Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYAWK99YXGM5WWJ7JMM9Z8D

Run Details

Duration:
34.8s
Cost:
$0.002055
Provider:
xAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The dim hum of The Raven's Nest wrapped around Rory like an old coat, threadbare but familiar. She pushed through the heavy oak door, the green neon sign above flickering its eternal welcome to the Soho night. Rain-slicked streets gleamed under streetlamps outside, but in here, the world narrowed to polished wood counters, the low murmur of patrons nursing pints, and the faint scent of aged whiskey mingling with cigarette smoke from the alley out back. Her delivery shift at Golden Empress had stretched into the evening—dodging London traffic on her battered scooter, hauling bags of dim sum through drizzling downpours—and all she craved now was a quiet stool at the end of the bar, a gin and tonic to chase away the ache in her shoulders. She lived upstairs, in the cramped flat with its peeling wallpaper and view of the rooftops, but descending to the Nest felt like crossing into another life. Silas kept the place running like clockwork, a haven for the shadowy types who drifted through Soho, but she rarely lingered. A nod to him from afar, maybe a quick hello if he was behind the bar. It had been that way for months since she'd moved in—polite distance, the kind that suited her. No need to dredge up the past. The bar was half-full tonight, a mix of locals hunched over their drinks and a cluster of tourists snapping photos of the black-and-white photographs lining the walls: grainy shots of wartime London, faded maps of forgotten empires. Rory slid onto her usual stool, the leather cracked and warm from previous sitters, and signaled to the bartender—a lanky kid named Tom who poured with efficient grace. "Gin and tonic, please. Light on the lime." As Tom mixed the drink, her eyes wandered to the far end of the bar. Silas was there, polishing glasses with a rag that had seen better days. His grey-streaked auburn hair caught the low light, neatly combed as always, and that silver signet ring glinted on his right hand as he worked. He moved with the same deliberate rhythm, but the slight hitch in his left leg was more pronounced tonight, a subtle drag that made her wince inwardly. Fifty-eight now, she calculated quickly—he'd been forty when they'd last really spoken, back in Cardiff, during one of those endless summers when her father dragged the family to visit his old MI6 contacts. She hadn't planned on talking to him. Not tonight. But as if sensing her gaze, Silas looked up, his hazel eyes sharpening across the dim expanse. He paused, rag suspended, and a slow recognition spread across his face—not the casual nod of a landlord to a tenant, but something deeper, like a door creaking open on a room long sealed. He set the glass down and limped toward her, the faint tap of his boot echoing against the floorboards. "Rory Carter," he said, voice low and gravelly, carrying that Irish lilt he'd never quite shaken from his Dublin roots. "As I live and breathe. Though you look like you've been dragged through a hedge backward." She managed a half-smile, fingers tightening around the cool glass Tom slid her way. Up close, the lines around his eyes were deeper, etched like the maps on the walls, and his beard—neatly trimmed, matching the grey streaks—framed a jaw that had once seemed unbreakable. "Silas. Yeah, long shift. Deliveries don't wait for the rain to stop." He didn't sit, just leaned on the bar, his weight shifting to ease the bad knee. The signet ring tapped lightly against the wood. "You could've hollered down the stairs. I keep a decent stock up there for emergencies." His gaze flicked to her wrist, where the small crescent scar peeked from under her sleeve—the one from that idiot childhood tumble off her bike, the one he'd bandaged himself after her father laughed it off. She tugged the sleeve down instinctively. "It's fine. I manage." The words came out sharper than intended, a reflex born of too many solitary evenings. They hadn't spoken like this in... God, years. Not since she'd been a teenager, wide-eyed and trailing after her father to those secretive gatherings in Cardiff, where Brendan Carter—barrister by day, amateur spook by night—would introduce her to his old mates from the service. Silas had been the favorite then: the one who told stories of Prague and Berlin without the bluster, who slipped her a shilling for sweets and warned her about boys with wandering hands. "Mentor" was too formal a word; he'd been more like an uncle she chose, a steady presence amid her parents' endless debates over law and literature. But time had