Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYANTKGQFPBNW06QB84Y3YC

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Duration:
1m 19s
Cost:
$0.008079
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Harlow’s fingers scraped the suspect’s oilskin coat tail before he slipped around a Soho alley corner. Rain plastered her cropped salt-and-pepper hair to her sharp jaw; her worn leather watch dug into her left wrist as she clenched her fist—an old military precision habit when closing in. The suspect’s boots thudded ahead, a quick tick-tock that echoed the pulse in her temples. She rounded the corner to find him darting past The Raven’s Nest, its distinctive green neon sign bleeding over the wet pavement to paint the alley in sickly hues. The bar’s black-and-white photograph-lined walls glinted through fogged windows; she spotted a heavy oak bookshelf tucked by the back door—rumors of a secret room for clandestine meetings pricked her memory, but she couldn’t afford a detour. She raced after him, her boots sloshing through puddles that reeked of stale beer and burnt fries. The suspect’s pace picked up as they reached Camden’s edge, his form blurring into the shadow of an abandoned Tube station entrance. Harlow skidded to a halt at the metal gate blocking the stairs—rusted bars twisted into jagged shapes, damp concrete reeking of mildew and copper. The suspect paused just beyond the gate, fumbling with a small object in his palm before he tossed it over his shoulder and slipped down the stairs. The object clattered at her feet: a weathered bone token, its surface carved with faint, winding symbols. Harlow stared at the token. She’d heard whispers of the Veil Market—an underground supernatural black market that moved locations every full moon, accessible only to those with a bone token. Her partner, DS Morris, had mumbled about similar tokens three years ago, days before he vanished under unexplained circumstances. She tensed her watch strap, the worn leather a tactile anchor as she fought the flicker of unease in her brown eyes. A figure stepped from the shadows beside the gate, his short curly dark brown hair matted with rain, olive skin glistening with sweat. Tomás Herrera—she’d identified him weeks ago as the former NHS paramedic who provided off-the-books care for the clique she suspected of criminal activity. His scar ran along his left forearm, visible where his sleeve had ridden up, and his Saint Christopher medallion glinted against his chest as he wiped blood from his fingers with a ragged cloth. A wounded market goer leaned against the wall behind him, gash on their neck oozing blood that stung Harlow’s nostrils. "That man’s a suspect in a double homicide." "He’s a messenger for the market—no hands on blood." "I don’t care about your clique’s hierarchies; I’m taking him in." "You can’t pass the gate without a bone token. The market’s guardians will tear you apart." "Morris faced worse before he vanished." "You don’t know what you’re chasing. The supernatural isn’t a case file to close." "18 years of decorated service says I do." Tomás stepped closer, his warm brown eyes hardening. He nodded at the wounded goer, his fingers brushing the medallion around his neck—a nervous habit she’d noted in surveillance reports. "I lost my NHS license for treating them. People the system abandons. You think your badge makes you judge, jury, and executioner?" Harlow’s jaw tightened. She bent to pick up the bone token, its rough surface digging into her palm. The gate creaked behind her, and she spun—shadowy figures had emerged from the Tube stairs, their forms indistinct, their breaths hissing in the damp air. The suspect leaned against the wall at the bottom of the stairs, yelling a command that made the figures advance. Harlow scanned the alley for an escape route: a locked fire door to her left, a stack of rotting crates to her right. The wounded market goer whimpered, and Tomás’s hand darted to his medallion again, a silent plea that didn’t escape her notice. She tested the bone token in her fist, weighing the risk of stepping into the market against the cost of letting the suspect slip away. Morris’s face flickered in her mind—his laugh, the way he’d tapped his own watch before he vanished—and she tensed her wrist, the leather strap digging deeper. The shadowy figures moved closer, their boots thudding a slow tick-tock that mirrored the dread in her chest. Tomás stepped between her and the figures, his scarred forearm outstretched. "Stand down. She’s not here to hurt the market—yet." "The guardians don’t care about ‘yet.’" "Then talk to them. You’ve got the token; they’ll listen to anyone who holds one." "I don’t barter with supernatural thugs." Harlow’s words hung in the air, thick with rain and tension. The suspect yelled again, and one of the shadowy figures lunged at Tomás, its clawed hand swiping at his medallion. Tomás ducked, his curly