Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8TSAPE5RFYJDK12D28ERN0

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Duration:
1m 17s
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$0.074330
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Amazon Bedrock

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The last dog-walker had disappeared down the hill twenty minutes ago, and now Richmond Park belonged to the dark. Rory kept to the tree line where the sodium glow of distant streetlamps couldn't reach her, her trainers soundless on the leaf-matted ground. The air had that particular stillness that November nights brought to London — too cold for lingering, too damp for comfort, the kind of chill that crept through denim and settled against the skin like a second layer of clothing you hadn't asked for. She tugged her jacket tighter and pressed forward through the oaks, counting her steps the way Isolde had taught her. Forty-seven from the split trunk. Sixty-two past the hollow where the foxes denned. Eighty-one to where the ground began its subtle descent and the canopy thickened overhead until even the ambient glow of the city was swallowed whole. She'd been to the Grove three times before, always in daylight, always with someone who knew the paths better than she did. Coming alone at night was stupid. She was fully aware of that. But the text from the unknown number had been specific — *midnight, the Grove, come alone or don't come at all* — and the photograph attached had been of something she needed to see with her own eyes. Something she needed to understand. Step ninety-six. Ninety-seven. The standing stones appeared first as darker shapes among the trees, as though the oaks themselves had decided to stop pretending and reveal what they really were. They weren't actually stone, of course — they were ancient oak, petrified and weathered into something harder than granite, taller than Rory by half, arranged in a rough circle perhaps thirty feet across. Wildflowers carpeted the ground between them even now, even in November, their petals bone-white in the dark. She could smell them — that strange, cloying sweetness that belonged to no season, the smell of a place that existed at an angle to the world she knew. She stopped at the boundary and listened. Nothing. No wind. No rustle. Not even the distant thrum of the A3, which should have been audible from this part of the park. The silence wasn't peaceful. It was the silence of a held breath, the silence of a room after someone has stopped talking and before someone else has decided to start. At her throat, the Heartstone Pendant pulsed once — a single throb of warmth, like a heartbeat that didn't belong to her. Rory touched it through her jacket, felt the thumbnail-sized gem press against her fingertip, its crimson glow invisible beneath the fabric but somehow still present, the way you can feel a candle flame with your eyes closed. She stepped between the stones. The air changed immediately — warmer, thicker, carrying a scent like rain on hot stone that had no business being in an English park in November. The wildflowers seemed to sway as she passed, though there was no breeze to move them. She walked to the center of the clearing and turned a slow circle, her eyes adjusting to the deeper darkness. No one was here. She checked her phone. 12:03. She was three minutes late, which shouldn't matter, though in a place where time moved like water — pooling, eddying, rushing forward without warning — three minutes could mean anything. The screen's glow turned the nearest stones a sickly blue, and she thumbed it off quickly, not wanting to kill her night vision. That was when she heard it. Not a sound, exactly. More the memory of a sound, or the space where a sound should have been — a low, arrhythmic something at the very bottom of her hearing, felt more in her chest than heard with her ears. Like a bass note played so deep it bypassed the eardrums entirely and went straight for the ribs. She held still. The sensation came and went, came and went, not quite matching the rhythm of her heartbeat, not quite matching the rhythm of anything. The pendant pulsed again. Warmer this time. "Hello?" Her voice came out steady, which surprised her. It didn't echo. In a clearing this size, surrounded by stones and trees, there should have been some kind of return. Instead, the word fell flat and dead a foot from her lips, as though the air had simply eaten it. She became aware, slowly and then all at once, that the wildflowers had stopped swaying. Every single one of them was motionless. Not the stillness of a calm night — the stillness of things that were paying attention. Rory turned again, slower this time. The standing stones stood where they'd always stood, evenly spaced, their weathered surfaces catching no light because there was no light to catch. But as her gaze swept past the third stone from the east — the one with the split running down its face like a scar — she saw something move. Not at the stone. Behind it. A shifting of the darkness, a rearrangement of shadows that had no source and no cause. She locked her eyes on the spot and willed herself to see clearly, but whatever it had been was gone now, folded back into the black, indistinguishable from the surrounding night. Her mouth had gone dry. She swallowed and tasted copper. The deep not-sound came again, longer this time, and the pendant flared warm enough that she could feel it through her shirt, a circle of heat against her sternum. Her hand went to it instinctively, fingers closing around the gem, and she felt its faint inner glow even through the fabric — the crimson light seeping between her fingers like something alive and desperate to be seen. She needed to leave. The thought arrived clean and certain and she honored it instantly, turning toward the gap between the stones where she'd entered. Her legs moved. The flowers bent away from her feet as though recoiling. Three steps. Five. The edge of the clearing was right there, the gap between the two nearest stones wide enough for two of her, and she could see the normal darkness of the park beyond — the layered shadows of oak and beech and the far-off suggestion of light that meant the