Run: 2026-02-20-01KHYB1J8XYQH8VPMG2FTK47BG

Run Details

Duration:
2m 32s
Cost:
$0.013278
Provider:
Seed

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The zip of Rory’s Golden Empress delivery bag caught on a thorn as she pushed through the brambles lining Richmond Park’s western edge, and she cursed under her breath—Irish lilt slipping through, a habit she’d inherited from her father when frustrated. Her straight, shoulder-length black hair stuck to the sweat on her neck, even though the December night bit at her cheeks, and she brushed it away with a hand that paused at the small crescent scar on her left wrist. The scar throbbed, a faint echo of the childhood fall that had left it there—she’d climbed an oak with Eva, slipped, and gashed her wrist on a broken branch before her friend had hauled her to safety. That memory tugged at her, a reminder of the last time she’d felt unshakably safe before Evan had wormed his way into her life, his fist around that same wrist two years prior. She’d come to the park because of the pendant. The deep crimson Heartstone, strung on a silver chain and roughly the size of her thumbnail, had been burning through her shirt for a week—faint at first, a warmth she’d chalked up to the restaurant’s steam tables, but growing sharper every time she’d made a delivery near Richmond’s tree-lined paths. Her quick, out-of-the-box thinking had led her to dig through old library archives after her shifts: tales of a hidden grove bounded by ancient oak standing stones, a pocket where time bent and wildflowers bloomed year-round. She’d dismissed the fae tales as folklore until last night, when the pendant’s pulse had synchronized with a strange, off-key whisper she’d heard from the park’s trees—one that sounded like her mother’s Welsh lullaby, but twisted, as if sung underwater. The brambles cleared, and she froze. Before her stood six oak standing stones, their bark gnarled and black with age, marking a circular boundary she’d never seen on any park map. Between them, wildflowers bloomed in a riot of color—crimson poppies, snow-white daisies, purple lupines—their petals glowing faintly in the moonlight as if lit from within. It was December; every other flower in London was dead, and the sight sent a cold shiver down her spine that had nothing to do with the night air. She reached for the pendant beneath her shirt, and her fingers brushed its warm, pulsing surface. The faint inner glow she’d only noticed in dark rooms was brighter now, a tiny crimson flame beating in time with her heart. She stepped across the invisible line between the stones, and the world shifted. The hum of London’s traffic vanished, replaced by a silence so thick she could almost taste it. No wind stirred, but the oak stones’ branches creaked as if pulled by invisible hands, and a child’s laugh echoed from the clearing beyond—high, tinkling, and completely unaccompanied by any sign of a child. Rory’s bright blue eyes darted to the edge of her vision, where a shadow taller than any human stretched across the wildflowers before vanishing. She reached for her phone, checking the time: 11:17 PM. She’d left the restaurant at 11:05; the walk should have taken 12 minutes, but the math didn’t add up—especially now that the park’s usual night sounds were gone. She stepped deeper into the clearing, her delivery bag thudding against her hip. The wildflowers brushed her ankles, their petals soft against her scuffed sneakers, and she noticed that their glow was growing brighter as she moved. The pendant’s pulse quickened, its warmth seeping into her chest until it was almost a burn. She paused to catch her breath, thinking she’d been walking for 20 minutes, and checked her phone again. 11:17 PM. The screen flickered, then died—no warning, no low-battery alert. She swore again, shoving the phone into her pocket, and traced the scar on her wrist with a trembling finger. Cool-headed as she was, the time warp was chipping away at her composure; she’d researched the grove’s lore enough to know that an hour inside could be minutes or days outside, and she didn’t want to risk Evan finding her gone for too long. He’d been leaving notes on her flat’s door above Silas’ bar for a week, his handwriting sharp and threatening—*I know you’re here, Laila*—using the alias only he’d insisted on calling her, a name she’d hated since he’d tied it to his abuse. A whisper curled through the silence, and Rory’s blood ran cold. It was her mother’s lullaby, the one Jennifer had sung to her every night until she’d left for Cardiff University—*Ar hyd y nos*, its Welsh lyrics soft and soothing, but now twisted into something guttural, as if spoken through a throat filled with mud. The whisper came from every direction at once, and she spun in a circle, her eyes scanning the oak stones for any sign of a figure. Nothing—only the wildflowers, swaying without a breeze, their glow now so bright it cast long shadows across the clearing. The pendant’s burn intensified, and she tugged it from beneath her shirt, gasping at the sight: the crimson gem was pulsing so rapidly it looked like a tiny, beating heart, its inner glow lighting up her face. She