Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYABYTP3Y0JS32E1743PCWJ

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Duration:
29.1s
Cost:
$0.001666
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rory pushed through the heavy oak door of The Raven's Nest, the familiar creak swallowed by the low hum of conversation and the clink of glasses. Soho's evening chill clung to her coat, but inside, the air wrapped around her like an old blanket—smoky, laced with the sharp tang of whiskey and the faint, underlying bitterness of spilled beer. The green neon sign outside had flickered like a dying firefly, but here, in the dim glow of pendant lamps, the bar felt timeless. Walls papered with faded maps of forgotten empires and sepia-toned photographs of stern-faced men in trench coats stared down at her, as if judging her return. She hadn't meant to come here. Not tonight, not after the shift that had dragged her through London's rain-slicked streets on her battered scooter, delivering greasy takeout bags to indifferent doors. Yu-Fei's Golden Empress had been slammed, and her arms ached from wrestling the helmet off in the downpour. But the flat upstairs—her flat, precarious and thin-walled—had started to feel like a cage after the day's monotony. Eva was out with her latest fling, and the silence upstairs pressed too hard. So, Rory had descended the creaky back stairs, thinking only of a pint to blunt the edges. The bar was half-full, a scattering of patrons hunched over stools: a couple of suits unwinding from the City, a lone artist sketching in the corner, and the usual cluster of locals nursing their regrets. Rory slid onto a stool at the far end, near the polished mahogany where the bartender usually poured without asking. But tonight, the stool felt different—colder, as if the wood remembered her absence. She traced the scar on her left wrist with her thumb, the small crescent a pale reminder of a fall from a swing when she was eight, back when Cardiff still felt like home. "Evening, love. What'll it be?" The voice came from behind the bar, gravelly and warm, pulling her gaze up. She froze. The man polishing a glass wasn't the young lad she'd seen last—had it been six months? A year? No, longer. This was Silas. Older, wearier, but unmistakably him. Grey streaked his auburn hair like frost on autumn leaves, and his beard matched, neatly trimmed but softer at the edges. He moved with a deliberate grace, but she caught the slight hitch in his left leg as he shifted weight—a limp she didn't remember. His hazel eyes met hers, crinkling at the corners, but there was a shadow there, something guarded. "Silas?" The name slipped out before she could catch it, her voice thinner than she'd intended. He paused, the cloth stilling in his hand. Recognition dawned slowly, like a match struck in the dark. "Rory Carter. Bloody hell. It's been... what, eight years?" She nodded, the number landing like a stone in her gut. Eight years since she'd last set foot in this place properly, since before the flat upstairs became her reluctant sanctuary. Back then, she'd been twenty, fresh from Cardiff, Eva dragging her to London on a promise of escape. Silas had been a fixture even then—Eva's uncle's old mate, or so the story went—a retired spook who'd bought the Nest after some shadowy career ended in Prague. He'd poured her first legal pint here, listened to her ramble about law school dreams she never wanted, all with that quiet authority that made you feel seen without being dissected. But life had pulled them apart. She'd tumbled into Evan, the charming bastard who'd turned possessive, and Silas... well, he'd faded into the background as she isolated. When she finally fled that mess two years ago, Eva had pointed her here again, to the flat above the bar. Silas had handed over the keys without a word, no questions, no lectures. And since then? They'd nodded in passing—him limping down the stairs, her rushing off to deliveries—but no real conversations. Not like before. She'd changed, hardened into someone who delivered egg rolls instead of arguments in court. And him? The limp, the greyer hair—he looked like time had carved deeper lines into him. "Guinness?" He set the glass down, already reaching for the tap, as if no chasm had opened between them. "Yeah. Thanks." She watched the dark foam rise, her fingers drumming the bar. The scar itched under her sleeve, a phantom twinge. "You look... good." He snorted, sliding the pint her way. The silver signet ring on his right hand glinted under the light—always there, a talisman from some old life. "Liar. Age doesn't flatter a man like me." He poured himself a measure of something amber, leaning on the bar with his good leg. The limp was more pronounced up close; she imagined the knee protesting every step, a souvenir from that botched op he'd hinted at once, back when they talked like friends. She took a sip, the bitter slide grounding her. "The place hasn't changed. Still got that photo of Churchill glaring at everyone?" "Wouldn't dream of moving it." He glanced toward the wall, where the framed print hung crooked, as always. "Keeps the drunks in line." Silence stretched, broken only by the murmur of the bar. Rory studied him—the way his shoulders carried less tension now, but his eyes scanned