiles. Dust motes danced in her torch beam. The brute lumbered forward, nostrils flaring. Copper tang hit her nose. Blood? Alchemy? "Oi. Token." Gravel voice rumbled. She flashed her warrant card. "Metropolitan Police. Stand aside." He snorted. Tusks gleamed. "No badge here. Token or piss off." Crowd hushed. Eyes turned – slitted, glowing, feral. A pixie-thing with jagged wings hovered nearby, claws twitching. Tomás was forty yards off now, slipping past a rack of cursed daggers. Harlow's jaw set. Sharp line hardened. She eyed the brute's belt. Bone token swayed. Close enough. "Last chance." Baton extended. He swung a meaty fist. She ducked, cracked the baton across his knee. Cartilage popped. He bellowed, staggered. She lunged, snatched the token. Cold as grave dirt. Runes burned her palm faint. "Enough!" She rammed it into a slot on the wall. Gears ground. A portcullis rattled up behind the brute. Market erupted. Shouts in tongues she half-knew. Scales-woman hissed, vials shattering. Horned man dropped his crate; eels slithered free, biting ankles. Harlow shoved past, torch sweeping. "Herrera!" He broke into a run again, weaving stalls. She pursued, knocking over a table of eyeballs in jars. Glass crunched underfoot. Smell of brine and rot choked her. "Quinn. Knew you'd follow." His accent thickened with panic, Spanish lilt sharp. He glanced back, medallion swinging. "You left a syringe at the Nest. Blackwood's blood? Or worse?" "Wrong crowd, detective." He dodged a stall of shrunken heads, their mouths gaping silent screams. She gained ground. Platform narrowed to service tunnels branching off. Echoes multiplied – footsteps? Or market beasts closing in? A low growl sounded left. She spun. Two goblins – knee-high, green-skinned, knives drawn – blocked retreat. Grins split warty faces. "Token thief!" One spat. Tomás hit a dead end. Iron grate barred the way. He rattled it, cursing in Spanish. Harlow cornered him, baton raised. Goblins scuffled behind, blades scraping stone. "Hands where I see 'em, Tommy. You're done stitching up monsters." He turned slow. Scarred forearm flexed. Pulled something from his pocket – another syringe, glowing green. "Not monsters." Needle caught light. "Family." She lunged. He jabbed. The plunger hissed. Something slammed her back. Pain exploded across ribs. Goblins piled on, knives flashing. Claws raked her coat. Tomás bolted past, grate yielding under his shove – hidden latch. Harlow swung wild, baton connecting with goblin skull. Crunch. Green ichor sprayed. The other slashed her calf, fire lancing up her leg. She staggered up. Blood slicked tiles. Torch beam danced mad on Tomás's fleeing back. Tunnels forked ahead. Market roar swelled – more shadows converging. Her watch ticked. Morris's words echoed: *Shadows bite back.* She gripped the baton. Charged into dark. The tunnel mouth yawned. Tomás vanished round a bend. A guttural chant rose from the depths, rhythmic. Hungry. Footsteps pounded behind. Goblins. Worse. She ran.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences16
tagDensity0.563
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1123
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Blackwood"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
10.95% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1123
totalAiIsms20
found
0
word"loomed"
count1
1
word"flickered"
count3
2
word"gleaming"
count1
3
word"perfect"
count1
4
word"treacherous"
count1
5
word"echoes"
count2
6
word"footsteps"
count3
7
word"echoed"
count2
8
word"etched"
count1
9
word"grave"
count1
10
word"lilt"
count1
11
word"charged"
count1
12
word"depths"
count1
13
word"rhythmic"
count1
highlights
0"loomed"
1"flickered"
2"gleaming"
3"perfect"
4"treacherous"
5"echoes"
6"footsteps"
7"echoed"
8"etched"
9"grave"
10"lilt"
11"charged"
12"depths"
13"rhythmic"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences181
matches
0"d with panic"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences181
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences188
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen17
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords8
totalWords1121
ratio0.007
matches
0"Steady, Quinn. Don't chase shadows."