city still existed. She stopped. There was someone standing between the stones. Not moving. Not breathing, as far as she could tell. Just standing, a figure that was almost a silhouette but not quite, because silhouettes required backlight and there was none. It was darker than the darkness behind it — a shape that existed not because light revealed it but because light refused to go where it was. Tall. Still. Close enough that if she took two more steps, she would be able to touch it. The pendant was burning now. Not painfully, not yet, but with the insistent heat of a warning, the way a stove element glows before it turns red. Rory's hand tightened around it and she took a step backward, her heel crushing flowers that gave way with a wet, fleshy sound. The figure didn't move. She couldn't see its face, couldn't see if it had a face, but she knew — the way you know in dreams that the thing behind the door is wrong — that it was looking at her. That it had been looking at her for longer than she'd been standing in this clearing. That it had perhaps been looking at her since before she'd entered the park, since before she'd left the flat above Silas' bar, since before the text had arrived on her phone with its careful, specific instructions. "Who are you?" she said, and her voice didn't fall dead this time. This time it carried, rang off the standing stones, came back to her from every direction at once, doubled and tripled and overlapping, *who are you who are you who are you*, as though the Grove itself had decided the question was worth repeating. The figure tilted its head. Just slightly. The way a dog tilts its head when it hears a pitch it can't quite place. Rory backed up another step. Then another. She was in the center of the clearing again, the exact center, and she could feel the geometry of the stones around her like pressure points on her skin — the circle they made was a boundary, she knew that, a threshold between the place she lived and the place that lived alongside it, and she was inside the boundary and the figure was standing on it, and she did not know which side of the line it belonged to. The deep not-sound swelled. It wasn't beneath her hearing anymore. It was everywhere — in the earth beneath the flowers, in the stones themselves, in the roots of trees she couldn't see and the sky she couldn't look at because looking up felt like a mistake, felt like the kind of thing you did once and then never again because what looked back would not be stars. The pendant's heat reached a pitch and then, abruptly, went cold. Not cool. Cold. The kind of cold that burns. Rory gasped and yanked her hand away from it, and in the half-second that her fingers pulled clear of the gem, she saw it — the crimson light, her thumbnail-sized sliver of something that was supposed to protect her, had gone entirely dark. And in the silence that followed, she heard breathing. Not from the figure at the stones. From behind her. Close enough to stir the hair at the nape of her neck. She didn't turn around. Every instinct, every childhood terror that had ever pinned her to a mattress at three in the morning, every animal whisper coded into the base of her brainstem, told her the same thing: *don't turn around*. If she turned around, it would be real. If she didn't turn around, there was still the possibility — thin, irrational, a rope made of smoke — that she was imagining it. The breathing was slow. Measured. It had a texture to it, a wetness, the sound of air being drawn through something that didn't quite work the way lungs were supposed to work. In front of her, between the stones, the figure was gone. Rory stood in the center of the Fae Grove with wildflowers motionless at her feet and a dead pendant at her throat and something standing behind her close enough to touch, and she thought of Cardiff and her mother's kitchen and the way rain sounded on the windows of the house she'd grown up in, and she thought of Eva's voice on the phone saying *come to London, it'll be good for you*, and she thought, absurdly and with terrible clarity, that she had never once in her life been as alone as she was right now. The breathing stopped. The pendant flared hot — an explosion of warmth against her chest, sudden and violent, and in the instant of its burning she felt something draw backward, a presence recoiling, the darkness contracting like a pupil in bright light. The flowers shuddered. The stones hummed a single low note. And the normal night sounds of Richmond Park came flooding back — wind in the canopy, the distant drone of traffic, a fox screaming somewhere on the other side of the hill — as though someone had lifted a glass dome from over the clearing. Rory sank to her knees in the wet grass. Her hands were shaking. Her breath came in short, ragged pulls that she couldn't seem to slow down. The pendant hung warm and steady against her chest, its crimson glow bleeding through her shirt like a slow ember, and she pressed both palms flat against the earth and stayed there, kneeling, until her heartbeat found something resembling its normal rhythm. When she finally looked up, the clearing was empty. The stones stood where they'd always stood. The wildflowers swayed gently in a breeze that had, at last, decided to make itself known. She didn't stand right away. She knelt in the flowers and the dark and touched the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist — an old habit, a compass point, a reminder that she was real and present and solid and alive — and she waited until the trembling stopped. Then she got to her feet and walked out of the Grove on legs that wanted to run, at a pace that refused to let them, and she did not once look back.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags3
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"That it had perhaps [perhaps]"
dialogueSentences2
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.333
85.49% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2067
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
1
adverb"quickly"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
4
adverb"slightly"
count1
5
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"really"
1"quickly"
2"very"
3"slowly"
4"slightly"