hair brushing the damp concrete, and grabbed a shard of broken crate from the ground. He swung it at the figure, the wood cracking against its shoulder, and yelled at Harlow: "Use the token or we both die." Harlow hesitated. She’d spent 18 years chasing criminals, solving cases with logic and evidence—not bargaining with creatures from a black market rumor. But the figure’s clawed hand raked Tomás’s forearm, reopening his old knife scar, and blood oozed onto the concrete. The copper stench intensified, mixing with the mildew of the Tube, and she felt her military precision slip—for a split second, she was back in the alley where Morris vanished, the same copper stench in the air, the same tick-tock of boots echoing. She raised the bone token, holding it up to the shadowy figures. The token glowed faintly, its carved symbols bleeding red into the rain-soaked air. The figures paused, their hissing breaths fading to a murmur. Harlow stepped toward the gate, her boots clicking against the concrete, and reached for the rusted latch. Then, a hidden door slammed open behind her, its metal frame scraping the concrete. A blade pressed to her throat, its cold edge biting through her uniform collar. The figure holding it whispered a word she didn’t recognize—one that made the hair on the back of her neck stand on end—and she felt the bone token slip from her hand, clattering to the ground as the shadowy figures advanced again.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags1
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences13
tagDensity0.077
leniency0.154
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1056
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
52.65% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1056
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"echoed"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count1
2
word"clandestine"
count1
3
word"raced"
count1
4
word"flicker"
count1
5
word"glistening"
count1
6
word"scanned"
count1
7
word"flickered"
count1
8
word"tension"
count1
9
word"echoing"
count1
highlights
0"echoed"
1"pulse"
2"clandestine"
3"raced"
4"flicker"
5"glistening"
6"scanned"
7"flickered"
8"tension"
9"echoing"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
1
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"clenched her fist"
1"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences45
matches
0"the flicker of unease"
47.62% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences45
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"notice"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences57
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen45
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1030
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions32
wordCount893
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity1.12
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Tomás"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Raven1
Nest1
Camden1
Tube3
Veil1
Market1
Morris3
Herrera1
Saint1
Christopher1
Harlow10
Tomás7
persons
0"Raven"
1"Camden"
2"Morris"
3"Herrera"
4"Saint"
5"Christopher"
6"Harlow"
7"Tomás"
places
0"Soho"
1"Tube"
2"Market"
globalScore0.94
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences42
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1030
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences57
matches(empty)
58.21% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs14
mean73.57
std26.02
cv0.354
sampleLengths
016
1111
2107
371
4100
572
651
7107
869
947
1073
1184
1252
1370
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences45
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs147
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount13
semicolonCount4
flaggedSentences13
totalSentences57
ratio0.228
matches
0"Rain plastered her cropped salt-and-pepper hair to her sharp jaw; her worn leather watch dug into her left wrist as she clenched her fist—an old military precision habit when closing in."
1"The bar’s black-and-white photograph-lined walls glinted through fogged windows; she spotted a heavy oak bookshelf tucked by the back door—rumors of a secret room for clandestine meetings pricked her memory, but she couldn’t afford a detour."
2"Harlow skidded to a halt at the metal gate blocking the stairs—rusted bars twisted into jagged shapes, damp concrete reeking of mildew and copper."
3"She’d heard whispers of the Veil Market—an underground supernatural black market that moved locations every full moon, accessible only to those with a bone token."
4"Tomás Herrera—she’d identified him weeks ago as the former NHS paramedic who provided off-the-books care for the clique she suspected of criminal activity."
5"\"I don’t care about your clique’s hierarchies; I’m taking him in.\""
6"He nodded at the wounded goer, his fingers brushing the medallion around his neck—a nervous habit she’d noted in surveillance reports."
