Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYAC80XFBXTKF6QYHW2M0RA

Run Details

Duration:
1m 14s
Cost:
$0.006551
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Quinn slammed her shoulder into the suspect’s back, but the rain-slicked jacket slipped through her grasp. She pivoted on her boot heel, military precision cutting through the chaos of Camden’s night crowds. The suspect—thin, hooded, hands stuffed in frayed cargo pants—darted between a kebab van and a stack of discarded cardboard boxes. Copper stung her nostrils; a cut on her palm from the earlier scuffle dripped blood onto the wet pavement. She’d tracked this figure for three days, ever since they were seen slipping through The Raven’s Nest’s hidden bookshelf door, rolled-up maps of London’s underground tunnels tucked under their arm. The bar’s distinctive green neon sign had glowed behind them then, a taunt she’d carried like a weight. The suspect veered toward a chain-link fence stretched across a gap between two brick buildings. Behind it, Quinn spotted the mold-stained entrance to an abandoned Tube station—no sign, just a rusted metal stairwell sinking into the dark. She’d read the unsubstantiated reports: the Veil Market, a supernatural black market that moved every full moon. Tonight’s full moon hung low (a detail she noted only when the suspect’s hood slipped, revealing moonlight on their pale cheek) so the timing clicked. The suspect fumbled in their pocket, pulled out a small, yellowed object, and pressed it to a hidden slot in the fence lock. A sharp click echoed over the rain’s patter. They slipped through. Quinn skidded to a stop, her worn leather watch digging into her left wrist. She’d never breached a supernatural market before, but her partner’s unexplained death three years ago hummed in the back of her mind—DS Morris had vanished near a similar abandoned station, his radio cutting out mid-sentence. She locked her sharp jaw, ready to follow, when a movement to her left caught her eye. Tomás Herrera leaned against a nearby lamppost, olive skin glistening with rain, his Saint Christopher medallion catching the faint neon glow from a distant tattoo parlor. His left forearm’s scar peeked out from his rolled-up shirt sleeve, a faint silver line against his skin. He clutched a crumpled paper bag to his chest, his fingers tightening around it when he saw her. Quinn’s steps carried her toward him, military bearing unshakable. She nodded at his closed fist, tucked into the bag’s fold. "That’s a bone token." "Souvenir from a patient." "We both know what bone tokens unlock." Tomás’s warm brown eyes narrowed. He clutched his medallion with his free hand, a habit she’d seen in witness statements about his off-the-books care. "I’m here for salve. Enchanted. Stops supernatural burns from festering." "You lost your NHS license for that kind of treatment." "I don’t let red tape kill people." The words hung between them, sharp as the knife that had left his forearm scar. Quinn’s mind flicked to The Raven’s Nest—witnesses had placed him there twice in the last month, tending to clique members with unexplained injuries. "You work for the Nest’s crew." "I work for anyone who can’t get help elsewhere." "The crew’s tied to the suspect I’m chasing." Tomás’s voice dropped, a faint Seville lilt slipping through. "The suspect’s a runner. Carries maps for the market’s guards. I saw them earlier, arguing with a man who had a face full of scaled patches—my patient." "You’re covering for them." "I’m covering for a teen who’ll turn to ash by dawn if I don’t get that salve." Quinn’s palm throbbed. She checked her watch—two minutes since the suspect slipped through the fence. The market’s guards would be patrolling the stairwell now, their senses honed to supernatural and human intruders alike. She’d never been one to hesitate, but the memory of Morris’s empty desk, his half-finished tea growing cold, made her pause. A sharp rattle cut through their conversation. The chain-link fence shook. Two figures in black robes emerged from the Tube stairwell, their faces hidden by hoods. One carried a curved, rune-carved knife; the other held a small clay jar, its lid hissing. They spotted Quinn immediately. The knife-wielding figure stepped forward, their boots squelching in the puddles. Tomás tensed, his scarred forearm flexing. He stepped between Quinn and the robed figures, the paper bag crinkling in his hand. "Leave her. She’s not part of this." "Intruders get fed to the market’s hounds." "The salve’s for a child." The robed figure with the jar laughed, a guttural sound that made Quinn’s skin crawl. It was the same laugh she’d heard on Morris’s last radio transmission, a sound that had haunted her dreams for three years. The suspect stepped out from behind the robed figures then, hood down, their pale face split by a cruel grin. "You still can’t save them, detective." Quinn’s hand flew to her service weapon, but the second robed figure twisted the clay jar’s lid. A cloud of purple powder burst into the air, acrid and sweet, stinging her nostrils. Her vision blurs—she sees Morris’s face flash before her, then Tomás’s panicking eyes, then the suspect’s grin stretching wider. Tomás yelled a Seville curse, his medallion glinting as he lunged for the jar. The knife-wielding figure swung at him, the rune-carved blade slicing through his shirt sleeve, grazing his scar. Quinn stumbled back, her military precision crumbling as the powder’s effect took hold. She heard the robed figures’ footsteps closing in, the suspect’s laugh echoing over the rain. Then, the Tube stairwell’s dark mouth seemed to yawn wider, a low growl rumbling up from its depths— the market’s hounds, called to hunt.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags1
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences16
tagDensity0.063
leniency0.125
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount934
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
46.47% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount934