5"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
58.88% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2067
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"chill"
count1
1
word"silence"
count4
2
word"pulsed"
count2
3
word"throb"
count1
4
word"warmth"
count2
5
word"echo"
count1
6
word"could feel"
count2
7
word"whisper"
count1
8
word"coded"
count1
9
word"measured"
count1
10
word"reminder"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"silence"
2"pulsed"
3"throb"
4"warmth"
5"echo"
6"could feel"
7"whisper"
8"coded"
9"measured"
10"reminder"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences129
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences129
filterMatches
0"know"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"seem to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences129
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen97
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans4
markdownWords30
totalWords2095
ratio0.014
matches
0"midnight, the Grove, come alone or don't come at all"
1"who are you who are you who are you"
2"don't turn around"
3"come to London, it'll be good for you"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions4
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions30
wordCount2075
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity0.43
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"November"
discoveredNames
Richmond2
Park2
November3
London2
Isolde1
Grove5
Rory9
Heartstone1
Pendant1
English1
Fae1
Cardiff1
Eva1
persons
0"Isolde"
1"Rory"
2"Pendant"
3"Eva"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"November"
3"London"
4"Grove"
5"English"
6"Fae"
7"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences83
glossingSentenceCount6
matches
0"not quite matching the rhythm of her heartbeat, not quite matching the rhythm of anything"
1"not quite matching the rhythm of anything"
2"as though recoiling"
3"not quite because silhouettes required backlight and there was none"
4"quite place"
5"felt like a mistake, felt like the kind"
6"felt like the kind of thing you did onc"
7"quite work the way lungs were supposed to work"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.955
wordCount2095
matches
0"Not painfully, not yet, but with the insistent heat of a warning, the way a stove elemen"
1"not yet, but with the insistent heat of a warning, the way a stove elemen"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences129
matches
0"dreams that the"
1"knew that, a"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs50
mean41.9
std31.93
cv0.762
sampleLengths
019
187
238
377
43
5106
67
754
859
95
1062
114
1258
136
1485
157
1650
1715
1823
1959
2053
2110
2267
234
2489
252
267
2775
2850
294
3090
3157
3223
3387
3467
3511
3652
379
3810
3912
4072
4132
4211
4397
443
4594
4669
4732
4849
4933
91.66% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences129
matches
0"was swallowed"
1"was gone"
2"was supposed"
3"being drawn"
4"were supposed"
5"was gone"
78.79% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount6
totalVerbs330
matches
0"were paying"
1"was burning"
2"was looking"
3"was standing"
4"was imagining"
5"were shaking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount28
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences21
totalSentences129
ratio0.163
matches
0"The air had that particular stillness that November nights brought to London — too cold for lingering, too damp for comfort, the kind of chill that crept through denim and settled against the skin like a second layer of clothing you hadn't asked for."
1"But the text from the unknown number had been specific — *midnight, the Grove, come alone or don't come at all* — and the photograph attached had been of something she needed to see with her own eyes."
2"They weren't actually stone, of course — they were ancient oak, petrified and weathered into something harder than granite, taller than Rory by half, arranged in a rough circle perhaps thirty feet across."
3"She could smell them — that strange, cloying sweetness that belonged to no season, the smell of a place that existed at an angle to the world she knew."
4"At her throat, the Heartstone Pendant pulsed once — a single throb of warmth, like a heartbeat that didn't belong to her."
5"The air changed immediately — warmer, thicker, carrying a scent like rain on hot stone that had no business being in an English park in November."
6"She was three minutes late, which shouldn't matter, though in a place where time moved like water — pooling, eddying, rushing forward without warning — three minutes could mean anything."
7"More the memory of a sound, or the space where a sound should have been — a low, arrhythmic something at the very bottom of her hearing, felt more in her chest than heard with her ears."
8"Not the stillness of a calm night — the stillness of things that were paying attention."
9"But as her gaze swept past the third stone from the east — the one with the split running down its face like a scar — she saw something move."
10"Her hand went to it instinctively, fingers closing around the gem, and she felt its faint inner glow even through the fabric — the crimson light seeping between her fingers like something alive and desperate to be seen."
11"The edge of the clearing was right there, the gap between the two nearest stones wide enough for two of her, and she could see the normal darkness of the park beyond — the layered shadows of oak and beech and the far-off suggestion of light that meant the city still existed."
12"It was darker than the darkness behind it — a shape that existed not because light revealed it but because light refused to go where it was."
13"She couldn't see its face, couldn't see if it had a face, but she knew — the way you know in dreams that the thing behind the door is wrong — that it was looking at her."
14"She was in the center of the clearing again, the exact center, and she could feel the geometry of the stones around her like pressure points on her skin — the circle they made was a boundary, she knew that, a threshold between the place she lived and the place that lived alongside it, and she was inside the boundary and the figure was standing on it, and she did not know which side of the line it belonged to."