7"The gate creaked behind her, and she spun—shadowy figures had emerged from the Tube stairs, their forms indistinct, their breaths hissing in the damp air."
8"Morris’s face flickered in her mind—his laugh, the way he’d tapped his own watch before he vanished—and she tensed her wrist, the leather strap digging deeper."
9"\"Then talk to them. You’ve got the token; they’ll listen to anyone who holds one.\""
10"She’d spent 18 years chasing criminals, solving cases with logic and evidence—not bargaining with creatures from a black market rumor."
11"The copper stench intensified, mixing with the mildew of the Tube, and she felt her military precision slip—for a split second, she was back in the alley where Morris vanished, the same copper stench in the air, the same tick-tock of boots echoing."
12"The figure holding it whispered a word she didn’t recognize—one that made the hair on the back of her neck stand on end—and she felt the bone token slip from her hand, clattering to the ground as the shadowy figures advanced again."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount917
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"white photograph-lined walls"
1"underground supernatural black market"
adverbCount12
adverbRatio0.013086150490730643
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.0054525627044711015
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences57
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences57
mean18.07
std8.87
cv0.491
sampleLengths
016
131
215
329
436
517
622
724
827
917
105
1125
1219
1322
1423
1523
1634
1720
188
199
2011
2116
226
2314
248
258
2621
2722
283
2915
3025
3120
3223
3321
3425
3526
3618
3711
389
396
4015
416
4211
4320
4419
4523
462
4720
4819
4943
44.74% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.2982456140350877
totalSentences57
uniqueOpeners17
75.76% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences44
matches
0"Then, a hidden door slammed"
ratio0.023
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount12
totalSentences44
matches
0"She rounded the corner to"
1"She raced after him, her"
2"She’d heard whispers of the"
3"Her partner, DS Morris, had"
4"She tensed her watch strap,"
5"His scar ran along his"
6"He nodded at the wounded"
7"She bent to pick up"
8"She tested the bone token"
9"He swung it at the"
10"She’d spent 18 years chasing"
11"She raised the bone token,"
ratio0.273
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount42
totalSentences44
matches
0"Harlow’s fingers scraped the suspect’s"
1"Rain plastered her cropped salt-and-pepper"
2"The suspect’s boots thudded ahead,"
3"She rounded the corner to"
4"The bar’s black-and-white photograph-lined walls"
5"She raced after him, her"
6"The suspect’s pace picked up"
7"Harlow skidded to a halt"
8"The suspect paused just beyond"
9"The object clattered at her"
10"Harlow stared at the token."
11"She’d heard whispers of the"
12"Her partner, DS Morris, had"
13"She tensed her watch strap,"
14"A figure stepped from the"
15"Tomás Herrera—she’d identified him weeks"
16"His scar ran along his"
17"A wounded market goer leaned"
18"Tomás stepped closer, his warm"
19"He nodded at the wounded"
ratio0.955
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences44
matches(empty)
ratio0
17.86% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences40
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"The suspect’s boots thudded ahead, a quick tick-tock that echoed the pulse in her temples."
1"She’d heard whispers of the Veil Market—an underground supernatural black market that moved locations every full moon, accessible only to those with a bone toke…"
2"A wounded market goer leaned against the wall behind him, gash on their neck oozing blood that stung Harlow’s nostrils."
3"The wounded market goer whimpered, and Tomás’s hand darted to his medallion again, a silent plea that didn’t escape her notice."
4"She tested the bone token in her fist, weighing the risk of stepping into the market against the cost of letting the suspect slip away."
5"The shadowy figures moved closer, their boots thudding a slow tick-tock that mirrored the dread in her chest."
6"The figure holding it whispered a word she didn’t recognize—one that made the hair on the back of her neck stand on end—and she felt the bone token slip from he…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags1
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"He swung, the wood cracking against its shoulder, and yelled at Harlow:"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
74.4943%