carved its canyons. She was twenty-five now, straight shoulder-length black hair tucked behind her ears, bright blue eyes shadowed by the weight of choices she hadn't made yet. No more Pre-Law dreams, no more safe harbor in Cardiff. Evan had seen to that—the bruises fading but the fear lingering, a ghost in her reflections. Eva's call had pulled her to London: "Come, Rory. Start over." And here she was, pedaling takeout through the city's veins, crashing above a bar she barely knew anymore. Silas's eyes narrowed, reading her as he always had. "Manage," he repeated, a hint of amusement undercut by something sharper. "That's your line now, is it? Last I heard from your da, you were set to conquer the courts. Top of your class at Cardiff Uni." She took a sip of the gin, the tonic's bite cutting through the haze. It burned going down, steadying her. "That was before." Before Evan, before the flat in Angel that smelled of his anger, before she packed a bag and vanished into the night. Her father had written once, a stiff letter about duty and perseverance, but Silas... he'd sent nothing. Not a word. "Things changed." He nodded, slow, like he'd expected as much. The bar noise swelled around them—a laugh from the tourists, the clink of glasses—but it felt distant, muffled. He poured himself a finger of whiskey from a bottle under the counter, neat, and took a measured sip. "They do. This place..." He gestured vaguely at the walls, the photographs curling at the edges. "Opened it after Prague. Thought it'd be a quiet end. Front for the old network, if needed. But mostly, it's just pints and regrets." Regrets. The word hung between them, heavy as the rain pattering against the windows. Rory traced the scar on her wrist with her thumb, the raised crescent a reminder of simpler falls. Back then, Silas had seemed invincible—tall at six-one, striding through her father's study with tales of shadows and secrets, his limp just a whisper from some unnamed skirmish. Now, it defined him, that drag in his step, and the bar... it was a cage disguised as sanctuary. She'd seen the hidden room once, glimpsed through the bookshelf when Tom was restocking: a warren of files and flickering screens, echoes of the spymaster he used to be. "You look different," she said finally, the words tumbling out before she could stop them. "Settled. Like you've... made peace." He chuckled, but it was dry, without mirth. "Peace? Christ, Rory. This knee's a daily sermon on what peace costs." He flexed his leg slightly, wincing. "Botched op in '05. Lost two good men. Came home to this." His hand swept the bar, encompassing the maps, the patrons who came for the illusion of anonymity. "Your da wrote me off the books after that. Said I was too bitter for the game." Brendan. Always the fixer, patching alliances like wounds. Rory remembered the letters her father read aloud at the dinner table, Silas's updates from the field—coded, thrilling to her young ears. Then silence, after Prague. She'd asked once, probing over tea. "He's retired," her father had said, eyes distant. "Time moves on." But she wondered now if that silence had been a mercy, or a severance. "And you?" Silas leaned closer, voice dropping. "Fled Cardiff like a storm wind, your da said. Eva's doing, I hear. What's chasing you these days? Or who?" The gin warmed her chest, loosening the knot there. She could lie—say it was ambition, the city's pull—but his eyes wouldn't let her. Those hazel depths, flecked with the green of old suspicions. "Evan," she admitted, the name tasting like ash. "He... it wasn't good. Bruises, threats. Eva got me out. London seemed far enough." Silas's jaw tightened, the beard shifting. He set his glass down harder than necessary, the ring clinking. "Should've called me, girl. I could've—" "What? Pulled strings? From behind the bar?" The bitterness surprised her, spilling over. She hadn't meant to lash out, but there it was, raw and unfiltered. Years of wondering why he hadn't reached out after her father's hints, why the mentor who'd bandaged her scrapes had vanished when she needed a compass most. "You were gone, Silas. After Prague, it was radio silence. Da said you washed your hands of it all." He straightened, the limp forgotten in the tension coiling his frame. "Washed my hands? I was a wreck, Rory. Knee shot to hell, nightmares that'd wake the dead. Your da kept you clear for a reason—thought the world's shadows would swallow you if I dragged you in." His voice cracked, just a hair, betraying the man beneath the authority. "Regret's a bastard. I told myself you'd follow his path, law and lights. Not... this." "This?" She gestured to herself, the damp jacket smelling