the room instinctively, mapping exits, faces. The Spymaster, Eva called him in jest, but there was truth in it. Who he'd been: sharp, untouchable, weaving networks in shadows. Now? Barman with a bad leg, pouring pints for tourists. "You've been scarce," he said finally, voice low. "Upstairs, I mean. Thought you might've ghosted London altogether." She shrugged, but the motion felt forced. "Work. Deliveries keep me out late. And... you know how it is. Life piles up." He nodded, but his gaze lingered on her wrist, where her sleeve had ridden up just enough to show the scar. "Heard about Evan. Eva mentioned. You alright?" The question hung, simple but loaded. Rory's throat tightened. Alright? She'd rebuilt—new name in her head sometimes, Laila, like a ghost identity—but the bruises faded slower than the body ones. "Getting there. Better than before." Silas didn't push, just sipped his drink. That was him: listening more than talking, letting the weight settle. But tonight, the air between them crackled with unspoken years. She remembered the last real talk they'd had, eight years back, her spilling dreams of Pre-Law, him warning her about the world's sharper edges with stories half-told. "You'll outthink them all, Rory," he'd said, hazel eyes steady. "Just don't let it blind you." She hadn't listened. Chased the wrong stability, ended up running. And him? What regrets did a man like Silas carry? The limp spoke of one—a knee shattered in Prague, a op gone wrong that ended his field days. She'd overheard Eva once: "He lost good men that night. Blames himself." "You?" she ventured, tracing the bar's grain. "The leg... new?" His laugh was short, wry. "Worsens with the weather. But it's old news. Prague, '09. Botched extraction. My fault." He flexed the joint subtly, wincing. "Retired me to this." He gestured around the bar, maps and photos like relics of a life he couldn't quite leave. Rory leaned in, the Guinness warming her chest. "You were the best, Si. Eva always said you ran circles around MI6." "Past tense." He met her eyes, the crinkles deepening. "Now I run a bar. Spot on spies in the clientele, maybe. Keeps the mind sharp." But she saw the flicker—the man who'd traded shadows for neon, authority for aprons. Changed, yes. The grey in his hair wasn't just age; it was the weight of missions unspoken, contacts buried. Regret etched in the limp, in the way he gripped that ring like an anchor. Time pressed in, heavy as the rain outside pattering the windows. Eight years, and here they were: her, the girl who'd fled an abuser, delivering for a Chinatown spot instead of arguing cases; him, the spymaster pouring pints. Friends, once—mentor and mentee, really—but the chasm yawned with what-ifs. What if she'd stayed in touch after that first escape? What if he'd called her out sooner on Evan? What if Prague had gone right, and he was still out there, not limping behind a bar? "You ever think about going back?" she asked, voice soft. "The work. Before all this." Silas poured another round, movements precise despite the hitch. "Every day. But the Nest... it's my network now. Quieter, but it works." He paused, eyes on her. "You? Law school was your fire. Still chase it?" The question stung. She'd abandoned it, buried under fear and survival. "Maybe. Someday." Lies. The fire dimmed, replaced by quick fixes and out-of-the-box dodges to pay rent. He nodded, but the silence thickened. Outside, a cab horn blared, and inside, a patron laughed too loud. Rory felt the tension coil—the who they were versus now. She, cool-headed Rory, reduced to Rory the delivery girl, scar and all. Him, Silas the unyielding, hobbled by time. "Regret's a bastard," he said suddenly, as if reading her. "Eats at you if you let it. I let a team down in Prague. You... well, you got out." She swallowed. "Didn't get out clean. Lost years." "But you're here." His voice held that quiet authority, pulling her back. "That's something." The bar hummed on, oblivious. Rory sipped, the foam bitter on her tongue. Unspoken regrets hovered: his, for the life traded; hers, for the dreams deferred. Eight years bridged in pints and glances, the weight settling like dust on old maps. They weren't the same, but in this dim light, they were enough—two ghosts recognizing each other, time's cruel etchings and all. The evening wore on. Silas shared a story from the Nest's early days—a dodgy contact who'd mistaken the bar for a drop point, leading to a chase through Soho alleys. Rory laughed, the sound genuine, loosening the knot in her chest. She countered with a delivery mishap: a bag of dim sum spilled on a posh doorstep, her quick thinking turning disaster into a tip. "Out-of-the-box," she said, echoing his old praise. He smiled faintly, the limp forgotten as he poured. "That's you, Rory. Always was." But as the crowd thinned and the neon buzzed outside, the tension resurfaced. She glanced at the bookshelf in the corner, knowing the hidden room beyond—clandestine meetings, Eva had whispered once. Silas's real world, still lurking. "You use it much?" she nodded toward it. His eyes sharpened. "When needed. Old habits." Regret flickered again—his world pulling, but the knee holding him back. Hers, too: the law calling faintly through the delivery hum. By closing, the bar empty save for them, Rory stood, coat in hand. "Thanks for the pint. And the talk." Silas walked her to the door, limp echoing softly. "Anytime. Door's always open." She paused on the threshold, rain misting her face. Eight years, and the weight lingered, but lighter now. Unspoken, yes—but shared. As she climbed the stairs to her flat, the scar on her wrist felt less like a mark of loss, more like a line connecting back. Time had changed them, but the Nest held steady, a nest indeed for weary wings.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