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"weight"
count1
1
word"echoed"
count1
2
word"glistening"
count1
3
word"flicked"
count1
4
word"lilt"
count1
5
word"throbbed"
count1
6
word"glinting"
count1
7
word"footsteps"
count1
8
word"echoing"
count1
9
word"depths"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"echoed"
2"glistening"
3"flicked"
4"lilt"
5"throbbed"
6"glinting"
7"footsteps"
8"echoing"
9"depths"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences49
matches(empty)
55.39% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences49
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences65
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords912
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions2
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
77.92% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions37
wordCount763
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity1.44
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Camden1
Raven2
Nest2
London1
Quinn11
Tube3
Veil1
Market1
Morris4
Herrera1
Saint1
Christopher1
Seville2
Tomás6
persons
0"Camden"
1"Nest"
2"Quinn"
3"Morris"
4"Herrera"
5"Saint"
6"Christopher"
7"Tomás"
places
0"Raven"
1"London"
2"Tube"
3"Seville"
globalScore0.779
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences43
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount912
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences65
matches(empty)
67.97% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs15
mean60.8
std23.58
cv0.388
sampleLengths
016
1103
2113
366
462
535
651
761
857
954
1057
1140
1263
1382
1452
98.10% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences49
matches
0"were seen"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs125
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences65
ratio0.138
matches
0"The suspect—thin, hooded, hands stuffed in frayed cargo pants—darted between a kebab van and a stack of discarded cardboard boxes."
1"Copper stung her nostrils; a cut on her palm from the earlier scuffle dripped blood onto the wet pavement."
2"Behind it, Quinn spotted the mold-stained entrance to an abandoned Tube station—no sign, just a rusted metal stairwell sinking into the dark."
3"She’d never breached a supernatural market before, but her partner’s unexplained death three years ago hummed in the back of her mind—DS Morris had vanished near a similar abandoned station, his radio cutting out mid-sentence."
4"Quinn’s mind flicked to The Raven’s Nest—witnesses had placed him there twice in the last month, tending to clique members with unexplained injuries."
5"She checked her watch—two minutes since the suspect slipped through the fence."
6"One carried a curved, rune-carved knife; the other held a small clay jar, its lid hissing."
7"Her vision blurs—she sees Morris’s face flash before her, then Tomás’s panicking eyes, then the suspect’s grin stretching wider."
8"Then, the Tube stairwell’s dark mouth seemed to yawn wider, a low growl rumbling up from its depths— the market’s hounds, called to hunt."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount760
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount13
adverbRatio0.017105263157894738
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.002631578947368421
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences65
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences65
mean14.03
std7.22
cv0.515
sampleLengths
016
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220
319
430
518
615
722
817
925
1023
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123
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349
3527
364
3717
383
3912
4018
4121
427
434
4415
4516
464
4711
486
4915
54.36% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.35384615384615387
totalSentences65
uniqueOpeners23
68.03% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences49
matches
0"Then, the Tube stairwell’s dark"
ratio0.02
81.22% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount17
totalSentences49
matches
0"She pivoted on her boot"
1"She’d tracked this figure for"
2"She’d read the unsubstantiated reports:"
3"They slipped through."
4"She’d never breached a supernatural"
5"She locked her sharp jaw,"
6"His left forearm’s scar peeked"
7"He clutched a crumpled paper"
8"She nodded at his closed"
9"He clutched his medallion with"
10"She checked her watch—two minutes"
11"She’d never been one to"
12"They spotted Quinn immediately."
13"He stepped between Quinn and"
14"It was the same laugh"
15"Her vision blurs—she sees Morris’s"
16"She heard the robed"
ratio0.347
0.82% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount45
totalSentences49
matches
0"Quinn slammed her shoulder into"
1"She pivoted on her boot"
2"The suspect—thin, hooded, hands stuffed"
3"Copper stung her nostrils; a"
4"She’d tracked this figure for"
5"The bar’s distinctive green neon"
6"The suspect veered toward a"
7"She’d read the unsubstantiated reports:"
8"Tonight’s full moon hung low"
9"The suspect fumbled in their"
10"A sharp click echoed over"
11"They slipped through."
12"Quinn skidded to a stop,"
13"She’d never breached a supernatural"
14"She locked her sharp jaw,"
15"Tomás Herrera leaned against a"
16"His left forearm’s scar peeked"
17"He clutched a crumpled paper"
18"Quinn’s steps carried her toward"
19"She nodded at his closed"
ratio0.918
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences49
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences38
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"She’d read the unsubstantiated reports: the Veil Market, a supernatural black market that moved every full moon."
1"It was the same laugh she’d heard on Morris’s last radio transmission, a sound that had haunted her dreams for three years."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags1
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"She heard, the suspect’s laugh echoing over the rain"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
78.3424%