of rain and fried rice, the scooter keys jangling in her pocket. "This is surviving. Better than pretending, like you do here." The words stung even as she said them, revealing the rift she'd nursed in secret. The Nest wasn't just a bar; it was his anchor, a place to watch the world turn without touching it. And her, upstairs, a ghost in his domain, both of them orbiting regrets unspoken. For a long moment, silence stretched, broken only by the bartender calling last orders in the distance. Silas's eyes searched hers, seeing the girl from Cardiff—the quick thinker with bright blue eyes, outsmarting puzzles he'd set for her amusement. Now, those eyes held storms. "You're right," he said at last, voice soft. "I changed. Hid in this hole, thinking time would bury the weight. But you... you've got his fire, Rory. Your da's. Don't let it flicker out." She swallowed, the gin turning sour. The weight of time pressed down: the years stolen by distance, the paths diverged. Evan was gone, but the scars lingered, and Silas's absence had been its own bruise. "And you? Still the spymaster, or just the barkeep?" He smiled then, faint and genuine, the lines crinkling. "Both, lass. Always both." He reached across the bar, hesitating before clasping her hand briefly—warm, callused, the ring cool against her skin. "Stay for a spell. Talk. We've time now." Rory nodded, the tension easing like rain after thunder. The bar's hum enveloped them again, a fragile bridge over the chasm of years. Outside, London pulsed on, indifferent, but here, in the dim light of The Raven's Nest, two old friends began to mend what time had frayed—one halting conversation at a time. As the night deepened, their words flowed haltingly at first: stories of her mother's Welsh lilt echoing in lessons long past, his tales of the Nest's quirky patrons masking deeper truths. He spoke of the hidden room, the bookshelf's secret latch, a nod to the life he couldn't fully abandon. She confessed the terror of nights with Evan, the crescent scar on her wrist paling against the invisible ones. Laughter crept in eventually, tentative, over shared memories of Cardiff summers—her outwitting his riddles, him sneaking her sips of cider when her father wasn't looking. But beneath it, the regrets lingered, unspoken barbs: his for retreating into solitude, hers for not reaching out sooner. The clock ticked past midnight, the green neon sign buzzing faintly as patrons thinned. Rory felt the shift, subtle as his limp—a reclamation, perhaps, of the bond time had tried to steal. When she finally rose to climb the stairs, Silas watched her go, his hazel eyes steady. "Goodnight, Rory," he called. "Goodnight, Silas," she replied, the door swinging shut behind her. Upstairs, the flat waited, but for the first time in months, it felt less like hiding and more like home.
created_at"2026-02-20T20:12:03.77Z" 2/20/2026, 8:12:03 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
69.57% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags23
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"He gestured vaguely [vaguely]"
1"she said finally [finally]"
2"His voice cracked just [just]"
dialogueSentences39
tagDensity0.59
leniency1
rawRatio0.13
effectiveRatio0.13
90.48% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2100
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
2
adverb"lightly"
count1
3
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"really"
2"lightly"
3"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
23.81% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2100
totalAiIsms32
found
0
word"familiar"
count1
1
word"efficient"
count1
2
word"calculated"
count1
3
word"echoing"
count2
4
word"lilt"
count2
5
word"etched"
count1
6
word"weight"
count4
7
word"flicked"
count1
8
word"solitary"
count1
9
word"measured"
count1
10
word"traced"
count1
11
word"reminder"
count1
12
word"whisper"
count1
13
word"sanctuary"
count1
14
word"echoes"
count1
15
word"coded"
count1
16
word"silence"
count4
17
word"depths"
count1
18
word"tension"
count2
19
word"unspoken"
count2
20
word"flicker"
count1
21
word"pulsed"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"efficient"
2"calculated"
3"echoing"
4"lilt"
5"etched"
6"weight"
7"flicked"
8"solitary"
9"measured"
10"traced"
11"reminder"
12"whisper"
13"sanctuary"
14"echoes"
15"coded"
16"silence"
17"depths"
18"tension"
19"unspoken"
20"flicker"
21"pulsed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences108
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences108
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences124
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen53
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2065