53.66% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags19
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"he said finally [finally]"
1"He gestured around [around]"
2"he said suddenly [suddenly]"
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.463
leniency0.927
rawRatio0.158
effectiveRatio0.146
89.47% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1900
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
3
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"really"
2"suddenly"
3"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
21.05% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1900
totalAiIsms30
found
0
word"familiar"
count1
1
word"chill"
count1
2
word"flickered"
count2
3
word"silence"
count3
4
word"traced"
count1
5
word"reminder"
count1
6
word"weight"
count5
7
word"sanctuary"
count1
8
word"tension"
count3
9
word"scanned"
count1
10
word"unspoken"
count4
11
word"shattered"
count1
12
word"tracing"
count1
13
word"flicker"
count1
14
word"etched"
count1
15
word"echoing"
count2
16
word"clandestine"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"chill"
2"flickered"
3"silence"
4"traced"
5"reminder"
6"weight"
7"sanctuary"
8"tension"
9"scanned"
10"unspoken"
11"shattered"
12"tracing"
13"flicker"
14"etched"
15"echoing"
16"clandestine"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences132
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences132
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"started to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences153
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen36
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1863
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"The Spymaster, Eva called him in jest, but there was truth in it."
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions59
wordCount1607
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity0.75
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest4
London2
Golden1
Empress1
Rory12
City1
Cardiff2
Silas11
Eva7
Prague3
Evan2
Silence1
Spymaster1
Laila1
Pre-Law1
Guinness1
Chinatown1
Soho2
Eight4
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Empress"
3"Rory"
4"Silas"
5"Eva"
6"Evan"
7"Silence"
8"Spymaster"
9"Laila"
places
0"London"
1"City"
2"Cardiff"
3"Prague"
4"Chinatown"
5"Soho"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
28.64% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences103
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"as if judging her return"
1"felt like home"
2"looked like time had carved deeper lines"
3"quite leave"
4"as if reading her"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1863
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences153
matches
0"fled that mess"
1"gripped that ring"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs44
mean42.34
std31.44
cv0.743
sampleLengths
0109
198
2102
319
492
516
627
7108
8113
919
1025
1180
1222
1323
1462
1517
1622
1728
1835
1971
2050
2110
2246
2321
2425
2548
2684
2715
2836
2927
3047
3129
328
3314
3462
3572
3614
3736
388
397
4021
4120
4213
4362
99.95% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences132
matches
0"been slammed"
1"being dissected"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs284
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount24
semicolonCount4
flaggedSentences24
totalSentences153
ratio0.157
matches
0"Soho's evening chill clung to her coat, but inside, the air wrapped around her like an old blanket—smoky, laced with the sharp tang of whiskey and the faint, underlying bitterness of spilled beer."
1"But the flat upstairs—her flat, precarious and thin-walled—had started to feel like a cage after the day's monotony."
2"But tonight, the stool felt different—colder, as if the wood remembered her absence."
3"The man polishing a glass wasn't the young lad she'd seen last—had it been six months?"
4"He moved with a deliberate grace, but she caught the slight hitch in his left leg as he shifted weight—a limp she didn't remember."
5"Silas had been a fixture even then—Eva's uncle's old mate, or so the story went—a retired spook who'd bought the Nest after some shadowy career ended in Prague."
6"They'd nodded in passing—him limping down the stairs, her rushing off to deliveries—but no real conversations."
7"The limp, the greyer hair—he looked like time had carved deeper lines into him."
8"The silver signet ring on his right hand glinted under the light—always there, a talisman from some old life."
9"The limp was more pronounced up close; she imagined the knee protesting every step, a souvenir from that botched op he'd hinted at once, back when they talked like friends."
10"Rory studied him—the way his shoulders carried less tension now, but his eyes scanned the room instinctively, mapping exits, faces."
