Run: 2026-02-24-01KJ8V6ATMP9KKHRF62EVHRCQE

Run Details

Duration:
45.3s
Cost:
$0.043104
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Thriller genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Quinn's boots hit the wet cobblestones at a dead sprint, and the gap between her and the figure ahead was closing by the second. The suspect, a wiry man in a dark canvas jacket, had bolted the moment she'd flashed her warrant card outside the Raven's Nest. Pure instinct, the kind that didn't come from an innocent conscience. He'd vaulted a parked bicycle, scattered a group of tourists outside a kebab shop and cut left onto a side street without looking back once. A professional runner. Or someone who'd needed to be. Quinn cut the corner tight, shoulder grazing the brick of a narrow alley entrance. Rain hammered the street and her salt-and-pepper hair plastered flat against her skull. She didn't wipe it away. Her eyes were locked on that jacket, the way it caught the amber light of a passing bus before dissolving back into the dark. Camden Road was a gauntlet. Market stalls shuttered for the night, their canvas awnings sagging under the weight of the downpour. The canal ran somewhere to her left, barely visible, just a dark smell and the sound of water against stone. The man ahead had local knowledge. Every turn he made was deliberate, economical, designed to bleed distance from her legs. She keyed her radio. "Suspect heading north on Camden Road, IC1 male, dark jacket, baseball cap. Requesting backup unit at the junction with Kentish Town." Static. A burst of interference that didn't resolve into anything useful. She clipped the radio back and ran harder. He ducked beneath a rail bridge, footsteps swallowed by the concrete echo chamber, and Quinn followed three seconds behind. A delivery driver leaned on his horn as she cut across the road without stopping. She held up her badge without slowing. He didn't care much for that. Then the man ahead did something strange. He stopped running. Right at the entrance to a derelict Tube station, one of the old ones that had been shuttered in the seventies, the hoarding around it plastered with gig posters and planning notices and amateur graffiti. He stopped like he'd reached a destination rather than a dead end, chest heaving, rain running off the brim of his cap. Quinn slowed to a walk, hand moving to the Taser on her hip. Thirty feet. Twenty. He reached into his jacket pocket and produced something small. Too small to see clearly in the dark. He pressed it against the corrugated metal hoarding, exactly where two sheets overlapped, and there was a sound like a key finding a lock it had been cut for. Clean. Certain. A seam appeared in the hoarding. Not the outline of a hidden door. More like the metal itself had decided to become something other than solid. Quinn stopped. Ten feet separated them now. Close enough to see the condensation of his breath. Close enough to see him look back at her for the first time since the Nest. His face was young, early twenties at most, with the hollow cheeks of someone who hadn't slept properly in weeks. He didn't look triumphant. He looked almost sorry. "Don't follow me down here," he said. "You don't have a token." She crossed the remaining distance and caught his arm before the gap in the hoarding could swallow him. "You're not going anywhere." "Detective." His voice was low, careful. "I know what you want. But not here. Not this way." "Here's how this works. You come with me, you tell me about the operation running out of that bar, and we talk about what kind of deal the Crown Prosecution Service might be interested in." He looked at her hand on his arm, then at the opening behind him, a narrow rectangle of dark that breathed cold air against her face, carrying something mineral and ancient. Stone and rust and something she couldn't name. "The Market moves at the full moon," he said. "That was last week. It won't be here again for three weeks. If you want your answers, you come now or they disappear with it." She stared at him. The opening behind him exhaled another gust of that cold underground air, and deep in the dark, she could hear something. A low ambient murmur. Dozens of voices softened by distance and stone. The smell of something burning that wasn't smoke. One year ago, she would have arrested this man, charged him with resisting and called it a productive night. One year ago, she still had a framework for what the world contained. Then she'd started pulling at the thread that began with Morris's death, and the framework had come apart in her hands piece by piece, and now she was standing in the rain outside a sealed Tube station that had apparently decided to open for a man with a small bone token and nothing in her training covered what came next. Her worn leather watch read quarter past eleven. She released his arm. "You run, I will find you. And the conversation we have then will be considerably less pleasant." He nodded once and stepped through the gap. She followed him into the dark. The descent was steeper than she expected, old tiled steps slick with damp, the walls pressing close on either side. The station's original signage was still mounted above the platform entrance, the enamel chipped and faded but legible under the light of dozens of lanterns strung between iron pillars. The murmur resolved into voices, plural and overlapping, the click and shuffle of commerce. The platform was packed. Stalls ran the length of the old track bed, each one lit differently, some by lantern, some by phosphorescent materials in jars, some by small contained fires in iron braziers. The vendors and customers between them represented something she had no taxonomy for. Mostly human-shaped, but the qualifier was doing significant work. A woman with irises the flat silver of a coin. A man whose shadow moved on a six-second delay, out of sync with every shift of his body. And behind a stall stacked with small glass phials, arranging stock with the careful hands of someone who'd done it a thousand times, stood Tomás Herrera. He looked up and saw her before she had a chance to process what she was seeing, and the colour left his olive skin in one clean wave. "Dios mío." He knocked over an entire row of phials reaching for something under the counter. "You brought a detective into the Market." The young man in the canvas jacket had already vanished into the crowd. Quinn put her hand back on her Taser.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags3