1"Shadows bite back."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions3
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions55
wordCount1057
uniqueNames25
maxNameDensity0.95
worstName"Tomás"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Tomás"
discoveredNames
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Herrera1
Seville1
Saint1
Christopher1
Silas1
Blackwood1
Raven1
Nest1
Soho1
God-knew-what1
Tube2
Blitz1
Metal2
Quinn1
Morris3
Christmas1
Veil1
Market3
Gears1
Spanish2
Harlow9
Claws3
Bone3
Goblins3
persons
0"Tomás"
1"Herrera"
2"Saint"
3"Christopher"
4"Silas"
5"Blackwood"
6"Raven"
7"Blitz"
8"Metal"
9"Quinn"
10"Morris"
11"Christmas"
12"Market"
13"Gears"
14"Harlow"
15"Claws"
16"Goblins"
places
0"Seville"
1"Soho"
2"Spanish"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences76
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"something like this"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1121
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences188
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
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mean21.56
std17.08
cv0.792
sampleLengths
012
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212
347
451
568
647
714
834
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1046
1137
1212
136
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1517
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2416
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416
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479
487
4918
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences181
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs242
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences11
totalSentences188
ratio0.059
matches
0"Scar on his left forearm flashed white – knife work from some NHS fallout, her files said."
1"The air turned fetid, thick with mould and something sharper – ozone?"
2"Figures haggled in shadows – not all human."
3"A brute guarded the ladder – seven feet of slabbed muscle, eyes milky like a shark's."
4"Eyes turned – slitted, glowing, feral."
5"Horned man dropped his crate; eels slithered free, biting ankles."
6"Echoes multiplied – footsteps?"
7"Two goblins – knee-high, green-skinned, knives drawn – blocked retreat."
8"Pulled something from his pocket – another syringe, glowing green."
9"Tomás bolted past, grate yielding under his shove – hidden latch."
10"Market roar swelled – more shadows converging."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1060
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"under graffiti-smeared brick."
1"ahead, jury-rigged power."
adverbCount12
adverbRatio0.011320754716981131
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.0009433962264150943
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences188
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences188
mean5.96
std3.78
cv0.633
sampleLengths
06
16
214
35
49
515
612
74
811
911
106
1115
129
1317
148
157
164
176
1812
1912
2017
216
224
234
2413
257
265
275
287
2912
306
315
3211
333
3413
351
366
374
3810
396
405
418
425
437
4412
451
463
4710
487
497
93.44% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.5638297872340425
totalSentences188
uniqueOpeners106
44.44% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences150
matches
0"Just darted left, into a"
1"Then he plunged down the"
ratio0.013
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount37
totalSentences150
matches
0"Her fingers dug into damp"
1"He shrugged her off with"
2"She lunged after him, boots"
3"Her shout cut through the"
4"He didn't glance back."
5"She followed, coat flapping, worn"
6"She dropped into mud, knees"
7"He was thirty feet ahead"
8"She sprinted harder, military bearing"
9"She drew her baton, thumbed"
10"He skidded at the mouth"
11"She shouldered through, links snapping."
12"She took the stairs three"
13"He shoved at a manhole"
14"She closed to twenty feet."
15"He dropped through the hole."
16"Her gut twisted."
17"She gripped the baton tighter."
18"She spotted his curls bobbing"
19"She flashed her warrant card."
ratio0.247
70.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount117
totalSentences150
matches
0"Harlow's hand clamped Tomás Herrera's"
1"Her fingers dug into damp"
2"He shrugged her off with"
3"Puddles exploded under his boots."
4"She lunged after him, boots"
5"Camden's shuttered market stalls loomed"
6"Her shout cut through the"
7"He didn't glance back."
8"She followed, coat flapping, worn"
9"Salt-and-pepper hair plastered to her"
10"Streetlights flickered overhead, casting oily"
11"The stench of rotting veg"
12"Tomás vaulted a low chain-link"
13"Harlow gripped the top, hauled"
14"Metal bit her palm."
15"She dropped into mud, knees"
16"He was thirty feet ahead"
17"That Saint Christopher medallion swung"
18"The Raven's Nest regulars."
19"Tonight, he'd bolted from a"
ratio0.78
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences150
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences32
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"She spotted his curls bobbing near a potion stall, haggling quick with a hooded vendor."
69.44% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"He dodged, their mouths gaping silent screams"
25.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Her shout (shout)"
1"One spat (spit)"
dialogueSentences16
tagDensity0.125
leniency0.25
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.25
82.7094%