15"It was everywhere — in the earth beneath the flowers, in the stones themselves, in the roots of trees she couldn't see and the sky she couldn't look at because looking up felt like a mistake, felt like the kind of thing you did once and then never again because what looked back would not be stars."
16"Rory gasped and yanked her hand away from it, and in the half-second that her fingers pulled clear of the gem, she saw it — the crimson light, her thumbnail-sized sliver of something that was supposed to protect her, had gone entirely dark."
17"If she didn't turn around, there was still the possibility — thin, irrational, a rope made of smoke — that she was imagining it."
18"The pendant flared hot — an explosion of warmth against her chest, sudden and violent, and in the instant of its burning she felt something draw backward, a presence recoiling, the darkness contracting like a pupil in bright light."
19"And the normal night sounds of Richmond Park came flooding back — wind in the canopy, the distant drone of traffic, a fox screaming somewhere on the other side of the hill — as though someone had lifted a glass dome from over the clearing."
20"She knelt in the flowers and the dark and touched the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist — an old habit, a compass point, a reminder that she was real and present and solid and alive — and she waited until the trembling stopped."
96.56% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1252
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount55
adverbRatio0.0439297124600639
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.011980830670926517
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences129
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences129
mean16.24
std16.22
cv0.999
sampleLengths
019
123
244
320
45
58
625
722
86
96
1038
115
122
131
1427
1533
1617
1729
187
191
202
212
2219
234
2426
2522
2637
275
2826
2916
3020
314
324
331
3430
3523
366
374
3837
3918
403
4123
424
433
449
453
4618
4720
4815
497
46.88% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats15
diversityRatio0.3515625
totalSentences128
uniqueOpeners45
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences111
matches
0"More the memory of a"
1"Instead, the word fell flat"
2"Just standing, a figure that"
3"Then she got to her"
ratio0.036
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount33
totalSentences111
matches
0"She tugged her jacket tighter"
1"She'd been to the Grove"
2"She was fully aware of"
3"They weren't actually stone, of"
4"She could smell them —"
5"She stopped at the boundary"
6"It was the silence of"
7"She stepped between the stones."
8"She walked to the center"
9"She checked her phone."
10"She was three minutes late,"
11"She held still."
12"Her voice came out steady,"
13"It didn't echo."
14"She became aware, slowly and"
15"She locked her eyes on"
16"Her mouth had gone dry."
17"She swallowed and tasted copper."
18"Her hand went to it"
19"She needed to leave."
ratio0.297
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount79
totalSentences111
matches
0"The last dog-walker had disappeared"
1"Rory kept to the tree"
2"The air had that particular"
3"She tugged her jacket tighter"
4"She'd been to the Grove"
5"She was fully aware of"
6"Something she needed to understand."
7"The standing stones appeared first"
8"They weren't actually stone, of"
9"Wildflowers carpeted the ground between"
10"She could smell them —"
11"She stopped at the boundary"
12"The silence wasn't peaceful."
13"It was the silence of"
14"Rory touched it through her"
15"She stepped between the stones."
16"The air changed immediately —"
17"The wildflowers seemed to sway"
18"She walked to the center"
19"She checked her phone."
ratio0.712
90.09% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences111
matches
0"If she turned around, it"
1"If she didn't turn around,"
ratio0.018
4.61% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences62
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"The air had that particular stillness that November nights brought to London — too cold for lingering, too damp for comfort, the kind of chill that crept throug…"
1"The standing stones appeared first as darker shapes among the trees, as though the oaks themselves had decided to stop pretending and reveal what they really we…"
2"At her throat, the Heartstone Pendant pulsed once — a single throb of warmth, like a heartbeat that didn't belong to her."
3"The air changed immediately — warmer, thicker, carrying a scent like rain on hot stone that had no business being in an English park in November."
4"Not the stillness of a calm night — the stillness of things that were paying attention."
5"The edge of the clearing was right there, the gap between the two nearest stones wide enough for two of her, and she could see the normal darkness of the park b…"
6"Just standing, a figure that was almost a silhouette but not quite, because silhouettes required backlight and there was none."
7"This time it carried, rang off the standing stones, came back to her from every direction at once, doubled and tripled and overlapping, *who are you who are you…"
8"She was in the center of the clearing again, the exact center, and she could feel the geometry of the stones around her like pressure points on her skin — the c…"
9"Rory gasped and yanked her hand away from it, and in the half-second that her fingers pulled clear of the gem, she saw it — the crimson light, her thumbnail-siz…"
10"Every instinct, every childhood terror that had ever pinned her to a mattress at three in the morning, every animal whisper coded into the base of her brainstem…"
11"And the normal night sounds of Richmond Park came flooding back — wind in the canopy, the distant drone of traffic, a fox screaming somewhere on the other side …"
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