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions20
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions60
wordCount1698
uniqueNames22
maxNameDensity0.77
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Raven2
Nest5
Rory6
Soho2
Golden1
Empress1
London4
Tom4
Cardiff5
Silas13
Irish1
Dublin1
Brendan2
Carter1
Prague2
Berlin1
Pre-Law1
Evan4
Angel1
Regrets1
Welsh1
Upstairs1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Rory"
3"Empress"
4"Tom"
5"Silas"
6"Brendan"
7"Carter"
8"Evan"
9"Angel"
10"Regrets"
places
0"Soho"
1"Golden"
2"London"
3"Cardiff"
4"Dublin"
5"Prague"
6"Berlin"
globalScore1
windowScore1
47.96% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences98
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"felt like crossing into another life"
1"as if sensing her gaze, Silas looked up, his hazel eyes sharpening across the dim expanse"
2"seemed unbreakable"
3"seemed invincible tall at six-one, striding through her father's study with tales of shadows and secrets, his limp just a whisper from some unnamed skirmish"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.484
wordCount2065
matches
0"not the casual nod of a landlord to a tenant, but something deeper, like a door creaking open on a room long s"
86.02% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount3
totalSentences124
matches
0"been that way"
1"carrying that Irish"
2"to that—the"
72.65% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs30
mean68.83
std27.83
cv0.404
sampleLengths
0127
188
273
3113
479
536
657
781
8122
986
1046
1167
1285
13108
1420
1572
1665
1727
1855
1923
2072
2174
2280
2378
2444
2539
2653
2794
2871
2930
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences108
matches
0"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs279
matches
0"was, pedaling"
1"wasn't looking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount23
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences20
totalSentences124
ratio0.161
matches
0"Her delivery shift at Golden Empress had stretched into the evening—dodging London traffic on her battered scooter, hauling bags of dim sum through drizzling downpours—and all she craved now was a quiet stool at the end of the bar, a gin and tonic to chase away the ache in her shoulders."
1"It had been that way for months since she'd moved in—polite distance, the kind that suited her."
2"Rory slid onto her usual stool, the leather cracked and warm from previous sitters, and signaled to the bartender—a lanky kid named Tom who poured with efficient grace."
3"Fifty-eight now, she calculated quickly—he'd been forty when they'd last really spoken, back in Cardiff, during one of those endless summers when her father dragged the family to visit his old MI6 contacts."
4"He paused, rag suspended, and a slow recognition spread across his face—not the casual nod of a landlord to a tenant, but something deeper, like a door creaking open on a room long sealed."
5"Up close, the lines around his eyes were deeper, etched like the maps on the walls, and his beard—neatly trimmed, matching the grey streaks—framed a jaw that had once seemed unbreakable."
6"\"You could've hollered down the stairs. I keep a decent stock up there for emergencies.\" His gaze flicked to her wrist, where the small crescent scar peeked from under her sleeve—the one from that idiot childhood tumble off her bike, the one he'd bandaged himself after her father laughed it off."
7"Not since she'd been a teenager, wide-eyed and trailing after her father to those secretive gatherings in Cardiff, where Brendan Carter—barrister by day, amateur spook by night—would introduce her to his old mates from the service."
8"\"Mentor\" was too formal a word; he'd been more like an uncle she chose, a steady presence amid her parents' endless debates over law and literature."
9"Evan had seen to that—the bruises fading but the fear lingering, a ghost in her reflections."
10"The bar noise swelled around them—a laugh from the tourists, the clink of glasses—but it felt distant, muffled."
11"Back then, Silas had seemed invincible—tall at six-one, striding through her father's study with tales of shadows and secrets, his limp just a whisper from some unnamed skirmish."
12"Rory remembered the letters her father read aloud at the dinner table, Silas's updates from the field—coded, thrilling to her young ears."
13"She could lie—say it was ambition, the city's pull—but his eyes wouldn't let her."
14"The Nest wasn't just a bar; it was his anchor, a place to watch the world turn without touching it."
15"Silas's eyes searched hers, seeing the girl from Cardiff—the quick thinker with bright blue eyes, outsmarting puzzles he'd set for her amusement."