11"She'd rebuilt—new name in her head sometimes, Laila, like a ghost identity—but the bruises faded slower than the body ones."
12"The limp spoke of one—a knee shattered in Prague, a op gone wrong that ended his field days."
13"But she saw the flicker—the man who'd traded shadows for neon, authority for aprons."
14"The grey in his hair wasn't just age; it was the weight of missions unspoken, contacts buried."
15"Eight years, and here they were: her, the girl who'd fled an abuser, delivering for a Chinatown spot instead of arguing cases; him, the spymaster pouring pints."
16"Friends, once—mentor and mentee, really—but the chasm yawned with what-ifs."
17"Rory felt the tension coil—the who they were versus now."
18"Unspoken regrets hovered: his, for the life traded; hers, for the dreams deferred."
19"They weren't the same, but in this dim light, they were enough—two ghosts recognizing each other, time's cruel etchings and all."
20"Silas shared a story from the Nest's early days—a dodgy contact who'd mistaken the bar for a drop point, leading to a chase through Soho alleys."
21"She glanced at the bookshelf in the corner, knowing the hidden room beyond—clandestine meetings, Eva had whispered once."
22"Regret flickered again—his world pulling, but the knee holding him back."
23"Unspoken, yes—but shared."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1642
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount62
adverbRatio0.037758830694275276
lyAdverbCount19
lyAdverbRatio0.011571254567600487
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences153
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences153
mean12.18
std7.68
cv0.631
sampleLengths
026
133
224
326
46
525
618
718
814
917
1035
1120
1213
1334
1419
152
1616
172
182
193
205
2121
2224
2317
2416
258
2610
279
2811
2920
3018
3128
3231
336
3412
359
3621
3713
383
3916
403
4114
422
4314
4419
4513
469
473
487
4919
69.50% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.42483660130718953
totalSentences153
uniqueOpeners65
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences122
matches(empty)
ratio0
69.18% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount46
totalSentences122
matches
0"She hadn't meant to come"
1"She traced the scar on"
2"He moved with a deliberate"
3"His hazel eyes met hers,"
4"He paused, the cloth stilling"
5"She nodded, the number landing"
6"He'd poured her first legal"
7"She'd tumbled into Evan, the"
8"They'd nodded in passing—him limping"
9"She'd changed, hardened into someone"
10"He set the glass down,"
11"She watched the dark foam"
12"He snorted, sliding the pint"
13"He poured himself a measure"
14"She took a sip, the"
15"He glanced toward the wall,"
16"he said finally, voice low"
17"She shrugged, but the motion"
18"He nodded, but his gaze"
19"She'd rebuilt—new name in her"
ratio0.377
87.05% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount91
totalSentences122
matches
0"Rory pushed through the heavy"
1"Soho's evening chill clung to"
2"The green neon sign outside"
3"Walls papered with faded maps"
4"She hadn't meant to come"
5"Yu-Fei's Golden Empress had been"
6"Eva was out with her"
7"The bar was half-full, a"
8"Rory slid onto a stool"
9"She traced the scar on"
10"The voice came from behind"
11"The man polishing a glass"
12"This was Silas."
13"He moved with a deliberate"
14"His hazel eyes met hers,"
15"The name slipped out before"
16"He paused, the cloth stilling"
17"Recognition dawned slowly, like a"
18"She nodded, the number landing"
19"Silas had been a fixture"
ratio0.746
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences122
matches(empty)
ratio0
65.93% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences65
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"Walls papered with faded maps of forgotten empires and sepia-toned photographs of stern-faced men in trench coats stared down at her, as if judging her return."
1"Not tonight, not after the shift that had dragged her through London's rain-slicked streets on her battered scooter, delivering greasy takeout bags to indiffere…"
2"But tonight, the stool felt different—colder, as if the wood remembered her absence."
3"He'd poured her first legal pint here, listened to her ramble about law school dreams she never wanted, all with that quiet authority that made you feel seen wi…"
4"But she saw the flicker—the man who'd traded shadows for neon, authority for aprons."
5"Eight years, and here they were: her, the girl who'd fled an abuser, delivering for a Chinatown spot instead of arguing cases; him, the spymaster pouring pints."
6"Regret flickered again—his world pulling, but the knee holding him back."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"The name slipped out, her voice thinner than she'd intended"
1"She watched, her fingers drumming the bar"
2"he said finally, voice low"
3"He met, the crinkles deepening"
4"she asked, voice soft"
5"he said suddenly, as if reading her"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"he'd (would)"
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.122
leniency0.244
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.049
75.5923%