turned to leave, but the oak standing stones had changed. The gap she’d stepped through was gone, replaced by a wall of gnarled bark and tangled vines. She ran to the nearest stone, running her hands over its rough surface, and realized that the stones were moving—slowly, almost imperceptibly, their positions shifting so that the circle was tightening around her. A memory flashed: Evan, pinning her against a wall in their Cardiff flat, his hand around her left wrist, the scar throbbing as he screamed at her for trying to leave. She flinched, rubbing the scar as if to wipe the memory away, and the pendant’s pulse skipped a beatwarmth flaring so hot she had to let go of the chain. The child’s laugh returned, closer this time, and she caught a glimpse of a shadow at the edge of her vision—taller than a man, its limbs too long, its head too large, swaying in time with the wildflowers. She backed away, tripping over a lupine and landing hard on the grass. The delivery bag spilled open, and a container of sweet and sour chicken rolled into the wildflowers, its lid popping off to spill orange sauce onto the glowing petals. The sauce hissed, and the petals turned black, curling into ash before her eyes. Rory stared, her mouth dry. That was new—folklore hadn’t mentioned wildflowers reacting to human food like that. Her quick thinking kicked in: if the flowers were sensitive to Earthly things, maybe she could use that to mark her path. She grabbed a handful of napkins from her bag and tore them into strips, tucking them into the petals of the unharmed flowers as she stood. She’d taken three steps when the whisper returned, this time clear enough to make her freeze. *Laila*. It was Evan’s voice, distorted but unmistakeable, and it came from right behind her. She spun, but there was nothing there—only the oak stones, the wildflowers, the growing shadow. The pendant’s burn was now almost unbearable, and she realized with a jolt that it was pointing toward the center of the circle, where two oak standing stones stood closer together than the others. Between them, a faint black rift had opened in the air, its edges shimmering like heat haze. The archives she’d pored over had mentioned Hel portals—gateways to a realm of chaos—and the pendant’s behavior matched the tales: pulsing warmth when near one. Time warped again. She thought she’d been staring at the rift for five minutes, but when she blinked, the moon was higher in the sky, and the wildflowers’ glow had dimmed to a faint flicker. The shadow was now at the edge of the circle, moving toward her, its limbs scraping against the oak stones with a sound like broken glass. Rory’s cool-headedness was fraying; she’d never faced something like this, not even with Evan. She fidgeted with her left wrist’s scar, remembering Eva’s words when she’d fled to London: *Conceal, don’t fight—use what’s around you*. She scanned the clearing, her bright blue eyes landing on the oak standing stone nearest her, its bark gnarled with hidden crevices. She climbed, her sneakers scraping against the bark, and tucked herself into a crevice just as the shadow reached the spot where she’d been standing. The shadow loomed beneath her, its form shifting so that she could see a flash of a hand—pale, with a scar across the knuckles, the same scar Evan had gotten in a bar fight. Her breath caught. Was this a fae trick, or was Evan somehow here? The pendant’s pulse grew so strong it felt like it was going to burst through her chest, and the rift between the stones widened, letting out a low, guttural groan. She looked down at the wildflowers, her napkin markers still tucked into their petals, and realized that they were now pointing toward the rift—she’d accidentally marked a path straight to it. The shadow turned its head upward, and she saw two faint red glows where its eyes should be, glowing in time with her pendant. She pressed herself deeper into the crevice, her fingers digging into the bark until her nails broke. The time warp was now impossible to ignore; she could feel minutes stretching into hours, the night’s cold seeping through her clothes even as the pendant burned her chest. The child’s laugh merged with Evan’s whisper, and the lullaby returned, louder now, as if sung by a chorus of distorted voices. She thought of her father’s barrister’s voice, sharp and logical, telling her to always gather evidence before acting; she thought of her mother’s teacher’s hands, gentle as she’d bandaged her wrist after the fall. She thought of Eva, waiting for her at the Golden Empress to swap shift stories, and she knew she couldn’t stay hidden forever. The shadow reached up, its long fingers scraping against the crevice’s edge, and Rory’s heart hammered against her ribs. She grabbed the pendant from beneath her shirt, its warmth searing her palm, and squeezed it as hard as she could. The crimson gem flared, sending a burst of light down into the shadow. The shadow screamed—a sound like grinding stone—and recoiled, its red eyes dimming. Rory didn’t hesitate; she scrambled down the oak, her sneakers slipping on the bark, and ran toward the oak standing stones, following the napkin markers