16"\"Both, lass. Always both.\" He reached across the bar, hesitating before clasping her hand briefly—warm, callused, the ring cool against her skin."
17"Outside, London pulsed on, indifferent, but here, in the dim light of The Raven's Nest, two old friends began to mend what time had frayed—one halting conversation at a time."
18"Laughter crept in eventually, tentative, over shared memories of Cardiff summers—her outwitting his riddles, him sneaking her sips of cider when her father wasn't looking."
19"Rory felt the shift, subtle as his limp—a reclamation, perhaps, of the bond time had tried to steal."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1438
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"tentative, over shared memories"
adverbCount47
adverbRatio0.03268428372739916
lyAdverbCount19
lyAdverbRatio0.01321279554937413
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences124
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences124
mean16.65
std10.14
cv0.609
sampleLengths
017
120
239
351
427
521
616
717
87
937
1028
118
1215
1313
1425
1527
1633
177
182
1917
2034
2119
2220
2316
2414
2531
2612
2716
288
2951
306
3119
326
332
3436
3533
3626
376
3825
3910
4016
4129
429
4311
4426
4514
466
4725
4814
493
72.85% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.45161290322580644
totalSentences124
uniqueOpeners56
64.72% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences103
matches
0"Always the fixer, patching alliances"
1"Then silence, after Prague."
ratio0.019
41.36% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount46
totalSentences103
matches
0"She pushed through the heavy"
1"Her delivery shift at Golden"
2"She lived upstairs, in the"
3"It had been that way"
4"His grey-streaked auburn hair caught"
5"He moved with the same"
6"She hadn't planned on talking"
7"He paused, rag suspended, and"
8"He set the glass down"
9"he said, voice low and"
10"She managed a half-smile, fingers"
11"He didn't sit, just leaned"
12"His gaze flicked to her"
13"She tugged the sleeve down"
14"They hadn't spoken like this"
15"She was twenty-five now, straight"
16"he repeated, a hint of"
17"She took a sip of"
18"It burned going down, steadying"
19"Her father had written once,"
ratio0.447
81.36% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount78
totalSentences103
matches
0"The dim hum of The"
1"She pushed through the heavy"
2"Her delivery shift at Golden"
3"She lived upstairs, in the"
4"Silas kept the place running"
5"A nod to him from"
6"It had been that way"
7"The bar was half-full tonight,"
8"Rory slid onto her usual"
9"Silas was there, polishing glasses"
10"His grey-streaked auburn hair caught"
11"He moved with the same"
12"She hadn't planned on talking"
13"He paused, rag suspended, and"
14"He set the glass down"
15"he said, voice low and"
16"She managed a half-smile, fingers"
17"He didn't sit, just leaned"
18"The signet ring tapped lightly"
19"His gaze flicked to her"
ratio0.757
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences103
matches
0"Before Evan, before the flat"
1"Now, it defined him, that"
2"Now, those eyes held storms."
ratio0.029
82.32% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences59
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"Silas kept the place running like clockwork, a haven for the shadowy types who drifted through Soho, but she rarely lingered."
1"Rory slid onto her usual stool, the leather cracked and warm from previous sitters, and signaled to the bartender—a lanky kid named Tom who poured with efficien…"
2"He moved with the same deliberate rhythm, but the slight hitch in his left leg was more pronounced tonight, a subtle drag that made her wince inwardly."
3"But as if sensing her gaze, Silas looked up, his hazel eyes sharpening across the dim expanse."
4"Up close, the lines around his eyes were deeper, etched like the maps on the walls, and his beard—neatly trimmed, matching the grey streaks—framed a jaw that ha…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags23
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"he repeated, a hint of amusement undercut by something sharper"
1"she said finally, the words tumbling out before she could stop them"
2"her father had, eyes distant"
3"Silas leaned, voice dropping"
4"he said, voice soft"
5"she replied, the door swinging shut behind her"
47.44% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"he repeated (repeat)"
1"her father had (have)"
2"she admitted (admit)"
3"The words stung (sting)"
dialogueSentences39
tagDensity0.231
leniency0.462
rawRatio0.444
effectiveRatio0.205
79.1511%