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences12
tagDensity0.25
leniency0.5
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1102
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
63.70% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1102
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"weight"
count1
1
word"resolve"
count1
2
word"footsteps"
count1
3
word"echo"
count1
4
word"charged"
count1
5
word"framework"
count2
6
word"resolved"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"resolve"
2"footsteps"
3"echo"
4"charged"
5"framework"
6"resolved"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences77
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences77
filterMatches
0"look"
1"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences85
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen60
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1102
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions3
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions17
wordCount962
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity0.62
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest2
Road1
Quinn6
Tube2
Taser2
Morris1
Tomás1
Herrera1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Morris"
2"Tomás"
3"Herrera"
places
0"Raven"
1"Road"
2"Taser"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences56
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"ation that had apparently decided to open for"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1102
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences85
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs41
mean26.88
std21.33
cv0.794
sampleLengths
024
159
29
356
461
54
621
711
88
947
107
113
1257
1313
143
1549
1626
172
1858
1912
2018
214
2217
2335
2439
2534
2645
2732
2860
298
304
3117
3214
3363
344
3580
3626
3728
3823
3913
408
96.15% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences77
matches
0"were locked"
1"been shuttered"
63.01% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs146
matches
0"was standing"
1"was doing"
2"was seeing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences85
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount966
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount31
adverbRatio0.032091097308488616
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.008281573498964804
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences85
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences85
mean12.96
std10.02
cv0.773
sampleLengths
024
123
211
325
43
56
614
713
85
924
105
1116
1220
136
1414
154
1621
171
1810
198
2019
2115
227
236
247
253
2635
2722
2813
292
301
3110
328
3329
341
351
366
377
3813
392
405
419
4216
4320
444
454
467
475
4818
494
67.06% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.4588235294117647
totalSentences85
uniqueOpeners39
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences69
matches
0"Then the man ahead did"
1"Too small to see clearly"
2"More like the metal itself"
3"Then she'd started pulling at"
4"Mostly human-shaped, but the qualifier"
ratio0.072
75.07% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences69
matches
0"He'd vaulted a parked bicycle,"
1"She didn't wipe it away."
2"Her eyes were locked on"
3"She keyed her radio."
4"She clipped the radio back"
5"He ducked beneath a rail"
6"She held up her badge"
7"He didn't care much for"
8"He stopped running."
9"He stopped like he'd reached"
10"He reached into his jacket"
11"He pressed it against the"
12"His face was young, early"
13"He didn't look triumphant."
14"He looked almost sorry."
15"She crossed the remaining distance"
16"His voice was low, careful"
17"He looked at her hand"
18"She stared at him."
19"Her worn leather watch read"
ratio0.362
83.19% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount52
totalSentences69
matches
0"Quinn's boots hit the wet"
1"The suspect, a wiry man"
2"He'd vaulted a parked bicycle,"
3"A professional runner."
4"Quinn cut the corner tight,"
5"She didn't wipe it away."
6"Her eyes were locked on"
7"Camden Road was a gauntlet."
8"The canal ran somewhere to"
9"The man ahead had local"
10"Every turn he made was"
11"She keyed her radio."
12"A burst of interference that"
13"She clipped the radio back"
14"He ducked beneath a rail"
15"A delivery driver leaned on"
16"She held up her badge"
17"He didn't care much for"
18"He stopped running."
19"He stopped like he'd reached"
ratio0.754
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences69
matches(empty)
ratio0
67.67% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences38
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Right at the entrance to a derelict Tube station, one of the old ones that had been shuttered in the seventies, the hoarding around it plastered with gig poster…"
1"He looked at her hand on his arm, then at the opening behind him, a narrow rectangle of dark that breathed cold air against her face, carrying something mineral…"
2"Then she'd started pulling at the thread that began with Morris's death, and the framework had come apart in her hands piece by piece, and now she was standing …"
3"And behind a stall stacked with small glass phials, arranging stock with the careful hands of someone who'd done it a thousand times, stood Tomás Herrera."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags3
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences12
tagDensity0.167
leniency0.333
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
90.5285%