in reverse. The wildflowers hissed as she passed, their petals turning black again, but she didn’t stop. She reached the edge of the circle, and this time, the gap between the stones was there—brambles visible beyond, the hum of London’s traffic faint but audible. She threw herself through the gap, tripping over the brambles and landing hard on the grass. She looked up, and the oak standing stones were gone—only a cluster of ordinary oaks stood in their place, no wildflowers, no glow. She checked her phone, which had turned back on: 11:07 PM. She’d been inside the grove for two minutes. The pendant’s pulse had dimmed to a faint warmth, its inner glow gone. She sat there, gasping, her left wrist’s scar throbbing, and realized that the shadow’s red eyes were still burned into her memory. She’d come to the grove to figure out the pendant’s secret, but now she knew something worse: the Hel portal was real, and it was tied to Evan. She stood, brushing the dirt from her clothes, and grabbed her delivery bag from the brambles. She had to find Eva, to tell her what had happened, but as she walked toward the park’s exit, she heard a faint whisper behind her—*Laila*—and she knew the grove wasn’t done with her. The pendant’s warmth flared again, faint but unmistakeable, a silent warning that the rift hadn’t closed, and that the shadow would be waiting for her the next time she dared to step across its boundary.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags3
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences0
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.09% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2036
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"completely"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"completely"
1"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
9.14% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2036
totalAiIsms37
found
0
word"lilt"
count1
1
word"throbbed"
count1
2
word"echo"
count1
3
word"reminder"
count1
4
word"warmth"
count7
5
word"pulse"
count5
6
word"synchronized"
count1
7
word"whisper"
count6
8
word"down her spine"
count1
9
word"silence"
count2
10
word"echoed"
count1
11
word"quickened"
count1
12
word"flickered"
count1
13
word"traced"
count1
14
word"scanning"
count1
15
word"skipped a beat"
count1
16
word"flicker"
count1
17
word"scanned"
count1
18
word"loomed"
count1
19
word"could feel"
count1
20
word"searing"
count1
highlights
0"lilt"
1"throbbed"
2"echo"
3"reminder"
4"warmth"
5"pulse"
6"synchronized"
7"whisper"
8"down her spine"
9"silence"
10"echoed"
11"quickened"
12"flickered"
13"traced"
14"scanning"
15"skipped a beat"
16"flicker"
17"scanned"
18"loomed"
19"could feel"
20"searing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"blood ran cold"
count1
highlights
0"blood ran cold"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences89
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences89
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences89
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen52
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans5
markdownWords17
totalWords2004
ratio0.008
matches
0"I know you’re here, Laila"
1"Ar hyd y nos"
2"Laila"
3"Conceal, don’t fight—use what’s around you"
4"Laila"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions44
wordCount1935
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity0.47
worstName"Evan"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Evan"
discoveredNames
Rory7
Golden2
Empress2
Richmond2
Park1
Irish1
December2
Eva4
Evan9
Heartstone1
Welsh2
London4
Jennifer1
Cardiff2
University1
Earthly1
Hel2
persons
0"Rory"
1"Eva"
2"Evan"
3"Jennifer"
places
0"Golden"
1"Richmond"
2"Park"
3"London"
4"Cardiff"
5"Earthly"
globalScore1
windowScore1
30.95% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences84
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"sounded like her mother’s Welsh lullaby, b"
1"looked like a tiny, beating heart, its in"
2"something like this, not even with Evan"
3"felt like it was going to burst through"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2004
matches(empty)
0.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount5
totalSentences89
matches
0"noticed that their"
1"know that an"
2"realized that the"
3"realized that they"
4"realized that the"
6.24% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs14
mean143.14
std24.6
cv0.172
sampleLengths
0151
1135
2124
3126
4188
5137
6122
7159
8122
9143
10132
11125
12134
13206
89.49% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences89
matches
0"were gone"
1"was gone"
2"were gone"
3"was tied"
78.79% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount6
totalVerbs330
matches
0"was chipping"
1"was pulsing"
2"were moving—was tightening"
3"was pointing"
4"was fraying"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount26
semicolonCount7
flaggedSentences28
totalSentences89
ratio0.315
matches
0"The zip of Rory’s Golden Empress delivery bag caught on a thorn as she pushed through the brambles lining Richmond Park’s western edge, and she cursed under her breath—Irish lilt slipping through, a habit she’d inherited from her father when frustrated."
1"The scar throbbed, a faint echo of the childhood fall that had left it there—she’d climbed an oak with Eva, slipped, and gashed her wrist on a broken branch before her friend had hauled her to safety."
2"The deep crimson Heartstone, strung on a silver chain and roughly the size of her thumbnail, had been burning through her shirt for a week—faint at first, a warmth she’d chalked up to the restaurant’s steam tables, but growing sharper every time she’d made a delivery near Richmond’s tree-lined paths."
3"She’d dismissed the fae tales as folklore until last night, when the pendant’s pulse had synchronized with a strange, off-key whisper she’d heard from the park’s trees—one that sounded like her mother’s Welsh lullaby, but twisted, as if sung underwater."
4"Between them, wildflowers bloomed in a riot of color—crimson poppies, snow-white daisies, purple lupines—their petals glowing faintly in the moonlight as if lit from within."
5"It was December; every other flower in London was dead, and the sight sent a cold shiver down her spine that had nothing to do with the night air."
6"She’d left the restaurant at 11:05; the walk should have taken 12 minutes, but the math didn’t add up—especially now that the park’s usual night sounds were gone."
7"The screen flickered, then died—no warning, no low-battery alert."
8"Cool-headed as she was, the time warp was chipping away at her composure; she’d researched the grove’s lore enough to know that an hour inside could be minutes or days outside, and she didn’t want to risk Evan finding her gone for too long."
9"It was her mother’s lullaby, the one Jennifer had sung to her every night until she’d left for Cardiff University—*Ar hyd y nos*, its Welsh lyrics soft and soothing, but now twisted into something guttural, as if spoken through a throat filled with mud."
10"Nothing—only the wildflowers, swaying without a breeze, their glow now so bright it cast long shadows across the clearing."
11"She ran to the nearest stone, running her hands over its rough surface, and realized that the stones were moving—slowly, almost imperceptibly, their positions shifting so that the circle was tightening around her."
12"She flinched, rubbing the scar as if to wipe the memory away, and the pendant’s pulse skipped a beat—warmth flaring so hot she had to let go of the chain."
13"The child’s laugh returned, closer this time, and she caught a glimpse of a shadow at the edge of her vision—taller than a man, its limbs too long, its head too large, swaying in time with the wildflowers."
14"That was new—folklore hadn’t mentioned wildflowers reacting to human food like that."
15"She spun, but there was nothing there—only the oak stones, the wildflowers, the growing shadow."
16"The archives she’d pored over had mentioned Hel portals—gateways to a realm of chaos—and the pendant’s behavior matched the tales: pulsing warmth when near one."
17"Rory’s cool-headedness was fraying; she’d never faced something like this, not even with Evan."
18"She fidgeted with her left wrist’s scar, remembering Eva’s words when she’d fled to London: *Conceal, don’t fight—use what’s around you*."
19"The shadow loomed beneath her, its form shifting so that she could see a flash of a hand—pale, with a scar across the knuckles, the same scar Evan had gotten in a bar fight."
20"She looked down at the wildflowers, her napkin markers still tucked into their petals, and realized that they were now pointing toward the rift—she’d accidentally marked a path straight to it."
21"The time warp was now impossible to ignore; she could feel minutes stretching into hours, the night’s cold seeping through her clothes even as the pendant burned her chest."
22"She thought of her father’s barrister’s voice, sharp and logical, telling her to always gather evidence before acting; she thought of her mother’s teacher’s hands, gentle as she’d bandaged her wrist after the fall."
23"The shadow screamed—a sound like grinding stone—and recoiled, its red eyes dimming."
24"Rory didn’t hesitate; she scrambled down the oak, her sneakers slipping on the bark, and ran toward the oak standing stones, following the napkin markers in reverse."
25"She reached the edge of the circle, and this time, the gap between the stones was there—brambles visible beyond, the hum of London’s traffic faint but audible."
26"She looked up, and the oak standing stones were gone—only a cluster of ordinary oaks stood in their place, no wildflowers, no glow."
27"She had to find Eva, to tell her what had happened, but as she walked toward the park’s exit, she heard a faint whisper behind her—*Laila*—and she knew the grove wasn’t done with her."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount457
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount9
adverbRatio0.019693654266958426
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.0087527352297593
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences89
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences89
mean22.52
std10.83
cv0.481
sampleLengths
041
140
237
333
49
550
636
740
86
925
1025
1129
1216
1323
1413
1517
1634
1724
1810
1928
2013
2124
2216
2318
242
259
2620
2744
2842
2911
3044
3126
3219
3337
3411
3517
3633
3731
3830
3938
4013
4129
4214
435
4412
4522
4626
4716
481
4914
30.90% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats17
diversityRatio0.19101123595505617
totalSentences89
uniqueOpeners17
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences87
matches(empty)
ratio0
26.90% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount42
totalSentences87
matches
0"Her straight, shoulder-length black hair"
1"She’d come to the park"
2"Her quick, out-of-the-box thinking had"
3"She’d dismissed the fae tales"
4"It was December; every other"
5"She reached for the pendant"
6"She stepped across the invisible"
7"She reached for her phone,"
8"She’d left the restaurant at"
9"She stepped deeper into the"
10"She paused to catch her"
11"She swore again, shoving the"
12"He’d been leaving notes on"
13"It was her mother’s lullaby,"
14"She turned to leave, but"
15"She ran to the nearest"
16"She flinched, rubbing the scar"
17"She backed away, tripping over"
18"Her quick thinking kicked in:"
19"She grabbed a handful of"
ratio0.483
0.23% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount80
totalSentences87
matches
0"The zip of Rory’s Golden"
1"Her straight, shoulder-length black hair"
2"The scar throbbed, a faint"
3"That memory tugged at her,"
4"She’d come to the park"
5"The deep crimson Heartstone, strung"
6"Her quick, out-of-the-box thinking had"
7"She’d dismissed the fae tales"
8"The brambles cleared, and she"
9"It was December; every other"
10"She reached for the pendant"
11"The faint inner glow she’d"
12"She stepped across the invisible"
13"The hum of London’s traffic"
14"Rory’s bright blue eyes darted"
15"She reached for her phone,"
16"She’d left the restaurant at"
17"She stepped deeper into the"
18"The wildflowers brushed her ankles,"
19"The pendant’s pulse quickened, its"
ratio0.92
57.47% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences87
matches
0"Before her stood six oak"
ratio0.011
23.81% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences78
technicalSentenceCount13
matches
0"Her straight, shoulder-length black hair stuck to the sweat on her neck, even though the December night bit at her cheeks, and she brushed it away with a hand t…"
1"The scar throbbed, a faint echo of the childhood fall that had left it there—she’d climbed an oak with Eva, slipped, and gashed her wrist on a broken branch bef…"
2"She’d dismissed the fae tales as folklore until last night, when the pendant’s pulse had synchronized with a strange, off-key whisper she’d heard from the park’…"
3"Between them, wildflowers bloomed in a riot of color—crimson poppies, snow-white daisies, purple lupines—their petals glowing faintly in the moonlight as if lit…"
4"She paused to catch her breath, thinking she’d been walking for 20 minutes, and checked her phone again."
5"It was her mother’s lullaby, the one Jennifer had sung to her every night until she’d left for Cardiff University—*Ar hyd y nos*, its Welsh lyrics soft and soot…"
6"The pendant’s burn intensified, and she tugged it from beneath her shirt, gasping at the sight: the crimson gem was pulsing so rapidly it looked like a tiny, be…"
7"She ran to the nearest stone, running her hands over its rough surface, and realized that the stones were moving—slowly, almost imperceptibly, their positions s…"
8"She flinched, rubbing the scar as if to wipe the memory away, and the pendant’s pulse skipped a beat—warmth flaring so hot she had to let go of the chain."
9"The shadow was now at the edge of the circle, moving toward her, its limbs scraping against the oak stones with a sound like broken glass."
10"She climbed, her sneakers scraping against the bark, and tucked herself into a crevice just as the shadow reached the spot where she’d been standing."
11"Rory didn’t hesitate; she scrambled down the oak, her sneakers slipping on the bark, and ran toward the oak standing stones, following the napkin markers in rev…"
12"She sat there, gasping, her left wrist’s scar throbbing, and realized that the shadow’s red eyes were still burned into her memory."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags3
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
68.3002%